The curtains that hung from the ceilings were a simple grey. Not the silver that sometimes comes from the moon’s light at the right angle. Nor was it the dark ash that comes after the fire has burnt too low in the hearth. A plain, simple, everyday grey. The sort of grey that suggested a life half-lived at best, a poor melancholy resignation to oneself. Dreary and drab, the curtains dimmed the already dark room. The isolation reflected in the grey of the—
They were cheaper. Or maybe the author just needed to pick a color for the scene and felt like grey. Or maybe he flipped a coin or spun a color wheel, and it landed on grey. Or maybe…
—fabric as it hung limp. They were unmoving, and strong in appearance, sweeping to the floor. It felt as if the very air itself had given up in the room and perhaps even in the very souls of those who had chosen the material.
Or maybe there wasn’t a fan in the room. Clearly, there is a need for one here to get better airflow.
Suddenly, the bright red door leading into the space opened. Perhaps the vibrant red was representative of a past or childhood trauma, or the rage that was simmering slowly from within. Or the true passion needing an opening, an outlet, an—
Or maybe, it’s just good Feng Shui. I read red doors can be considered auspicious. We don’t know what sort of stuff the owner might be into!
—an exit! The air felt suffocating as he walked into the room—heavy, pressing in, and slowly weighing him down. He couldn’t breathe. The weight filled his lungs and settled on his shoulders.
Have you considered opening a window to get rid of that stifling air? Really, if you’re not going to invest in a fan, that’s the least you can do. That sounds like a ventilation issue, not a symbolism one. This can also lead to mold, did you know.
If he had to pick a color to describe how he felt, it would be black—
Oh great. Black mold. The worst kind. Might as well begin drafting that eulogy. Black like the dresses that will be worn at the grave, if we don’t open the window. Seriously. Open it! I promise you will feel much better afterwards.
If he had to pick a color—
Pink? Green? That weird yellow? Still mold. Also, I definitely think we are going to die in this room now.
Please stop… I’m trying to tell a story here. Can I just finish the story? Thanks.
Anyway, if he had to pick a color, it would be black.
He had had a long day, and sat back in his green chair. He was waiting for her. He turned towards the window and bathed in the warmth of the sun. The sun began to lower itself in the sky, turning the horizon into a spectacle of red, orange, yellow, and soft pink—
So… a sunset? Unless this is some kind of astronomical anomaly. In which case, we should probably be concerned. Also, what is with all these colors?
Would you prefer something else? Crimson. Azure. Onyx. Phlox.
Stop. Stop. Wait—what is phlox?
It’s a pink-ish purple. Look it up. Or don’t. It’s basically just a really nice pink. As I was saying—
The sun began to lower itself in the sky, turning the horizon into a spectacle of red, orange, yellow, and soft pink, until the sky at last opened up like a blossoming flower under the dazzling sunset.
Okay. Now we are just being ridiculous. Also, good. Thought we were about to die again.
He was considering whether to reach out, maybe open the window, and breathe in the salty air. That was when the red door opened again, just like the red in his heart.
Or—hear me out—just like a door. Doors tend to do that sort of thing, you know. Open. Close. With good hinges, you shouldn’t even notice them. The creaking thing is more of a sign of deterioration than good plot.
They stared into each other’s eyes. His were a deep green, and hers a nice warm brown. The longer they stared, the more she realized his also seemed to have a hint of blue as well. The green and blue were a clear reflection of the multiple parts of his soul and personality, that she would soon learn as they drew closer.
Has she considered that he might just have heterochromia? Or maybe the author just couldn’t decide what eye colors were pretty and decided a mix. I hear multi-eye colors are back in for the main male character. Maybe they are just trying to jump onto the trend.
Later, they decided to stroll down to the water together. The ocean was a glowing shade of deep blue.
Of course it’s blue and deep! It’s the ocean. Have you ever been to the ocean before? Or even seen a photo? If it wasn’t blue, I would be concerned. It would mean some overgrowing algae or an oil spill or The Great Pacific Garbage Patch.
For a moment, the waves grew more restless, crashing harder against the shore. The water churned and pulled, growing unpredictable and shifting much like the uncertainty that lingered between them. But still, they stood there. Together. Holding hands, they knew their relationship would be alright.
Should you really be this close to the water if it’s acting up like that? That’s usually a sign to leave and come back another day. Or call someone. Coast Guard. NOAA. Maybe someone with scientific charts… I don’t know. Someone who knows what they’re doing. Literally anyone.
For once, neither tried to explain it nor what they felt. Not the slow smoothing of the waves, nor the way the light seemed to soften everything it touched, as the sun continued its final journey into the horizon. There wasn’t any need to name it or give it a definition. The feeling simply was.
At last, the ocean calmed. The small waves rolled in and out, flowing naturally with the tide. They left streaks of white and grey foam against the grainy sand. The last light of the sun reflected across the water, turning it gold, like sparkling crystals.
Alright… alright. I get it now. Not everything has a meaning. I’m just going to sit back, relax, and—
Actually, that one did have a deeper meaning. Carefully chosen to represent the upcoming opportunity and the hope for a better tomorrow.
Aww, come on!
