Feverish Nights

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Romance Teens & Young Adult

Written in response to: "Write a romance where your character falls in love with the last person they expected to." as part of Shocking Developments.

Theo slowly folded the blanket over, uncovering Sophie’s disgruntled expression with her brows slightly furrowed together. Strands of hair stuck to her sweating face, she breathed through her mouth heavily, her chest heaving up and down.


With the small portion of moonlight that seeped through window curtains, illuminating Sophie’s face, Theo could make out her frantic eyes moving behind closed eyelids.


He gently placed his hand over her moistened forehead, recoiling it back almost immediately the moment their skin made contact.


“Shit, you’re burning up again.”


He gently tried to scoop her up in a better position, seeing how uncomfortable she was curled up into a ball, latching onto a pillow, with the towel on her forehead leaving a wet spot on the same pillow she was clutching.


Her constant squirming the past hour did not go unnoticed by him, he made sure to check up on her every few minutes, regularly taking her temperature and changing the wet towel folded over her forehead.


He tried to wake her up, only to receive incoherent noises coming from her.


“The beds, we need twelve beds,” She mumbled lowly but seeing how inaudibly she had said it made Theo second-guess what he had heard.


“We’ll buy them tomorrow,” He coaxed her, pulling her up into a seating position.


“No, we need them now,” She pulled herself up drowsily, holding Theo’s arm to support herself, and leaning her head against the headboard, her eyes still half-closed.


He gently stroked her hair, successfully calming her down as he continued to pour sweet words into her ear. “It’s fine, it’s just a feverish dream, Fifi.”


A loud, scratching sound resounded throughout the silent room as Theo dragged the basin filled with water from the bedside table.


Weirdly enough, the scratching sound meshed perfectly with the sounds of droplets from what Sophie could only make out as Theo squeezing a towel into the basin, she slowly blinked herself back into sleep accompanied with the calming sounds, echoing endlessly on her mind.


She could feel herself succumbing into a peaceful sleep, no feverish thoughts over how many pillows and beds would fill their room, when suddenly, like a flicker of a light bulb switching on, her skin made in contact with an unimaginably, piercing cold.

She jumped from her place, pulling herself out of what could have been a dreamless sleep. She recoiled her arm that made in contact with the freezing towel Theo held in his hands.


“It’s alright, it’s just me,” He whispered calmly, returning to what he was previously doing, and smothering her with that damned towel, sending goosebumps down her arms.


He continued to wipe her fevered skin, despite numerous whines and cries from her.


“Theo, I feel fine. Just stop, it’s cold,” She said in a raspy voice as courtesy from all the persistent coughing that had had her exhausted all day.


“You’re not fine, you can barely talk,” He frowned. “And I told you not to put the blankets over your head.”


“It was cold.”


He grabbed the thermometer beside him and pushed it into her mouth, not even waiting more than a minute when it dinged loudly.


“One-Oh-Four, Eighteen. I feel fine, my ass,” He dipped the towel back into the freezing water, wiping her body, starting with her face, then her neck, and chest.


She looked at his focused impression, how gentle and kind he was being with her. With a flat look, Sophie didn’t want him getting ideas. “Hey Theo, remember that time-”


He groaned, irritated as if he’d encountered that start of the sentence one too many times. “Yes, I remember that time when I didn’t finish our school project that happened over seven years ago.” He said dryly, slightly narrowing his eyes, resembling somewhat of a glare.


“Good. Even though you’re being nice to me, I still don’t forgive you for that,”


“Just so you know,” She added with a smile.


“I tried to pay you for that,” He grumbled.


“You were seven years late. All you had to do was assemble a toy car, how hard could it be?” She huffed a breath. “And that way you wouldn’t have needed to pay.”


She plopped the wet towel over her face, pressing it to her face with her hands as it slowly grew warm. She knitted her eyebrows together at the sudden loss of Theo’s touch. “Why’d you stop?”


She kept her face under the wet towel, flipping it over to take advantage of the other side’s coolth. Her body slowly grew warm and uncomfortable.


“The water’s warm, I’ll get cold water,”


“No,” She lengthened the words out, wiping her sweat-infused face with the towel.


He sighed, “Do you want me to get you an Advil?”


