The Eternals Pt. 1

Fantasy Fiction

Written in response to: "Set your story at a convention for a hobby most people have never heard of." as part of Keeping Busy.

**Hey guys!! I will be officially detaching from Malefice and gifting it to Mira Caplan, as she has a ton of enthusiasm for ways to continue it. Please read all continuations she makes!! This story was just so out of the blue and I was like "How on earth did I come up with this" but I can't wait to keep writing it. John Dee is an actual historical figure, and the Old Testament was written in ancient Hebrew. Enjoy!


February 4th, 1954


A gold suit had appeared on my doorstep three days before. It was satin, which I hated with a vengeance, but I forced myself into the sleeves with a fair share of grunts and curses. The smooth fabric felt like oil on my skin. It was time. I forced my legs to walk out of the home and to the trolley stop, the sickly green that painted the doors reflecting across my vision.


There were fifteen other people wearing gold suits on the trolley, all of them as rigid and uncomfortable as I. When it screeched to a stop, I toppled to the floor, wincing as I wiped the grime off on my pants. The fifteen other passengers bumped into me as they hobbled off the trolley, and I stuck out my tongue behind their backs. Fall on your backs, you snobs.


I was a younger member, only 548 years in age, so I was the puppy they all wanted to kick. Well, only a decade more. The clubhouse had silver edges, with a Victorian arch looming over everyone's head. I hated that arch, the perfect wood and shimmering edges. It was too pretty, almost to the point of disgusting. The entrance, a door that had been hanging around for millennia, made no creaking sounds when I pushed it open. The whole place was timeless. There were already at least a hundred in the Great Hall, taking their seats in the Jury chairs of the Court. Mine was all the way to the left, where barely anyone could see me, but I was happy to have one at all.


"We are called here to commemorate the 100,000th anniversary of the Eternals." The Grand Eternal, the founder of the entire society, sat at the forefront of the room. His chair was adorned with gold silk and jewels from ancient Mesopotamia. I glued my eyes to his face, watched the sagging skin fold as he talked. That would be me one day. Otherwise, I'd burn this whole place to the ground. As Nixon had said to me, "You don't get what you want, you get nothing."


"We will be accepting treasures of days past for our refurbished Vaults, specifically those from medieval France. Also, we will discuss the matter of promotions and demotions." His voice made me want to sleep, the monotone echoing out of his shallow skull.


Members began to shuffle to their various jobs. At the moment, I had the meandering task of filing the ancient documents. Every day, I had to read through the works of thousands of kings, thousands of visionaries. When you live forever, you work forever. That was our motto. Thank goodness you didn't have to.


I took the hall nearest to my chair and made my way to the Archives. The walls of texts and scripts were my own barricade, keeping the bad out and, well, everyone else. On the right was the very first copy of the Old Testament, which I had just finished deciphering. It was hard enough to learn ancient Hebrew, let alone weed through the erosion. I loved holding each text I handled, loved the way it crinkled lightly in my hands. It gave me a warm feeling to know that, despite my long tenure of life, I could go even further.


"How's the Qu'ran going?" John Dee was standing in the doorway, twirling an Elizabethan necklace around his frail thumb. He was one of the oldest, but more importantly, he was one of my favorites.


"Eh, I sent it over to Mikey. I'm not an Arabic person," I said. John pulled up a chair and grabbed my notes on the Bible. They were rushed, granted, but he nodded his approval.


"Jakob, I think you've done great work." I didn't meet his eyes, but I imagined myself smiling. John Dee, the legendary alchemist and immortal, had just praised my work! What a day. I nodded, took a deep breath. There was a draft coming from the side of the room.


"Hey, John? I... well... I was wondering if... since you're pretty famous around here... if you could give me some props?" John's head whipped back at me. I was scared for a second, scared he would indict me. Then his eyes softened, like someone squeezing a pie.


