A sharp CLACK-POP tore through the silence of the motel bedroom.
The light vanished as fast as it came, leaving behind the faint fizz of a cooling bulb and the smell of scorched metal.
Mosely didn’t wait for his eyes to adjust to the returning dark. He plucked the spent bulb from the flash gun with a handkerchief and let it go tink-tink-tinking across the floorboards. A fresh bulb snapped into place. He slid in a new holder, aimed at the figure he had arranged on the bed, and pressed the release.
A second CLACK-POP blinded the room.
The white light revealed the stark outline of a young man, mouth open, eyes closed.
Mosely whispered, but the echo in the room made it carry, “Ah… that pool of red against the white sheet. It does make it lovely.”
“Sir, we hired you to take the pictures. Please keep your comments to yourself,” the sergeant said from the corner of the room.
“Do you not see it? The wallpaper torn from the walls, the design of that metal bed frame, this young man’s face. There is artistry even in death.”
“You’re sick,” the sergeant said, his voice strained with held-back anger. “I know you’re good, but you truly disgust me. Just take the pictures, please.”
Charles Mosely smiled. His front teeth had been rotting for years, thanks to his habit of sucking on sugar cubes. He adjusted his hat. “You should see my studio, friend. Hundreds of such works hang on its walls. Each one speaks to me.”
“I will never set foot in your demented little studio. We have another body. That makes two today. Follow me down the hallway. We need pictures of this one as well.”
“Delighted!”
The two men walked down the dark hallway, glass crunching under their feet, the remains of a struggle. The sergeant opened a door, and from the ceiling hung an old woman, swaying slightly.
“She’s in a long black wedding dress. Of all things,” the sergeant said dryly. “As you know, this is probably the killer’s tenth this year alone.”
“Oh my, this is absolutely stunning.” The words slipped out before he could think better of it. Only a thin slant of light reached the room. Someone had painted the windows black, leaving a single clear spot to light the scene.
“He does have refined tastes, you could say.”
Mosely set the tripod, and the flashes began to throw white into the darkness. The smell of hot metal filled the room as he circled, taking in every angle.
“Beautiful,” he kept murmuring.
He saved the best angle for last. It was his ritual to circle each subject twice, taking in the scene and its light before closing himself off from the world beneath the black cloth.
He shook out the heavy fabric and drew it over his head and the back of the camera. The room dimmed around him. He leaned toward the ground glass, where the scene appeared as little more than a blur of gray shapes.
Then the image came into focus, and what he saw made him go very still.
The old woman was standing. Upright, in her black wedding dress, her gray hair loose, her skin lit from within by a pale, sickly light. She pointed at something he could not see.
He tore the cloth from his head. Nothing. Only the body, swaying as before.
Mosely stood motionless for a moment, then pressed the back of his hand against his mouth. He looked at the flash gun. He looked at the window. He looked at the ceiling.
“A defect,” he muttered. “The glass.”
He wiped his eyes slowly with his handkerchief, folded it, and put it away.
Taking a slow breath, he drew the cloth over himself once more and leaned toward the glass. The old woman was still there, her finger still pointing, her eyes locked directly onto his.
“Good God,” he whispered.
He held the view far longer than he should have, waiting for her to dissolve back into rope and shadow. She did not.
“Okay… I have what I need,” Mosely growled finally, as much to himself as to anyone. He was aware of how long he had been standing there.
He fired. CLACK-POP. When he looked again through the glass, she was gone.
“I will have these developed and get back to you.”
He put on his hat, popped a sugar cube into his mouth, and walked out of the motel.
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September 1, 1931
In the darkroom of his studio, he watched the faces of the dead emerge. It never failed to quicken his heart, the silhouettes of those he had just witnessed surfacing before his eyes like music rising in the darkness. He had always thought of them as treasures drawn up from the depths of the forbidden.
He turned to the print of the old woman, eager to find her standing there. To his disappointment, there was nothing but the rope that held her body.
