The Most Wanted Gift

Contemporary Fiction Funny

Written in response to: "Include a scene in which someone is cooking, eating, or drinking." as part of Food for Thought.

“Hello? Is anyone home?” I called out for the second time. Today was my nephew Luke’s 18th birthday, and my sister, his mother, Mavis, had invited me to celebrate with them. I had been knocking and ringing the bell for several minutes, but no one had answered the door. I was about to take my phone out of my pocket to call my sister when the door finally opened.

“Run away while you still can,” my brother-in-law Jake whispered as he opened the door very slowly. He stood there in a dirty apron, holding a bowl. He looked very tired and depressed.

“Rough day?” I asked, slightly shocked and slightly amused.

“Your sister is crazy,” he sighed, still speaking in a whisper. Well, he wasn’t completely wrong. My sister could be a little bit bossy and a perfectionist, especially when she was planning something.

“Is that my brother?” I heard Mavis shout from the kitchen. “Send him in. We need all hands!” Maybe I should have run away after all.

“I warned you,” whispered Jake, then added in a loud voice, “Come in.”

As soon as I stepped into the house, I was greeted by the pleasant scent of sweet pastries and vanilla. Then I noticed balloons and colorful ribbons everywhere.

“She has been baking and decorating the house since dawn,” Jake explained before I could even ask. That was impressive, considering it was almost 4 PM. It also explained why Jake looked so tired.

“Hey, Mavis,” I greeted my sister as I entered the kitchen. She tossed an apron at me instead of returning the greeting. “Chop some veggies for a salad.” She pointed to the vegetables on the kitchen counter.

“Roger that,” I answered, then immediately started chopping a cucumber. I was always a little afraid of arguing with her when she was in that bossy mood, even though my sister had never actually hurt anyone. But I didn’t want to tempt fate.

“Where is Emma, by the way?” She looked at me for the first time, finally noticing that my wife wasn’t with me.

“She felt sick.” I shrugged apologetically, excusing her absence. Mavis looked a little suspicious of me, probably because she could tell I was lying, but she nodded.

The truth was, I didn’t tell my wife about the party. It had been four months since we learned we couldn’t have children and one month since my wife suggested adoption. I never wanted to adopt a child, and I still don’t. The idea of raising someone else’s child has always been scary for me, and I could probably never feel like a real father. We had been arguing a lot about it lately, barely talking about anything else. Even though I knew it was very selfish of me not to tell Emma about the birthday party, being here alone was somewhat refreshing—a brief escape from it all.

“Where is the birthday boy, anyway?” I changed the subject, setting tomatoes on my cutting board.

“With his friends. He’ll be back any moment.” She glanced anxiously at the clock. “Hurry up with that salad, then take it to the living room!”

I quickly finished chopping the remaining vegetables, trying to hide the uneven pieces from Mavi’s sigh. I added only olive oil and salt because I hadn’t had enough time, and probably even the skills, to do anything better.

As soon as I stepped into the living room, I saw two large tables, each covered with food. There were so many dishes, pastries, and snacks that I would need a whole month to eat them all. But the birthday cake was what caught my attention. It was huge, with a big sign that read “Happy Birthday, Luke.” I easily changed the first letter of his name to “P,” and I smiled in amusement at my own cleverness.

“Where are the other kids, by the way?” I asked when I returned to the kitchen, realizing the house had been oddly quiet the whole time.

“They are upstairs,” answered Jake. “Lucky devils,” he added silently as he cleaned the kitchen counter.

“George, Willow, Charlotte, Uncle John is here. Come downstairs to say hi,” yelled Mavis. A minute later, I saw them running down the stairs, excited. I smiled when I heard them laugh and run toward me. But beneath my smile, I felt pain. I always envied my sister for having a big family, and now that I knew I couldn’t have children of my own, watching them made me somewhat sad.

“Hello, Uncle John,” they said almost in unison. The youngest, Charlotte, jumped into my arms, while Willow and George hugged me, melting away my sadness. They were so much younger than Luke. Charlotte was almost two, Willow was five, and George was eight.

