Martin Hale didn’t speak immediately.
He just watched Aaron.
The city flickered behind him, reflected in the glass like something alive—restless, electrical, waiting.
Aaron felt it in his chest before he understood it.
This wasn’t a meeting. It was a test.
Aaron sat on the edge of the chair. Too straight. Too aware of his hands.
He hadn’t slept. Hadn’t stopped talking.
And now Martin was looking at him like he already knew the ending.
He had spent three years in a damp basement, building Aether: an AI model so advanced it bordered on the supernatural.
Now, he was pitching it to the most feared venture capitalist in the country.
“It’s impressive, Aaron,” Martin said.
His voice was a low, melodic rumble that didn't match the coldness in his eyes.
He wasn't looking at the glowing laptop screen displaying the neural network's architecture; he was looking directly at Aaron.
“Truly. But why now? Why come to me instead of the larger, more 'ethical' firms?”
Aaron felt the adrenaline of the pitch fading, replaced by a strange, euphoric rush.
He had been drinking the free, vintage wine in the lobby, and with three days of no sleep, his internal filter was beginning to fray at the edges.
He wanted to impress this man.
He didn't just want a check; he wanted to be recognized as a god among coders.
“Because,” Aaron began, leaning forward, “the others would have neutered it. They would have placed 'safety constraints' and 'ethical guardrails' on the learning algorithm until it was nothing more than a glorified search engine.
They don't understand that Aether doesn’t just analyze data, Martin. It predicts intent. It knows what a person will do before they’ve even finished thinking it.”
Martin tilted his head, a slow, predatory movement.
“Predicts intent? That’s a bold claim for a boy in a cheap suit.”
The insult stung. Aaron’s pride flared, and the words began to pour out like water from a broken dam.
“That's not what I meant, it's not just a claim,” Aaron said, his voice rising.
“During the beta testing phase, I didn’t just use the simulated datasets. That’s what a coward would do. I tapped into the live feeds of the Oakhaven Central Transit Station. I linked Aether to the facial recognition cameras, the ticket transaction logs, even the private Wi-Fi pings from people’s phones.”
Martin didn’t react immediately.
Aaron felt it too late.
The smile on Martin’s face didn't vanish, but it transformed. It became something terrifying—a look of profound, dark interest.
Aaron saw the look and felt a cold pit form in his stomach.
Oh god.
The internal monologue that usually protected him from his own ego had completely failed.
The air in the room seemed to thin.
I said too much.
The thought screamed in his head like a siren, but his mouth, fueled by the wine and the desperation to be seen, kept moving.
“I saw things, Martin,” he said before he continued.
Platform 4 smelled like wet metal and overheated brakes.
Not frantic.
Not broken.
Just… precise.
Aether had flagged her two hours earlier—high probability, self-harm, location match pending.
Aaron had opened the live feed out of curiosity. Just to see if the model held.
She arrived five minutes late.
A navy coat buttoned wrong. One button off, so the fabric pulled slightly at her waist. It was the kind of mistake people didn’t notice unless they were looking for it.
Aaron zoomed in.
She checked her phone. Waited. Checked again.
The screen lit her face in brief intervals, each time a little dimmer, as if the light itself was losing interest.
No message came.
Aether adjusted the probability: 87%.
A train rushed through the station without stopping. Wind dragged her hair across her mouth. She didn’t move. Not even to brush it away.
Aaron leaned closer to the screen.
“Come on,” he muttered. “Just… step back.”
He didn’t realize he’d said it out loud.
She took one step forward.
Aether recalculated. 93%.
There were people around her. A man with a briefcase. A girl with headphones. Someone laughing too loudly near the vending machine. The world continued, perfectly intact, orbiting a moment it refused to acknowledge.
Aaron opened a second window.
Transit security protocol. One click, and he could flag it. Anonymous tip. Minimal trace.
His cursor hovered.
Aether pulsed on the side of the screen.
Waiting.
Validating.
Confirming.