“Beautiful, my fair lady,” he whispered. “Though I feel I saw you standing…”
He sucked on a sugar cube, his thoughts drifting back to the dress and to the woman who had been standing inside it.
“A wedding gown of black…”
Brrrring. Brrrring.
The telephone in the hall startled him from his thoughts. He wiped his hands and hurried to answer.
“We require your services under the Caugherton Bridge. Be punctual.”
Grabbing his leather bag of equipment, he left.
It was early morning, and the sun had barely cleared the rooftops. A very large man lay on his back, shirtless, in nothing but his underwear, a pitchfork buried in his belly.
Mosely circled the body, his hands moving as if he were framing the picture in his mind. He glanced over at the sergeant. “I bet I can get a little of that gorgeous sunrise to glisten off the handle,” he said, with a smile that made the sergeant turn his back.
He shook out the cloth and settled it over his head, and a man was staring right into his face. Mosely felt his heart skip a beat.
The man’s blue eyes were tortured and angry, and they pierced something in Mosely that he did not like. His mouth was stretched wide in a scream, the veins standing out like rivers along his forehead. Mosely heard nothing. Not a word, not a breath. Only silence.
He whipped the cloth off and saw once again only a body lying there.
“Why can’t the dead stay dead!” Mosely growled, moving closer to the corpse.
He cursed the dead man under his breath as he reset the camera. When he drew the cloth over his head again, the man was there, fully dressed and much calmer, pointing at something on the ground.
“Deceptive spirit,” he hissed. “What could you possibly need? You are dead.”
Yet curiosity made him look where the finger pointed.
Mosely pulled the cloth away, walked over, and found a matchbook lying in the dirt. Inside the cover were initials.
He leaned toward the sergeant and whispered, “I have something for you. You might want to take a look at that on the ground. I have a feeling it will lead you in the right direction. You see… I can be helpful from time to time.”
The sergeant picked up the matchbook and turned it over in his hands.
“That is a very helpful find,” he said slowly. “I have no idea how we missed it.” He glanced back at Mosely, confusion creeping across his face. “Thank you.”
Mosely only tipped his hat.
That evening he poured a large glass of red wine and spread the prints across the table, turning each one over until he found the big man’s face.
“Why did I even help?” he murmured, again and again.
His hands drifted over several boxes and stopped on one labeled My Prize Shots.
“My sweets, one day you will have your own gallery.” He leaned down and kissed the lid. His brother had been the first.
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September 15, 1931
Another call came. This time it was a death in a copper bathtub. Mosely let himself in ahead of the sergeant and hummed as he set up his tripod.
“I would marry you, my lady,” he said with a laugh. “You are death captured in its truest form.”
He had almost forgotten the earlier disturbances until he drew the cloth over his head and found a young woman in the tub staring directly at him. Tears ran down her face. She raised a trembling finger and tapped a tile on the wall, again and again.
Mosely pulled the cloth off and paused.
“Intriguing,” he murmured. He stepped closer and studied the tile, then the dead woman’s face.
“And why should I help you?” he whispered angrily. “You’re dead. What does it matter? If anything, I wish I had been here to witness it. The man who did this is a genius.”
“Who are you talking to?”
The sergeant’s voice echoed from behind him. Mosely paused for a second, then turned and smiled, showing his stained teeth.
He drew the cloth over his head again. The woman was glaring at him now. She dipped a finger into the bathwater and began to write on the wall, and he watched the letters form, one by one.
My Prize Shots.
His hands went rigid on the camera. He tore off the cloth and leaned close to the dead woman’s ear. “I don’t care what happened to you.”
He lit a cigarette and blew the smoke into her face. Then, with a warm smile, he pressed the release.
CLACK-POP.
Before the glare faded, he flung the cloth over his head.
She was standing now. Slowly, she opened her mouth and vomited a photograph, which drifted across the glass and, impossibly, landed on the floor beside Mosely’s boot.
