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Funny High School Teens & Young Adult

Written in response to: "Write about someone asking out an old crush, only to realize their crush doesn’t remember they’ve ever met before." as part of Candy Hearts.

I know it’s a stupid decision, yet I took it. Why do I always do things, which embarrass me in the end?

 Sitting on the sidewalk, seeing faces that are strange to me, is my favorite pastime. On top it’s the Valentine season, young love blossoming, couples rolling their tongues into each other, making fake promises. I adore this drama, also I used to be part of this whole brainwashing stunt some years ago, but right now, I am single ready to mingle.

 First, I needed a stable job, and money to pay my rent and bills. The pandemic ruined our company, which took a toll on all the employees. I did not get my salary for the last few months and my company shut down. So, I am jobless and soon will turn into homeless.

To start afresh and to bring out some change. I considered perming my silky straight hair. I wanted luscious locks of curls falling on my forehead, but the perm turned out to be a disaster.

 Now, my hair is looking like noodles, and it’s ruined my whole look. I spent 100 dollars on the whole process. Still, it did not come out as I expected.

I have rent to pay, bills, and study loans over my head. Then why did I invest it in such a childish whim? Sometimes, I have to consider rethinking before making impulsive decisions.

In this whole lockdown, I watched Oparah, you know, to get the boost of motivation you need. Instead of getting excited about my life, I got driven to mimic her hairstyle. I think my brain is wired differently, I always see the world in rose-colored glasses.

I was also kinda hit away by the new trend of #NewMeInNewYear. But why did I choose my hair?

 I could have chosen a weight loss or fitness regime. Why did I choose this stupid yet expensive hairstyle? Even I don’t have answers for my stupid actions.

My stomach rumbled, signaling me about my hunger. I check my wallet. I have only 4 dollars with me. I can buy some donuts and a diet soda. I rise from the bench progressing towards my favorite bakery, but a strange smell stung my nostrils. I turned a whole 360 degrees to whiff the source of the smell but could not find it. I gazed at the sky and the ground to see if the source of the smell is nearby. I couldn’t find it anywhere.

“Put on some deodorant, miss,” a blonde girl shoved me from the pathway. While spitting the words on my face. I smelled my hair, and bam my nose burnt. The chemicals were still lingering on my hair, and now it was blazing the nostrils of people surrounding me. My style goes with a rule. I am told not to wash my hair for the next 48 hours. I think I should try to murder my landlord with this smell and solve my problem of rent debt.

I smiled upon my immature idea and marched down to the bakery.

“How much for the donuts, diet soda, and cookie.” I haste my words because my hunger was at its peak.

“It's 6 dollars and 50 cents,” said the cashier.

“It's Valentine's day, isn’t there any discount and donuts are 4 dollars, right?” I ask her with dismay.

“It's our policy when we put the discount board that means that there is no discount. We have these special donuts, not the regular ones, so it's expensive.”

“Just give me the cookie and the soda.” My stomach made an upset groan, even it was expecting the sweet donuts.

I turned from the counter with consternation and a growling stomach, when something icky got spilled over my shoulder. When I saw the source of the cold coffee spray, my eye's balls rotated 360 degrees. Its Max. Max Taylor, captain of the football team, a serious jock, an A grade student, a handsome hunk, a model, and whatnot. He still has those fox eyes with ocean color in them, his jawline was still in shape like it was 6 years ago. My heartbeat raced, blood rushed to my cheeks and a smile popped on my face. Do I still love him? I don’t know.

“Miss, I am sorry, this day is going worse for everyone,” he speaks with a honey voice while handing the tissue.

But I was gazing at the Greek god in front of me, feeling the butterflies like I used to 6 years ago.

“Are you going to gaze at him, like a raccoon for the next two hours too?” The voice interrupted my flow of thoughts bringing me back to reality.

I flushed more and apologized to the cleaning lady. The cold coffee was spilled on his navy blue suit and it stained his white vest.

“I apologize miss, I was not looking where I was going,” He had a sour tone in his voice.

“It's your habit, it can't be changed,” I murmured to myself.

“What?” He tensed his forehead while asking.

“Nothing, it's just…” The cleaning lady interrupted our conversation, even before I could continue.