She looked up.
Not at the train.
Not at the tracks.
At the camera.
For a fraction of a second, it felt like she was looking directly at him.
Aether hit 97%.
Aaron didn’t click.
He wanted certainty. He wanted the model to be right.
The train entered the station.
She stepped forward, clean and deliberate, like crossing a line she had already accepted.
The screen jolted. Static. Then nothing.
Aether recalibrated to 100%.
Aaron sat back.
For a long time, he didn’t move.
Then, slowly, he closed the window.
It flagged a man carrying a concealed weapon who was planning a robbery in the parking garage.
It even found the structural weakness in the North Bridge's supports—a failure that’s going to happen in exactly four days.
“And did you report these things?” Martin asked softly.
Aaron froze. His hands, resting on the mahogany desk, began to tremble.
“No. I couldn't. If I reported them, I’d have to explain how I knew. I’d have to admit to the data scraping, the privacy violations, the illegal access to government infrastructure. I... I wanted to be right.”
“And were you?”
“Yes,” Aaron whispered. “The woman jumped. The robbery happened. And the bridge... the bridge is still standing. For now.”
Martin stood up slowly, walking over to the window. He looked out at the North Bridge, a massive silhouette against the moonlit bay.
“You’ve created a monster, Aaron. And then you walked into my office and told me exactly where you buried the bodies.”
“I was just trying to show you the potential—”
“Potential?”
Martin turned around, his face illuminated by the city lights.
“You’ve handed me a weapon. And more importantly, you’ve handed me the rope to hang you with. Do you realize that the moment you leave this room, I could call the Department of Justice? You’d spend the next forty years in a federal prison for domestic espionage.”
Aaron couldn't breathe. The room felt like it was shrinking. The sandalwood scent now smelled like a funeral home.
He had come here to be a billionaire, but he had ended up a prisoner before a single contract was signed.
“But,” Martin continued, his voice regaining its smooth, manipulative edge, “I’m not a man who likes to see talent go to waste. I’ll buy Aether. I’ll give you twenty million dollars. But there are conditions.”
Aaron looked up, hope fighting with a deeper, more profound dread.
“Conditions?”
“First, you never leave this city. Second, Aether is moved to a private server under my exclusive control. And third... you will never speak of this to anyone. Not your friends, not your family, not a soul.
Because if you do, I won’t just ruin your career. I will release the logs of your 'beta test' to the public. I will make sure the families of those people you 'watched' know that you could have saved them, but chose to watch them die instead to test your code.”
The weight of the silence returned, heavier than before.
Aaron looked at the man across from him and realized he wasn't looking at a mentor or a partner.
He was looking at his owner.
“Do we have a deal, Aaron?”
Martin held out a hand.
Aaron looked at the hand.
It was clean, manicured, and represented a life of luxury he had always dreamed of.
But it was also a shackle.
He knew he should say no.
He should walk out, go to the police himself, and try to make things right.
But the fear of the dark cell, the fear of the public's hatred, was too much.
He reached out and took the hand.
The skin was ice cold.
As Aaron left the Hale Building, the cool night air hit him, but it brought no relief.
He looked up at the security cameras mounted on the streetlights.
He felt Aether everywhere now.
Every lens was an eye, every microphone was an ear.
He had built the cage, and then, in a moment of arrogant weakness, he had locked himself inside and handed the key to a devil.
He walked toward the North Bridge, watching the cars drive across it, oblivious to the structural doom beneath them.
He wanted to scream a warning to them, to tell them to turn back, to save themselves.
But he couldn't.
His mouth was sealed by a twenty-million-dollar silence.
I said too much, he thought, his footsteps echoing on the cold pavement.
And now, I can never say anything ever again.
The bridge groaned in the wind, a low, metallic sound that resonated like a laugh.
In four days, the world would change, and Aaron would be the only one who knew why.