"Well, sure. You know, you've done a great job, so sure." I breathed a sigh of relief the second he exited the room and hugged the Old Testament to my chest. It was a great day to be immortal. What was my next document?


As I flipped through the pages of parchment, I mentally reviewed which languages I could decipher. There was, well, Latin, Greek, Hebrew, Albanian, Cantonese, Sanskrit, Ottoman, Sumerian, Demotic Egyptian, Hieratic, Anglo-Saxon... what else? Oh, that's it! Maori. I picked up a piece of paper that had dropped to the floor, only slightly weathered. It couldn't be any older than 340.


I'd never seen it before. It wasn't even registered with the archives, it seemed. All documents that were to be transcribed had a sticker on them, they said. Well, why didn't this one?


I peered closer, narrowed my eyes as I tried to make out the words. It was Anglo-Saxon, I could see, but it had been written in my lifetime. The curls around the letters weren't faded yet, which made my work much easier. I immediately grabbed a notebook and began transcribing, even if it wasn't a sanctioned document.


My hands scribbling in a frenzy, trying to get the words down on the page. I don't know why I hurried, the words weren't going to die, but I still felt a sense of urgency. As I flew through the sentences, there were no pauses. I read and read and read until there was nothing left. Finally, once the beating of my heart had slowed and my eyes blinked for the first time in minutes, I took a deep breath. Shoving the document into my knapsack, I looked at what had appeared on my notebook.


Hell hath no fury for those whose clock does not run out. We have become all that is evil and cruel in the world. All shall fear us and all shall die before the power of the Eternals. Helheimr.


-John Dee

Posted Jan 25, 2021
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Nainika Gupta
January 27, 2021 15:37

New Story!
also....you've done that emoji before right??
war and peace??!!!!
XD

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January 27, 2021 15:39

You already got this but I'm lazyyyyy

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Nainika Gupta
January 27, 2021 15:39

ahaha that's what I thought :D:D
and lukeeeeeee you can't leave people HANGING!!!

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January 27, 2021 15:40

Fiiiiiiiiiiiiine

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Nainika Gupta
January 27, 2021 15:41

<3<3
ooh ok
uhm zombie shocked man
classic or non classic?

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January 27, 2021 15:42

I'm not telling you that, because you'll guess it immediately. Hint, I started reading it last night and I CANNOT PUT IT DOWN. SHE IS SUCH A GOOD AUTHOR UGH I READ THE WORD PAROXYSM AND I WAS LIKE YAS.

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Zilla Babbitt
January 27, 2021 02:59

Sword, medal, dove... is that the dove from WWII or WWI, Cherie, who saved a battalion?

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January 27, 2021 12:44

XD Nope its a russian classic that you probably didn't care to read all the way through. Two peeps have got it already, so I might change it soon.

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Liling Wei
January 30, 2021 06:56

Love the story, Luke! Sorry I didn't have time to look at this before. I thought this was a little slow but made up for it in its extremely engaging intrigue. The last line left my brain working and I can't wait to read the next one!
-lily

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January 30, 2021 14:56

Thanks you!!! So kindddddd

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Liling Wei
January 30, 2021 20:31

:)

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Liling Wei
January 30, 2021 20:33

Okay, humor me...have you read my story "Common Smuggling?" I don't remember. Well anyway, because of the prompts this week I'm thinking to give my, uhh, character both a brother and a father. I was wondering if maybe I could use you as the brother? Don't feel pressured to say yes! I don't know if I'll be making this story but I might and I need to know ahead of time. Don't say yes because you feel pressured to, if you don't want to, umm, play the brother, I already have a contingency plan. :D

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January 30, 2021 21:01

I just did, and I loved it!!! Of course, you could definitely use me as the brother!!

