Loving Poe

Fiction Bedtime Friendship

Written in response to: "Include the line “We’re not alone” or “Did you hear that?” in your story." as part of What Goes Bump in the Night?.

Loving Poe

The first time Oliver held a snake, he was five years old. His mother prayed with certainty that it would be the last. She was wrong.

On his eighth birthday, she stood frowning in the doorway of his bedroom with her arms folded, watching her son lift three feet of patterned muscle from a glass enclosure his father had carried upstairs that morning. The boa constrictor was a surprise present, purchased from a reptile breeder who assured them the animal was gentle and very accustomed to handling. His mother reasoned it was much less demanding than a puppy, which Oliver had begged for since he could talk.

“His name is Edgar,” Oliver announced, allowing the snake to wind around his forearm.

“Edgar the snake?” his mother asked.

“Like Edgar Allan Poe.”

His mother regarded the creature's blunt head and dark, unblinking eyes. “Somehow, I do see a resemblance.”

"Don't you love him, Mom?"

"Not today."

And that, Oliver thought, was the problem with most people. They judged creatures by their appearances, mistaking unfamiliarity for danger. His mother hated spiders, and his father refused to enter the basement after discovering a since-freed bat hanging over the washing machine. His classmates were afraid of what they considered freaks of nature, like sharks, scorpions, and alligators.

Oliver, on the other hand, had an affinity for unusual animals. He knew most creatures were harmless if treated with proper respect. Edgar, with his intricate brown markings and beautiful amber eyes, seemed to Oliver the most misunderstood creature of all.

Within weeks, they were inseparable. He watched television with Edgar draped across his shoulders and completed his homework while the snake rested in his lap. He read aloud to Edgar from his favorite adventure books, convinced that the snake enjoyed the sound of his voice as much as the stories. When his parents argued, he’d confide in Edgar all the things he couldn't bring himself to tell anyone.

“You're my best friend,” he whispered one afternoon, stroking the smooth scales beneath the snake's jaw. Edgar flicked his tongue against Oliver's cheek, and the boy considered this a loving response.

There was only one unpleasant aspect of their friendship, and that was feeding time.

Every Friday evening, just before bedtime, Oliver's father placed a mouse inside the enclosure and switched off the bedroom light. Edgar seemed more interested in feeding after dark, and Oliver had learned that watching him eat was not particularly desirable.

Instead, Oliver climbed beneath his blankets and waited in the dark. Sometimes the room remained silent for several minutes, interrupted only by the hum of the enclosure's heating equipment and the distant murmur of his parents' television.

Then came the sound.

Thump.

It was a peculiar little noise, like a dropped shoe, followed by the faint rustle of bedding inside the enclosure. Oliver always felt relieved when he heard it.

“Good boy, Edgar,” he’d whisper.

After allowing his snake time to finish, Oliver would open the wire-mesh lid and lift him carefully onto his bed. Edgar settled into the warmth of the blankets, arranging himself in generous loops alongside Oliver's legs, occasionally resting his head on his thigh.

His parents had cautioned him about sleeping with the snake, explaining that Edgar belonged in his enclosure at night. Oliver insisted his snake was happiest beside him but quickly lost the argument. So, the boy had learned to wait until he was sure his parents thought he was asleep before freeing Edgar. 

By Oliver's ninth birthday, Edgar had grown noticeably thicker and longer. He began measuring the snake using pencil lines on his bedroom doorframe, like the markings his father used to record Oliver’s height.

“Five feet, three inches,” Oliver proudly announced one Saturday.

His father shook his head. “At this rate, he'll need his own room.”

“Never,” Oliver laughed.

That autumn, however, something happened that frightened Oliver. Edgar stopped eating.

Each Friday, patiently waiting a stretch of time, Oliver switched the bedroom light back on to find the mouse untouched. After three unsuccessful weeks, his father complained that now they had two pets and drove Edgar to a veterinarian specializing in exotic animals.

Dr. Hensley was a small woman with silver spectacles and a habit of addressing her patients as though they were children. She examined Edgar on a stainless-steel table while Oliver stood nearby, grimacing and twisting the hem of his shirt.