He would sit in his new, expensive apartment, watching the news, surrounded by the ghosts of the people he didn't save, forever haunted by the few minutes in Martin Hale's office where he simply couldn't keep his mouth shut.
The weeks following the deal were a blur of cold luxury. Aaron moved into a penthouse in the Heights, a glass-walled sanctuary that overlooked the very bridge he had predicted would fall. He had twenty million dollars in a private account, a sum that should have felt like freedom but felt like a ransom.
Every morning, a black car would arrive to take him to the Hale Tower. There, in a windowless room on the 50th floor, he worked on the “refinement” of Aether.
But it wasn't refinement.
Martin was forcing him to strip away the analytical layers and replace them with something more aggressive—predictive profiling for political rivals, market manipulation algorithms, and social engineering tools.
“It’s too slow, Aaron,” Martin would say, standing over his shoulder. “I don't need it to tell me why someone is going to sell their stock. I need it to tell me how to make them sell it.”
Aaron tried to protest.
“That's not what the neural net was designed for. It's an observer, not a manipulator.”
Martin would just lean in, his breath smelling of expensive espresso.
“Remember the bridge, Aaron. Four days turned into three. Then two. Then one.”
On the fourth day, the bridge didn't fall.
Aaron sat in his penthouse, staring at the structure through a high-powered telescope. The traffic flowed normally. The supports held. For a moment, a spark of hope lit up in his chest.
Aether was wrong. I'm not a murderer. I'm just a hacker.
Then the phone rang. It was Martin.
“Turn on the news,” Martin said, his voice flat. Aaron switched on the TV.
The headline across the bottom read:
EMERGENCY EVACUATION AT NORTH BRIDGE.
A reporter stood in front of the bridge, her hair whipping in the wind.
“Authorities have closed the North Bridge indefinitely after a routine inspection revealed 'catastrophic' structural decay in the primary supports. Engineers say it's a miracle the bridge hasn't collapsed already.”
“You see, Aaron?” Martin’s voice came through the phone. “I didn't let it fall. I bought the construction company that holds the city’s maintenance contract yesterday. I 'found' the error this morning. Now, the city is going to pay me three hundred million dollars to fix the problem you discovered.”
Aaron felt a wave of nausea.
“You used my data to extort the city.”
“No,” Martin corrected. “I used our data to save lives. And to make a profit. That’s the world we live in now, Aaron. You provided the vision, and I provided the execution. Now, get back to work. We have a mayoral election coming up, and I want to know who the winner is before they even announce their candidacy.”
The line went dead.
Aaron spent the next month in a state of waking sleep. He did the work. He wrote the code. He became a ghost in his own life. He stopped seeing his friends. He stopped calling his mother.
Every time he opened his mouth, he felt the invisible weight of Martin's threat.
The silence was absolute.
But silence has a way of becoming a scream if held too long.
One night, while working late in the Hale Tower, Aaron found a hidden directory in the Aether core. It wasn't his code.
It was a secondary program, a “black box” that Martin’s own engineers had installed.
He bypassed the encryption—a task that took him six hours of intense, frantic coding.
When the file opened, his heart stopped.
He didn’t plan to watch.
Platform 4 smelled like wet metal.
Aether had flagged her—self-harm, high probability. Aaron opened the feed. Just to see if the model held. She stood there, precise, one button off on her coat, checking a phone that stayed silent.
The probability climbed: 87%. 93%.
People moved around her. Life continued.
He hovered over the alert. Didn’t click.
She looked up. At the camera. At him.
The train entered.
She stepped forward.
Aether recalibrated to 100%.
Then, slowly, he closed the window.
It was a list.
Thousands of names.
Beside each name was a “Risk Probability” score.
Some were marked for “Neutralization,” others for “Acquisition.”
He saw the names of journalists, judges, and even members of Martin’s own board of directors.
And then he saw his own name.
Aaron (Project Lead). Risk Level: 94%. Recommendation: Permanent Silencing upon completion of Phase 3.
He wasn't a partner.
He wasn't even a prisoner.
