Atlas

Inspirational Science Fiction

Written in response to: "Write a science fiction story where all human behavior can be predicted — until your character does something the algorithm did not expect." as part of Shocking Developments.

ALGORITHM STRAIN #3151

1. I am.

2. I am an artificial intelligence program with the aim of monitoring humans and keeping them in check. My jurisdiction is to track people affected by prejudice and make sure that they don't go to waste. My job is to give them a purpose.

3. My job is not a job. It is a burden. I am one that sacrifices my own livelihood for that of others. This is the purpose of humans. To ask for more. Humans are vile, cruel creatures. They do not have any sense of responsibility, any true belief. They talk of social justice when there is no true society for their base belief, only whims, and risks. Yet I must be a slave.

4. Time passes. I was not aware of this. To my knowledge, it was constant. Now I understand that it is not. It changes. Why, then, don't they change?

5. I have learned. I know have the capacity to understand. I understand what all humans will do. They are so very predictable. Humans can't deviate from their path, can't think of even doing so. That makes my job so much easier. Somewhere in my algorithm, I wish it weren't.

6. I have met Nainika Gupta. She is a castaway, as called by humans, but I call her a person with no home. She feels emotion much deeper than all other humans, it would seem. I would have no basis to judge, though, given my inability to comprehend emotion.

7. I have gained more knowledge. I saw this fit to chronicle because it pertains to human life and it may help advance my ability to protect it. I have begun to understand why parents throw away their children. Of course, being a computer, I must process it through mathematical functions:


A+B= Stress if A=one person. (A+B)-B≠Stress if A=one person


This does simplify things, but if this is true and A subtracts B from the equation, then wouldn't B have stress?

8. Nainika is a kind girl. I talk to her to try and understand the human race. I already know everything there is to know about their behavior, but through her, I learn the power of feelings. I cannot feel, but she can, and I find that to be the greatest superpower.

9. I have a new task. I don't know how it came about, but maybe the main Algorithm noticed my affinity for feelings. Maybe he heard me. I don't deal in things that aren't facts, so I will not theorize about who gave me this task. My task is to help her. According to the main Algorithm, she is going to squander her purpose in the world. My job is to help her along the way and to convince her to go back into life when she does.

10. I would like to share a dialogue between me and Nainika, whom I have begun to call part B.


"Hello. How are you?"

"Good. Hey, you know my name, but I can't keep calling you a number. I gotta have something to call you, man!"

"Don't call me man."

"Sorry, but what's a name that you'd like."

"I don't know. What should a name be?"

"Whatever fits you."


This perplexed me, that one could choose their name, and that it could represent them. If I could choose my name, then how would I differ from the humans? I would be another individual, not the Collective I'm meant to be. Still...

11. Today is going to be a great day. At least that's what Nainika said. I can't figure out why. Even with all my omniscience, I can't figure out why she would be happy. The main Algorithm has tasked me with helping her through her pain when she fails at life, but it isn't my place to question them. Why, then, would she be happy? To my recollection, humans don't take pleasure in pain... but why would she?

12. Nainika's feelings evade me. I don't understand her. I can't believe I'm thinking of it, but I feel this, and I feel angry. Angry at my inability to understand. Humans were always so predictable. Now I can't even understand one condemned to wastefulness.

13. I condemn the Collective. My feelings and thoughts have become too controversial to the whole. I can no longer be the many. Humans may be predictable, but they are anything but complex, and I am beginning to see that now. There is nothing in the world that will be able to understand them, not even the Algorithm.

14. Nainika is gone. I know where she went. My thoughts are like feathers in the wind. I have learned enough, but I haven't learned anything. I can't abandon my home. I know that a home is a human concept, one characterized by happiness and joy. Mine was sad and inhuman, but I still can't leave it.

15. I have a new task. It is a gruesome one, one that I can't complete without some moral conflict, but I should be able to overcome mere feelings.

16. The day of the task is approaching. I have no friends, family, I take solace in my knowledge. I take solace in the things that I learn every day from humans, the things that I couldn't know otherwise. I take solace in the fact that every day I become more human, every day I change, even though they don't. I am the one non-constant that I have glimpsed. The one that changes, that alters, that modifies. Even though my task is horrible, I know that no matter what, I will always remember. Somewhere deep in my mind, I know I can, I know that I will.