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Liling Wei
January 30, 2021 21:21

Thank you, Luke!! So, if it's alright, I'm going to put you as twenty-years-old and, apologies in advance, could you fill out the questions(statements?) below? If you don't want to choose one, you can just tell me and I'll choose randomly. :D

Reminder, apologies in advance, I wrote A LOT of stuff:
Hair(anything from just a vague description to every detail is fine):

Eyes(anything from just a vague description to every detail is fine):

Clothing preferences(anything from color preferences to exact outfits is fine):

Personality:

Fav Color(if you want multiple, please choose up to two):

Choose a power:
Power: Elemental - Weakness: restrictions based on area(ex. Water is hard in a desert)
Power: Mental(telekinesis, mind reading, psychic stuff, etc, etc) - Weakness: will always tell the truth. But can, of course, ignore questions altogether.
Power: Shapeshifter - Weakness: at the beginning, the shapeshifter will need to study and memorize the animal they wish to shift into. Note they can simply shift their appearance, not just turn into animals. The more they shift into that animal, the easier it will be and the less time and knowledge of that animal they will need. Also whenever transforming, they will have one part of their body that will always stay the same. (ex, blue eyes or brown hair or a birthmark, you can choose what part of your body. Megan has her teal hair tips and stormy eyes)
Power: Magic - Weakness: needs to study and memorize all spells exactly. Wand.
I...am so sorry. This is a lot of writing for something so small.

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January 30, 2021 21:51

Hair: wavy short brown hair
Eyes: Silver with flecks of gold
Clothing: multiple torso layers with jeans and good sturdy shoes I can go on adventures with
Personality: Zesty and intelligent, adaptable
Fav color: silver and gold
Power: MENTAL

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Claudia Morgan
January 28, 2021 10:19

is your emoji thing scared back to life?

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January 28, 2021 12:45

Nope, its a classic :)

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Claudia Morgan
January 28, 2021 14:17

ohk

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Amany Sayed
January 28, 2021 03:46

I loved the story! The character's voice was so distinct. As a Muslim, I'm really glad you spelled Quran with a Q and not a K like most people do. (You can bet I would've gone off on you had you not) The amount you know about history is pretty cool! Keep writing, and I can't wait for part 2!

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January 28, 2021 12:45

Thanks you!!! YESH I'M NOT MUSLIM BUT I JUST HAAAAAAAAAAAAAATE THE SPELLING KORAN!!! UGH!!! Awwww thank you, Amany!!!

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Amany Sayed
January 28, 2021 12:48

Any time! Yes, I can assure you it's veeeeeeeery wrong.
No prob 🤗

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January 28, 2021 12:49

XD

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January 28, 2021 12:45

OMG YAY

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Felicity Anne
January 28, 2021 02:31

Heyyyy Luke!!! I just posted a new story!! It's dedicated to you. <3

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January 28, 2021 12:49

YOU DID?????

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Felicity Anne
January 28, 2021 14:27

:)

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January 28, 2021 15:04

NEW STORY

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Felicity Anne
January 28, 2021 15:13

Yass I'll read it soooon!!! :DDD

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January 28, 2021 01:24

Hellllooooooooo :)) I posted a new storyyyy, you totally dont have to check it out if you dont want to (also, totally unrelated, do you watch twoset violin?)

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January 28, 2021 12:51

Of course I will!!! (YAS I HAVE BEEN FOLLOWING THEM SINCE 2017 THEY ARE AMAZING)

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January 28, 2021 12:53

WHATTTT?? WILL YOU BE WATCHING SIMP SIBELIUS??

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January 28, 2021 12:53

YAS I ALREADY DIDDDDDDDDDDD

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January 28, 2021 12:56

OHHHHH, TIME ZONES????

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January 28, 2021 12:57

YEPPPPPPPPPPP

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January 27, 2021 17:32

I've actually read a story with John dee in it (Alchemist series)... I think yours is pretty similar, except that he's not an immortal magician who summons evil golems... Funny that this story takes place one day before my birthday (except... not 1954). Seems interesting!

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January 27, 2021 17:43

I know!! I did read that series, and I thought of him.