“If you don’t want your parcel, can I take it?” the cleaning lady taunted me with fire in her eyes.

“Sorry, I will take it.” I took the package without even looking into her fierce eyes.

“It's just a cookie and soda. Can I buy something from you? Like a coffee or a donut.”

“I would love it,” I say without thinking.

We took a small table and he ordered a black forest pastry and warm chocolate milk.

“So, miss can I know your beautiful name?” He asked with a selfish grin.

“It's Rose, Max.”

“Ok, wait how do you know my name?” His body postured tensed.

“Max Taylor. Student of St, Joseph. A valedictorian with a famous personality. Had more medals than the hair on the head. Loved his girlfriend Veronica like Romeo to Juliet.”

“How do you know all that?” He flashed a charming smile.

“I was your batchmate. The girl who wrote a poem for your birthday.” Tears swell in my eyes while recalling the incident.

“Ya, that’s why I felt that I have seen you somewhere before.  I remember you had an amazing smile and such beautiful eyes.”

“You used to tease me about my braces and once called me owl because of my specs.” I correct his narration.

“Ahh…” he paused a bit.

“I think, I messed up your description. But I remember you used to have these awesome grades and topped our English class always.”

“I flunked most of my subjects, and once you called me a donkey for getting the least score in the class.” Why am I recalling this and yelling in the public?

“Ohh, I think I messed up again,” His body language changed.

He continued to stuff his mouth while I kept talking.

“Let it be. The past remains past, by the way, how are you?”

He lifts his head and gulps down a huge chunk of my cookie.

“It's great, how is your life going?” A few pieces of cookie fly out of his mouth and land on the table.

“I am good. Are you still dating Veronica?” I don’t want an answer, but still, I ask.

“We kind of broke up a few days ago,” His face drops.

“It's ok, time will heal it. I think you may now feel the effect of my heartbreak. Just like I had felt 6 years ago.”

“Excuse me, what instance are you picking on?” His brows tense.

“It was your 16th birthday. I composed a poem for you and gathered some courage to sing it in front of everyone. But you poured a whole bottle of Mountain Dew over my head and made fun of my feelings. It's ok, it's not sensible to dig the past.”

“Umm, I hate girls with curly hairs,” he vaguely points in the direction of my hair. “ That’s why my behavior was kinda odd to you.” He again flashed his selfish grin.

“Wait, I had extra straight and smooth hair in my high school. You don’t remember me, right?”

I looked into his eyes with fierce emotions and balled up my fingers.

“It's tough to recall you. But I am trying,” he ate some of his words and spoke some.

“ Why did you buy me food if you could not recall me,” I gave him a confused look.

“Well, sorry to cut in your chit-chat, but it's 8 dollars in total,” said the waitress.

“I forgot my wallet in-home, can you pay?” he asked me without a pinch of shame.

“ You sat with me. So, I could pay for you, am I right, Max?” I stand up and place my hand on the table and fix my eyes on his face.

“Its.. n-o-o-t wh-at y-ou thin-k” he stammers.

“You know Max, you stammer when you lie. Am I right?” I want to punch his face, but control my senses.

“N-o-o, its n-o-t-t lik-e t-hat..”  Before he could complete his sentence, I threw the water from the jug on his face.

“ You kinda deserve this.” A heavy feeling took off from my chest after doing it. I feel I took my revenge for his past deed.

“Excuse me, I think you forgot, but I am standing right here. So, who’s going to pay for the bill?” the waitress is controlling her laughter, and the whole café is recording, and having a good laugh seeing us.

I just don’t want this to go viral now.

 

 


Posted Feb 20, 2021
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Writer Maniac
March 09, 2021 11:55

Hey, could you please give me feedback on my story 'Black and White'?

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Writer Maniac
February 21, 2021 12:23

It was a lightly humourous story. I felt however like the dialogue was a bit forced and the events that happened in the store confused me a bit. I'll read it back again and see if I can make sense of it. But I found the part where Max tried to chat her up really funny. And when the narrator kept correcting his narration, that part was really funny as well. Even though there is room for improvement, it's a good first try! Well done! I also posted two stories recently called 'Still Have Each Other' and 'Love is Enough', and I would appreciate some feedback on both :)

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Radhika Diksha
February 21, 2021 11:37

I tried my baby steps in humor so please tell me if I could do it.