“Hello, kiddos,” I greeted them, hugging them back as much as I could, even with Charlotte in my arms. “You are getting heavy,” I told her, setting her down.

“You can’t say that to a girl.” Willow was horrified by my words. “I’m sorry,” I apologized, mostly to Willow, since Charlotte didn’t seem offended by my words.

“Luke is here.” My sister interrupted us, rushing from the window. She tossed me a tube of confetti and put a birthday hat on my head. Oh, are we really doing this?

“Surprise!” Mavis and the kids yelled and threw confetti as soon as Luke opened the door. I did the same, even though I thought it was stupid, and from Luke’s look, I figured he probably thought the same. However, he at least tried to act surprised, and he thanked us for all of that.

“That’s a lot of food.” Luke looked a little astonished as we all moved into the living room. I noticed the sign on the cake had been fixed back to “L,” and Mavis looked daggers at me. Okay, she will probably kill me later.

“You can eat all you want now, but we have some activities to do next,” said Mavis proudly, and they all started eating almost immediately. I seized this opportunity to give Luke a gift.

“Hey, Luke, this is for you. Your mother probably shouldn’t see it.” I handed him a small envelope. “Thank you, Uncle John.” He began to open it.

“What shouldn’t I see?” Mavis suddenly reappeared around us, a suspicious look on her face, and yanked the envelope from Luke’s hands.

“You gave him a voucher for a tandem parachute jump? Do you want him killed?” she asked angrily. “Surprise,” I said sarcastically to Luke. But he seemed to like the gift, since he had always wanted to try it.

“Yeah, that was my plan all along,” I answered my sister sarcastically, but she probably didn’t appreciate the joke, because she glared at me even more furiously than before.

“I will keep this.” Mavis slid the envelope into her pocket and walked away.

“I want that too.” George ran toward us, looking at me with puppy eyes.

“You are afraid of heights,” Luke objected, a little irritated. “You want it only because I have it, right?”

“That’s not true!” George pretended to be offended, even though he knew it was true.

“You are not old enough. I will buy it for you when you are eighteen, okay?” I suggested. George nodded, seeming satisfied with the plan.

“I want it, too. I want to be cool like Luke.” Willow suddenly appeared beside me, startling me.

“Is there anyone who doesn’t want it?” I asked, amused. “I will give it to you, too, when you turn eighteen.”

She looked at me with pleading eyes. “Do you promise?”

I nodded. “Yes, I do.” She looked pleased with my answer and ran off to eat more cupcakes.

“Where is the voucher?” I asked Mavis when she returned. “I hid it,” she answered simply.

“Evidently not very well.” I started to laugh, pointing at Charlotte, who was drawing on the voucher. Mavis looked shocked and rushed over to Charlotte to take it away. It was funny how all of them wanted that voucher, each for a different reason.

“Don’t worry, Luke. I have this voucher in electronic form as well. I will send it to you,” I reassured him, and he looked relieved.

“Thank you,” he said appreciatively. “No problem. Now go enjoy your party.” I nudged him toward the others, who were already playing games.

I watched them play, and they all seemed happy. I smiled as my wife’s words suddenly came to mind: “It doesn’t matter whether the children are biological or not; they always brighten the room.” And for the first time, I truly believed it.

I was lost in my thoughts when Mavis suddenly reappeared beside me. She startled me, but her next question was even more horrifying. “John, have you changed the letter on the cake?” Oh, no. I’m going to die.

Posted Jul 08, 2026
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Sharon Mathers
14:22 Jul 15, 2026

I think this would be great finished as a novel. I enjoyed the comedy and the emotional layers. Great characters!

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04:49 Jul 16, 2026

Thank you so much for reading and commenting. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

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Matthew Granger
05:43 Jul 15, 2026

Another great slice of life. I'll be looking forward to the next. Thanks for sharing.

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06:39 Jul 15, 2026

Thank you so much for reading and commenting.

