trigger warning! Violence and gore.
I squirted the small amount of honey directly into the steeping tea, stirring it slowly. I enjoyed a calming tea in the morning. Before it could even finish steeping, I heard a loud crash, the sound of a window breaking, I turned around, grabbing my sharpest and biggest kitchen knife.
"Hey, whoevers out there, I have a knife, and I practice killing, for a living." I spoke with the calmest, and coldest tone I could muster. I heard shuffling immediately, "I'm gonna come out there, and slit your throat if you don't leave, now." I said, trying to sound threatening.
But I kept hearing shuffling. So I walked forward, ready to kill whoever was there, "Ready or not, here I come." I made sure to chuckle, to add to the absence of fear, on my part. When I turned the corner, I saw a man twice my size, big and burly, looking angry, and looking at me.
I smiled, "Hi there!" I said, cutting my fear out of my expressions, and brandishing my knife. The man noticed the eery calmness that I had, at least I think thats what happened, because he took a step back, "Oh, are you gonna run away?" I chuckled again, this time because I felt like it. Adrenaline coursed through my veins, and this felt like the perfect opportunity to let out some anger.
He took another step back, sweat beading on his forehead, "Oh no. You don't get to leave now." I could feel myself smiling. I could barely contain myself now, "The fun hasn't even begun!" I saw him look at the broken window, so I walked in front of it, trapping him.
"Oh don't look so afraid, it won't hurt. That badly," I grinned, knowing I was toying with him, and enjoying it I held my knife in front of me, pointed to his neck, "Now, there's two ways this can go. You can tell me why you're here, or I can slit your throat right here, and now."
His expression lost some of the fear, and was replaced with anger and determination. He immediately swung his fist at my head, I reacted quickly by stabbing his forearm with the sharp as hell knife, "Guess we're going with option two." I said, raising my voice, still grinning, as he clutched my wrist, "I'll be quick, I still have a tea to prepare, and I won't let the likes of you take that from me."
I felt my grin fade for a moment, anger filling me, adrenaline, giving me the rush I needed to punish him. I yanked the knife out of his arm and kicked him in the stomach, making sure to lead with my heel, to punish him, to make him double over. As he bent over, I slammed my knee into his face, crushing his nose into his face, making him scream, and stand back up, looking dazed, as if blinded.
I didn't want to kill him yet, because I wanted this to last, but I did have a tea to finish, and I could only let it steep for a minute and a half longer. I smiled, deciding to incapacitate him momentarily, take the tea bag out, let it cool while I make him suffer even more.
I switched the hands that was holding the knife, holding it in my left, so I could punch him with my right hand, in the jaw as hard as I could. He stumbled for a moment before lunging at me, I flinched, and quickly stabbed his left hand, through the palm.
He screamed, and reeled back, his face filled with fear once more, "What? Did you think you would steal from a random persons house and get away with it? I told you! I practice killing, for a living! I wasn't bluffing!" He turned to run out, grabbing the locked door, I darted at him, slamming the bottom of the knife onto his head, making him turn around and slam me into the wall, using his strength to fight back.
I still had a knife, and technique. So I plunged the knife into his shoulder, now with 3 deep gashes, all bleeding profusely, he jumped back, grabbing the knife by the blade as he did, disarming me swiftly. I quickly understood he was at the point in a humans determination to survive, pain became a distraction, and he stopped paying attention. Adrenaline coursing through his veins, and knowing i was the danger.
I knew he was at a scarier point of view than me, more dangerous now. but due to that knowledge, I knew I could still use that to my advantage, somehow. He charged at me, with a roar. holding my knife up high. I felt fear, for the first time in this encounter. I grabbed a lamp and slammed it against his head as hard as I could, but he had already commited to stabbing me, and he got me right in the left shoulder. severing tendons, making it so I couldnt lift it to my side. But I could still pull it up in front of me.
I grabbed his shoulder wound, and grabbed the tendons, ripping them, out, making him feel pain worse than anything yet, while also grabbing the knife. He screamed, and slammed his fist into my head, making me fly into my couch. I laughed, a nervous laugh but still a laugh. The man looked at me, fear filling his face once more, "What the fuck are you?!" He yelled out at me.
I stood up, "I'm your worst nightmare." I said, blood filling my mouth, but I grinned nonetheless, the blood dripping down from my mouth, "What the fuck!" He cried out, in fear, and terror.
I held up the knife again, "I think it's time I slit your fucking throat." I chuckled, "3." His eyes widened, shaking his head, "2." He tried to open the door again, forgetting it was still locked. I darted forward, "1!" I yelled out, as I reached him, plunging the knife into his neck, and yanking it out, blood immediately spraying out from the wound. He swung his fist at me, before getting dizzy, and almost falling. He swung again, I just kept backing away, watching this man quickly suffocate.
