Noah Adir (Part 1)

People of Color Historical Fiction Coming of Age

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Written in response to: "Start your story with a major news event breaking — one that will change the world forever." as part of Living History.

"Headline news this hour. An eight-year-old boy, allegedly accused of sexually offending a woman, is being executed next Monday at the Jorge's Memorial Center."


Laney sat watching the news on the couch while ironing her clothes she planned on wearing to work the following day. It was night, the first night she had been home, in a long while. 


Her back was sore from bending over her stout desk at her work. She leaned back, trying to straighten her posture, as she rubbed her shoulders.


The television was playing softly in the background. She didn't want to wake up her son, who was snoring loudly in his room. 


The news reports had been running crazy all morning about this little boy. His name was Noah Adir. He was an African-American kid who just so happened to be walking down the street when a white lady called the police on him. He was coming home from his walk to the candy store downtown when the police scooped him up in their squad car and left; of course not before they made a scene. 


They roughed him up real good. They showed a picture of what he looked like before the incident, next to the picture of what happened after, and you could barely recognize him. His mother was in the news screaming for them to let her little boy out. 


He didn't do nothin' wrong! Let my Noah go! Her demands have been heard all over the world. Even people in Europe tried to make things right by broadcasting a special tv event. They'd never know that what they did only made it worse. 


It got so bad that people marched right up to the police station and protested to let him go. It didn't work. So far, five people are dead and more than 50 people are injured.


Laney couldn't believe that they were doing all of this for just one little boy. She looked up to face her staircase and starting thinking about her own son, Jordan.


Jordan was only nine years old, one year older than Noah. She wondered what she would do if Jordan were in the same predicament as Noah. She didn't think she could live with herself. 


She closed her eyes and sighed. As she let her breath out in slow motions, moments with Jordan flashed behind her closed eyelids. 


Jordan's first basketball game. He was so happy his coach decided to take him off the bench and even happier that he shot the ball, even if he missed. Laney remembered the smile Jordan gave her when the game was over. The moment was irreplaceable. 


Or the time Jordan lost his first tooth. It was the one right in the front. He cried when he saw blood pouring out of his mouth. Laney had wrapped her arms around him and explained what it was, why it happened, and that it would keep happening until he had all of his adult teeth.


And the time when she gave birth to him. He was so tiny and full of hope. For the first few weeks, she called him Burrito because of how he looked when she wrapped his favorite blankie around him.


Laney didn't want to let go of the feeling so she kept her eyes close, but she still heard the news report softly going in the background, so she turned it up a little, careful not to wake up Jordan. 


"What do you have to say about Noah Adir's fate?"


A news reporter, white herself, was now asking a black man what he thought about Noah. She was stationed at a protest that was going on downtown. The man didn't look happy. He looked disgusted; as if he didn't want to be apart of the news report. Maybe he didn't like the way she said fate as if this was inevitable.


He spoke in a loud manner: "What happened to Noah, ain't no fate. This was the devil! That white lady got a devil in her! She know ain't nobody wink at her! He just a little boy!"


The news reporter tried to take the microphone away from him but he held a firm grip on it. 


"These white folks wanna throw us out of here and this is their way of doing it. By using an eight-year-old boy against us. You know what, lady? You are apart of the problem. Talkin' about fate. This ain't no fate!"


The news lady was struggling with the man, trying to get his hands from around the mic, but the man wouldn't budge.


"Do you hear what these people are saying? They sayin' we want change. Let Noah go! We want change. Let Noah go! And we won't stop saying it until we get justice. That boy should not be being executed. And all of you are going to hell if you think he should. Some devils!"


The news lady finally managed to get a grip around the mic and grabbed it from the man's hands. Or maybe he was done talking and let it go himself.


Laney put her head in her hands as she said: Carl, back to you with the Sports Section.


Laney changed the channel to the next news station. On their feed, the riots were getting worse. Buildings were burning, people were looting, and the police were beating people in the street.


She changed the channel again to a medical show called "Cabinet of Medicine". She binge-watched shows like this all the time and she figured she should catch up. Right when Ryan was about to kiss Sophia, the station was interrupted. 