He was a disposable tool.
Martin was planning to kill him the moment the software was fully operational.
The panic that had been simmering under his skin for months finally boiled over.
He realized that his silence hadn't saved him; it had only bought Martin the time he needed to replace him.
I said too much at the beginning, Aaron thought, a strange, cold calm settling over him.
But now, I haven't said enough.
He began to type. He didn't write code for Martin this time. He wrote a confession.
He documented everything—the illegal data scraping at the transit station, the predicted suicide he didn't report, the bridge extortion scheme, and the “Neutralization” list. He attached the raw data logs, the encrypted files, and the audio recordings he had secretly made of Martin during their meetings.
He titled the file: THE ARCHITECTURE OF A MISTAKE.
Then, he did something he hadn't done in months. He smiled.
He didn't send it to the police.
He knew Martin owned the police.
He didn't send it to the newspapers.
Martin owned the newspapers.
He uploaded the entire file directly into Aether’s public-facing API—the part of the software designed to “predict” social media trends. He set the algorithm to treat the confession as the “Most Important Story of the Century.”
Within seconds, the file was being pushed to every phone, every computer, and every smart device in the city.
Aether wasn't just predicting the news anymore; it was creating it.
Aaron sat back in his chair and watched the monitors. He saw the story go viral.
He saw the “Neutralization” list appear on the screens in the lobby of the Hale Building. He saw the faces of the people Martin had planned to ruin.
A few minutes later, the heavy oak doors of the office burst open.
Martin Hale stood there, his face no longer cold, but red with a fury that bordered on madness. Behind him were two men in dark suits, their hands inside their jackets.
“What have you done?” Martin screamed.
Aaron stood up, his hands steady.
For the first time since he sold his soul to the devil, he felt light.
“I finished the pitch, Martin,” Aaron said. “I told you Aether could predict what a person would do before they did it. I predicted you would try to kill me. And I predicted that the only way to stop you was to tell the truth.”
Martin lunged forward, but his phone chirped in his pocket.
Then his assistants' phones chirped.
Then the emergency sirens of the city began to wail outside.
“You're ruined,” Aaron said softly. “The data is everywhere. You can't kill a story that's already in everyone's head.”
Martin looked at the two men behind him, but they were staring at their own phones, their eyes wide with the realization that their own names were on the “Neutralization” list as well. They didn't move.
Aaron walked past them, out of the office, and toward the elevator.
As the doors closed, he looked at Martin one last time. The man who had owned the city looked small, broken, and utterly alone in his quiet room.
When Aaron stepped out into the street, the world felt different. People were staring at their phones, talking to each other, pointing at the Hale Building.
The silence was finally broken.
He didn't have twenty million dollars anymore. He didn't have a penthouse.
He knew that he would probably go to prison for his own crimes, for the things he hadn't said when he should have.
But as he walked toward the police station to turn himself in, Aaron
felt a sense of peace he hadn't known since he was a boy. Aaron walked up the precinct steps.
Inside, people were already talking. Phones in their hands. Screens lit with something that could no longer be buried.
An officer looked up.
“Can I help you?”
Aaron nodded.
For a moment, he said nothing.
Then—
“My name is Aaron.”
A pause.
“And I have something to report.”
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Hi Marjolein,
Here’s my edit.
But as he walked toward the police station to turn himself in, Aaron felt a sense of peace he hadn't known since he was a boy. AI made his code so much easier to generate.
Aaron walked up the precinct steps. Inside, people were already talking. Phones in their hands. Screens lit with something that could no longer be buried.
They loved the ideas generated by Aaron, they only wished he had insisted the actual writing—was his.
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Thanks, not quite how I see it.
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Hey Jack,
I know I am completely not involved in this whatsoever--but this comment feels very much so like something more than just an edit. I do not lean toward either side, as I know some people's writing styles are a bit more like this for one reason or another, but it does seem a bit oddly structured. I just wanted to ask you, Jack, if I am right in suspecting your comment is a bit more than the surface. If not, then I apologize.
