Bewitched

Creative Nonfiction Kids Funny

Written in response to: "Write a story from the point of view of a witch, spirit, or corpse." as part of The Witching Hour.

Bewitched

I'm bewitched. Well, that is, I'm becoming a witch. No, not the true, crone looking, broom flying, cauldron cooking kind of witch. But still a witch. A pretend witch, that is. And only for one evening. Not so bad. And I'm actually being encouraged to become a witch or something I'm usually not. Don't intend to cast any spells on unsuspecting souls, good or bad. But you never know. Could happen unintentionally, you understand. Since I'm only eight years old how bad could it be? I have never been schooled in becoming a witch. I'll have to work on it. And, of course, I don't want anyone to know that is what I'll be. So don't tell anyone. It has to be a secret. Now, let's do this!

We, my whole family, don't have much money so Mom will never agree to buy a ready made witch outfit. Those aren't easily available out here in the country anyway. I have to be creative. What am I going to need to make myself look like a witch? Witches always dress in all black, right? I'm gonna need a black dress. One that reaches all the way to the ground. I don't have one of those but my older sister has a long black skirt. Maybe it would reach the floor on me. Now I have to be sure she doesn't need it tonight and will let me use it. Maybe she will help me turn into a witch. She is very resourceful and she knows how to sew. Dad had an old black shirt, once. If we can find it and cut it up some, it would work for the top half. Long sleeves and all, maybe even a cape or shawl. Sis can fix it, I know.

But for the hat? Has to be pointy on top, right? I saved some black construction paper from school. With some glue and scissors bet we can fashion a proper witch hat. Boy, that will look fine! Mom will help draw some lines on my face with her eyeliner makeup to look like wrinkles and mold my silly putty into an extra long nose maybe with a mole on it for good measure.

Wish I had a better pair of shoes to wear. Curly toed boots would be wonderful but I can't think of anything to mimic that. The long skirt won't let them show anyway. I'll put my striped socks on and call it good. Mom's letting me carry our old outdoor straw broom as long as I don't lose it.

Okay, okay! I'm so excited. It's time to go. My two older sisters are ready, too. Even though they are only in fifth and sixth grades, they are going as teen-age boys with their hair swept into Elvis style pompadors including a bad-boy curl in front. They look so goofy with their letter sweaters on. The party is for the whole school and their families. Mom will stay home with the three little one's. They are only five, two and one years old. Way too young to have a good time. Dad will drop us off then come and get us again. He doesn't like these kind of events. You gonna ride with us? Remember, we don't want anyone to know who we are. It's more fun that way.

Our gymnasium doesn't even look like the same place! Sure you can still see all the classrooms spaced around the center open room where the basketball hoops are but the eerie decorations, the orange and black streamers, cobwebs and jack-o-lanterns transform the place into a spooky backdrop for the activities they plan for us. Do you see the graveyard in the corner? Skeletons, ghosts and everything. The cafeteria is serving all kinds of treats, too. Over there is a witch's cauldron. I need to stand by it and stir in some bat's teeth. This is gonna be fun. I heard someone say there will be a costume contest. We all have to parade in front of judges. Maybe you want to volunteer to be a judge. You are new here. You'd be an impartial observer.

Anyway, I see a bunch of my classmates. I'll go hang out by them. Hmm. Nobody seems to recognize me. I'm not going to talk so they won't know who I am. See how long it takes for someone to get wise. I know who they are. Kay Anne is the angle, as always. Martha is a spotted ladybug. Billy is the ghost, I can tell because he has his glasses on the outside of his sheet. Charlie is a caveman just like Fred Flintstone. Jimmy, the hobo or Freddie Freeloader, keeps following me trying to figure it out.

This is so funny! This costume is working out better than I would have ever guessed. No one knows me. Maybe I'll have a shot at winning the costume contest. Wonder what the prize will be. I'll make a clean sweep with my broom. I'm enjoying this whole night except Jimmy is starting to make a pest of himself. He is asking everyone around who they think I am. Did I come with them? Don't tell, please. Hope my sisters catch on and keep the secret.

Gonna have to cast a spell on Jimmy if he doesn't quit annoying me. But I can't talk. Oh, good! Some games are starting. Maybe that will distract the little detective. He could bob for apples. I can't or my nose would fall off or my makeup could smear. I'll paint a small pumpkin. Dracula is whispering scary stories in the graveyard. The skeleton is leading a scavenger hunt. Teens are doing the Monster Mash. I see my sisters joining in.