"We interrupt this program to feature a special news broadcasting report. The story of Noah Adir is heavily spreading all across the globe. Women in Budar, India are sewing quilts saying WE WANT CHANGE. LET NOAH GO! Kids in Africa are sending voice messages over to America with warm messages to the family. People in Paris, France are starting to protest and riot. All of this for a little boy named Noah Adir, who is being executed on Monday for allegedly winking at a woman. 


Some sources say that this is all a fluke. That he never winked at the lady and everyone is blowing this out of proportion. Others say that this is fate for the little boy. No one has spoken up in the trial and the judge has already ruled his final verdict. So I ask anyone seeing this now, what are you going to do to stop this motion? Have a nice night everyone."


Laney looked from the tv to the staircase; where she saw Jordan sitting on one of the stairs.


"Come here, baby."


Jordan walked over to his mom with his arms out wide and asked: "What's going on, Mommy?"


"Nothing, honey. Something bad happened and people are trying to mellow it out, that's all."


Laney didn't know how to tell Jordan that she was scared. She was scared to send her only black son out into the mean world ahead of them. But she knew that there was no way around it. So she kept her mouth shut, wrapped her arms around Jordan, and closed her eyes to let out a long sigh.

Posted Feb 08, 2021
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Cookie Carla🍪
February 08, 2021 18:21

This is a historical fiction story because this was based on a true story. The real boy's name was Emmett Till and unlike Noah, he was 14. He was murdered in Mississippi because a lady thought that he was hitting on her. I believe the lady's husband kidnapped him from his home and tortured him. Later, after he had already been executed, the lady that was supposedly offended came out and said that she lied about all of it.

I'm telling everyone here, do not take anything for granted. There are people out in the world who are just evil at heart and want to see you fail. Although she did this because she thought it was "right" and she wanted to protect her husband, it's wrong!! Don't be like that. No matter what happens, ALWAYS TELL THE TRUTH. In the long run, the devil will come behind and bite you.

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February 08, 2021 20:36

OMG!!! THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR FEATURING ME IN YOUR BIO!!!!!!

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Cookie Carla🍪
February 08, 2021 20:49

It's the least I could do!! :)

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February 08, 2021 20:56

Thank you so much! You are one of the friendliest people on Reedsy!

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Cookie Carla🍪
February 08, 2021 20:59

I really do try to be positive and uplifting for everyone bc that's the way I want others to treat me. So thank you!!

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February 08, 2021 21:02

You're very welcome!!!!

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Cookie Carla🍪
February 09, 2021 15:54

Because everyone liked this story, I decided to do a Part 2!! Part 2: https://blog.reedsy.com/creative-writing-prompts/contests/80/submissions/54212/

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February 09, 2021 16:45

YESSSSS!!!!

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Cookie Carla🍪
April 14, 2021 19:12

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April 14, 2021 23:56

Of course!

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XANDER DMER
February 08, 2021 20:09

The parts when they were protesting really pulled me into the story.

Great Job! :D

Keep Writing.

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Cookie Carla🍪
February 08, 2021 20:12

Thank youuuuuuuu!!!!!

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XANDER DMER
February 08, 2021 20:21

Anytime! :D

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XANDER DMER
February 08, 2021 20:29

Hey Cookie...

🍪 I read your Bio :) ;)

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Cookie Carla🍪
February 08, 2021 20:32

Thanks so much!! I actually just updated it but thanks for the cookie :DDD

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XANDER DMER
February 08, 2021 20:33

Your Welcome 🍪 Carla

Get it??? 🍪?

lol

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Cookie Carla🍪
February 08, 2021 20:35

😂😂🤣🤣 I just got it!!

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Cookie Carla🍪
February 09, 2021 15:55

Because everyone liked this story, I decided to do a Part 2!! Part 2: https://blog.reedsy.com/creative-writing-prompts/contests/80/submissions/54212/

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Cookie Carla🍪
April 08, 2021 17:02

Hey did I ever read your story??

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XANDER DMER
May 07, 2021 16:32

Which one?

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Cookie Carla🍪
May 07, 2021 16:36

Idk😂 you said 'check out my new story'

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XANDER DMER
May 14, 2021 16:24

Yea, I was talking about my first story.

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XANDER DMER
May 14, 2021 16:24

lol

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Cassandra Durnin
February 08, 2021 19:10

I happened to know the story that this one was based off of, and it really pulled on my heartstrings. I do love the way that you focus on someone who doesn't really have anything to do with the conflict, but it effects them just the same. Especially a mother. Anyway, amazingly well done.