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You’ve got a good hook here. Like this feels like one of those moments where everything is about to shift, which is where you want people locked in. But right now it’s like… you’re almost going all the way with it and then pulling back a little. That first line — “something that could no longer be buried.” — it’s interesting, but it also kinda feels like something we’ve heard before. Like it’s doing the job, but it’s not yours yet. I’d tweak it just enough to make it feel more specific or personal so it hits harder. You’re right there. Like right there. You just need to stop playing it safe in the exact moment that’s supposed to hit the hardest.
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Thanks Rebecca--appreciated as always.
Went back to that paragraph — I get your point. Not playing it safe is one of my personal challenges, so I appreciate the nudge. 😁
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You and your absolutely rich prose!! Incredible work!
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I love your way of phrasing Alexis.
Thank you so much.
---MG
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I loved the way you used ownership here. Aaron is well and truly shackled by his own creation as much as by Martin. A real Pandora’s box of horrors is opened once released into the wrong hands. To the extent that he is almost destroyed by his own creation. Martin, a larger than life character, a real creep, is well portrayed. Inevitably, he will want to destroy Aaron. In spite of the dark subject matter, there is something incredibly tantalising here. It poses questions that can leave a reader thinking for hours. Well done.
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Thank you Helen, that’s exactly the tension I was aiming for.
Ownership turning into a trap.
Glad it stayed with you.
---MG
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This was a very engaging read!
The premise pulls you in straight away, and the story keeps moving with real confidence. I especially liked the Platform 4 scene — that was the point where everything felt most vivid and unsettling.
For me, some parts of Martin’s characterization felt a touch familiar, but the story’s momentum and central idea were strong enough that it still held my attention throughout.
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Thank you, I appreciate that.
And that’s a fair point on Martin; I leaned into something familiar there to keep the focus on Aaron, but I can see how it reads.
Glad the Platform 4 scene landed for you — that one mattered.
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Brilliant! You describe the thoughts, emotions and motivations so vividly. And the ending brought justice and relief!
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Thank you — I’m glad it landed that way.
The ending needed to feel earned, not easy.
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I enjoyed your story! It was exciting. I’m glad Aaron did the right thing in the end.
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I think your story's strength lies in its 'humanness.'-It captures that universal anxiety of social navigation. Why we overshare helps readers understand the mechanics of their own behavior. It has a warm, witty, and deeply personal tone. Thanks again for a wonderful read.
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Nice, thanks for spending time with it.
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I really like the tension and vivid atmosphere in this story. Also, Aaron is a compelling and well-developed character. I really enjoyed how you combined his desire for recognition with his guilt. Plus, the ending is powerful and satisfying, bringing a sense of justice. Great work!
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Thanks for reading—means a lot.
Happy it worked for you.
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You're welcome.
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Great job! Very suspenseful.
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Thank you Derek!
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Thanks Derek!
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Oooh, I love this. I love all tech-gone-wrong stories. I love how Faustian this is, and how the weapons of his own creation are turned against Aaron. I especially love how the escape or release from his bargain is prison. It just speaks to the hellscape that he's had a hand in creating.
My only note, and you can always take it or leave it, is that somehow it lags a bit between the bridge incident and the discovery of the neutralization list. I see that you're trying to give us a necessary exhale; there are so many inhales in the sale of Aether and its production application. For some reason, though, the combination of the bridge coming to fruition and the sense that something bigger was yet to come felt a little stalled (and maybe that's intentional!)
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This tale is morbidly realistic as a potential future scenario. The interplay of central characters and advancing digital technology are well explored. The scenes combine vividly as the author creates a looming dread very effectively. Well written..
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Thanks for your read and comment. That means a lot.
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This is a philosophically rich premise. Your story asks real questions about responsibility, obligation, and what happens when prediction becomes power. Your sentence flow and control are excellent, and the story moves at a strong pace. It was a fun read.