It was a black-and-white picture of an old man in a rocking chair, holding a pipe. Mosely knew it at once. It came from his own collection.
He slipped it into his coat, then called over his shoulder, “Sergeant, take a look at that tile there. I think it might be a fingerprint.”
Without another word, he tipped his hat and walked out.
The sergeant stared after him, then back at the tile. “We overlooked this…” he said, almost to himself.
Mosely walked the alley in deep thought.
“Cursed woman!” He spat on the ground and cut onto the train tracks. He walked for hours, his equipment heavy on his shoulder, until he reached his studio apartment. There he sat for a long while, staring at the one print he had managed of her before she appeared. He poured a glass of vodka, lit a cigarette, and drew the smoke deep into his lungs, his hands not quite steady.
“How could you give me a photograph from my own private collection?” he whispered.
He sat with the question till his bottle was empty.
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October 30, 1931
Brrrring. Brrrring.
He answered lazily. “Hello.”
“Sir,” the sergeant said, “your keen eye, twice in a row, has really advanced our investigation. That print on the tile gave us a name. I wanted to thank you for that.” He paused. “Though you honestly disgust me.”
Mosely said nothing.
“We have a body. I would rather never see you again. And on Devil’s Night, of all nights. Please come to 22 Meadowbrooke Drive. Bring your keen eye.” The line went dead.
Mosely looked at the print of the woman in the bathtub and smiled. “You are still lovelier dead than you were as a ghost.”
He pressed the red-hot tip of his cigarette into her face and watched the hole spread, black and smoking, until it ate her features away. Then he took his hat and left.
The scene was in the basement of a decayed, abandoned house. As he descended into the darkness, the old excitement returned.
A man was tied to a chair, apparently put to sleep right where he sat. The basement smelled of damp earth.
“Gorgeous knots,” Mosely murmured, photographing the man’s hands, then his face. He glanced at the sergeant, knowing the comment would disturb him.
He drew the cloth over his head and focused. The bald man in the chair was staring directly at him. They looked at each other for a long while. Finally, the man nodded and pointed with his eyes toward the corner of the room.
There, on the ground, lay a tooth.
The man raised his hands to show Mosely the blood on them. His knuckles were split, as if he had broken them on someone’s face.
CLACK-POP.
Mosely stepped out from under the cloth and knelt. The dead man’s hands were bloodied, just as the ghost had shown him. Then he saw the tooth in the corner.
He looked around to make sure no one was listening, leaned toward the corpse, and whispered, “Why me?”
He went back under the cloth. The basement was gone. In its place hung his studio, every photograph from My Prize Shots dangling from a thin string, one hundred and six of them. And they were moving. He could watch himself inside each one.
He saw the man dying in the street after a mugging, still alive, while Mosely adjusted his tripod. He saw the young man drowning, a life that could have been saved, while a man behind the lens was too enthralled to put his camera down. His eyes passed from the gutters of the slums to orphanages and hospitals. Everywhere, death approached. And everywhere, Mosely was there to capture it. The flash of light before each final breath.
And then, at the end of a long mahogany dining table, he saw his younger brother, grasping his own throat. His eyes pleaded for help. And Mosely, reaching for his camera.
CLACK-POP.
His head spun, and the blood drained from his face.
The bald man opened his mouth, and one last photograph slipped out from between his teeth. It drifted down and landed beside Mosely’s boot. Whatever was in the picture made his whole body shudder.
“What is the matter with you, Mosely?” the sergeant shouted. “You have been standing there unmoving for five minutes. I do not have all day.”
Snapped back to the present, Mosely picked up the photograph and slipped it inside his jacket. Was it really there? He stepped out from under the cloth, pale and sickly, like a man who had seen a ghost.
“Are you unwell, sir?” the sergeant asked.
“I… I am fine. Yes. If you look over there, sir, I see a tooth on the ground. And I noticed through my lens that he has cuts on his hands. Perhaps from the perpetrator? Perhaps they had some kind of confrontation?”