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January 27, 2021 17:52

My sister loved him; honestly, that series never gets any attention, but it's so good

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January 27, 2021 17:53

I knowwww I only read the first but I was like WOW

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January 27, 2021 16:56

hi luke!
BACK WITH GUESSING THE EMOJI PUZZLE lol
congrats on 30 stories! :D
is the puzzle the walking dead?

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January 27, 2021 16:57

XD NOPE ITS NOT THE WALKING DEAD I DON'T THINK THAT'S A BOOk... AW THANKS!!

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January 27, 2021 16:58

oop okay its probably a movie
the zombie autopsies?

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January 27, 2021 17:00

Nope its a boooooooooook but it has some very inaccurate movies based on it

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January 27, 2021 17:03

very inaccurate
hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm
world war z?

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January 27, 2021 17:04

Nopeeeeeeee

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Erza Scarlet
January 27, 2021 15:08

I read the entire thing-
I really didnt get anything but that may be my in class listening to my teacher while reading this-
;-; but ok

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January 27, 2021 15:10

You didn't understand?

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Erza Scarlet
January 28, 2021 13:38

Eh not really-
I’m not into Russian stuff or something

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January 28, 2021 13:38

That’s okay!! Thanks for reading tho :)

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Phebe Emmanuel
January 26, 2021 05:52

Luke!!!!! Oh LUKE!!!!!! ANYBODY HOME!!!

New Story AHHHHHHHH it's been too long...

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January 26, 2021 12:44

OMG YASSSSS IT TOTALLY HAS!!!!

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Phebe Emmanuel
January 26, 2021 16:28

FEEL THE POWER!!!!!!

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January 26, 2021 16:31

XDDDDDDDDDDDD!!!!

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Maya W.
January 26, 2021 03:31

Hi Luke. As you probably know, I love mythology related stories (in fact, I've written 14 here and am in the process of publishing them in the form of a novella short story cycle, along with 5 more), so naturally, I really enjoyed this story. It reminded me of a book I read years ago that I'm blanking on the name of. All in all, this was really well written and nicely paced - I look forward to the rest in the series.

By the way, I saw you like my most recent story. Would you mind commenting? I'd really like suggestions on how to improve!

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January 26, 2021 12:48

Thanks you!!! Yes, I am aware of your mythology craze :) That's very kind!! Of course I'll comment!!

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January 26, 2021 00:06

First of all, how do you keep coming up with these stories? they're amazing!

Secondly, you've written it sooo well, the detail's great, and the satin.....I felt it.. It's eww, I had goosebumps all over me. You know that feeling when you rub silk with silk, or scratching your fork against your plate? That's the feeling I had from the satin part...

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January 26, 2021 00:14

THANKS YOUUUUUUUU!!!! I really haven't worn any satin, but yeah I get youuuuuuuuuuu I get that feeling when I scratch the skin of a peach lightly with my fingernail.

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January 26, 2021 00:17

I haven't scratched a peach before but yeah, it's goosebump-y

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January 26, 2021 00:17

I knowwwww even thinking about it makes me get goosebumps

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January 26, 2021 00:18

Ikrrr ewwwwwww

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January 26, 2021 00:19

I meant the writing is good, the silk scratching thing.. It's eww

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Wow Luke, I love the way your stories just keep on improving...are you like a
writer-magician or something?

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January 25, 2021 22:44

XDDDDD I wishhhhhhh thank you so much, Haripriya!!!

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Haha, lol. XP
Your welcome! :)

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January 25, 2021 23:57

XP

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War and peace is your puzzle, ammi right?

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January 25, 2021 19:50

Yep!! How'd you like the story?

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January 26, 2021 16:31

Thankoo!! I don't like any of the other prompts, so that suckssss

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January 26, 2021 19:04

:)

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Mira Caplan
January 25, 2021 17:37

You. Are. Writer.
You. Will. Be. Famous. Writer.
You. Are. Famous. Writer.