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Cookie Carla🍪
February 08, 2021 19:26

Thank you so much!!

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Cookie Carla🍪
February 09, 2021 15:54

Because everyone liked this story, I decided to do a Part 2!! Part 2: https://blog.reedsy.com/creative-writing-prompts/contests/80/submissions/54212/

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Cookie Carla🍪
April 14, 2021 19:12

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Cassandra Durnin
April 15, 2021 21:10

Just took it!

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Whitney Jones
February 09, 2021 14:54

Carla you did an excellent job!! I never knew you could write like this. I like how you put an outside person point of view in it. It makes the story kick(and of course the main point of the story). Yea, it's a great idea to do PART TWO. I'm a proud person!

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Cookie Carla🍪
February 23, 2021 15:00

Thanks yous!!!!

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You know, I really like this story a lot. I loved the way you based this plot off of a real story. You are so creative. ;)

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Cookie Carla🍪
February 08, 2021 21:13

OMG!! Thank you sooooooooooo much!!!!

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Haha, of course!

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Cookie Carla🍪
February 09, 2021 15:56

Because everyone liked this story, I decided to do a Part 2!! Part 2: https://blog.reedsy.com/creative-writing-prompts/contests/80/submissions/54212/

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Oooh, I'll read for sure! :)

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Cookie Carla🍪
February 09, 2021 21:48

YAY!!!

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Cookie Carla🍪
April 14, 2021 19:15

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February 08, 2021 20:23

Truly amazing. Really, the biggest thought that went through my mind during this was "Why is this listed as fiction" and I hate that. Honestly, though, this was beyond amazing. The best stories are the ones that last forever in our own minds, no matter what we believe.
Also, as a student of Ap us history and one taking a government class, I thought I recognized this story. You didn't ruin any of this at all. In fact, you made it only more powerful.
These words need to be spread more. Can I put it at the top of my bio?

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Cookie Carla🍪
February 08, 2021 20:26

OFCOURSEYOUCANYOUARESOAMAZINGOMGICOULDHUGYOUEVENTHOUGHWEAREINAPANDEMICOMGIALMOSTCRIEDAHHHHHHH!!!!! Thank you so much for the feedback!!!

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Cookie Carla🍪
February 09, 2021 15:54

Because everyone liked this story, I decided to do a Part 2!! Part 2: https://blog.reedsy.com/creative-writing-prompts/contests/80/submissions/54212/

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Cookie Carla🍪
April 14, 2021 19:15

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April 14, 2021 20:02

Sure!

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Nancy Drayce
February 08, 2021 19:12

This broke my heart... I read your comment first and a shiver crawled down my spine... This is the first time I am hearing about this. I just can't wrap my head around the fact that this is true and that someone could have done this. I am so mad right now... I don't get how the police even had in mind of coming and taking that little boy... I mean why? How? And then someone deciding about his life the way they did, I can't even type it down...
Besides that, I have to say that I really like how you wrote it! The point of view, of a woman listening to the news and thinking about her own son, was an amazing idea because I believe that adds to bringing awareness. 💙🌟

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Cookie Carla🍪
February 08, 2021 19:28

Thank you so much!! My first time hearing about Emmett I was so mad I started crying so it really hit home for me. Again, thanks for the feedback!!

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Cookie Carla🍪
February 09, 2021 15:55

Because everyone liked this story, I decided to do a Part 2!! Part 2: https://blog.reedsy.com/creative-writing-prompts/contests/80/submissions/54212/

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Cookie Carla🍪
November 30, 2021 15:09

Hello!!
Read my bio pls!!

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Akshaya Sutrave
March 09, 2021 13:26

Cookie, this was so moving. So sad and touching. I hope, really hope nothing happens to Noah Adir. He's only eight! :( I can't believe it really happened to someone in real life. I can't believe how bloodthirsty and evil some human beings can be.
You've written this story so well, and I could feel the conflict happening even if the story was taking place somewhere else. I also like how you used Laney's protectiveness of her son to narrate this story. Amazing job!

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Cookie Carla🍪
March 09, 2021 14:35

Thank you so much!!!