“Thank you again for your keen eye,” the sergeant said, already moving quickly toward the corner.
“I bid you good day, sir. I am going back to the studio.” Mosely turned his back and left.
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In the darkroom, Mosely sank into the chair at his table and stared at his walls with a blank gaze. The cigarette burned between his fingers. A long thread of ash broke away and fell to the floor.
His hands trembled as he reached into his jacket, hoping it would not be there, hoping it had all been his imagination. His fingers brushed against it.
Slowly, he drew it out and laid it on the table before him. It was dated October 30, 1931.
The photograph showed Charles Mosely himself, in his signature frock coat, striped vest, and plaid trousers. His bowler hat sat at its usual angle.
In the picture, he was very much dead. Dead in the very room where he now sat.
He reached for a sugar cube, and behind him, he heard footsteps.
A heaviness crept over him, a paralysis that started in his fingers and swallowed his arms, his legs, his tongue. He could not move. He could not speak. His mouth had gone too dry to hold the sugar, and the cube dropped from his lips onto the floor.
Something soft and rough settled around his neck. A noose. It began to tighten.
His body would not obey him, but his eyes still could. They slid down to the photograph on the table, and he understood that it was not a warning. It was a record. It was telling him the story, one frame at a time, exactly as it was happening.
One hundred and six hands gripped the rope, each belonging to a different body, every shape, size, and age. Each second a new face surfaced from the dark, held for a moment, then faded as another took its place, every one as furious as the last. Even the old man with the pipe had his turn. They pulled the noose tighter, and their rage seemed to crawl into every cell of his body, until slowly the world dimmed.
Mosely tried to scream, but no sound left his mouth.
Then, before him, stood a man carrying an old camera beneath one arm.
He mounted it on the tripod he had brought, adjusted Mosely’s hands and feet and straightened his hat.
“We must get this photo exactly as it was taken. After all, I do like to get the details right.”
He glanced toward the dark window. “Besides, what better night for it?”
With one last adjustment, he stepped back. “Ah, yes. This is it.”
Then, with a warm smile, he said, “Say cheese.”
The scream died in Mosely’s throat. He could see it as the camera would: the rope stark against the pallor of his face, the carved mahogany of his chair, the lamplight gleaming along the curve of his bowler hat. His lips curled into a smile at the beauty of the shot.
CLACK-POP.
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Old Iz, it's so good to see you back! And what a wonderfully twisted story to return with! 😂
What struck me most was that Mosely isn't simply fascinated by death. He's offended by the idea that the dead might have something to say about it. The sheer arrogance of a man who considers himself an artist while people are dying in front of his camera!
I loved how the photographs gradually turned against him, especially the revelation about his younger brother. And that final scene, with 106 pairs of hands and someone carefully arranging Mosely for his own photograph, was deliciously cruel.
The fact that he still manages to appreciate the beauty of the shot, even as he's being killed, says everything about him. And that final CLACK-POP! Perfect.
One question, though: was the photographer at the end one of his victims, or did you deliberately leave his identity open?
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Thank you! This is probably the most twisted story I've ever posted, so I'm delighted you enjoyed my little morbid photographer's tale. )
That's a great question about the photographer at the end, and honestly I'm still scratching my head over it a little myself. I was writing the scene, and suddenly it just appeared on the page and I loved it immediately, but afterward I found myself wondering who he actually was. Mosely's brother? One of the other victims? The serial killer? Something else entirely?
In the end, I decided to leave it a mystery. If I had no idea, I figured it might be best to remain an unknown figure. Sometimes its the unanswered questions that are the ones that linger the longest anyways. Maybe it is one big weakness in the story, but I really liked that it highlighted the depth of mosely's darkness. Thank you so much for reading and taking the time to comment!!
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Haha, I love that even the author has no idea who the mysterious photographer is! 😂 I wouldn't call that a weakness at all. Some mysteries are better left unsolved. And apparently this one is keeping both of us guessing.