“Yes please,” She barely uttered out, suddenly feeling drowsy.


She held her arms out inaudibly telling him to carry her. He does so and lifts her up without a hassle.


They headed for the kitchen, with Sophie carrying the basin over her and leaning her head on his chest.


“Were still not done talking about my toy car.” She mumbled quietly.


“I think we are,” He said, trying to dodge another argument about that stupid toy car.


“I want one on our wedding. I won’t marry you without one,” She blinked innocently up at him.


He sighed, “I don’t get why you’re still not over this. I tried to pay you.”


“You paid me seven years late! My dad berated me every day to get you to pay your part of the project.”


“I am this close to letting go of you right now if you talk about that damned car one more time, my arms are the only ones keeping you from falling,” He loosened his hold on me, making me tighten my hold on his neck.


“You won’t do that,” I snuggled closer to him, brushing my cheek across his chest.


“You love me too much.”


“I mean how can you not?” She said haughtily, “I’m basically the sugar, the spice, and everything nice that’s happened in your life.”


“You got spice right,” He narrowed his eyes at her, “You were a little shit.”


She giggled as a memory of a young, red, and crying Theo resurfaced. She remembered that day vividly, she had tricked Theo into eating a chili pepper, as long as she ate one as well, except she faked eating it leading to horrifying puddles of Theo’s vomit.


“You were the little shit,” She giggled more, “I was taller than you were.”


“I really hate you sometimes,” He had a frown imminent on his face, but Sophie smiled and shook her head. She placed herself in between the crook of his neck, her breathing making the little hairs on his nape stand up. “Still better than hating me all the time.”


“But you still love me, right?” He asked her worriedly.


“Mhm,” She buried her nose in his hair, resulting in more goosebumps coming from him as her hot skin came in contact with his.


“You’re turning hot.”


She didn’t respond and laid quietly in his arms, eyes closed, taking comfort from the sounds of his footsteps creaking against the hardwood floor. Unexpectedly, he comes into an abrupt halt, followed by a switch clicking. She groaned at the sudden brightness overtaking her senses, her eyes blinked furiously before getting used to the light and opening her eyes.


He set her down on a chair, opening several cabinets looking for an Advil, whilst he waits for the basin to fill. She gaped at Theo, amazed with how patient and gentle he was with her. His shirt was wet with several spots fully clinging to his skin, his shorts slowly slipping from his hips, and his eyes were filled with dark bags underneath from staying up taking care of Sophie.


He peeled a banana, placing it in a plate and cutting it into seven equal pieces, before embedding an Advil into one of them. He threw the towel into the basin and carried the plate with one hand and the basin on his left.


He placed the plate in front of her, squeezing again into the towel he held for her forehead to cool down. Sophie was slack jawed, the man she was staring at before her, was nothing like the boy she’d met years ago.


She couldn’t believe that this was the same guy that used to steal her food, rummage through her bags, and talk so loud that she could’ve sworn her eardrums had burst.


You would think that Sophie’s cousins or relatives would be the last people she would ever wed with. But no, she couldn’t believe that this man before her was the same man she vowed to never love, let alone speak with.


“Stop staring,” He told her as he wiped her face with the glacial towel he held, but she couldn’t care less, all she felt were Theo’s warm fingers grasping her cheeks.


She gave him a sweet, saccharine smile and kissed his jaw.


He grumbled, not looking pleased. “I told you not to get yourself sick.”


She smiled at him with one thought lingering on her mind; ‘I was definitely sickly in love’.

Posted Dec 15, 2020
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Kate Reynolds
December 20, 2020 23:00

THIS STORY WAS REALLY GOOD!!!!!!!! It was a pretty creative way to write about the prompt! I only have one suggestion: it was a little bit confusing when the story changed from third person to first (or maybe it was just me..), but other than that it was great!!!!!!!!

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December 20, 2020 23:05

Oh which part?? I really didnt notice, I may have gone from third person to first in between breaks lol. And thank youu so muchh :))

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Kate Reynolds
December 20, 2020 23:08

Ofc! Its the part where you say: “I am this close to letting go of you right now if you talk about that damned car one more time, my arms are the only ones keeping you from falling,” He loosened his hold on me, making me tighten my hold on his neck.
“You won’t do that,” I snuggled closer to him, brushing my cheek across his chest.
“You love me too much."