“Well, Edgar Allan,” she murmured, running practiced fingers along his body, “you're certainly growing properly.”

“Is he sick?” Oliver asked.

“He appears quite healthy. Sometimes snakes refuse food for reasons that aren't immediately obvious. Always check his enclosure temperatures and humidity. And it may be time to offer larger prey. Give the boy more of a challenge. A rat or hare will do."

Oliver recoiled. “What? Really?”

“It's all part of caring for an animal, sweetheart. Pets don't always share our food preferences.”

That Friday, Oliver's father brought home a live rat from the reptile shop. He carefully dumped it from its metal cage into the enclosure.

“Goodnight, Dad,” Oliver said, turning off the light. "Good luck, buddy."

He crawled into bed, pulling the blankets to his chin with crossed fingers, and waited. Five minutes passed.

Thump. Then the rustle.

Oliver grinned into the darkness. “There you go, boy.”

Later, Edgar curled beside him with what seemed an especially contented disposition, his broad body warm from the enclosure, his smooth scales sliding over Oliver's pajamas as he arranged himself. Oliver fell asleep with one hand resting against his snake's back.

As Edgar grew, so did his reputation. By Oliver's tenth birthday, neighborhood children who had once refused to play with him began asking to see the snake. Most stood several feet away while Oliver demonstrated how gently his boa accepted being handled.

At school, Oliver became a different source of amusement. He had never been popular, being smaller than most boys his age and more interested in academics than sports. The unfortunate nickname Snake Boy began following him through the corridors after he’d displayed his favorite photographs of Edgar for a science presentation.

One afternoon, Oliver opened his locker to find a picture taped inside. It showed a crude drawing of himself but with a forked tongue, scales covering his face, and a long tail protruding from the seat of his pants. Several classmates gathered behind him, laughing as he struggled to peel the paper away.

“Hey, Oliver,” a boy called. “Does your snake kiss you goodnight with his tongue?”

“Leave me alone,” Oliver muttered.

“Maybe you should take him as your date to the school dance.”

More laughter ensued. Oliver managed not to cry until he reached home, but the humiliation remained lodged somewhere deep beneath his ribs. His mother noticed his silence at dinner and asked whether something had happened at school. Oliver shook his head, pushed his plate away, and said he wasn't hungry.

Later, sitting cross-legged beside Edgar's enclosure, he told his snake about the school bullies. Edgar emerged slowly from his hiding place inside a hollow log, his eyes brightly reflecting the light from Oliver's desk lamp as if empathizing.

“They think we're both weird and ugly,” Oliver whispered. “Maybe I should bring you to the school dance and then see who’s so tough.”

Edgar's tongue flickered against the glass.

“At least you'll never be mean to me,” Oliver said as he opened the enclosure and lifted Edgar onto his lap. For the first time that day, he felt better.

His mother came upstairs to check on him but stopped in the doorway when she saw her son lying quietly with his damp cheek pressed against Edgar's smooth body. She’d never really understood his devotion to the snake, although she had begun to appreciate the comfort the creature provided. She studied her son for a moment before speaking.

“Everything okay, sweetheart?”

Oliver nodded. “Edgar's keeping me company.”

His mother smiled. “Well, he's certainly good at that.”

By the time Oliver celebrated his eleventh birthday, Edgar had grown to nearly eight feet long, and his father had purchased an enclosure so large that Oliver had to surrender his bookshelf and move his treasured collection of Transformers into the closet.

After long weeks of constant harassment at school, Friday evenings had remained a special ritual. Oliver ate dinner, watched TV with his parents, then brushed his teeth and changed into pajamas. He patiently waited for his father to bring Edgar his weekly meal before extinguishing his bedroom light.

The familiar bump invariably followed.

Sometimes Oliver imagined it was Edgar's way of saying good riddance to a long week, a small acknowledgment that everything was as it should be and that it was time to join his owner on the bed.