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Wow - I think this may be your best story yet and a real contender this week. The idea that the dead can only be seen through the ground glass of an old-fashioned camera is so clever. Mosely is such a creepy character whose presence makes us uncomfortable long before anything supernatural happens. Initially, the ghosts appear to be trying to communicate with Mosely. Gradually, we discover that they have a much more personal reason for seeking him out. The underlying story of the brother choking is so unsettling. Then the photograph showing Mosely's own death is a brilliant reversal. It's not revenge but more the difference between witnessing suffering and participating in it through deliberate inaction. A brilliant take on this prompt! Well done.
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Wow!! Now that is very high praise coming from someone who has won this competition on so many occasions. I'm am really thrilled you enjoyed it! I'm kind of a nerd when it comes to old photography, so I had a lot of fun researching those early cameras and working some of that into the story. I also wanted Mosely to remain unsettling right to the very end... especially in that final moment when he's still admiring the beauty of his own death. Thank you so much for reading and for such an encouraging comment. It means a lot. I had a great time writing this one, and I'm especially glad my account is back so people can actually read it!
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Chills while reading this! It was absolutely enthralling to read through. I was hooked almost instantly by your use of sound. The repeated use of it throughout the story and the use of it in the ending was phenomenal. I enjoyed the whole read, each little hint and clue kept me more and more interested. The atmosphere you set and the characterization of Mosely himself was truly impressive!
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Thank you so much for such a lovely comment! I’m thrilled you were hooked from the beginning. I had a lot of fun writing Mosely and playing with the sounds throughout the story, Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment!!
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Never mock the dead... I suppose forensic photography was tailor-made for Mosley, but it proved to be unsustainable. I loved the fine details of photography and lighting contrasts layered into your story, as well as the progression in the intensity of each case and how the deceased subjects communicated with him. Another spectacular story! Thank you for sharing, Iz!!!
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Thank you so much! I'm delighted you enjoyed i my morbid tale especially the photography details and the way the hauntings gradually intensified. Mosley certainly learned the hard way that the dead deserve a little respect! :)
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Good to have you back, Izbushka. Multiple repeating bits that worked so well. Clack-Pop, of course, but also the black cloth as almost another camera lens bringing what was truly being seen into focus. You upped the creepy factor of Mosley with his introduction as having rotting teeth from his sugar cube addiction. How many scary creatures have we seen in movies that smile with a mouth full of rotted stumps? The police detective was a nice foil allowing in enough normalcy to really highlight the distinction between the world most of us occupy and Mr. Mosley's. Enjoyed the read. Well done. -M
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Thank you so much, M! I had been traveling a lot lately. Glad to be back for a bit. I love your observation about the black cloth acting like another lens... revealing what was truly there. And yes, the sugar cubes and rotting teeth were meant to make Mosely feel just a little more wrong from the start. Thanks for reading and for such thoughtful feedback. I really appreciate it!
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I like the story. I think the whole idea of a photographer who sees beauty in death, only to end up becoming one of his own photographs, is pretty damn good. Mosely is a sick, twisted character, but that's what makes him interesting. He's not just taking pictures of dead people. He's obsessed with them. He sees something beautiful where everyone else sees something horrible. I like the CLACK-POP throughout the story. It gives the camera its own presence, and when you hear it again at the very end, it brings everything full circle. The ghosts appearing through the camera is my favorite part. I like how they start out just pointing things out to him, but begin showing him things he doesn't want to see. Now, the ending is fantastic. The photograph of Mosely already dead, dated that very day, is creepy as hell. And the line about it not being a warning but a record is one of the best in the story. I love the idea of all 106 victims coming back for him. He's spent his life watching people die, sometimes when he could have saved them, and now he's the one who can't do anything about it. The part I wouldn't change is Mosely smiling right before the final photograph. That's what makes the ending work for me. He's dying. He's still thinking about how beautiful the picture will be. He hasn't learned a damn thing. He's still the same twisted man. I think it's a good horror story with a great concept and an ending that sticks with you. That last CLACK-POP is perfect.