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December 20, 2020 23:10

Oh thank youu for pointing it out <33 I didnt even notice it, but im glad somebody else did :D

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Kate Reynolds
December 20, 2020 23:10

Welcome! :D

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Kate Reynolds
December 20, 2020 23:09

Btw, when you post a new story please tell me!! I'm looking forward to reading other stories that you wroteee!!

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January 01, 2021 11:55

Of course! I didn't notice right away that your comment was back from Dec. 20, happy new year, btw :)) I've read some of your stories as well, I loved A Christmas resolution in particular, it was sooo sad and sweet and I LOVE ITT. I'll also be looking forward to reading more of your stories, you write really well making them soooo enjoyable to read.

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Kate Reynolds
January 01, 2021 17:12

Awww thank youuuuu!!!
And you too!!!!!!!!!!

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Sapphire 🌼
January 07, 2021 16:36

updated my bio :D (*wink wink*)

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January 08, 2021 01:08

Wow I- thank youuu, you're so kindd and probably my first friend here :D
You were the first person to comment on my story as well!
I mean- I'm speechless
🎊New friend celebration whooo🎊

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Sapphire 🌼
January 08, 2021 16:03

WHOOOO YESSS!!!😂😅😋

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Sapphire 🌼
December 18, 2020 18:58

AAAAAH THE ROMANCE! THE DESCRIPTIONS! THE WRITING! THE PLOT! AMAZING! Oh my gosh this was so spectacular great job!

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December 19, 2020 00:25

thank you :)) you're flattering me sOOooooOo much. let me shower you with my upvote

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Sapphire 🌼
December 19, 2020 00:55

Im so sorry I just saw this now! You're so kind! I will also shower you with upvotes!

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December 19, 2020 00:58

No need to apologize, i've replied after a day you've posted the comment (time zones are soo confusing). but thank you again :)) i'll shower, shower you with upvotes

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Sapphire 🌼
December 19, 2020 01:35

hahahah thank you so much! I'm going to upvote you as much as possible, since you seem new to Reedsy, you don't have too many comments! Thank you again! Gonna follow you!

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Sapphire 🌼
December 19, 2020 01:36

JUst realised these are your first comments and I already upvoted you lol XD aaaah stahp upvoting me I don't deserve this much!!! Thank youuuuuu!

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Frances Reine
January 06, 2021 13:18

Oh WoW, this was amazing!
Just one part that was kind of confusing:
“Good. Even though you’re being nice to me, I still don’t forgive you for that,”

“Just so you know,” She added with a smile.

I was a little bit unsure of who said the first thing and then--correct me if I'm wrong--I realized Sophie said both things. I think you could keep both things sentences together without using another quotation mark but this story was TRULY AMAZING :)

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January 07, 2021 00:47

Thank you :)) ...I'll keep it in mind next time

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Frances Reine
January 07, 2021 13:14

sure no problem! :D

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Sapphire 🌼
January 04, 2021 19:50

aieeeee I need more storiesssss from youuuuuuuuuu XD

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January 05, 2021 00:49

you're soooo kind, i'll make more storiess soon, probably including the weird dream that i had the other nightt loololol

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Sapphire 🌼
January 05, 2021 16:00

lmao I CAN'T WAITTTT!!! WEIRD DREAMS ARE THE BEST!! (well not the fact that they are INSANELY weird)

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Var .
December 31, 2020 10:05

The story was amazing. Great Work!!!

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December 31, 2020 11:24

Thank youu :))

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Kendall Defoe
December 31, 2020 02:57

Not bad, sir...

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Sunshine (:
December 21, 2020 20:01

This story was really good! I loved all the descriptions and the dialogue was great. Maybe you could've explained a little bit more about what was wrong with Sophie/why she was sick, or why she used to hate Theo. Other than that, great job!

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December 21, 2020 23:16

Thank youu. Explaining how she hated Theo was the hardest bit, I couldnt really tell what people were understanding from their perspective lol. I'll try to clarify more next time I make something similar. Thank you again for pointing it out :))

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Sunshine (:
December 22, 2020 07:01

Np!