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User_2443 0967
March 09, 2021 16:48

HAHAHAHAHHAA Radhika, this is gold!!
Amazing, I would adore seeing this as a movie, lollll
Superior storytelling, Radhika!

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Radhika Diksha
March 10, 2021 14:01

Thanks, timber, I loved your comments on my stories. Thanks for reading them.

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User_2443 0967
March 10, 2021 14:02

No problem!!!

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User_2443 0967
March 10, 2021 14:02

No problem!!! They were awesome!

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This was a fantastic story, Radhika! The small details and imagery you added to illustrate the setting and feel of the story were great. The main character's financial situation connected the reader with her, her struggles made the reader be more invested in her story. You also did a great job of making the reader hate Max for his rude, arrogant behavior.

If you want feedback, my only suggestion would be to maybe change the punctuation on some of the sentences so they would flow a little better. For example, maybe changing the placement of commas so the reader is pausing in the right places. Also on the sentence, “I forgot my wallet in-home, can you pay?” do you maybe mean "I forgot my wallet at home, can you pay?" You don't have to agree, though, these are just my thoughts.

I loved the story, you're a talented writer. <3

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Aww bye when are you leaving? (Even though you don't know me much XD)

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Radhika Diksha
March 05, 2021 02:19

I have written this 2 weeks ago. I just came here to read stories and will go again.

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Kate Reynolds
February 23, 2021 01:11

DON'T BE SHY, THROW SOME MORE WATER
Wow, I adored this story! It made me laugh at parts, which I really enjoyed! And I have developed an absolute hate for that Max dude, I mean like what kind of person is he???
You should be very proud of this :)

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Radhika Diksha
February 23, 2021 04:58

Thank you, Kate, you are a lovely girl too. I will miss you very much. I just had a request for you, can you read my first story and give feedback to me in your free time.

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Kate Reynolds
February 23, 2021 12:41

Aw thank you! :)
As will I
Ofc, anything! I will leave some feedback ASAP!

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Kate Reynolds
February 23, 2021 00:51

RADHIKA. YOU'RE LEAVING???
I really don't wanna force you to stay, but you've been one of my closest and oldest friends on Reedsy that I cannot imagine it without you.
I don't want to beg, but it would mean a lot to me if you stayed.
We (especially me) will miss you tons if you leave, but if you feel like that's the best thing for you, then don't let me stop you.
And yeah, when I joined Reedsy I joined because I wanted to improve on my writing skills, but now it's overrun by clubs (no hate).
But I'm still going to stay here for the hope that it would become the nice, fun, and happy writing society that it once was.
Please, even though you're leaving, keep writing. Your writing is like a rainbow, adding splashes of color onto this dull and colorless world. Never stop writing.
I'm going to miss you a lot, but I wish you the best in life, and in achieving your goals.

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Radhika Diksha
February 23, 2021 05:01

I will miss you a lot too. You are the co-founder of my club, you inspired me to make it and brought people to the club. I am grateful to your eternity. Thanks for describing my stories in such a wonderful way. You are a great writer too and I love you a lot.

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Kate Reynolds
February 23, 2021 12:55

Awww thank you so much! Well, they are wonderful
<3333333

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February 22, 2021 13:20

YAAAAAAS
Ok, I know you probably want tips; my tip is you should use semicolons, since there are some run-on sentences; like I'm doing right now in my run-on comments.

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Radhika Diksha
February 22, 2021 13:48

Thanks, I would definitely keep it in my mind.

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February 22, 2021 13:57

Ok! Could you check out mine???

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Radhika Diksha
March 07, 2021 15:13

I did check out, was my comment helpful?

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March 08, 2021 11:16

Yes!

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Shalom A
October 06, 2025 14:26

Hello Rashida, nice write-up. Have you published a book?

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March 17, 2021 08:02

this was humongously humorous and also a bit of horrorly but instead of the 'pls, let she escape the monster' kinda thoughts, my head was freakingly filled with thoughts like 'pls, this can't end in an happily ever after together!' from the time she met max.

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Radhika Diksha
March 17, 2021 09:19

And behold it didn't turn to be a happily ever after. This was my first attempt at humor. I loved that you found my story hilarious.