Finally the parade is lining up. We walk around and around the room while people pick out their favorites. Oh, these stupid annoying shoes. I have the same problem all the time at recess. They are hand-me-down flats a little too sloppy big on me. Every time I try to run or hurry one falls off nearly tripping me. I have to double back to pick it up.

Suddenly Jimmy calls out, “Ah, ha! The witch is Mary! Those are her shoes! I'd know her anywhere!”

Posted Nov 07, 2024
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Ghost Writer
November 17, 2024 05:15

Delightful. To be a kid again and experience the excitement of Halloween.

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Mary Bendickson
November 17, 2024 05:58

Quite bewitching😆. Thanks for the follow.

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Timothy Rennels
November 16, 2024 22:54

Ah, to be young again! I remember as a boy suffering through just such an event in a insufferable plastic cone with two armholes and two eyeholes. I was Candy Corn!

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Mary Bendickson
November 17, 2024 05:56

Two years before as a first grader I was a pumpkin without arm holes. Sisters decided we couldn't enter together because we would be recognized as a set. They left me outside unable to get the heavy doors open.😭

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Timothy Rennels
November 19, 2024 04:31

I hope they were kinder to you as the years went by! Hilarious!

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Mary Bendickson
November 19, 2024 16:01

Wasn't meant to be mean. We just never thought it out far enough. Someone soon came along to open the door. But I don't remember if I had anything to eat 😭.

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Sophie Trevelean
November 14, 2024 16:47

I really enjoyed this Mary!

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Mary Bendickson
November 15, 2024 01:13

Thank you. Not so scary Halloween story.😄

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Philip Ebuluofor
November 13, 2024 17:50

I think judging from what is happening here around me, everyone is one already. Fine move.

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Mary Bendickson
November 13, 2024 20:45

Thanks for reading my story.

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Philip Ebuluofor
November 17, 2024 18:01

Welcome.

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Adelle A.
November 13, 2024 14:48

The younger siblings always get the hand-me downs.... A lovely, cute Halloween read!

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Mary Bendickson
November 13, 2024 16:45

Indeed they do. Glad you liked it.🤗

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Marty B
November 13, 2024 03:53

Tripped up by your shoes! Great story-
Thanks!

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Mary Bendickson
November 13, 2024 20:39

Made that event memorable.☺️

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Tom Skye
November 12, 2024 16:41

This was a fun read. Very simple story but filled with so much detail and childlike enthusiasm, it really captured the setting.

The opening was a little ambiguous and brought some intrigue to what was going on, before it unfolded into a party setting.

The final line and identification can be considered harmless child's play but to the children it is the most important thing in that moment. This meant the scenario drew parallels with being identified as or falsely accused of being a witch. Something with graver consequences in earlier centuries. I felt maybe there was an (intentional?) irony in a witch being identified as a sweet girl, as opposed to an innocent girl/woman being accused of being a witch

Lovely story, Mary. Very subtle.

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Mary Bendickson
November 12, 2024 19:17

Thanks so much. Who knew my innocent childhood memory could hold so much intrigue?🤔

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Tom Skye
November 12, 2024 19:33

Haha I overthink things

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Mary Bendickson
November 12, 2024 19:44

Oh, but I like it😅

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Kevin Keegan
November 12, 2024 14:09

What a lovely story Mary. Very nostalgic and it brought me back in time too. Great work Mary.

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Mary Bendickson
November 12, 2024 14:13

Pleased you liked it.

Also all the others you've been catching up on.😀

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Rebecca Lewis
November 12, 2024 12:07

I enjoyed reading this story — it’s got a sweet, nostalgic vibe that brought me back to the excitement of being a kid during Halloween. I love how you captured the energy and voice of an eight-year-old. It’s a fun story with a lot of heart.

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Mary Bendickson
November 12, 2024 14:00

Glad you enjoyed it.☺️

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Carol Stewart
November 12, 2024 02:57

So endearing! Love the descriptions of the home-made costumes - even better when the child puts them together themselves.

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Mary Bendickson
November 12, 2024 05:01

Thanks.