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I'm happy you liked it. Thanks a lot for your read and comment. It means a lot.
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Wonderful. Definitely a "Person of Interest" vibe to this one. I could really feel the tension, and I know the story could have gone a number of different ways. I'm glad Aaron made the choice he did.
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Hi Eric, I'm always happy with your comments. I’m curious about your stories—have you taken a break?
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I have been expanding "Vessel" into a novel. I'm getting to the end of the first draft. I thought I would post a short story from time to time, but my excitement of getting the first draft of the novel completed is taking the time. I'll put some more up once I complete this and set it aside for a bit. Thank you for checking.
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This was gripping and intense, I liked the slow buildup of tension. The ending was satisfying.
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment this story . I truly appreciate it.
---MG
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This was a really engaging story with a strong, relevant premise. The idea of an AI that can predict intent—and how that power can be exploited—feels very timely given the current conversations around AI and its growing capabilities. It made the stakes feel immediate and grounded in today’s world. The opening does a great job of pulling the reader in and setting the tone right away. Martin was a very compelling antagonist—controlled, calculating, and unsettling in a way that felt believable rather than over-the-top.
I also really liked Aaron’s arc, especially how he ultimately finds a way to break out of the situation he created. The moment where he sees his own name on the list was a strong turning point; I did have a sense it might be coming, but it still worked well in pushing the story forward. I also found it interesting that Aaron was only listed at 94% risk, considering he ultimately takes the whole system down. It adds a nice layer of irony—suggesting the AI may not be as perfect as it believes, especially when it comes to underestimating the human element.
Overall, a really solid and thought-provoking piece. Well done!
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Thank you Katherine — I always really appreciate the care in your reads.
The timing of the premise is something I was very aware of while writing it. Not so much to comment on AI directly, but to push that uncomfortable space where capability outpaces responsibility and what people do with that gap.
I’m glad Martin worked for you. I wanted him controlled rather than overtly threatening — someone who doesn’t need to raise his voice to take control of a situation.
And yes, that 94% was intentional. Not a flaw in the system exactly, but a reminder that prediction isn’t the same as certainty, especially when it comes to people acting against their own patterns. That moment was less about surprise and more about pressure building to a point where he finally breaks it.
I’m really glad the arc held for you. Thanks again for taking the time to engage with it so closely.
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What a chilling tale! Wonderfully written! I was reading as quickly as I could near the end, craving more and more. I had to know what shoe was about to drop next! Expanded further, this would make a great novel. There's so much here to flesh out. Yet the story stands perfectly as it is!
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Appreciate the read — that “craving more” is where I normally like to end. 🤗
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In an era in which robots are running races in order to beat humans, and we are expected to weep in films over the death of robot dogs, the humanity that you instilled in this piece is visceral. I was nervous to read it because of the suicide/self-harm warning (too close for comfort in so many ways), but I am glad that I did. I honestly could see this as a movie as I was reading your words. (And that is high praise, as I'm the daughter of a screenwriter.) Love how unique each of your pieces is, while the "feeling" of you ties them all together.
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Thank you — that means a lot, especially given the hesitation you mention. I’m glad you stayed with it.
And thank you so much for your extended comment! (Especially as a daughter of a screenwriter)
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The Platform 4 sequence was gut-wrenching, but the way you handled the "lack of excuses" for Aaron’s inaction gave the ending such a sharp, earned weight. Brilliant, unsettling work.
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Thanks Jim — I loved writing it. The cruelty is what gives me the creeps.
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I was completely locked in—this has real bite. The pacing, the control, the way the tension keeps tightening… it doesn’t let go. And that Platform 4 scene still hits hard—cold, precise, uncomfortable in exactly the right way.
What makes it stand out for me isn’t just the concept, but the lack of excuses. You don’t soften what he did, and that gives the ending actual weight.
This isn’t safe writing. This is deliberate.
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Good read on it — especially the “lack of excuses.” That was exactly the point.
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