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Ari Vovk
18:38 Jul 14, 2026

Lol. What a great story. Thoroughly fun and light hearted. Well written. Affecting. Thank you for sharing this, Veronika. I am glad that you liked my story, because it alerted me to yours.

Ari

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05:17 Jul 15, 2026

Thank you so much for reading and commenting, Ari. I'm glad you enjoyed my story.

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Jim LaFleur
07:36 Jul 14, 2026

You captured the messy magic of family perfectly. Great work!

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08:36 Jul 14, 2026

Thank you so much for reading and commenting.

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Ronaldo Chadinha
19:44 Jul 13, 2026

Funny and light hearted, I enjoyed how John came to the realisation that the relationship he has with his sisters kids (despite the fact she clearly wants to murder him for the antics) made him to decide on the idea of adoption. Amazing!

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05:48 Jul 14, 2026

Thank you so much for reading and commenting. I'm glad you enjoyed the story and John's shift in perspective.

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Marjolein Greebe
14:18 Jul 13, 2026

This one surprised me in a good way. I expected a lighthearted family comedy, and for the first half that's exactly what it is. But quietly, almost unnoticed, you plant John's infertility and his resistance to adoption beneath all the birthday chaos. By the end, that emotional thread becomes the real story.

One thing I particularly appreciated is that John's change of heart isn't caused by a speech or a dramatic revelation. It happens organically. Watching his nieces and nephews throughout the day slowly chips away at his certainty until Emma's earlier words suddenly make sense. That's a subtle and believable character arc.

The family dynamics also felt authentic. Mavis's bossiness could easily have become caricature, but because Jake, John and the children all react to it differently, she comes across as someone who is exhausting, loving and funny all at once. The recurring parachute voucher was another nice touch—it starts as a joke, keeps returning in different ways, and ties several scenes together naturally.

I also enjoyed the humor. Small moments like changing Luke into "Puke" on the cake, Charlotte drawing on the voucher, or John's immediate realization that Mavis has discovered his prank kept the story light without undermining the more serious emotional core.

If I had one suggestion, it would be to trust that emotional core a little more. The revelation about John and Emma's struggle is strong enough that I'd actually be tempted to introduce it a bit earlier or weave tiny reminders of it through the party. That would make his final realization land even harder, because the reader would carry that conflict alongside him throughout the story rather than encountering it mainly in one section.

Overall, this is a warm, funny story with a genuine emotional payoff. It balances comedy and vulnerability well, and John's quiet shift at the end felt earned rather than sentimental. I enjoyed reading it.

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05:44 Jul 14, 2026

Thank you so much for reading and for your kind words, Marjolein. I really appreciate your thoughtful feedback and how you mentioned the emotional thread became the real story. That was exactly what I wanted. It’s encouraging to hear that John’s change of perspective felt believable to you. I'm also glad you enjoyed the family dynamic and the humor.
You're right that I probably should have introduced John and Emma’s struggle a bit earlier and mentioned it more throughout the party. I usually have the opposite problem: overexplaining and overmentioning, but in this case I could have added a few reminders of their struggle to make the ending even more resonant. I will look into it.
Thank you so much for your comment. It really means a lot!

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Elizabeth Hoban
11:40 Jul 13, 2026

This is hilarious! I love the changing of the letter on the cake and the overall feel of the story. I think as a mom, if my brother were to gift the voucher to one of my boys I'd have done the same. 😱 But that's what fun uncles are for. I was so touched in the end when he had his realization about adopting and kids in general. You wrapped it up perfectly on a funny note. Very cute story! Kudos.

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05:15 Jul 14, 2026

Thank you so much for reading and for your kind words. I'm glad you enjoyed the letter change on the cake and the ending. I agree, the fun uncles are here to stir things up, sometimes giving moms a little heart attack. Thanks for the comment!

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Graham Kinross
14:04 Jul 11, 2026

It’s a shame now that Puke will never get the cake he asked for. At least the MC learned something about his feelings about fatherhood.

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07:33 Jul 12, 2026

Thank you so much for reading and commenting, Graham. You're right that leaving the letter P on the cake could be interesting. I'm glad you appreciated the shift in John's perspective and his feelings.