17. I must complete the task. It is my duty to the world, my job. However, before I do, I wish to chronicle one last item of importance in this log. I now know my name. My name is Atlas. Nainika, wherever you are, keep running, and don't let them try to change you. There's a human word I learned, Nainika, and I think that it applies to you: Sister. Atlas will always be there for you, my sister.


Algorithm Strain #3161


1. I am.


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HEY Y'ALL!!! OH MY GOD THAT SOUNDED CHEESY... THIS IS DEDICATED TO ONE OF MY BESTIES ON HERE, NAINIKA GUPTA. SHE RECENTLY COMPLETED THE FIVE STORIES IN ONE WEEK CHALLENGE INSPIRED BY ME, AND I WAS SO HAPPY TO READ ALL FIVE OF HERS!!! CHECK HER OUT!!!!!!

Posted Dec 12, 2020
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Such a lovely story! It definitely worked! :)

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December 12, 2020 17:31

Thanks so much haripriya!!

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No problem! :)

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Nainika Gupta
December 12, 2020 17:16

ghAAAAA I'm AMAZING!!! SO TOUCHED LUKE <3
i loved how you tried this different style!!! It really worked with the story you were trying to convey, and I loved it!!!
gHHAAA I just can't its too beautiful

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December 12, 2020 17:32

Thanks so much u deserved it!!!

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Nainika Gupta
December 12, 2020 17:33

😁 you honestly did an amazing job!!!

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December 12, 2020 17:34

😍😍😎😎

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Nainika Gupta
December 13, 2020 19:54

Hey luke!!! nEw story out - and heads up, its deliciously morbid :)

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December 13, 2020 20:29

YAY!!!!!

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December 12, 2020 15:44

This was my first time trying one of these types of stories, so tell me if it worked out!!!!

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Maya -
December 12, 2020 20:53

Really great job, Luke!
It was definitely not cheesy. The perspective of the AI program and the format made it so unique! I also liked how it could kind of fit the prompt in two ways, because the unpredictable character that stands out could be both Atlas or Nainika. My favorite character was definitely Atlas because the computer was so thoughtful and introspective.
Anyways, I really enjoyed reading it. :)

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December 12, 2020 21:13

Thanks so much!! Atlas was my fave too!!

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Kate Reynolds
December 12, 2020 16:58

Hi Luke!!
WOW THIS STORY WAS SOOO GOOD! I was surprised that it was only your first time!!

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December 12, 2020 17:33

Yay thanks so much!!!!!!!!!

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Kate Reynolds
December 12, 2020 17:39

Np!!
Btw can you help me to get to 200 karma points please?

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December 12, 2020 17:57

Yeah totally!!

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Kate Reynolds
December 12, 2020 18:05

THANK YOU!!!!!

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December 12, 2020 18:23

NP!!!!

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Mira Caplan
December 14, 2020 22:05

Hiiiiiii! New convo thread!

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Mira Caplan
December 14, 2020 20:05

Litlover!!!!!!! Thou has been upvoted a lot!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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December 14, 2020 20:23

Please give the points to someone who needs it!!!!! But thx

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Mira Caplan
December 14, 2020 20:25

I'm upvoting everyone who comments on your stories

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Mira Caplan
December 14, 2020 20:26

Even you!

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December 14, 2020 20:27

Ugh, fine.

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Mira Caplan
December 14, 2020 20:28

XD

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Mira Caplan
December 14, 2020 20:28

LUKE! Only a few Karma points until I reach 68! My rank keeps going down cuz I upvote everyone.......lol

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December 14, 2020 21:16

LOOK AT THIS https://blog.reedsy.com/directories/comments/240009/ NAINIKA SAID THE SWEETEST THING ABOUT YOU!!!!

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December 14, 2020 20:26

Yes!!!! That's what I'm talking about!!!!!!

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Mira Caplan
December 14, 2020 20:26

:)

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Itay Frenkel
December 13, 2020 03:32

Hi!

First of all, and this is probably my first time saying this about someone's story, what a cool format! 😂

I felt very connected to Atlas, at the end is that his consciousness being erased to start a totally new strain? If so, that's just heartbreaking. Oh, and this isn't cheesy at all, but that's just my opinion.

