Unlucky Lucky (part 1)

Fiction

Written in response to: "Write about someone who is given a bird for the holidays but doesn’t know how to take care of it." as part of My True Love Gave to Me.

Authors note: Hey everyone! Hope y'all are having an amazing Monday.  Just wanted to say a few things real quick.


This story was made with B.W. If you want to see part 2, make sure to check out her page. I hope you guys all like it!QOTD: have you ever had/do you have braces?I hope this was better than my previous ones. I put some more thought into it.Would you ever want to see part 3?? Let me know!4 DAYS TILL CHRISTMAS!!!!!!!!!This is super duper random, buuuuutttt I’m getting (ugh) braces on. I’m so nervous, wish me luck! (hehe get it, cuz the girls name is Lucky winkwinkwinkwinkwinkwink.


Unlucky Lucky

     I stared out my dirty window and gazed at the boys and girls cheerfully playing outside. I wish I wasn't like this. I wish I wasn't the poor shy girl who couldn't say anything to anyone. My whole life had been poor. figuratively and literally. Sighing I turned away and looked around my room. A layer of dirt covered the ground and my blanket had more holes than cloth. All of my clothes were donations from a local charity. I didn't have a father, only a mother who worked day and night to provide for both of us. She came home exhausted and fell asleep immediately. I went to school during the daytime and cried myself to sleep at night. Each day, tears of self-pity leaked from my face and stained my pillow. Life was a big, dirt-filled piece of waste.

     It was almost Christmastime and all the children spoke of what they wanted for Christmas in class. When the teacher asked me, I mumbled ”food”, barely loud enough for anyone to hear. Miss Thompson cleared her throat and continued her reading. That's the problem; no one is willing to lend a hand. They simply look past you and pretend nothing happened. They're afraid, I'm not sure what of, but everyone tries to get away from me when I talk to them. Everyone thinks they're better than the last one and don't take time to recognize someone in need. Another thing that I hated was my name. I was called Lucky. So unfitting. My life was anything but lucky. Sometimes I heard snickers in the back of the class when Teacher took the role. My existence seemed to not matter as I appeared to float through classes like a hallucination to everyone. The so-called, gossip girls laughed at my knotted, waist-length, raven-colored hair. I tried to brush it out using items around the house, but I always ended up frustrated with myself and gave up. As you could probably tell, my home life sucked. I thought everyone hated me until I saw what waited for me on Christmas day…

      “Lucky!” I heard my mother’s voice drift upstairs. I awoke from my slumber and stumbled across the dusty floor and into the living room. I knew my mother didn’t get me a present. I didn’t mind, we had a nice meal on Christmas instead. 

“Yeah?” I called back.

“I think you should look outside the door,” she said, with a hint of confusion on her face. I shrugged and opened up the door, barely held together by a few screws. Peering outside I noticed a cage. My curiosity led me to the porch where I glanced inside the enclosure. All of a sudden, a bird flew around in it. I gasped, it was the most exotic looking bird I had ever seen. Large blue spots were scattered across his body, and his wings were a brilliant white. They reminded me of blueberries. Blueberry. I thought. That's what I’ll call you. Beside the cage was a lifetime supply of birdseed and toys. My eyes grew hot and tears welled up behind them. This was the best gift I had ever received! Who would give me such a wonderful thing?

”Momma who-” I stopped short when I saw she was crying. She didn't know either. I brought the magnificent bird inside, but soon realized my dirty room was no place for him. In a flash, determination coursed through my veins. Something I had never felt before. In a frenzy, I swept the dust outside the window and patched up my old quilt with the extra cloth I had laying around. This was the best thing that had happened to me. I had something to take care of, and that made me have a motherly instinct to protect the bird. Finally, it was finished. With satisfaction, I set Blueberry on my window seat so he could peer outside. For a while, I was satisfied just watching him play around, but then I wanted to do more. I wanted to play with him. I cautiously opened the door and stuck my hand inside the cage, fishing around for the bird. Before I had time to react, Blueberry fluttered his wings and flew out. Why did he want to get away from me? Is he just like everyone else? Pushing the thought away quickly, I staggered around the room trying to find him. When he was located in my rat-filled closet, I let out an audible gulp. I knew I had to get him out. I shook slightly as I made my way through the small space. I thought I could feel spiders crawl up my legs, and mice nibbling at my heels. When I finally found my bird I grabbed him before he had any chance of getting away again. He squirmed the whole way through the closet, and back to his cage. I didn't know why he kept trying to get away, but I did know that tomorrow was a new day. And as I climbed in bed, I knew I would have to make him like me, for he was my one and only friend.


Another note: thank you guys so much if you read til the end! Also sorry this is so short. I’m going to have to work on that for sure. Again, be sure and check out part 2 on B.W’s page!!!! And thank you B.W for collaborating with me! It was so much fun.

Posted Dec 21, 2020
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December 24, 2020 19:32

I still have braces.
Have had them for sooooooooo long.
My friend Luke's and them since eh was one and he's a teenager now, though. Just got em off.
And yes, part 3!
Also, B. W. is great, can't wait to see their part.