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Akshaya Sutrave
March 09, 2021 15:05

Of course! :)

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Amel Parvez
February 22, 2021 07:50

amaaaazing!

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Cookie Carla🍪
February 23, 2021 15:01

Thaaaaaaaank you!!

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Amel Parvez
February 23, 2021 15:04

you're welcooomeeee!
XD

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Cookie Carla🍪
April 14, 2021 19:16

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Amel Parvez
April 15, 2021 16:27

sure!

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Cookie Carla🍪
April 15, 2021 16:52

I just read your submission for my quiz (thanks btw!!) and you said you wanted real judges to give you feedback on your writing?? There's one judge on here, he has his own website dedicated to giving feedback on short stories and novels and such. Here's his Reedsy link and his website (which you can find in his bio):

-- https://blog.reedsy.com/creative-writing-prompts/author/a-r-eakle/
-- eaklereviews.com

PS - I'm about to read Rachel and Michael in a minute!! :)

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Amel Parvez
April 15, 2021 17:45

Thnx for telling!

hope u like it:)

<3

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February 10, 2021 21:22

All this...
because he winked?
Although yeah, stuff can get exaggerated like that. A wink at a freaked-out lady turns into a worldwide protest. It's a little weird, but I quite like it. Powerful message.

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Cookie Carla🍪
February 10, 2021 21:24

The real boy, Emmett Till (black), supposedly grabbed the lady (white) in the 1940s by her waist and said some provactive comments to her. I didn't want to put that in my story because it seemed a little... extra like you said.

Thank you for the feedback!!

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February 11, 2021 19:42

You're welcome! Yeah, extra.

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Sapphire 🌼
February 09, 2021 19:28

This is so heartbreaking.

I'm on the verge of tears.

These are real problems going on in our world right now, and they are so scary. It was so amazing of you to put it into a beautiful, emotional, spectacular story. I love your bravery and I love how you took a real event and made it into this masterpiece.

Amazing job :)

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Cookie Carla🍪
April 14, 2021 19:16

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Sapphire 🌼
April 21, 2021 17:49

Oooh! sure! Thanks!

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Cookie Carla🍪
February 09, 2021 19:53

Oh my gosh you almost made me cry!!! Thank you so much!! It's always been a dream of mine to write about the issues that we face in our world but I never really went out and did it. Thank you so much for your kind words!! It's people like you that keep my writing passion going so I really do appreciate you and everyone else who took the time today (and yesterday) to read my Adir stories!!

Part 3 is a POSSIBILITY. I'm writing it right now but I may not publish it. Idk yet but I'll let you know if I do :)

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Sapphire 🌼
February 09, 2021 20:07

Awwww no problem!!!!!!

*gasp* I WILL ONE HUNDRED PERCENT READ IT!!!

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Cookie Carla🍪
February 09, 2021 20:08

*gasp* I might publish it :DDD

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Sapphire 🌼
February 09, 2021 21:19

OMGGG I WILL BE FIRST IN LINE TO BUY IT

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Cookie Carla🍪
February 09, 2021 21:21

Idk if I sent you this or not. I'll send it anyway :) I just finished it a few minutes ago!!

Part 3: https://blog.reedsy.com/creative-writing-prompts/contests/80/submissions/54242/

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Frank Njugi✨
February 09, 2021 15:50

Loved how you used Laney and Jordan to tell the story although they weren't involved ....so creative

Also choose a very perfect real historical story to tell issues that still affect the society in modern day ..I like that about the story ✨

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Cookie Carla🍪
February 09, 2021 15:52

Thank you so much for the feedback!! I actually just posted a part 2!! vvvv

https://blog.reedsy.com/creative-writing-prompts/contests/80/submissions/54212/

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Whitney Jones
February 09, 2021 14:54

Carla you did an excellent job!! I never knew you could write like this. I like how you put an outside person point of view in it. It makes the story kick(and of course the main point of the story). Yea, it's a great idea to do PART TWO. I'm a proud person!

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Cookie Carla🍪
February 09, 2021 15:02

Thanks so much Whitney!! I'm actually halfway through Part 2. I'll let you know when I publish it. I'm a proud person too!!

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Whitney Jones
February 09, 2021 15:35

Great! Lol. Hurry!!!