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Thank you so much for this wonderful comment! It genuinely made my day!! I'm especially glad Mosely worked for you as a character. He's undeniably twisted, and I wanted him to be the kind of person whose obsession was far darker than the ghosts haunting him. The fact that you picked up on him finding beauty where everyone else sees horror tells me I conveyed exactly what I was hoping to. I'm always nervous about putting a story out there and wondering how it will be received, so it means a lot that you feel you captured its essence. And thank you for mentioning the ending. The photograph wasn't meant as a warning at all, but as proof that his fate had already been written, so it's wonderful to hear that landed for you. Most of all, I'm glad Mosely's final smile worked. You're absolutely right. Even at the very end, he hasn't learned a thing. If anything, that moment reveals the depths of his depravity. I'm also happy the recurring CLACK-POP worked its magic. That final one felt like the only way the story could end. :)
Thank you again for taking the time to read the story and leave such thoughtful feedback. Comments like this make sharing these strange little tales a lot less nerve-wracking!
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I really enjoyed this story!
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Thanks so much!! Glad you enjoyed it :)
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Wow! That was an awesome read. The characterization of Mosely is top tier. I was almost as disgusted with him as the sergeant was! From the rotting teeth to his smile at the end as he became the subject of his own depraved passion was truly a great, twisted story. Masterfully done and thank you for sharing this story!
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Really appreciate you taking the time to read the story! It honestly makes my day to hear you thought Mosely's characterization was top-tier. I was hoping he would be a memorable character... obviously for all the wrong reasons! Thanks so much for the thoughtful read and kind comment!!
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Another great one! Many younger people nowadays wouldn't always get the crack-pop of the flashbulb (my phone tried to correct this word three times proving my point) or developing one's own film. Great time period ambiance. This is a little different for you, but I still like it, showing once again you immense talents.
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Thank you so much! You gave me a good laugh with the flashbulb comment. :) It's probably true that a lot of people have never heard a flashbulb go CLACK-POP... let alone watched photographs slowly emerge in a darkroom tray!
I've always had a fascination with old photography, so it was a lot of fun building a story around those cameras. I'm glad the time period felt authentic to you.
Really appreciate your encouragment! This one was definitely a little different from my usual stories so it's encouraging to hear that it still worked for you. I really appreciate you taking the time to read and comment!
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Never a problem! I worked at a newspaper in college and in my first newspaper assignment professionally, where we had a darkroom, and I learned how to develop black and white film. I grew up with a flashbulb camera in our home and still own one that my wife's uncle had.
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That is a great experience! There's something almost magical about watching an image slowly appear. I've always found darkrooms fascinating for that very reason. Nowadays we can take thousands of photos on our phones without a second thought.... back then every shot mattered. You had to think carefully before pressing the shutter and then wait to see whether you'd captured what you hoped for. There was a mystery and craftsmanship to it.. That is really neat you grew up around flashbulb cameras and even own one!!
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Very well written and masterfully paced. Your use of sensory details drew me into the character and early century setting. However why would the ghosts kill him when he was being cooperative in helping solve their murders. I think it would've made more sense if he wasn't helping, unless its symbolic of the inevitability of death for people like Mosley (maybe I'm thinking too much into it haha). I liked that he died becoming one of his own photos though, poetic justice. Wonderful read, thank you for sharing.
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Thank you so much for such a thoughtful comment and for reading so closely! I love seeing how people experience the story, and loved your question!! I wrestled with that and hope my answer helps.
The ghosts who killed Mosely were the 106 victims from his My Prize Shots box, people whose deaths he watched and photographed until their final breath, including his own brother. Those were his personal trophies, and that’s where the ultimate revenge came from.
The crime scene ghosts were different. They were already dead when he arrived, and while they used him as a reluctant witness to point toward clues, he never helped them out of genuine compassion. Only shock at first, then the feeling that he had little choice. I think that’s partly why they were the ones who revealed his death photograph to him. He enjoyed their death and wished he had watched them die.
