An Eidolon Named Night

Fantasy Fiction

Written in response to: "Start your story with the line, “That’s the thing about this city…”" as part of City Living.

** This story has lines from Edgar Allan Poe's poem Dream-Land, my favorite poem, and you can see by now that EAP is one of my favorite authors as this is the second story that has a poem of his in it. I hope you enjoy it in all of its oddness.**


By a route obscure and lonely

Haunted by ill angels only

Where an Eidolon named Night

On a black throne reigns upright


“Tha’s the thing about this village,” Old Nula intoned, “darkness is evil.” She had her stand near packed up by then. Lime and ice had tinged the road lime like the color of her rags, so she could wander without danger. She mumbled to herself whenever a newcomer came to town, in her old batty way. No one paid her any mind.


A man had arrived. Nula could tell the ilk of people when they prowled through the gates. An unmistakable bird call would sound each time; sparrow for lady, raven for man. As soon as the birds called, Nula listened. It wouldn’t do to forsake nature’s wisdom, she’d decided long ago. There had been a flock of ravens earlier in the wee hours and sure enough, he was a he.


Nula didn’t exist to the other villagers. They went about their own lives, wrapped in the shadowy shrouds of disillusion and blind to the actions of people who were free. Nula was one such person. Nature, to her, left her signs, clues, things that one could only find if they were unbound from self-absorption. That morning, though, when the newcomer came, his eyes weren’t glossed in uncaring. They weren’t blind, no, they were open.


He had walked right up to her, letting his breath fall unequivocally onto the frosted grass. Yet Old Nula was in a fright, thinking that the man was a ghost. He had been sent to take her away, she thought, to do evil and forsake Nature. She shivered in fright and reached for a stake. 


“Hush, woman, I mean you no harm.” Her grip on the stake faltered for only a moment, but she stood strong. 


“Eh? Why you here then? Answer me!” Nula grew stronger and stronger in her conviction that the stake she held would save her from everything and nothing could threaten her. With a breath of pride, she inched closer with it raised. 


“Why do you think I’m here?” He spoke in a rich accent. “I seek help.” Nula’s raggedy eyelids shot up. They’d been scarred by the threshes and thrashes of branches whenever she left town, marred by the rocks that adorned the mountains she’d once climbed… but that was too long ago. Now she was a feeble old lady, and the only activity her eyelids could manage was a dramatic leap.


“You… I’ve heard stories ‘bout yer kind. They don’t speak kindly of ye.” she said. Slowly and carefully, she brought the stake to a nice waist level. 


“Ah, well, those are rumors. Surely you’d know the difference by now, Nulina.” He was cool and crisp, responding in a serene manner.


“How do ye know me name?” 


“Oh, ‘my kind’ knows many things.” Seeing that Nula was pondering, the man stepped closer. He was careful not to push it, so as to drive her to fight him. In the days of yore, as he remembered, she’d been a fierce warrior. Such a pity that she should peddle in a dank village rather than living the days past. 


“We want no evil here! Leave, night-thrall.” Nula raised her stake as she yelled, being careful so as not to bring attention. The few pedestrians paid the pair no mind; countless times the old hag had felt deep sorrow at their ignorance… but she would take no chances. Her town was peaceful, and she liked it just as it was. 


“No, no! I mean no harm!” For the first time since the beginning of the brief conversation, the man was panicked. His eyes were stricken in a red web and his face contorted like a braid. The world around them seemed to slow as Nula fixed her gaze on him. The trees ceased their rustling and began to shiver noiselessly. 


“Begone.” With the anger of an angry grandmother, she stepped forward to thrust the spear. The man was gone.


**

For the heart whose woes are legion

‘Tis a peaceful, soothing region

For the spirit that walks in shadow

‘Tis– oh, ‘tis an Eldorado!