There were nights when Oliver woke to find the snake stretched along the length of his body, his head resting near Oliver's feet and his tail disappearing somewhere behind the bed. Other nights Edgar arranged himself in a broad circle, leaving Oliver a comfortable hollow in the middle. Oliver found these positions both amusing and comforting.

“You're way taller than I’ll ever be,” he told him. Edgar's tongue gently flicked his wrist.

A few months after Oliver's birthday, Edgar lost his appetite again. This time, neither a change in feeding routine nor adjustments to his enclosure made any difference. Week after week, the skittish prey remained untouched. Oliver became increasingly worried that something was very wrong with his beloved pet.

Dr. Hensley examined Edgar again, weighing him, checking his mouth, and questioning Oliver about the snake's behavior.

“Does Edgar Allan spend much time outside his enclosure?” she asked.

Oliver hesitated. “Sometimes.”

She looked over her spectacles. “Oliver, a snake this size needs a secure, enclosed home and carefully controlled conditions. Even one accustomed to human handling can become stressed and fall ill if those conditions aren't maintained.”

“But he likes sleeping with me.”

“I'm sure you're very attached to him, but that practice is not healthy for Edgar or you. He needs consistency in order for us to figure out why he isn't eating.”

Further examinations revealed no obvious issues. Although the veterinarian explained that snakes could sometimes fast for extended periods, she remained concerned about Edgar's continued refusal. She suggested it may be time to transfer him to a reptile sanctuary permanently for professional care.

Oliver was inconsolable.

He knew the veterinarian was only trying to help, but he wanted to give Edgar more time. The snake's eyes remained bright, his scales glossy, and his movements deliberate. Besides, Edgar still seemed perfectly content next to Oliver every night.

The following Friday, when Edgar refused his food, the decision was made. Oliver’s father called the sanctuary, and the snake would be collected the next morning.

Oliver tried to explain to Edgar that everything would be okay. Maybe he could visit Edgar, and there would be other snakes for Edgar to play with. But Oliver's heart was breaking at the thought of their separation.

”I wish you could tell me what’s wrong.”

That evening, he lay awake beside Edgar, listening to rain patter against the windowpane as thunder cracked the night sky. Oliver cried, imagining Edgar having to sleep alone at night. And worse, so would Oliver.

He stroked the snake's broad, muscular body, feeling the subtle movement beneath the scales, the quiet strength of a creature that had shared the past few years of Oliver's life.

“Poor old boy. I wish you'd eat something.”

Downstairs, his parents were watching a movie, their laughter occasionally rising through the heating vents. Oliver turned toward Edgar in the dark and pressed against the snake's smooth back. He remembered the first time he’d held Edgar when he’d been barely longer than Oliver's leg, and how everyone was wrong when they told him snakes were incapable of affection.

Outside, the thunderstorm continued, while inside the house grew quiet as his parents retired to their bedroom. For a long while, nothing disturbed the darkness but the raging storm and the steady hum of the enclosure.

For one final night, Oliver fell asleep with his arm draped over Edgar's body, comforted by the familiar weight of his only friend.

Then, sometime after midnight, came a thump. Oliver's mother stirred in her sleep.

“Did you hear that?” she murmured.

His father rolled onto his side. “Probably just a tree branch hitting the window. Or maybe that damned snake finally decided to eat.”

“Regardless, Edgar still has to go in the morning,” she reminded him.

“I know. The sanctuary people will be here around ten.”

They listened briefly, heard nothing more, and fell back asleep.

In the morning, Oliver's mother climbed the stairs carrying a basket of clean laundry against her hip. She knew the sanctuary was the right decision, but dreaded it anyway. Perhaps her son was old enough now for that puppy.

She knocked once and opened Oliver’s bedroom door, smiling at the sight of Edgar under the rumpled blankets. The snake raised his large head and regarded her with the same beautiful amber eyes that had enchanted her son years earlier.

The room was otherwise empty, and she was prepared to scold Oliver for leaving Edgar loose again after getting up for the day. Then, the snake slowly moved from under the blankets.

