Blind Date

Fiction

Written in response to: "Write about a character who meticulously catalogs everything in their life, until something disrupts their system." as part of No Talking in the Library.

The scent of jasmine was my first clue: a woman. 

I was sitting alone at my usual table when she came and sat down at the one right next to me. I knew she was alone because the chair on the other side of her table had not scraped across the floor, and no one had spoken to her after she had sat down. 

I sipped my coffee. On a good day, I could pick up the cup, take a sip and return it to the saucer, and if you were sitting at the table right next to me, you would never know I was blind. The challenge was to see how long I could carry out the deception Before the person sitting next to me realized the truth. And believe me, the moment they do, they give themselves away. Some began to whisper, and I suspect nod or point; some become attentive, and a few are so embarrassed that they do not speak again. Yes, I could even sense that.

I hoped someone would be joining her so I could hear her speak. I can tell a great deal from a voice. When you cannot see someone, the accent and the tone are enhanced, and those can give so much away. Pause for a moment, imagine listening to someone on the other end of a phone line, and you will get the idea. 

Charlie was heading towards us. 

“Are you ready to order, madam?” asked the waiter, his slight Cornish accent, leaving no doubt that he was a local. Charlie is tall, strong, and gentle. How do I know? Because when he guides me back to the pavement after my morning coffee, his voice comes from several inches above me, and I am five foot ten. And if I should accidentally bump against him, there is no surplus weight, just firm muscle. And then, on Saturday afternoons, he plays rugby for the Cornish Pirates. He has been in the first team for the past seven years, so he must be in his late twenties, possibly early thirties. Charlie has recently split up with his girlfriend, and he still misses her. Some things you pick up from asking questions, and others are volunteered.

 The next challenge is to see how much I could work out about the person sitting at the table next to me before they realize that I cannot see them. Once they have gone their way, Charlie tells me how much I got right. I usually manage about seven out of ten.

“I’d like a lemon tea,” she replied softly. 

“Certainly, madam,” said Charlie. “And will there be anything else?” 

“No, thank you.” 

Thirty to thirty-five would be my guess. Polite, and not from these parts, and now I am desperate to know more, but I need to hear her speak again if I am to pick up any further clues. I turned to face her as if I could see her clearly.

“Can you tell me the time?” I asked, just as the clock on the church tower opposite began to chime. 

She laughed but didn’t reply until the chimes had stopped. “If that clock is to be believed,” she said, “it’s exactly ten o’clock.” The same gentle laugh followed. 

“It’s usually a couple of minutes fast,” I said, staring blankly at the clock face. “Although the church’s perpendicular architecture is considered as fine an example of its kind as any in the West Country, it is not the building itself people flock to see. Rather, it is the Madonna and Child by Barbara Hepworth in the Lady Chapel,” I added, casually leaning back in my chair. 

“How interesting,” she volunteered as Charlie returned and placed a teapot and a small jug of milk on her table, followed by a cup and saucer. “I was thinking of attending the morning service,” she said as she poured herself a cup of tea. 

“Then you are in for a treat. Old Isaac, our vicar, gives an excellent sermon, especially if you’ve never heard it before.” 

She laughed again before saying, “I read somewhere that the Madonna and Child are not at all like Hepworth’s usual work.” 

“That’s correct,” I replied. “Barbara would take a break from her studio most mornings and join me for a coffee,” I said proudly, “and the great lady once told me that she created the piece in memory of her eldest son, who was killed in a plane crash at the age of twenty-four while serving in the RAF.” 

“How sad,” said the woman but added no further comment. 

“Some critics say,” I continued, “that it’s her finest work and that you can see Barbara’s devotion for her son in the tears in the Virgin’s eyes.” The woman picked up her cup and sipped her tea before she spoke again.

“How wonderful to have actually known her,” she said. “I once attended a talk on the St Ives School at the Tate, and the lecturer made no mention of the Madonna and Child.” 

“Well, you’ll find it tucked away in the Lady Chapel. I’m sure you won’t be disappointed.” I added. 

As she took another sip of her tea, I wondered how many out of ten I had gotten so far. Clearly interested in art, probably lived in London and certainly hadn’t come to St Ives to sunbathe on the beach. 

“So, are you a visitor to these parts?” I ventured, searching for further clues. 

“Yes, but my aunt is from St Mawes, and she’s hoping to join me for the morning service.” 

I felt a right chump. She must have already seen the Madonna and Child and probably knew more about Barbara Hepworth than I did but was too polite to embarrass me. Did she also realize I was blind? If so, those same good manners didn’t even hint at it. 

I heard her drain her cup. I could even tell that. When Charlie returned, she asked him for the bill. He tore off a slip from his pad and handed it to her. She passed him a banknote, and he gave her back some coins. 

“Thank you, madame,” said Charlie effusively. It must have been a generous tip. 

“Goodbye,” she said, her voice directed towards me. “It was nice to talk to you.” 

I rose from my seat, gave her a slight bow, and said, “I do hope you enjoy the service.” 