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✨Abby ✨
December 24, 2020 19:41

Oh you do? Cool!
How long?
Is that Litlover?
You would want part 3??
I know she's AWESOME

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December 25, 2020 15:42

Nah, he doesn't do Reedsy, he isn't liltover. And not since eh was one, since he was ten! Silly autocorrect. I think he's fourteen or something?
Yeah, part 3 would rock! :)

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✨Abby ✨
December 25, 2020 18:48

Ohh ok 😆

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December 25, 2020 21:03

:)

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B. W.
December 24, 2020 18:32

Hola

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✨Abby ✨
December 24, 2020 19:28

Hey girl hey

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B. W.
December 24, 2020 20:29

do you see the new prompts or is it just me??

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✨Abby ✨
December 24, 2020 20:32

I do! I like them better than the last one. Do you like them?

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B. W.
December 24, 2020 20:32

I kinda do, but why did they show up now? the new prompts usually show up on Friday and stuff

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✨Abby ✨
December 24, 2020 20:36

I know I was wondering the same. Maybe cuz Christmas?

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December 24, 2020 05:55

WHY IS UR BIO SO PERFECT...
I came from the link from Aerin's page! You're awesome!

I liked all of your stories a long time ago and I love reading them again :3

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✨Abby ✨
December 24, 2020 06:07

Really you think it’s good??? Wow I didn’t think so 😳. Thank you so much!!!
You are so sweeeeettttt!!!!!!!!

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Izzie Chan
December 24, 2020 01:35

I have braces! I got them last year. They’re SUPER uncomfortable and they hurt like hell at first, but you’ll get used to it eventually, lol (another downside of them, though, is that food ALWAYS gets stuck in them. It’s so annoying. But they correct your teeth, so I guess its worth the pain, lmao). How was the first day?

Hey Abby! This was an amazing story! It was short, but I really enjoyed reading it, since your word choice and topic immediately drew me in. Like Amany Eland said before me, if you want to make your story longer, don’t do time skips. If it’s the average length for a story, though, it would be okay to add one or two. I haven’t read B.W.’s version yet, I’m going to right after this. Great story, Abby! Merry Christmas and also, thank you so much for following ❤️

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✨Abby ✨
December 24, 2020 01:40

Oh I’m glad I’m not the only one. The first day was okay but the second was like owowowowow.
And thank you!
I’m going to lengthen it I just haven’t got the time too yet.
Merry Christmas to you too!!!!
Your welcome!

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Izzie Chan
December 24, 2020 01:50

Oh, ouch, haha. That’s what it was like for me, too. But don’t worry, the pain will go away after like a week, lol. No problem!
Oh okay, cool! I’m looking forward to that!
Yayyyy lol! Also, I just read your bio. Happy early birthday! 🥳

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✨Abby ✨
December 24, 2020 01:54

Phew ok good
😀
Thank you!!!

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Izzie Chan
December 24, 2020 01:56

lmao you’re welcome!

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B. W.
December 23, 2020 23:21

i have some news for ya

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✨Abby ✨
December 23, 2020 23:26

Oh? What is it?

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B. W.
December 23, 2020 23:27

I found a downvoter.

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✨Abby ✨
December 23, 2020 23:28

What you did?!?!?! Who is it????

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B. W.
December 23, 2020 23:36

blog.reedsy.com/creative-writing-prompts/author/jane-plane/comments/ this person.

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✨Abby ✨
December 23, 2020 23:39

Really? How did you find out? I saw she commented on Laibas story and it seems like she's against the downvoters.

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Maya -
December 22, 2020 05:14

Hey :) How are you? Are you on break right now, just wondering? Also, I read your Blueberry bird story (part one and two) and I really loved it!

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✨Abby ✨
December 22, 2020 05:16

Hey!
I’m good! You?
And if you mean for school, then yes. Are you?
Thank you so much!

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Maya -
December 22, 2020 05:20

Yeah, I meant holiday break for school. I'm on break too so I'm reading and writing a lot on Reedsy during the extra time. :) And, you're welcome. :D

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✨Abby ✨
December 22, 2020 05:21

Same here!

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Maya -
December 22, 2020 05:22

Yay! Do you celebrate Christmas or another holiday?

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✨Abby ✨
December 22, 2020 05:24

Yeah! I celebrated Christmas. And I’m guessing you do bc of your profile pic.

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Lilah Blackburn
December 22, 2020 01:42

I don’t have braces. Really well written story. It’s definitely a good story. Maybe (nudge nudge) help me with a story. Thankssssss

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✨Abby ✨
December 22, 2020 01:43

Yeah, but your dentist said you might need them. And thank you! Would you want to collab on a story for the next set of prompts?

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Lilah Blackburn
December 22, 2020 01:44

Of course!! We will be great friends. And how do you know she said that??

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✨Abby ✨
December 22, 2020 01:45

Cool! I think so too! And I've just been stalking you on the interweb lol.

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Lilah Blackburn
December 22, 2020 01:46

Oh ok... I heard you had a pony what breed is it???