For several seconds, she stood frozen in the doorway, unable to comprehend what she was seeing. She stared at the snake, recalling the peculiar way he’d always slept beside her son.

Below Edgar’s cocked head, his exquisite pattern of chocolate, coppery scales was distorted by an enormous, unnatural swelling along the length of his body.

The laundry basket slipped from her grasp. She opened her mouth to scream, but her knees gave way before she made a sound.

Posted Oct 14, 2026
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Liz Elletson
October 20, 2026 16:56

I had a feeling that Oliver would be Edgar's last meal, but by the way you told the story was absolutely brilliant, and many times throughout this tale, I concluded that my assumptions were wrong. You are a great writer! What a fantastic job you did with this prompt. Bravo!

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Elizabeth Hoban
October 20, 2026 17:14

Thanks so much! x

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The Old Izbushka
October 18, 2026 14:01

This story completely confirmed that I will never own a snake! Oh how that unease slowly crept in while Oliver's affection for Edgar made me perhaps lower my guard a little.... right along with him. That final image was both fascinating and horrifying,... And as for me... I am never, ever having a snake as a pet. Not now. Not ever!! Great work as always!!!

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Elizabeth Hoban
October 18, 2026 14:07

Thank you TOI!! Appreciate your comments as always! And I will NEVER own a snake either. I’ll stick with my dogs. 🐶 x

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Jo Freitag
October 17, 2026 10:15

Like one of your other commenters I was expecting Oliver to take Edgar to school and for the boa to take revenge on the bullies!
The thump in the night and the laundry basket falling from the mother’s hands tells the horrifying ending so brilliantly!

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Elizabeth Hoban
October 17, 2026 13:02

Thank you so much for reading and commenting! x

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Violette Doré
October 16, 2026 13:28

Well, naming the snake after Poe was very appropriate after all! Hahahaha!

I'm not usually one for animal stories, but this was a fun read. I love how you described Oliver and Edgar's relationship. The twist, though. Hahahaha! Wonderful stuff!

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Elizabeth Hoban
October 16, 2026 13:30

Thank you! So glad you got the Poe reference to not just the snake’s name but a foreshadowing of something much darker. Appreciate the read and comment! x

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Marjolein Greebe
October 16, 2026 09:41

Elizabeth, what a wonderfully sinister turn! 😄

I loved the tenderness of Oliver's relationship with Edgar, especially how the snake becomes his refuge from the cruelty of his classmates. That makes the ending all the more horrifying. The recurring *thump* is a lovely piece of misdirection, and Edgar's habit of stretching himself alongside Oliver takes on an entirely different meaning in hindsight.

I also liked how you let the mother's dropped laundry basket do much of the work in that final scene. Poor Oliver!

Thanks a lot for sharing your story!

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Elizabeth Hoban
October 16, 2026 11:20

Thank you so much, Marjolein! As always, I appreciate your comments - x

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Eric Manske
October 26, 2026 19:17

Yep, a la Shel Silverstein. I wondered.

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Elizabeth Hoban
October 26, 2026 23:21

LOL! Thanx for the read. x

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Manuel Garcia
October 26, 2026 12:45

I really thought this story was going to win the contest. I was actually rooting for it. Great take on the prompt. Amazing story overall. It's a winner in my eyes.

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Elizabeth Hoban
October 26, 2026 18:41

Wow! Thanks so much! It’s comments like yours that make me feel like I won regardless. x

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Gabri D
October 23, 2026 20:42

It should have won, it's one of the best I've ever read ❤️

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Elizabeth Hoban
October 23, 2026 22:14

Thank you so much for the kind words. It's comments such as yours that make me feel like a winner!! 💕

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C.J. Riley
October 23, 2026 14:04

I was wondering which way you were going to go with it. At first, I figured you would have the boy train the snake to eat those who made fun of him, but I like the Natural twist about how ignorant people are about predator pets. It was a fantastic, well-written story. Thank you for giving us such a great piece.

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Elizabeth Hoban
October 23, 2026 14:55

Thank you so much! 😊

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Blake Hayden
October 23, 2026 10:27

You did an amazing job with this prompt! Wonderful story telling and your descriptions - “three feet of patterned muscle.” I think you nailed this prompt. Great work!