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This was fun to read. The biggest thing it has going for it is that the joke keeps evolving instead of just repeating “haha symbolism.” The interruptions start off as reasonable pushback, then spiral into things like mold concerns, NOAA involvement, and door hinge maintenance, which makes the whole thing feel unhinged in the best way. The two voices are also very clear from the start. The narrator sounds dramatic and poetic without feeling over-the-top. The other voice sounds like someone who got trapped in a high school English class one too many times and has snapped. The contrast carries the entire piece well. Some of the strongest lines are the ones that take the symbolism and reduce it to the dumbest possible practical explanation. Stuff like- “Or maybe there wasn’t a fan in the room.” “Oh great. Black mold.” “Doors tend to do that sort of thing, you know.” “That sounds like a ventilation issue, not a symbolism one.” Those land because they feel realistic. I also like that the ending doesn’t dunk on symbolism as a concept. It would’ve been easy to make the entire thing “literary analysis dumb,” but the last line flips it around and goes- no, sometimes the symbolism IS intentional. That makes the joke feel more balanced instead of one-note. Though, this works well. It feels like a mix of literary parody, meta commentary, and someone fighting the narrator for control of the story. The concept stays entertaining the entire way through, which is the hardest part with this kind of joke.
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Wow, thank you! Your descriptions of the two narrators are hilarious and honestly exactly what I was going for. I’m especially happy the joke felt like it kept evolving instead of becoming repetitive, because that was one of my biggest concerns while writing it. I also really enjoyed writing the “dumbest possible explanation” moments, so I’m glad those landed and didn’t just come across as plain dumb. And you’re completely right—sometimes symbolism IS intentional, so it would’ve felt unfair to spend the entire piece dunking on it without giving it at least a little credit in the end. Thanks again for such a thoughtful comment!
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Katherine, I loved this! It was so incredibly funny, and I laughed out loud at basically every other sentence. I adore your sense of humor.
I actually did Google phlox - it's really pretty, you're right! I loved how the MC sorta was like "nothing needs to be *this* complicated" and then when the author lays back, it's like "no, that one did have a meaning!" That was super funny!
I can so relate to this; this little voice is in my head whenever I write, which can be iffy at sometimes, but it also helps me become a better writer in some ways. But, this was hysterical. I loved specifically that the voice kinda just replied, uninvited. LOL.
There were some bent-over-laughing lines in this piece, like: "Or—hear me out—just like a door. Doors tend to do that sort of thing, you know. Open. Close. With good hinges, you shouldn’t even notice them.", or "Of course it’s blue and deep! It’s the ocean. Have you ever been to the ocean before? Or even seen a photo? If it wasn’t blue, I would be concerned. It would mean some overgrowing algae or an oil spill or The Great Pacific Garbage Patch." and all the other insanely funny lines in this piece. This was such a work of art, genuinely!
Pardon the use of emojis but 🙌! Loved this so much, and I needed that laugh. Excellent work, Katherine! ^^
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Wow—thank you so much! I had so much fun writing this one, so I’m really glad you had just as much fun reading it (and that it got some actual laugh-out-loud moments!). This definitely came from those moments in class where we’d spend ages analyzing what something means—like a door—when sometimes it really is just… a door. I’m glad that tension between “it’s not that deep” and “okay wait, maybe it is that deep” landed the way I hoped.
Also, I love that you Googled phlox. That makes me ridiculously happy 😂 And yes, that uninvited voice showing up felt very true to my own writing process, so I’m glad it resonated. Thank you again; this was such a fun comment to read!
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You're so welcome! I saw it, and obviously I just had to Google it. 😂
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Love the way you use italics here. Very effective use of internal commentary where the “main character’s view is given a bit of a reality check. Or to put it another way, brought down to earth with a great big bump. Probably much needed when it comes to creating a story or anything else. Here, the reader gets to view things in a different way. Lively use of a palette of colours. Enjoyable, smart and funny.
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Thanks so much! I was really hoping the italics would help clearly separate the two voices while still letting them feel like they were fighting for control of the same story. I’m happy the contrast worked for you, and I’m really glad you enjoyed the humor and commentary throughout.
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REAL, this was a joy to read! :D Incredible writing!!
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Thank you so much! That truly means a lot to hear; bringing even a little bit of joy to someone through writing is always the goal!
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This is fun—self-aware in a way that actually sharpens the point instead of undercutting it. The back-and-forth between story and commentary keeps it lively and unpredictable.
What works best is how you poke at over-interpretation while still using it. That tension carries the piece, especially toward the end where you let the story breathe a bit more.
And that last line? Perfect. You let the story win… and then immediately take it back 😄
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Thank you so much! This was definitely inspired by those classes where we’d spend ages debating why an author chose a specific color or detail, and then joking afterward that maybe they just wanted to switch things up. I’m really glad that balance between poking fun at over-interpretation while still using it came through—that was exactly what I was aiming for. And I’m especially happy the ending worked for you! That last line was actually one of the first ideas I had, so I ended up building a lot of the piece around it. Really appreciate your thoughtful read!
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You have perfectly captured the inner critic in my head, arguing over each word choice!
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Thank you! I’m honestly so glad to hear that, haha—I was definitely channeling that exact inner critic while writing this. It’s comforting to know it’s not just me!
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