Hope that makes sense! Best I could do in under 3,000 words. So glad you loved the ending! It was fun to wrtite! :)
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ahhh that makes sense, thanks for clarifing. Also yep that's totally fair 3k words is a tough maximum, and I think you did a great job working underneath that ceiling.
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Appreciate your thoughtful read and comment. That 3,000-word limit can be challenging at times, especially since I tend to be a bit long-winded :) I see you have a new story up. I'll be sure to give it a read when I get the chance!
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This was amazing. Movie worthy for certain. Mosely had no respect for the dead. He could have helped and respected the dead. Instead his own twisted excitement and sheer pleasure at a deceased body was his only hobby. Like a child playing in legos or opening up a Christmas gift. The true horror is the man himself. He didn’t value life or death. So the tables being turned on him was perfect. Great story!
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Thank you so much for the kind words! That's incredibly encouraging to hear you say it felt movie-worthy. I'm especially glad you picked up on the fact that Mosely was really the most disturbing part of the story. The ghosts may haunt him, but he was always meant to be the true horror. He had become so obsessed with death and, as you put it perfectly, like a child playing with Legos or opening a Christmas gift, he would take delight in watching anyone die.
And yes, I really enjoyed turning the tables on him at the end... though in true Mosely fashion, he still managed to appreciate the beauty of the shot even as he became part of it himself!
Thanks so much for reading and for taking the time to leave such a thoughtful comment. I truly appreciate it!
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What a fantastic story. This is extremely well written. I love your use of description and sound, really kept me enthralled. Using the camera as a lens to interact with the spirits and their movement, so well done!
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Thank you so much!! Really appreciate that you took time to read and comment. I am thrilled that you liked the camera lens angle of the story.
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Holy crap, that was amazing. The way everything was stated without overdramatic exclamations made it sound so ironically cold. Mosely's a terrible character! I definitely felt hate for him, and that's a compliment. Honestly, you controlled my emotions through words better than if you were literally pulling my strings!
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Wow!! I truly take your hatred for Mosely as the highest compliment! And I'm especially glad you noticed the restrained tone... it's wonderful to hear that came through. Thank you so much for such a fantastic comment! You have made my day! And if you have a moment to leave a like, I'd really appreciate the little boost to help the story travel further! Again thank you so much for taking the time to comment and read this story. Your encouragement goes a long way!
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Not sure this story fits the brief. 106 ghosts kill the guy at the end, after all. I also found the final twist a bit confusing; who is the final photographer? I assume it's the killer they are investigating. In which case, what's his link, if any, to the ghosts' revenge? Seems to muddy the ending that both the killer and the ghosts are involved in the final death.
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Thank you for reading and for you very thoughtful feedback. That's a fair observation!!
You've identified exactly the ambiguity I was aiming for and I intentionally left it unresolved...
That said, as you pointed out, it may also be seen as a weakness that muddies the ending. I wasn't necessarily envisioning the final photographer as the killer. Rather, I wanted readers to draw their own conclusions. He could be the killer, Mosely's dead brother, or one of the other victims, or even some form of supernatural judgment.
I do see how that ambiguity might create confusion rather than intrigue. It's always interesting to discover where a reader's interpretation differs from what I had in mind.
Despite the muddy ending, I hope you still enjoyed the story! Thank you again for taking the time to share your thoughts. Feedback like this genuinely helps me grow as a writer, and I appreciate it very much. :).
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This was fantastic-loved the concept of a photographer who can see the dead through his camera. The idea that Mosely was more interested in taking the perfect photo than saving someone's life was chilling. And him becoming the subject of that final shot was such a satisfying ending.
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Thank you so much!! I wanted Mosely’s morbid obsession with capturing that perfect shot to be nicely disturbing. Glad it worked, and I love that you found the ending satisfying! I really appreciate your thoughts and comments. Your encouragement means a lot!! I’ll check out your new story soon!