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Elizabeth Hoban
October 23, 2026 13:17

Thank you so much- I appreciate your kind words! x

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Rebe L
October 22, 2026 21:26

I can't believe you actually did it to us. :D AWFUL. How dare you make horror...horrific (jokes). But wonderfully written, truly. I felt a growing disgust for the snake but also a certain empathy and sadness for Oliver. I was concerned about the snake for him, if that makes sense. You made me feel complex feelings, nicely done.

P.S. "Fiction" "Bedtime" and "Friendship." We got pranked. Lol

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Elizabeth Hoban
October 22, 2026 21:41

Thank you so much, and yes, sorry for the tags suggesting a sweet bedtime story about friendship. And I am not a fan of snakes, but I also felt bad for both of them. I am smiling over your comments! Means a lot. 💕

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Armando Hubble
October 22, 2026 16:50

I love the use of sound effects in telling the story here and specifically with building tension. I was just waiting for that last one to hit, and when it did it was sickeningly satisfying. I also like how the specific sound effect was a playful connection to the name of the contest!

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Elizabeth Hoban
October 22, 2026 17:49

Thank you so much, Armando! x

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Eriko Sugita
October 22, 2026 01:04

Such delicious, understated terror. Setting up that gentle bond - while offering clues the whole time - only to deliver that chilling final image! A masterclass in quiet dread!

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Elizabeth Hoban
October 22, 2026 01:44

Thank you so very much! x

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BRUCE MARTIN
October 21, 2026 22:49

Fairly predictable outcome, and a good demonstration of parental incompetence. But nicely written.

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Elizabeth Hoban
October 21, 2026 23:04

Thank you! x

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Shree Raaman
October 21, 2026 05:17

As someone with a three-year-old niece who absolutely adores snakes, this story has convinced me to get her a pet that will never get big enough to eat her, such as a corn snake. Understated terror at its best.

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Elizabeth Hoban
October 21, 2026 09:36

Thank you so much! I had to laugh at a corn snake -that’s even too much snake for me. 🐍

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David Smith
October 21, 2026 01:41

This was so well written. You really built the tension well, and the repeated use of the thumping sound was so effective. The ending felt inevitable but satisfying, the way good horror stories often do. Brilliant!

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Elizabeth Hoban
October 21, 2026 01:48

Thank you so very much! I loved your story too! We’re in wonderful yet sometimes misunderstood company. But it’s a perfect place to stretch our wings. Appreciate you. x

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Faith Root
October 20, 2026 23:40

That was an absolutely amazing story! Very well written, definitely belongs in a horror movie❤️

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Elizabeth Hoban
October 20, 2026 23:43

Thank you so much, Faith. I very much appreciate the support! x

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Dr. Josh Valk
October 20, 2026 22:41

I can't remember if I asked you before, but have you ever been published?

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Elizabeth Hoban
October 20, 2026 22:45

Yes, I have a few books traditionally published - thanks for asking - they are listed here in my bio if interested.

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Dr. Josh Valk
October 20, 2026 23:22

Awesome. I will check it out. Check my bio. I have an idea for you.

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Antonio Briseno
October 20, 2026 19:57

Ooooh, I'm not a good writer. This story is very well written Elizabeth. You write with no anxiety, the story weaves and wanes and arrives exactly on time. I appreciate the slow methodology in which you unveiled the ending. I saw it coming, yet I still felt despair. Thank you for sharing!