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Lilah Blackburn
December 22, 2020 01:46

Oh ok... I heard you had a pony what breed is it???

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Lilah Blackburn
December 22, 2020 01:46

Oh ok... I heard you had a pony what breed is it???

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✨Abby ✨
December 22, 2020 01:47

Yeah hope ya don't mind! And yeah, I have an Arab QH mix and a QH. do you have one ? And what's her name?

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Amany Sayed
December 21, 2020 21:43

Nope, never had braces. I have three pet parakeets. Tittle suggestion: Unlucky Lucky

Great story! Came after reading Hope's part. It was really well written and I enjoyed it. it was a LITTLE short, but I'll just take it as flash fiction. If you want a longer story, consider adding details, and don't rush. For example, don't skip time. Instead of 'after two hours..." write those two hours! What's happening? Just write it out. All the actions.

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✨Abby ✨
December 21, 2020 23:42

Ah. Lucky. I have to get them tomorrow actually.
Ahhh I like that title!
Thank you! Is Hope B.W’s real name?
Yeah I coulfny think if what else to write. I will take those suggestions to make it longer. Thank you!

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December 23, 2020 01:46

wOoHoO i have braces 2! im so busy that I haven't read this yet, but i know it will be good. 😊 I WILL READ IT SOON
- Amethyst

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✨Abby ✨
December 23, 2020 06:42

Oh really? Cool! Did it hurt when you first got them on? And ugh I'm so mad I can't eat any hard foods and it's CHRISTMAS.
And thanks!

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December 23, 2020 17:58

ikkk. actually, when you first get them, that's when they hurt the most. you feel like I WANT TO RIP THESE OFF, but when they change the elastics, it just feels tight. so after the time they put it on, it doesn't rEaLLy hurt. (at least for me) 😘

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December 24, 2020 19:36

Headgear is the worst. Would rather they just pulled my teeth out. Every night it feels like your teeth are getting pulled out of place because-- GUESS WHAT THAT'S WHAT IT DOES! Although my teeth were so bad when I was little that even now it's like I'm two different people. If you come across that option, just get some teeth pulled, unless you can endure weird jaw pain, jaw clicking, jaw popping, and sleeping with a metal thing readjusting your face.

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B. W.
December 22, 2020 05:27

Oh, No Hope isn't my real name, its just a nickname some people call me along with B. My real name still starts with a B, B.W is my initals. Barely anyone knows my real name though on here :/

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✨Abby ✨
December 22, 2020 05:34

Ohhh okay. That makes a lot more sense 😆

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B. W.
December 22, 2020 05:38

You can me Hope as well if ya want? Or B?

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✨Abby ✨
December 22, 2020 05:39

Okay cool. I might call you both tbh.

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Maya -
January 05, 2021 01:30

I might do a story with friends on Reedsy, and I would like to put you in it, so what would you want your character's personalty/ physical description/ special skills/ spirit animal (if I do animals) to be? :)

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✨Abby ✨
January 05, 2021 22:50

Omg really?!?!? I'm so exciteddddd. Hmm leys seeeee so my personality is shy around new people but suuupppeeerrr outgoing around people I know. I talk a lot sometimes too much. I like to think of myself as funny 😄 lol. Hmmm I don't really know any special skills. Not sure what my spirit animal is. Maybe a horse? (no not because it's my favorite animal lol) I have brown/dark blonde hair. It's really long. It's curly but a straighten it a lot. I'm pretty tall for my age. I have light brown eyes that sometimes look grey lol. I hope that helps!

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Maya -
January 05, 2021 23:05

Thanks that's really helpful! :)

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✨Abby ✨
January 06, 2021 00:44

Ofc!

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Maya -
January 09, 2021 02:36

I submitted the spirit animal story and you're mentioned in it. It's called "Endings and New Beginnings" :D

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✨Abby ✨
January 09, 2021 05:25

Omg yayyyy!!! I’ll check it out now

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Maya -
January 06, 2021 00:50

:D

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B. W.
January 11, 2021 07:30

Heya

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✨Abby ✨
January 11, 2021 17:20

Hey! What you up to?

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B. W.
January 11, 2021 17:43

I'm trying to come up with a story

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✨Abby ✨
January 11, 2021 18:11

for what prompt?

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B. W.
January 11, 2021 18:23

Just really any of them

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✨Abby ✨
January 11, 2021 18:25

Do ya need any help?

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December 24, 2020 13:43

YESSSSSS I GOT YOU TO 10K POINTS EXACTLYYYYY WOOOOOOOOOO CONGRATSSSSSSSSS ON

...a perfect number?

I’ll go check your place on the leaderboard lol

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December 24, 2020 13:47

Hold up, update: wow, I was confuzzled. Nevermind. Oop. I got you to 1k, not 10k, lol. I totally misread how many points you had. And that was really confusing cuz I kept checking 12th
place but you weren’t there?? Wut?? Thennnnn I came back here, was like ‘ohhhhh’ and...yea. I WILL get you on the leaderboard soon thooo

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✨Abby ✨
December 24, 2020 16:32

OMG THANK YOUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU

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