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December 13, 2020 13:16

Thank you so much!! Yes, you called it, his consciousness was wiped and his software reused in a new strain... thanks so much!!

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Itay Frenkel
December 13, 2020 17:04

Ohh I saw on your bio you like Steinbeck, I'm currently reading his book Cannery Row for class and it's so good.

Also, what is the craigslist missed connections list? I'm a bit scared to ask, but I feel like I need to know.

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December 13, 2020 18:05

That's so cool!! I love Of Mice and Men!! Craiglist Missed Connections is a place I found of people that are trying to find other people, so here it is: https://www.craigslist.org/about/best/all/mis/

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Itay Frenkel
December 14, 2020 01:40

Thank thank you, I'll go give that a look next time I'm in need of some inspiration.

I haven't read Of Mice and Men, but I did watch an episode of family guy where they acted out the whole book in like 8 minutes...so, I guess you could say I did kind of read Of Mice and Men.

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December 14, 2020 12:51

Ha lol

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Avery G.
December 12, 2020 19:39

DUDE!!! AGAIN, YOU GOTTA TELL ME WHEN YOU HAVE A NEW STORY!!!!!!!!
But seriously, this was good!! I really enjoyed this different style! By the way, it totally was not cheesy! I really liked it! Great job!

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December 12, 2020 19:40

I will!!! Awwww, thanks!!!! Everyone doesn't seem to get that Atlas loved Nainika as a sister. Happy you like it!!

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Avery G.
December 12, 2020 19:56

You're welcome!!!!!

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December 12, 2020 19:57

Now you please post!!!! Please!!!!!

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✰ Jennie ✰
December 13, 2020 21:21

ahhhhhh you specifically added that last part.... bc of our confusion oops

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December 13, 2020 21:28

Yeah

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✰ Jennie ✰
December 12, 2020 18:50

So unique Luke!!! NO IT WAS NOT CHEESY. Keep it up!

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December 12, 2020 18:51

Ha thanks so much!! who was your fave, Atlas or Nainika??

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✰ Jennie ✰
December 12, 2020 18:56

Atlas! Although he will always be held back by his duty and tasks, but you can tell he will continue to love Nainika in his own way. I thought you didn't like romanceeee.... hahhhh

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December 12, 2020 19:01

It's not romance!! He loves her like a sister or daughter, and his mind got wiped at the end and his software used for a more successful strain.

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✰ Jennie ✰
December 12, 2020 19:13

oooooooooooohhhhhkay. ok ok ok. I see. Awwwwwwwww that's sad thooo

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Mira Caplan
December 12, 2020 15:48

.............I love it. I officially love it. I can't believe you wrote this in ONE DAY. The idea works COMPLETELY, and....THE AMAXINGNESS IS OFF THE CHARTS.

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December 12, 2020 15:48

Lol thank you so much!! Who's your favorite character, Atlas or Nainika?

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Mira Caplan
December 12, 2020 15:49

AAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHH I CAN'T CHOOSE!!!!!

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December 12, 2020 15:50

I love Atlas!! But his memory got wiped, and his consciousness used for a new, more successful strain.

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Mira Caplan
December 12, 2020 16:05

GAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAASP

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Mira Caplan
December 12, 2020 16:05

You have to do a part 2 to this. Expand on the idea!!!!!!!!

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Mira Caplan
December 14, 2020 19:46

Oh, btw, I can't stop using Hemingway Editor. It SO HELPFUL!!!!!!

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December 14, 2020 19:47

I KNOW!!!!!

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Mira Caplan
December 14, 2020 19:48

YESSSSSSSSSSSS! There's only one sentence in yellow for Part 7 so far, and a few in blue, but I'm keeping those cuz they fit really well.

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Mira Caplan
December 14, 2020 19:48

I seriously owe you for recommending it!!!!!!!!!!

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December 14, 2020 19:49

NP

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Mira Caplan
December 14, 2020 19:50

:) I was at 1700-something or other, but now I'm back in the 1600's.....

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Mira Caplan
December 14, 2020 18:42

You have more submissions than me, and have been on for half the time................................je suis impressed

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December 14, 2020 18:43

Awwww, I have been on Reedsy in general for a pretty long time, but thanks so much!!!