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Elizabeth Hoban
October 20, 2026 20:19

Thank you so much, and you most definitely are a writer, or you wouldn't be here! I can tell you that after I post my stories by the Friday 11:59pm deadline here on Reedsy, I take full advantage of the grace period before my story gets approved by their team. And I continue to edit the sh** out of it. Occasionally others who follow me will notice typos that I immediately correct and that's so helpful. What I originally post is not the end result that the reader ultimately gets to see. Some would call it cheating, but Reedsy allows it, so I feel safe doing it - and sometimes it's a good 3 - 4 days before it's approved, which to me is awesome because scrupulous editing is the hardest part of the process. It can be done right here without uploading a better version, too. However, if Reedsy happens to approve my story by Saturday morning, I'm f***ed. And it has happened - not a pretty sight at all. And I will admit that I have improved tremendously since I have been on here for the past 2 years - it's a rarity to win, so getting comments such as yours feels like I already won! I did win with my first story only because it was a story I had written many years ago and it happened to fit the prompt the day I discovered the site. Call it beginner's luck, but that story definitely did not take me a week to write - no way - more like a year of polishing without knowing I'd someday find a home for it. If you're writing and not getting paid to do it, then you are the definition of a writer! Why else would we do something so time-consuming, isolating, and tedious from scratch- that would be insanity! We do it because we don't know how not to do it - and you're doing it! Sorry, but you're stuck forever with the title of writer/author. 😉x

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October 20, 2026 15:06

This was amazing! I was captivated from the start. I am TERRIFIED of snakes and the way you chose your words and your writing style kept me hooked until the very end!

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Elizabeth Hoban
October 20, 2026 15:27

Thank you so much for the awesome comment! I am terrified of them too! Ever since I saw The Jungle Book with the snake character Kaa when I was a kid - 🐍😱 And welcome to Reedsy!

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Emily Greene
October 20, 2026 12:19

Absolutely phenomenal! The tension throughout the story, the subtle hints throughout and how you set up a sound that was supposed to be comforting and twisted it into something absolutely awful! All of it worked so well. Even though I know of the old snake myth about how they eat people in bed I was still absolutely hooked by the entire story and didn't want to stop reading! Probably one of my favorites! Amazing!

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Elizabeth Hoban
October 20, 2026 13:18

Thank you so much for such an encouraging comment! x

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Debi Ang
October 19, 2026 22:07

I cringed the entire time reading because... A Snake! Ahhh, how scary! I loved the E.A.P. of it all. I'm sure he would've loved it as much as I did :)

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Elizabeth Hoban
October 19, 2026 23:01

What a lovely compliment, and yes, it is right up EAP's alley - lol. It was the Bump in the Night main prompt that made me immediately think of Poe, and it just went where it went from there. Not a fan of snakes either. 🐍x

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Angell Brooks
October 19, 2026 16:43

Ok this one is going to haunt me for a while. I loved and hated the twist, which I saw coming, but hoped it wouldn't. Going to go home and pet my doggy. Well done.

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Elizabeth Hoban
October 19, 2026 18:10

I’m happy to have a dog too - they may bite but not swallow you whole! 😱 Thank you for the feedback. x

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Ron Sewell
October 19, 2026 11:34

The end was the digesting of Oliver. I sort of expected it but it was still unexpected.

I admit I’m not a fan of snakes but your story telling keeps me reading.

Well done.

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Elizabeth Hoban
October 19, 2026 12:39

Not a big fan either! Thank you so much for the kind comment! x

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David Sweet
October 18, 2026 15:24

I was afraid that I saw where this was going! Inevitable, yet I wanted Oliver to avoid it. I was actually hoping Oliver would invite one of his "frenemies" over to feed them to Edgar. I don't have a fear of snakes, but a hefty amount of skepticism towards them. Did you ever see the horrible movie "Ssssssss"? It scared the wits out of me as a kid in the 70s. Great job, as usual, Elizabeth.

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Elizabeth Hoban
October 18, 2026 15:32

Thank you so much, David. I was hoping he would go after the bullies too, but the story took on a life of its own! Love and hate when that happens. I never saw that movie, but just the title alone sounds ominous. I remember watching Anaconda back in the day and have been even more fearful of snakes ever since. Always appreciate your insightful comments! x

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David Sweet
October 18, 2026 17:14

Yes, I understand completely; sometimes one has to follow the story where it goes. This was the natural conclusion, but in an alternate universe, the bully is snake food.

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Elizabeth Hoban
October 18, 2026 17:35

Lmao! 🐍

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