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November 11, 2024 10:18

This is a delightful story. I was getting excited right along with her! Children used to be delighted with such simple things. A costume made up of family items. It's a shame the shoes were a give-away. You can't win them all.

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Mary Bendickson
November 11, 2024 14:21

Glad you were delighted. Yep, no store bought costumes! 🤗

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Brynn Helena
November 10, 2024 17:04

this was so adorable, gosh. it made me really miss being a kid at halloween :,)

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Mary Bendickson
November 11, 2024 07:26

Thanks. You are a talented writer.

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Max Wightwick
November 10, 2024 16:34

Hi Mary,
This is a very endearing story. There is much to chuckle at, such as the Elvis style pompadors or the Monster Mash, and the perspective of a child is well executed. It is nice to read a peaceful, happier tale for Halloween.

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Mary Bendickson
November 11, 2024 07:26

Thanks. Three weeks of mostly horror, I needed something else
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November 10, 2024 11:08

You write a child's pov really well. Great and realistic voice . Love the boundless imagination of the child that you have delivered here. Very sweet :)

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Mary Bendickson
November 11, 2024 06:49

Thank you🤗

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Helen A Howard
November 10, 2024 09:22

I knew she wouldn’t get away with not being recognised for long. Shoes are always a bit of a giveaway I love your depiction of the fun side of spookiness. It makes a nice change.

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Anthony Andrés
November 10, 2024 07:57

A cute take on the prompt. Really captured the child’s voice well.

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Deborah Sanders
November 10, 2024 06:47

Very nice point of view. Cute, not scary. It’s too bad Jimmy figured it out. But I imagine he was trying so hard that he wasn’t really having much fun. And Mary, resourceful and determined, was a winner.

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Daniel Rogers
November 09, 2024 23:52

Too bad she couldn't find curly toed boots. She may have kept her identity secret. Fun story, and I see it's creative nonfiction. Your story?

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Mary Bendickson
November 10, 2024 00:51

My story. I had a hard-knock world😜. See my comment to Trudy where I tell what happened two years before.😭

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Chris Miller
November 09, 2024 22:32

This reads really nicely, Mary. A really sweet tale.

There may be a typo on Kay Anne's costume? Unless she was just really into geometry.

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Mary Bendickson
November 10, 2024 00:49

Too late to fix but it puts a good angle on it😜

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Trudy Jas
November 08, 2024 21:45

Poor little Mary. Pesky little Jimmy. 🤗

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Mary Bendickson
November 09, 2024 05:05

I should have put a spell on him
😜

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Trudy Jas
November 09, 2024 12:23

You already had. His relentless looking for you,was the equivalent of tugging on your braids. He had a crush on you. LOL

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Mary Bendickson
November 09, 2024 17:24

You may be right about that😆.

Wanted to work in that when I was six, two years before, at same party I was left stranded outside because we sisters had the great idea we shouldn't go in together because people would recognize us as a set. I was dressed as a pumpkin but had no arm holes therefore I couldn't get the big heavy doors open! 😭

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Trudy Jas
November 09, 2024 17:26

And left in the cold. Poor little Mary. :-( LOL in retrospect.

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Annie Persson
November 08, 2024 19:03

So cute! The shoes gave her away! This was very fun to read, and a really charming little tale. I hope she has new shoes next year! :)

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Mary Bendickson
November 09, 2024 04:58

Thanks
That was me a few decades ago.😂

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Annie Persson
November 10, 2024 14:25

We can all still be young at heart! :)

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Alexis Araneta
November 08, 2024 17:26

Adorable !!! Hahahaha ! I loved the perspective of child you trying your best to win the contest. Lovely work !

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Mary Bendickson
November 09, 2024 04:57

Glad your enjoyed it.☺️

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Linda Kaye
November 08, 2024 15:09

Fun story, Mary. Very creative, as usual. I smiled to see this was creative nonfiction. I am guessing that this is a take on a wonderful childhood memory. Thank you for taking us back to an age of innocence! Well done.

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Mary Bendickson
November 08, 2024 16:57

Thanks. Sure was! Third grade school wide Halloween party. Those darn shoes!

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Susan O'REILLY
November 08, 2024 12:34

Ah cute story, much enjoyed sláinte

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Mary Bendickson
November 08, 2024 15:07

Thanks. Had enough of scary over last few weeks.😂
Will get over to read yours soon.

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