I shook my head, "Told you to get out while you still could." I looked down at my clothes, dirtied by his, and my blood. I remembered my tea, and sprinted to it, having gone over the time by 10 seconds. I yanked the teabag out and stirred. I looked back at the man, who had fallen, and was now almost still, "and think, the last sense that the brain loses, is sound. So you will get to hear me sipping on my tea as I watch your body go cold.
Quickly after saying that, the adrenaline began to fade, my mania disappearing. I looked at the body, realizing what I had done. I sipped my tea, knowing it would calm me.
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Hi friend, I apologies for the delay in reading a story for you. You may remember me as the author who wrote, "Monster with Two Faces." It's been awhile, and I've stepped away from Reedsy to reevaluate my goals in regard to my own writing and to work on my physical and mental health.
Let me tell you what I think:
"Hey, whoevers out there, I have a knife, and I practice killing, for a living." I spoke with the calmest, and coldest tone I could muster.
_ here we have a protagonist who feels threatened and meets that threat with the answer of becoming something even more threatening than his real or imagined enemy. Some might be shocked by the intensity of the protagonist but I actually enjoy horror, specifically psychological horror. Some people read bed times stories, but I like to read about psychopaths and sociopaths and the break down of human psychology and behavior. The protagonist reads a little like someone on the anti-social spectrum.
To make this story stronger and more compelling, I would consider the art of showing and not telling. You tell "I practice killing for a living." Instead, show: Open on a scene of what he does for a living. Is he a hitman, taxidermist, etc? Open up on what he does and show how unaffected he is by the taking of a life. This would then later build suspense in the story when someone suspiciously breaks in. Us, the audience -- already know now after the opening scene that our protagonist has the potential to be a cold and calculated killer. Food for thought. It really is so hard to squeeze a bunch into these short stories and it takes practice to become concise and to make every sentence count.
The truth is -- when you are an author. You are actually playing cat and mouse with the audience. As a reader, I love looking for clues and figuring out what is going on. Why did this character do that, etc. Also consider what your favorite stories are and why. They don't necessarily have to come from books. It can be a movie, a manga, an anime. Etc. Study what those storytellers do and build on your own storytelling. There are tons of resources online like youtube or etc if you have that where you are that can teach you skills in your preferred genre to write. It's also a good idea to surround yourself with not any kind of author/writer circle. If you publish stories around romance readers - they might get the ick and your work gets no engagement. This could leave you feeling like something is wrong when really there is a reader for ever writer. However if you leave that room, and enter a room where people enjoy intense stories, dark stories, gore, etc. All of a sudden you have people who have a love for that medium and can appreciate it properly. I want horror critiques from a horror enjoyer. I don't necessarily want horror critiques from a person who only enjoys lighthearted comedies and can't stomach blood. Discord, reddit, online forums, facebook, etc. There are several online communities for each genre where you can find likeminded writers and readers who enjoy the same types of stories and maybe even make some friends along the way.
I for one am a huge anime nerd, manga reader, etc. No one does horror or psychological horror in my opinion quite like Japan. So I read a lot of horror and will definitely be writing more horror/dark intense stories in the future at some point. The reason I like to write these kind of stories is because writing for me is a way to work through my own PTSD and Trauma. Coincidentally, manga anime have also really encouraged me through some of my darkest moments. I had a very dark childhood and I love writing about characters overcoming trauma and finding a purpose for themselves. This is my light I want to shed on the people around me before I die. So maybe someone with similar trauma might see themselves in one of my characters and realize they, too, have had the strength inside themselves to overcome their hardships all along. We all have that power -- the power to breath life into those around us. To make others feel seen, understood, and heard. To cheer them on, to offer guidance, and strength. So that no one is left in the dark all by themselves. I found that if I am in a dark place where there is no light shed for me, I must become a light myself. I hope that in this way it is reflected in what I write, in what I do, and what I say. The truth is, we all have hardships and battles we must fight. But its my belief that everything happens for a reason, and none of us are faced with circumstances we can't rise above. This is coming from a person who sorry for the TMI but was sexually abused, physically abused, and mentally abused. My biological father was abusive, my biological mother was mentally ill, i was separated from them and placed with my grandparents at the age of 10 and they both passed from cancer when I was sixteen and I was left without a home. "Monster with Two Faces," was rooted in my lived experience. It took years for me to find my footing, a path forward, to look at depression and say "not today." To fight to become someone strong who loved herself and began living everyday with intention, passion, and to the fullest.
I wish that for you friend. Remember that writing can and should be fun, it can be healing, and a creative outlet. Ask yourself your why for writing and make your characters real. Give them their own goals, motivations, and reasons for existence. They are in your story, and all stories are written to serve a purpose. So when you finish your story, what purpose did it serve?
And remember that no matter what, in real life -- your past does not define you. You define your past, and from there you decide your future.
Best, Danie
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Hey, how are things going? You've actually been on mind quite a bit lately, and... I wanted to check in :)
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hey I'm actually doing quite well!
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I'm so glad to hear it!!
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Been praying for you, hope you're doing well
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