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March 17, 2021 09:56

Thank you. my first attempt in humor was, i dunno, kinda based on the frog and the princess XD tho it didn't end up this funny (it was titled "The (Virtuous) Princess and the Frog") , would you mind if i asked you to read my new stories and leave feedback, i would love to hear what you think =)

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Radhika Diksha
March 17, 2021 10:52

Sure, i will.

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Liling Wei
March 16, 2021 23:44

Hiiiiiii!! Just wanted to let you know that my newest TSD featuring you is out today!

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Izzie Q.
March 16, 2021 01:24

AMAZING!! You have such a powerful way of expressing emotion and sitations <3

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Liling Wei
March 14, 2021 20:32

Also, this may sound weird, but if you were to have a password for people to know its you, like a code word, what would it be?

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Liling Wei
March 14, 2021 20:26

hey, radhika. I think you forgot to tell me what your character's hair color is. if you don't mind, could you tell me?

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Radhika Diksha
March 15, 2021 01:29

Lilac color, with blue streaks in it.

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Liling Wei
March 15, 2021 02:16

Awesome, thanks!

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Amany Sayed
March 13, 2021 17:38

Hey! I liked the not so fairytale ending of this- it was cool. A couple grammar edits, even though it's too late...

"On top it’s the Valentine season, young love blossoming, couples rolling their tongues into each other, making fake promises." I would say "On top of that"

"out some change. I considered" you need a comma, not a period.

Your plotline, characters, and monologue are great, but I suppose my only critique is your grammar. You might want to consider getting Grammarly if you don't have it already. (no shame- I have it) Your dialogue's a bit stiff too, but I'd only suggest using more contractions for that. (it to it's that is to that's etc) Other than that it was enjoyable! Keep writing!

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Radhika Diksha
March 13, 2021 17:40

I use Grammarly and to tell you the truth sometimes my application does remove some things. Sure I will keep the points you mentioned in my mind.

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Amany Sayed
March 13, 2021 17:41

Ah, okay!

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Kate Reynolds
March 13, 2021 00:03

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Radhika Diksha
March 13, 2021 03:04

Thanks so much, Kate.

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Kate Reynolds
March 13, 2021 14:52

Ofc! It’s very true

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March 12, 2021 21:08

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Because you are <33333
Pass it on, i think Isaac started a new trend :)

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Radhika Diksha
March 13, 2021 03:04

Thank you so much tiff. How are you by the way? Long time no see.

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TJ Squared
March 13, 2021 03:07

pretty good, now that I got my feelings on paper, it feels better. If you don't know what I mean, scroll down on this story's comments.

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Felicity Anne
March 12, 2021 21:07

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Spam this to everyone (Isaac's idea lol)

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Radhika Diksha
March 13, 2021 03:05

Hi Felicity. Thank you so much. You are back?

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Felicity Anne
March 13, 2021 03:42

Yep!! ;)

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TJ Squared
March 12, 2021 18:10

part 9 out :)

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TJ Squared
March 11, 2021 22:37

part 8 out

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Sapphire 🌼
March 11, 2021 17:34

Hi Radhika!

How are you doing?

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Radhika Diksha
March 11, 2021 19:48

I am fine, how are you?

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Radhika Diksha
March 11, 2021 19:51

Why are you leaving? What happened? Is it because of us.
If you read this all I want to you to know is that ur a great person and human being. Your writing is good and quirky. I enjoyed reading ur stories. I will miss you a lot and I am worried because of ur sudden leave.

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Radhika Diksha
March 11, 2021 19:51

Why are you leaving? What happened? Is it because of us.
If you read this all I want to you to know is that ur a great person and human being. Your writing is good and quirky. I enjoyed reading ur stories. I will miss you a lot and I am worried because of ur sudden leave.

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Sapphire 🌼
March 11, 2021 19:53

I will be inactive for a little bit after today to cool down. It's not any of your guys' fault! Thank you so much for your support, you really are a kind person :)

What's your favourite movie? :)

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Radhika Diksha
March 11, 2021 20:20

Um. Okay I get it. I love hidden figures a lot. And inside out. To all the boys too.