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Maya -
December 20, 2020 01:07

Terrific story!!! I really enjoyed reading it! :)

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December 20, 2020 01:11

Thank you so much :))

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Maya -
December 20, 2020 01:21

Of course!

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December 22, 2020 06:35

Ikr theodore chipmunk hahahahahagagagag
(P.S this was a joke what did I ever do to yall)

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Nicole Of 2022
May 18, 2022 22:32

LOL I am so confused XD

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Sapphire 🌼
January 08, 2021 16:39

omg DANNNYYYYY YOUR PROFILE PIC IS THE CUTESTTTTT!!!

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January 08, 2021 22:20

Thaankk youuuuu, yours look sooo minimalistic. I LOVE ITTT!!

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Sapphire 🌼
January 08, 2021 22:25

Thankkkk uuuuu :DDD

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Coco Longstaff
January 05, 2021 09:13

Hewo
Thanx for following me btw! I really appreciate it!
I loved this story especially because it was based on romance!
The descriptions are good. The last sentence was wonderful; it made me smile. Good work!

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January 05, 2021 09:14

Of course! Come by if you ever want me to read some of yours, I'm always up for new storiess :))

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Coco Longstaff
January 05, 2021 09:40

Oh thanks! Maybe could you read my Frozen hearts story orrr my Criminal story please? Thanx

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January 05, 2021 09:42

Sure!

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January 01, 2021 00:14

Hey Danny!!

This was just- amazing!!! I loved it! I love romance especially romance that is uniquely different! I loved how you made their romance not exactly cheesy but us, the reader could tell they truly loved each other. It was really just a sweet tale! Wish I could write like this!

Another thing, I know everyone already pointed out the 3rd person to first thing(I made the same mistake ahaha..). But I kinda liked it, I liked how it just changed from 3rd to first. It was noticeable but it flowed and I think thats all that matters (for me as a reader of course. I can't speak for everyone else).

But great job Danny! I loved it!! Hope to read more from you! Great job and keep writing!

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January 01, 2021 01:08

Thank you! Wow, I don't know what to say, but I'm glad you enjoyed it :))

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January 01, 2021 01:25

Of course!

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December 31, 2020 07:57

My goodness, Danny Glipo! What a rare find!! I deeply enjoyed reading every word of your story. I loved how you gave the narration meaning beyond just what the characters were doing in the moment, but also explaining their connection that led to it. The narrative was just so natural and easy! It flowed like water and felt completely realistic. I loved the imagery and visual details of fever and sickness. It was palpable how much Theo cared about Sophie and how she gradually fell for him.

There is a jarring shift to first person in the middle of the story, as Kate Reynolds pointed out, but I barely even noticed it! Though it is good practice to prevent POV hopping, as it can confuse readers.

Keep up the excellent work, good job!

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December 31, 2020 08:12

Thank youu so much! It's nice to know that somebody enjoyed it :)) and lmaoo same, I barely noticed I shifted POVs until Kate Reynolds pointed it out

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Sapphire 🌼
January 13, 2021 00:17

maybe it's just me being lazy but another thread woop!!!

So question.
What sounds more dramatic:
"The Diamond Sword" or "The Diamond Blade"

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The diamond blade heheheh ♦️

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Sapphire 🌼
January 13, 2021 15:56

hehehehe ALRIGHT YESS

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Sapphire 🌼
January 13, 2021 16:12

THE STORY'S GONNA COME OUT TODAYYYYY :DDDD

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January 13, 2021 00:21

the diamond blade sounds fancyy~

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AntMan 🐜
January 11, 2021 14:15

This is an amazing story!

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January 11, 2021 23:37

Thank youuuu

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March 20, 2022 00:59

I seriously love this. It's so sweet, and I find it engaging. You should make a part two!!!! Also, thanks for following me. Means a lot. :)

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March 21, 2022 14:15

Thank you so much, I appreciate it! I thought of that but I posted this so long ago I've already forgotten what the original idea for part 2 was :') Thanks for checking it out though

Also a lil sidenote, I read your bio, what are your favorite books? :)

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March 21, 2022 16:10

Most definitely books by Kiera Cass and then the Keeper of the Lost Cities series. The best. :) What about you? What are your favorite books?