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Cookie Carla🍪
February 09, 2021 15:39

I'm thhiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiisssssssss close to finishing. I'm literally like... right on the brink.

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Whitney Jones
February 09, 2021 15:41

Go Carla!! Go Carla!!!

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Cookie Carla🍪
February 09, 2021 15:53

Done. Part 2: https://blog.reedsy.com/creative-writing-prompts/contests/80/submissions/54212/

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February 09, 2021 13:07

I've read a book about Emmet Till and it's horrible. This was very accurate and awful(the writing is amazing, the fact that this is happening in modern times is awful)
I liked how you wrote it from the perspective of someone who wasnt at the scene yet she was still nervous/scared.
This was amazing, well done!!

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Cookie Carla🍪
February 09, 2021 15:55

Because everyone liked this story, I decided to do a Part 2!! Part 2: https://blog.reedsy.com/creative-writing-prompts/contests/80/submissions/54212/

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Cookie Carla🍪
February 09, 2021 14:02

Thank you so much!! I'm so happy you liked my story!!!!!!

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Cookie Carla🍪
April 14, 2021 19:16

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April 14, 2021 20:14

sure!

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February 09, 2021 12:27

This was such a powerful story that I agree should be told and retold. I really liked the fact that the story was almost told entirely through the news medium. I actually think this could have been used even more. It would be a great way to link this story (that I'm guessing happened at an earlier time given the extent of the sentence) to our present time, as the news today still hold a lot of weight.
I also found the character of Laney very interesting. We expect her to be angry with our modern eyes but she isn't and maybe it is because what she feels more, is fear, like you said at the end. Well done!!

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Cookie Carla🍪
February 09, 2021 14:00

The story of Emmett Till happened in the 1940s and they were still lynching people back then. I didn't even notice that her character wasn't as mad as we would be today. Everybody has been saying that but I never knew what they were talking about. So thank you so much for the feedback!! It was really appreciated and I'm glad you like it!!

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Cookie Carla🍪
February 09, 2021 15:55

Because everyone liked this story, I decided to do a Part 2!! Part 2: https://blog.reedsy.com/creative-writing-prompts/contests/80/submissions/54212/

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February 10, 2021 22:49

That's great. I'll be sure to take a look :)

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Corey Melin
February 08, 2021 23:24

This story is definitely an eye-opener, and one that I have read about. In fact, I have read many stories similar to this one. Evil that is set to take our young ones away. I don't give a damn of the reasoning. It's peer evil. Thank you for the read.

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Cookie Carla🍪
February 09, 2021 14:09

I agree. It makes me so mad that people think that this is okay. I remember my first time hearing about Emmett Till, I had just got done watching the movie called "Just Mercy" and I started crying. My mom was like "this happens all the time..." and she told me the story. I got so mad I starting shaking and crying. So it hurts that this had to happen.

Thank you so much for liking my story!!

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Cookie Carla🍪
February 09, 2021 15:56

Because everyone liked this story, I decided to do a Part 2!! Part 2: https://blog.reedsy.com/creative-writing-prompts/contests/80/submissions/54212/

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XANDER DMER
February 08, 2021 20:53

Why are there DOWNVOTERS?????

I mean think to yourself. . .

What is downvoting someone doing???

Lowering peoples Karma Points ( Not Nice! )

Positive Energy NOT negative :D :D :D XD XD

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Cookie Carla🍪
February 08, 2021 20:58

Now I'm not condoning this behavior, and I'm not saying that it's right, but the purpose of the downvote button is like the same thing as the thumbs down. Many ppl use the thumbs down function bc they don't like the video, or in this case, story.

I think ppl use it unnecessarily. I haven't downvoted anyone on here bc first of all, if I don't like the story I'm either going to comment why or not say anything at all. Other ppl do it because of personal grudges or just to be funny. And none of it is fair. So honestly... I really don't know.

I don't even think I have been downvoted, and if I have, I never noticed because thems be negative vibes and I don't fool around with that.

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XANDER DMER
February 08, 2021 21:00

Can I Get A AMEN!!!

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Cookie Carla🍪
February 08, 2021 21:03

AMEN!!!!