“Thank you,” she replied. As she walked away, I heard her say to Charlie, “What a charming man.” But then again, she had no way of knowing how acute my hearing was. 

And then she was gone. 

I sat waiting impatiently for Charlie to return. I had so many questions for him. How many of my guesses would turn out to be correct this time? From the buzz of cheerful chatter in the cafe, I guessed there were a lot of customers in that morning, so it was some time before Charlie was once again standing by my side. 

“Will there be anything else, Mr. Trevathan?” he teased. 

“There will most certainly be, Charlie,” I replied. “For a start, I want to know all about the woman who was sitting next to me. Was she tall or short? Fair or dark? Was she slim? Good-looking? Was she-” 

Charlie burst out laughing. 

“What’s so funny?” I demanded. 

“She asked me exactly the same questions about you.” 

Posted Apr 26, 2021
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Phoenix LaRue
May 03, 2021 20:50

Ah, this story was so clever, Nainika! I love how you didn't give away that the woman was also blind until the very last line, which also makes the title exceptionally fitting. The dialogue was solid, and I feel like the two blind characters would have really good chemistry together, either as friends or more than that.
Excellent job!

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Nainika Gupta
May 04, 2021 01:12

Aw, thanks Pheonix! really appreciate it :)

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Phoenix LaRue
May 04, 2021 18:58

No problem!

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Kristin Neubauer
May 02, 2021 17:25

No way!!! What a great twist. Brilliant....just utterly brilliant. I don't know what else to say.....you need to publish an anthology of your stories!

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Nainika Gupta
May 03, 2021 11:00

Aw, thanks so much, Kristin! :)

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April 27, 2021 00:38

ahhhhhhhh I love this ;)
When I read the title, I thought it was the oThEr meaning, but this is much more creative! GRATE 🧀🧀🧀 job!!!
the end - :'O

"The challenge was to see how long I could carry out the deception Before the person sitting next to me realized the truth" -> I think the 'b' in 'before' should be lowercase :)

"“Well, you’ll find it tucked away in the Lady Chapel. I’m sure you won’t be disappointed.” I added." the period after 'disappointed' should be replaced with a comma :)

I luved thissss :D

~ Amethyst

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Sunny 🌼
April 26, 2021 16:52

oop-
didn't see that coming
so they were both blind...
*le gasp*
OH, THE TITLE MAKES SENSE NOW!
hehehe that's smart
I smell my new OTP lol

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Nainika Gupta
April 26, 2021 18:39

:) yep!
lol haha

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Asha Pillay
April 26, 2021 15:59

Wow! It had a nice surprising twist to it.
I'm sure it's is a typo.
Cup and saucer not cub and saucer.

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Nainika Gupta
April 26, 2021 18:39

Thanks!
Yep, thanks for the catch - fixing it!

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Asha Pillay
April 26, 2021 22:36

Your welcome.

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Part 9 of the Adapters is out and you are featured! Please read previous parts first!

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Nainika Gupta
April 26, 2021 18:39

:)

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Zahra Daya
May 03, 2021 08:37

Haha, this plot twist was great! It was a nice story all along but the twist really completed and enhanced it. Very well done!

- Z

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Nainika Gupta
May 03, 2021 10:57

Thanks so much Zahra!

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Avid Writer
May 03, 2021 01:12

Very very good! I love the fact they are both blind! Ive been meaning to write about somone who is blind recently. :) You are a very good writer, id love it if you checked my story out.

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Nainika Gupta
May 03, 2021 10:59

Aw, thanks! I'll check it out!

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Claudia Morgan
May 02, 2021 21:58

Really well written. So enjoyable! Loved it!

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Nainika Gupta
May 03, 2021 10:59

Thank you so much!

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Claudia Morgan
May 03, 2021 11:25

No problem!

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May 02, 2021 21:23

Thank you for including blind characters. They're so interesting, and I feel like they don't get represented enough.
This was a great story. The dialogue stood out to me in this one; it seems realistic. Great job!

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Nainika Gupta
May 03, 2021 10:59

Thank you so much!

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May 03, 2021 11:48

No problem.

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Jade Young
May 01, 2021 09:34

Omigosh that ending was perfect😂❤ I love everything about this story. The title is super witty given the content of the story, the game he plays had me hooked from the beginning. I found myself trying to keep track with him of all the facts about her. And discovering that she's also blind was just the cherry on top (mainly because the possibility hadn't occured to me lol). The dialogue between your characters was effortless the the point where I was fun immersed in the scene you painted with your words. This is an amazing girl story. Thank you for sharing it on Reedsy ;)

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Nainika Gupta
May 01, 2021 11:08

Aw, thanks for the sweet comment Jade! Really appreciate it :)

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Coco Longstaff
April 28, 2021 22:28

....😮*GASP*
They’re both blind!!!
How could you write such an amazing story like this???
The title, ending, everything is SO well written!!!!! Well done!!!