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March 21, 2022 23:50

Oooohhh yessss I heard they were good, they've actually been on my tbr for a while now.
Most recently probablyyy Before I Go To Sleep, I forget by whom

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March 22, 2022 00:12

Cool. :)

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March 22, 2022 00:14

Also, how was your day(not trying to be creepy or anything, just wondering)?

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March 18, 2022 02:20

This is the besttttttttttttt
Romance is my favorite genre, and some are better than others, and this is most definitely one of those!!!!!!! I love how sweet Theo is, he's probably everything someone would want in a boyfriend/fiance. :)

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March 21, 2022 14:12

Thankyouuu <3
Definetely though, but you wouldn't ever want to see what my original character for Theo was (such a real heartbreaker for moms all around the globe </3)

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March 21, 2022 16:10

Well, I like him how he is. Sweet guy. :)

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March 21, 2022 23:51

He says thanks then haha :)

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March 22, 2022 00:12

Ooohh, wish I could talk to him!

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February 22, 2024 18:56

Just reread it again, and I love it just as much as I did the first time <3 It's great. You're such a good writer :))))

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Chloe Nicole
March 02, 2022 21:11

This is so good!!! I just recently joined here, was planning on submitting a story but seeing how good everyone’s is I’m not sure lol my writing is no where near as good. I loved this! <3

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March 03, 2022 00:08

Welcome to reedsy! How are you liking it here so far?
I'm sure what you've written turned out amazingg, lots of people here would be interested in what you'd have to share. There's no harm in submitting a story, I say go for it :)
Best of luck~

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ℂ𝕁 𝕄.
March 03, 2021 22:56

Holy crap you have a talent! This story was so fricking good!!!!! It could not have been written a better way.-CJJJJJJJJJJJJj

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March 03, 2021 22:58

Thank youuu :)))

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ℂ𝕁 𝕄.
March 03, 2021 23:02

You're welcome!!!!!!! :))))

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March 04, 2021 04:10

:)))

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Maggie K
January 24, 2021 18:12

Awww so cute!

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January 25, 2021 00:40

Thank youu <33 I think your story's on my library, can't wait to read it :)

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Maggie K
January 25, 2021 08:22

Thanks it's my first one it's not amazing though

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January 25, 2021 08:28

I read it, it's amazing for a first story! Lolllolll my first story here was soooo cringyyy, I'm glad I deleted it.....hiding my shamee

Lol I'm getting second-hand embarrassment from my old self just by typing this

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Maggie K
January 25, 2021 08:50

Yeah that happened to me when I wrote something a few years back and I reread it I was like wow this is total crap I can't believe I ever thought this was good.

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January 25, 2021 08:56

IKRRRRR SAMEEE, probably because of all the compliments, but this is what constructive criticism is for, I guess..

Lol we should start normalizing cringyyy stories young us made.....likee lol so we can all cringe in harmony

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Sapphire 🌼
January 18, 2021 21:14

I just got rick-rolled for the second time today.

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January 18, 2021 23:27

Haha I'm sorryyyyyy, who was the first?

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Sapphire 🌼
January 19, 2021 00:06

My teacher. I'm not lying, he said, "Check out these puppies!" and sent me a link and BOOM Rick Astley.

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January 19, 2021 00:23

That's sooo weird, or maybe I'm just used to grumpy teachers

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Sapphire 🌼
January 19, 2021 15:50

XDD probably yeah

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Ben To
January 14, 2021 22:53

Nice descriptions, made the story very immersive! Really enjoyed it!

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January 14, 2021 22:53

Thank youuu :))

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Boba Bendy
January 12, 2021 14:57

I like how she's just suffering from this awful fever and bringing up all these things and the guys just like, "I will drop you if you mention those things again." I was smiling through the whole story. Well done!

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January 12, 2021 22:56

HAHAHAHAHA THANK YOUUUUU, GLAD MY STORY COULD MAKE YOU SMILEEE

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Amel Parvez
January 12, 2021 13:04

WOAH! you have described sooo well. i really loved it.
<3

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January 12, 2021 13:05

Thank youuuu :))))

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Amel Parvez
January 12, 2021 13:53

you are welcome!

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September 02, 2022 14:02

Your story was really good I didn't really notice the switch, but that's probably because I'm in 6th grade and don't notice those things.

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