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XANDER DMER
February 08, 2021 21:03

lol! :) :)

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Cookie Carla🍪
February 09, 2021 15:56

Because everyone liked this story, I decided to do a Part 2!! Part 2: https://blog.reedsy.com/creative-writing-prompts/contests/80/submissions/54212/

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February 08, 2021 19:47

This was great, but I would like you to show more personal connections between Jordan and Noah, make it a little more fictional. also, the mother should've been a TON more angry in person or heartbroken, because that's the power of motherly love. Overall though, I thought this was absolutely heartwrenching.

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Cookie Carla🍪
February 08, 2021 19:50

Thank you for the feedback Lit!!! You mean, make Jordan and Noah know each other on a personal level? And when you say mother... which mother?

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February 08, 2021 19:51

No problem!!! Yeah, I feel like that would make it awesome. by Mother I mean Noah's mother.

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Cookie Carla🍪
February 08, 2021 21:05

Ahhh!! I see. I'll keep that in mind when I write Part 2. Part 2 is coming out probably tomorrow or Wednesday. Tell everyone!!!

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February 08, 2021 21:06

Ooooooooooooooooooh yayyyyyyyy!!!!! I might be posting again soon, and your only hint as to what its about is: Licinia.

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Cookie Carla🍪
February 08, 2021 21:06

Ooooo YAY!!!

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Cookie Carla🍪
February 09, 2021 15:55

Because everyone liked this story, I decided to do a Part 2!! Part 2: https://blog.reedsy.com/creative-writing-prompts/contests/80/submissions/54212/

And I'm about to read your story right now!!

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February 09, 2021 15:57

YAYYYYYYY AND YAYYYYYYYY

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April 14, 2021 19:16

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Cookie Carla🍪
February 08, 2021 19:09

Emmett Till is a true story and I did tweak my story a little bit to fit the prompt. Thank you for giving feedback and I'll go read yours right now!! It is your most recent right?

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Cookie Carla🍪
February 08, 2021 19:27

Ohhh I see what you mean :DD

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Cookie Carla🍪
February 09, 2021 15:55

Because everyone liked this story, I decided to do a Part 2!! Part 2: https://blog.reedsy.com/creative-writing-prompts/contests/80/submissions/54212/

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Echo Sundar
March 05, 2021 21:10

Wow. This story is amazing. And breathtaking and scaringly realistic.

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Cookie Carla🍪
March 06, 2021 22:44

Thank you so much!!!

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Claudia Morgan
February 25, 2021 18:16

Woah. It’s so good! I love it!

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Cookie Carla🍪
April 14, 2021 16:46

OHMG!!! I never saw this I'm so sorry!!
Thank you!! <33

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Claudia Morgan
April 14, 2021 17:17

Haha, no problem!

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AVAN SHIPECK
February 24, 2021 19:27

This story is soooooooooooo good!! I love how you describe everything between 2 different races. No matter color or race, we are all the same as people. This story is like my new favorite, also that u added how the character has her own african american son and how she didnt want him to put through with what Noah did. :) Id love to see you write more and grow as a writer!!

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Cookie Carla🍪
February 24, 2021 20:07

Thank you so much!!! You have no clue how much that really means to me!!

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Cookie Carla🍪
April 14, 2021 19:17

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Sunny 🌼
February 15, 2021 13:53

Wow, this was actually really powerful. The whole thing reminded me a lot of Emmet Till, who was attacked by two men for supposedly winking and whistling at a white woman. I liked how you told the story from Leney's point of view showing that she can relate to Noah's parents. And I also adored the ending. Very bittersweet.

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Cookie Carla🍪
February 17, 2021 17:57

This story actually was based off the story of Emmett Till so I'm glad I could make that connection!! Thank you so much!!

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Sunny 🌼
February 17, 2021 18:05

Aaaaaah you're welcome!

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Cookie Carla🍪
April 14, 2021 19:17

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February 09, 2021 10:21

This is one of the most heartbreaking story. And we can see a mother's love for her son in the event of racism and we can understand that even though, in a way, all these happened "outside"
I like how this flows.

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Cookie Carla🍪
February 09, 2021 13:57

Thank you so much!!!

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Cookie Carla🍪
February 09, 2021 15:56

Because everyone liked this story, I decided to do a Part 2!! Part 2: https://blog.reedsy.com/creative-writing-prompts/contests/80/submissions/54212/

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Cookie Carla🍪
April 14, 2021 19:17

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