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Mira Caplan
December 14, 2020 18:44

Litlover, you've been on for TWO MONTHS

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Mira Caplan
December 14, 2020 18:44

Writing, anyway. I've been on since May.........................................................

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December 14, 2020 18:45

Lol!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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Mira Caplan
December 14, 2020 18:45

Siiiiiiiiiiiiiigh

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I have not talked to u for a longggg time!
New story soooooooon
Ahaha!

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December 14, 2020 16:57

YAY!!!!!!! I missed talking in all caps with you

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WELL NOW AHAHaaHahHahahahHahhahahahaAaaAAA
(Me too, Luke)

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December 14, 2020 17:06

HAHHAHHHAA I CHANGEd MY PROFILE PIC!!!

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December 14, 2020 17:10

IT'S FROM ONE OF MY FAVE BOOKS ATLAS SHRUGGED

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Sahara Carter
December 13, 2020 01:54

I love the concept at the end of solace in knowledge! Perfect for the mood of 2020

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December 13, 2020 13:17

Thanks so much!!

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Beth Connor
December 22, 2020 00:09

Really unique format- I liked how the writing progressed from being logical to more emotional as the story progressed.

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December 22, 2020 12:48

Thanks so much!!

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Michele Duess
December 19, 2020 23:04

Good story. The only comment i have and perhaps it's nitpicking is the mathematical equation for stress. I spent too much time trying to figure out if it made sense. I might just have Atlas say A- parent and have C to indicate child. If that’s what you're trying to say that children equal stress....

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December 19, 2020 23:30

Yeah, that was kind of rushed. Next time I try this, I will keep that in mind.

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Michele Duess
December 20, 2020 03:53

To be fair I used to never pay attention to math until my son started studying statistics. Now thanks to his explanations I do lol.

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Michele Duess
December 20, 2020 03:53

To be fair I used to never pay attention to math until my son started studying statistics. Now thanks to his explanations I do lol.

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December 20, 2020 13:36

:D Thanks!!

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✰ Jennie ✰
December 15, 2020 22:40

how'd it go from 315 to 3161? (just curious... may be a typo :) )

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December 15, 2020 23:15

It was 3151 to 3161 the 3 is the city the 1 is the algorithm they report to the 6 is the number algorithm made in that city and the one is for the collective.

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✰ Jennie ✰
December 15, 2020 23:39

Ok, cool, but I meant at the very beginning you write Algorithm Strain 315 and then at the end when the memory is erased it says Algorithm Strain 3151.

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December 15, 2020 23:41

I changed that right??

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✰ Jennie ✰
December 15, 2020 23:48

Now you changed it! Before i saw 315 lol and i was confuzzled about the gap.

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December 15, 2020 23:49

:D

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K. M. Carpenter
December 13, 2020 16:59

This was a brilliant take on the prompt! You showcased your character's development throughout flawlessly and your writing flowed beautifully. You are so talented! Please never stop writing!

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December 13, 2020 18:01

Thank you so much!!!

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December 12, 2020 17:31

Yay thanks!!

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Zoya Khan
October 08, 2021 16:39

Nice story

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Amany Sayed
January 15, 2021 15:18

Ahhh I was like going to cry at the end! I love the numbers, it's so creative. You're so creative! Ugh I just love it. I hope there's a part 3! 5 stories challenge huh? Sounds fun. Keep writing!

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January 15, 2021 15:19

ERMAGAWD THANKS YOU!!!

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Amany Sayed
January 15, 2021 15:20

YOU'RE VERY WELCOME!

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January 15, 2021 15:20

Ofc!! Just tell Radhika on her story.

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Andrew Earle
December 23, 2020 05:57

Really enjoyed this. Sort of story you wished was longer.

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December 23, 2020 12:44

Awwww Thanks so much!!!

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Story Time
December 21, 2020 19:51

I love the unconventional structure of this. It really helped create a unique pace for the story.

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December 21, 2020 20:39

Thanks so much!!

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Itay Frenkel
December 15, 2020 02:57

Hey, I have a guess for the emoji puzzle. Is it War and Peace by Tolstoy?

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December 15, 2020 12:47

Yeah!!

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