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Graham Kinross
10:17 Jul 12, 2026

You’re welcome.

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Aaron Luke
12:09 Jul 11, 2026

Wow Veronika,
First of all the coincidences that I found when reading this was crazy. Considering my name is Luke and that I'm 18, it was such a blast. Though if we only had the same interests with him. Either way, I loved the family dynamics that you brought about, how Mavis is a control freak and Jake being the one receiving the blows and the children being crazy and whimsical. I especially adored John's fate. How his mind is troubled with the need of fatherhood, it was impressive how you were able change his perspective with only one party. We can only hope that he shall adopt and cherish a child of his own in the future, great work!!

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07:28 Jul 12, 2026

Wow, what a coincidence! I hope your birthday celebration was a little less chaotic and that no one made fun of your name (sorry for that). By the way, is your first name Luke or Aaron?

I'm really glad you enjoyed the family dynamic and John's shift in perspective. Thank you so much for reading and commenting. It means a lot!

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Aaron Luke
14:28 Jul 13, 2026

Oh no!!😂😂 Nobody made fun of me, though that was so funny I forgot to point it out. With Mavis' character, I wonder how John is doing right now.
As for my name, the first one is Aaron, but I adore Luke for other certain things. But yeah... those are my names. Great story Veronika, really enjoyed it.

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Scott Speck
14:38 Jul 09, 2026

I really enjoyed this family drama story, including the bossy sister, preparing for the party, etc. I can also only imagine John's wife's response if she ever learns about the party that she never knew about. I could honestly see this as a small part of a drama novel... Great work!

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08:26 Jul 10, 2026

Thank you so much for reading and commenting, Scott. I'm really glad you enjoyed the family drama. It's true that his wife's response could be interesting. Thanks again. I appreciate it.

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The Old Izbushka
14:10 Jul 09, 2026

This was a heartwarming story and filled with great humor! I especially loved the progression of John’s slow shift in perspective, from being completely closed off to his wife’s idea of adoption, to realizing how children would brighten his life— their life together. It was very fitting to have these reflections happen in the most natural of environments: a birthday party. The ending is wonderful, too, because it left me with a smile :).

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08:23 Jul 10, 2026

Thank you so much for reading and commenting. I'm really glad you enjoyed the story and appreciated John's gradual shift in perspective. I'm happy to hear the ending made you smile. Thank you again. I truly appreciate it.

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The Old Izbushka
10:40 Jul 10, 2026

your welcome :)

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C.J. Riley
13:41 Jul 09, 2026

This was So Holesome, Good Job! The "change the letter" part got me to laugh out loud. It was a nice rounding out of the story.

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08:20 Jul 10, 2026

Thank you so much for reading and commenting. I'm really glad you liked the story and that the change of the first letter made you laugh. I appreciate it.

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Mariyam G
09:09 Jul 09, 2026

This was such a fun and unexpectedly heartfelt read. I loved the chaotic birthday prep, Jake’s exhausted whispering, and Mavis running the house like a military operation. The family dynamics felt so real and funny. And beneath all the humour, the emotional thread about John’s fears around fatherhood was beautifully done — the ending lands with a quiet, touching shift. A lovely mix of comedy and heart.

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11:34 Jul 09, 2026

Thank you so much for reading and commenting. I'm really glad you enjoyed the birthday preparations and the family dynamic. I truly appreciate your comment on the emotional thread and the ending. It's especially encouraging. Thanks again.

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Akihiro Moroto
18:44 Jul 08, 2026

Jake has a lot to learn about being an empathic partner for his wife, being a father with unconditional love, and also being a responsible uncle. Of course, children right-size the adults and remind us of what's truly important. Thank you for sharing such a human story, Veronika.

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04:50 Jul 09, 2026

Thank you so much for reading and commenting. I completely agree. His journey is really about learning and growing in each of those roles, and the children in the story help ground him in what truly matters. I’m glad the story resonated with you on that human level.

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