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Radhika Diksha
March 11, 2021 20:20

What is ur favorite movie

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Sapphire 🌼
March 11, 2021 20:23

Well then-

Hmmm Im wayy to indecisive to choose, but basically all of the netflix shows. To all the boys is reallyyyy good, I agree!

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Radhika Diksha
March 11, 2021 20:26

Yeah. Can I ask you why you are going to be inactive?

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Radhika Diksha
March 11, 2021 20:26

Yeah. Can I ask you why you are going to be inactive?

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Ru .
March 11, 2021 14:51

This was a light, funny and sweet read. The awkward mishaps of the protagonist made it easier to invest in her character and follow the flow of the story. You built up the tension and atmosphere nicely. My only suggestion would be to watch grammar like "left my wallet at home" instead of "in home" and also, read your dialogue out to make it sound realistic. Good job.

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Radhika Diksha
March 11, 2021 14:59

yeah, thanks for the feedback. I can elaborate on the dialogue part because it will help me in the future. Like how can I improve it?

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Liling Wei
March 10, 2021 23:25

Hey, Radhika! Heard you wanted to be in my Reedsy Cast, could you please fill out the questions below!
Preferred story name (just so you know, I like keeping your username so that people can easily identify you unless your name is like an inanimate object or something but I wanted to put this here just in case):

Hair(anything from just a vague description to every detail is fine):

Eyes(anything from just a vague description to every detail is fine):

Skin tone(anything from just a vague description to every detail is fine):

Clothing preferences(anything from color preferences to exact outfits is fine):

Personality:

Fav Color(if you want multiple, please choose up to two):

Any relationships because yeah, why not?:

Power (please choose one of the below):

Elemental: Weakness: restrictions based on area. Please tell me if you would like to be a general or specific elemental, contact me for more information.

Mental: Weakness: will always tell the truth. But can, of course, ignore questions altogether. Please tell me what you would like to specialize in.

Shapeshifter: Weakness: at the beginning, the shapeshifter will need to study and memorize the animal they wish to shift into. Note they can simply shift their appearance, not just turn into animals. The more they shift into that animal, the easier it will be and the less time and knowledge of that animal they will need. Also whenever transforming, they will have one part of their body that will always stay the same. (ex: blue eyes or brown hair or a birthmark, you can choose what part of your body. Megan has her teal hair tips and stormy eyes). Please tell me what you want your marking to be.

Magic: Weakness: needs to study and memorize all spells exactly (uses wands). Please tell me what you want your character to specialize in!

Anything else? Questions? Comments? Concerns?

Lol, I'm so sorry about how long this is

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Radhika Diksha
March 11, 2021 02:02

Yeah, it's long but it's okay.
Name: Katniss
Eyes: Raven black
Skin tone: Golden kinda with a bit of olive tinge
Clothes: I want a sky blue body con suit, it should have a peacock feather design on my shoulder of the cloth.
Personality: she has a lot of knowledge but has some anger issues. She cannot trust people easily, she is mysterious. She bottles her feeling up but is caring in nature. She pretends to aggressive but inside she is soft like a marshmallow. A good warrior and know the art of weapons.
Fav colour: blue and lilac
Relationship: Of course yeah, but can you put me in a love triangle.
Power: ELemental will be fine.
So, when have you started the series because I need to catch up You will write it very well.?

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Liling Wei
March 11, 2021 02:26

First umm you may need to specify who what where in the love triangle lol.
For Elemental, what type of Elemental would you like to be:
General Elemental:
Can use many different types of elements
Generally has less control over each element as opposed to a strong Specific Elemental
Specific Elemental:
Strong in one or two areas of Elementalism
Can only control one or two elements
Note: There is one Earth Elemental, one Water Elemental, one Fire Elemental, and one general Elemental already in play.
For your last statement, what do you mean exactly?

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Radhika Diksha
March 11, 2021 02:33

I said that you write very well, and I have to read the whole series because I don't know about it, do I have to catch up a lot?

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Liling Wei
March 11, 2021 02:34

Well, I've written six stories but if you don't want to read them all, I completely understand. I can just give you a summary of the first five and you can read the last one.

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Radhika Diksha
March 11, 2021 02:42

Yeah that will be great. Cause reading 6 stories on top I have to read other peoples story so. Please don't feel bad about that.

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