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Nainika Gupta
April 29, 2021 00:29

:)))
Aww, thanks coco! Also..YOU'RE BACK??!!
<333

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Coco Longstaff
April 29, 2021 01:05

No problem🥰
Yasss i am backkk
Hehe
I’m on my Golden Week holiday now so ill probly be on here a lot

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Zelda C. Thorne
April 28, 2021 09:26

Hi Nainika,

I really liked this story! Very clever and so sweet 👍

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Nainika Gupta
April 28, 2021 15:20

Thanks so much Rachel! Really appreciate it :)

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April 26, 2021 22:52

Is the emoji puzzle Chicken Little?
also, did you see my other comment?

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Nainika Gupta
April 27, 2021 00:09

:) yep!
and no...i didn't?

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April 27, 2021 00:16

:DDD yAhOoO-
oop XD that's fine, I was just asking which of your stories (if they do) have swears and which don't

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Nainika Gupta
April 27, 2021 00:24

oh haha lol
none of them do?
i don't usually swear lol :)

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April 27, 2021 00:26

ooh YAY :D
I'll get on the long task of reading all your stories now XD
Hru?

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Liling Wei
April 26, 2021 17:09

Nainika, you there??

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Nainika Gupta
April 26, 2021 18:39

yeppp

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Liling Wei
April 26, 2021 19:34

hehe, any chance you want to bother abigail cross? we're sorta competing lol

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Fay Winter
May 07, 2021 23:52

I love this, it's so cute!! Keep up the good work 🙂

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Nainika Gupta
May 08, 2021 11:04

Thanks so much!

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Charlie Murphy
May 06, 2021 00:16

WOW! Great twist! I love the title too. If you want, read "The Librarian and the Baby."

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Alison Brewis
May 05, 2021 22:10

Great story. I liked the setting and the surprise ending.

Just a note: you have Charlie call her madam at one point and then madame at another. I'd go for madame for both.

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Nainika Gupta
May 06, 2021 02:24

Thanks Alison!
and yep, caught that already but thanks for pointing it out :)

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Alison Brewis
May 06, 2021 06:41

:)

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Charli Britton
May 05, 2021 15:10

Wow! I love that take on the prompt! I would have never thought of that for this, let alone have a blind character! Would you mind if I wrote about a blind character if the opportunity presented itself? I don't want to seem like I am copying... but I sort of am? It's just such a good idea and there is so much personality and it's so touching!
Also, I love the name "Charlie" As I am sure you can guess. ;)
Love the plot twist and I still love your writing style! This has to be one of my favorite stories on Reedsy! Very well thought out.

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Nainika Gupta
May 05, 2021 15:27

Thanks so much! aww, thanks :)
absolutely! I'd love to see...er read it if you ever write one :)
ahah I can see that :)
aww, means a lot!

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Charli Britton
May 05, 2021 15:38

Yeah, Anytime.

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Kanika G
May 05, 2021 10:56

Loved the story! I can't say I saw the twist coming early in the story, but I did see it coming just before I read the last few lines. Excellent!

I would love it if you could check out my story 'The Long Walk Home' and leave your feedback.

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Nainika Gupta
May 05, 2021 11:24

Thanks Kanika! Means a lot!
Sure, i'll do it ASAP!

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Taylah G
May 04, 2021 04:18

This is probably my favourite story so far! Very original with a plot twist nobody saw coming. It was a pleasure to read and I really enjoyed.

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Nainika Gupta
May 04, 2021 11:26

Aw, thanks so much!

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J.A. Blackmore
May 04, 2021 03:27

This. Is. SO COOL!!! I absolutely love this!

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Nainika Gupta
May 04, 2021 11:26

Aw, thanks!

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Philip Clayberg
May 03, 2021 21:19

I really really liked this story. Thank you so much for writing it.

I've read that if you're blind and/or deaf, other senses take on the tasks that eyesight and/or hearing used to have. Some blind people have amazing hearing. I can only imagine how frustrating it was for Helen Keller who not only couldn't see or hear but also couldn't speak orally. Thankfully, her teacher taught her how to use sign language, pressing her fingers into the "listener's" palm (if you've read my short story, "Blind Date", then you'll probably know where I got my inspiration from for the conversation between the two blind characters). Btw, there's a movie about Helen Keller, in which Patty Duke plays Helen Keller. I recommend it (if you haven't seen it yet).

I did have an editing comment to make, but I noticed that another reader had already mentioned it (the error of "Before" instead of "before").

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Nainika Gupta
May 04, 2021 01:12

:) thanks Philip, aww I got two really's :)
and I'll check it out! thanks :)

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Philip Clayberg
May 04, 2021 16:54

You're welcome. Hope you like reading it.

Really? Really? Hmm. I hope I'm not repeating myself myself two much. (grin)

It's interesting that there are two short stories titled "Blind Date" on this website and they're for entirely different weekly contests.

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Nainika Gupta
May 04, 2021 18:52

:) Yeah for sure!
haha, very interesting!

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Nainika Gupta
May 03, 2021 10:57

:) Thanks!
Yes it is!

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