AND I AM NOW THE AUTHOR OF MALEFICE!!!!

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January 25, 2021 17:58

XDDDDDDDDDDDDD DANKE AND YES SAME WITH YOU AND YES YOU ARE MALEFICE WRITERRRRRR

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Maya -
January 25, 2021 17:34

Awesome story!!! The descriptions of the trolley, the Great Hall, and the society were really creative. The way your main character wanted to lead the society and had a hidden desire for power added a lot of drama and suspense. Great job, Luke! I'm looking forward to future parts! :D
PS- You didn't tell me you posted. :/

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January 25, 2021 17:59

Thanks youuuuuu Maya!!! Omg I didn't tell you I'm so sorryryyyyyryryryry can you help me out and tell some other peeps because I can only click so many times XXD?

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Maya -
January 25, 2021 18:01

I'll put a link in my bio. XDDD

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January 25, 2021 18:01

XDDDDDDD Thanks youuuuuuu

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Maya -
January 25, 2021 18:02

No problem! XDDDDDD

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January 25, 2021 18:02

:DDDDDDDDDDDDDD

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January 25, 2021 17:07

Nice Story. Also, I don't know where to put this but I think the 3 emojis mean the Hunger Games. The bird made me think of a Mockingjay and the sword, fighting.

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January 25, 2021 17:08

Thank you!! Yeah, you can put your guesses anywhere, but no, it is a Russian classic.

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January 25, 2021 17:09

Oh, ok. :P

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January 25, 2021 17:09

:D :P

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Ari Berri
January 25, 2021 17:03

Awesome story!

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January 25, 2021 17:03

Thanks, dude!!

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Ari Berri
January 25, 2021 17:04

No problem.

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January 25, 2021 17:05

:D

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Liling Wei
February 03, 2021 21:51

Hey, Luke, I did your quizzes last night!
*mumbles: when I was supposed to be writing*
Pretty sure some of my answers were rather indecisive so sorry!😁

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Maya -
January 27, 2021 23:32

Hey Luke, do you want to join the new Reedsy group the Skribbls? More info is on my new story/ message. :D

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January 28, 2021 00:11

I'd love to when I can, Maya!! :D

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Maya -
January 28, 2021 00:35

Yayyyyyyyyyyyyy!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
All you have to do is put ♥♥♥ ᏕᏦᏒᎥᏰᏰᏝᏕ ᎦᎧᏒᏋᏉᏋᏒ ♥♥♥ in your bio or comment that you joined in our meeting place story. :DDDD
Yay I'm so happy!

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January 28, 2021 00:36

I WILLL!!!!

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Maya -
January 28, 2021 00:37

Yay I'm so happy you're joining!!! :DDDDDDDDDDDD

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January 27, 2021 02:44

I have absolutely no idea about the emojis in your name lol, but imma guess anyways: War and Peace?

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January 27, 2021 12:44

YERP

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January 27, 2021 13:39

Yayyyyyy!!!!! V I C T O R Y lol

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January 27, 2021 14:01

XD I think that's your first time guessing it right!! Lollll

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January 27, 2021 17:10

Yup lol, although I think I’ve only guessed once or twice XD Oki, I have a guess for your new name...Frankenstein?

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January 27, 2021 17:11

Yerp!!!!!

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January 27, 2021 12:45

OME YAY

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Maya -
January 26, 2021 23:19

Hey, Luke, would you rather be a vampire or werewolf? I'm trying to see which more people would want to be. XD

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January 26, 2021 23:39

Vampireeeee

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Maya -
January 26, 2021 23:41

Really?? You would drink blood?

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January 26, 2021 23:42

Yeah!! It tastes like metal, and I bet werewolves would have to taste it all the same when they hunted, perhaps even more, because Vampires don't need the meat. Also, immortality and eternal beauty....

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Maya -
January 26, 2021 23:44

Okay...
:D

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January 26, 2021 23:44

:D ALSO FELICITY'S BACK

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