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Ol'Iz, what a great story! It was so cleanly streamlined moving from one line to the next. I could find nothing to criticize even if I tried. Great imagery. I think your ending "CLACK-POP" is so perfect for the story. I think you have a run away story here. Thanks again for such a great read.👍👍
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Thank you so much! That’s incredibly high praise, especially hearing you think this might be a runaway story! I had so much fun writing this one, and I’m thrilled you enjoyed it!
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This story sings! Despite the horror, the gruesome details, the hate in Mosely. Here's a man who could have shown compassion and instead helped the police by "mere accident". All those who held the rope at the end -- what poetic justice. The sound of the popping flash cubes was also a great touch. Chilling. And fantastic.
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Thank you so much! I’m glad you felt the story sang! A wonderful compliment . I had a lot of fun writing this one and hopefully, Mosely turned out to be a little more frightening than the ghosts themselves! :)
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The transition from the ghosts pointing at physical clues to handing Mosely his own death portrait is brilliantly chilling.
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Thank you, Jim! I always appreciate your comments!! I am glad the moment he receives his own death portrait worked for you. That's the point where Mosely stops being the man behind the camera and becomes the subject. Sick man in that he actually liked it in the end :).
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What a wonderfully macabre premise! I loved the idea of a crime-scene photographer so obsessed with finding beauty in death that he gradually loses sight of the humanity of his subjects. Also, there was one single detail that solidly put me in the time frame of the story. Pausing to wipe his brow with the handkerchief sold it for me. Well played.
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Thank you! I'm really delighted you enjoyed my little macabre story. Mosely was an awful man who loved capturing death, so I'm glad his obsession came through. And thank you for noticing the handkerchief detail! I was hoping to give the story a bit of that 1930s atmosphere. I appreciate you reading and taking the time to leave such thoughtful feedback!
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I really enjoyed how authentically you depicted early 1930s forensic photography. The atmosphere you created captured the mood and challenges of crime investigation in that era very well. I also liked how you portrayed Charles Mosely’s relationship with his work. You captured him as a master of his craft, yet someone deeply marked by the darkness he documented. His obsession with capturing the perfect image, even at the cost of his own well-being, added a powerful psychological dimension.
The way you incorporated ghosts into the story was original and unsettling. Their appearances through Mosely’s camera lens created a chilling atmosphere and added a supernatural layer that deepened the story's psychological impact. It was a great take on the prompt. The ending was powerful and haunting. Making Mosely the final subject in his own collection was a poetic and chilling conclusion.
Great work, as always! I was really happy to see you publish another story.
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Thank you so much for the kind words! I have always had a love for old photographs, and I couldn't help wanting to showcase a little of how those early cameras worked without boring the reader to tears. :). I'm glad that aspect came through and that you enjoyed my little dark tale. Mosely was an awful character. I wanted him to be far worse than the haunts haunting him, so it's gratifying to hear that his obsession and moral decay came across. For me, the real horror was never the ghosts, but Mosely himself. I'm glad to be publishing another story here, and I think I'll continue to do so from time to time. After sixteen submissions, I've learned that what keeps bringing me back isn't the contest itself but the feedback and encouragement from this community. I've learned so much from the thoughtful readers and writers here. Thank you for reading and for taking the time to comment. It truly means a lot!
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You're welcome. You handled that well. You're absolutely right about the feedback and support other authors give. The community here is the real win. And thank you for being part of it. I'm really looking forward to reading more of your stories!
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Thank you always for your encouragement! You are absolutely right, the community here. is the real win!
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A photo of death is a Still Life. It frames the moment. Some used to believe a photo took the soul from the body.
Great story and well written. It made me think.
Thank you.
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Thank you! I love that observation. A photograph freezes a moment in time, and the old belief that it could capture a soul fits maybe was oart of Mosely's obsession. I'm glad the story stayed with you and made you think, Much appreciated and encouraged.
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