Morgan Fay drifted silently through the night. He was tired from talking with the old warrior, drained from his journeys. Long ago, he had been out on a night not so different. It had been cold as it was in the town, with shivering trees and angry wind. It had been deep in the impenetrable expanses of the forest, where the mysteries of nature were concealed between cracks in the roots. There was nothing more invigorating than feeling your soul blend with that of the earth, the trees, the land… but at night? The world was awash in pain, anguish, despair. The night was a poison, a sickness. 


He had an empty cup of ale when he stumbled into the forest, drops hanging like dew on his shaven beard. There was a faint uproar from the bar he had ran from but he was deaf to all noises. Morgan kept drifting farther out of consciousness and into the grip of intoxication. 


La-uera sendirian… A cold voice seemed to ooze from the sky itself and crumble to the ground in wisps. There was a song, soft but ominous. The lyrics were sharp and edged, uttered in a foreign tongue… Morgan… the song was beginning to surround the desperate man as he stumbled back and forth… 


Morgan… Do you wish to be free? All of the dark clouds that had shrouded his mind in a clump had been pierced by the voice. So alert was he that the moon seemed brighter than the sun had ever been in all of his years.


In Morgan’s intoxication, as is customary, he made poor decisions. First, to wander into the night alone. Second, to leave the expanse of the nearby town. Third, to accept the offer that the mysterious voice offered. As soon as his head nodded, the voice thickened, the sounds lengthened, the world stretched. 


Good, good. The voice was laughing. When Morgan awoke, he had chains of darkness around his wrist. 


Nula's village was his last hope, the only place he might find the knife that could free him. Of course, she wasn't likely to give it to him... he would have to get it himself.


After the sun had set and all of the wandering people had gone to bed, Morgan hoisted himself from the shadows. Darkness was like a heavy mist that sunk down and down in waves and was somehow discernible. Le Fay Street, Gawain Street, Genevieve Street... they were all quiet, the empty veins of the cadaver that was the town.


Nula's shop was right ahead, where there was a small flickering candle that always remained to ward off the poisonous dark from her wares. Morgan had gained much knowledge through the darkness, such terrible things that he'd rather not know intermingled with things of such interest that he giggled at them. The frail old lady was not one to idly disobey.


Morgan snuck his dark fingers under the flap and climbed in. There, snoring, was Old Nula. Drool slipped and curved from her lips to her collarbone. His heart pounded in his chest as he walked past her, almost starting at her loud snores. On the floor, there were many objects, various things of interest.


Ah, the Club of Brabantio, the lava hilt still glowing.


The poison whip of Claudius, lime as ever.


A couple of deadly smoke bombs.


Some old tarot cards.


An evil eye charm.


There wasn't anything there that didn't pull his fancy, but he forced himself away. You're here for one thing, he thought, don't get distracted.


The knife was nowhere in sight, not on the ground or the shelves. Every nook and cranny, every single hole and crack Morgan checked while staring at the snoring woman, but to no avail. Had she sold it? Surely not, she wouldn't try to burden anyone... Morgan doubted she sold anything in this town or made even a measly profit.


Then he saw it, when his hopes had just begun to sink like a ring into the ocean, ever deeper into despair. Beneath a book in the rightmost corner was a case. He cared not for the old lady now and pushed it aside. With a gleam, the knife Nocturne was revealed.


"Ha! I shall be free!" Morgan was giddy with excitement. His joy clapped against the silence of the night until the whoops echoed through the distance. As he was about to raise it to his arms, Old Nula pushed herself up to her feet. Ah, just another day, nothing special, she thought. Then she saw the man with the knife in his hand and yelled.


"Yeh'll kill us all! No!" But it was too late. In an explosion of darkness, Morgan's face contorted. There was no turning back, for all future decisions would cascade from the decision made long ago, the drunken one, which caged him and left him trapped. All through the night, a grim voice rang out. Oh, the foolish traveller, oh, the foolish man... now you'll lay beside him in a grim and undead land.


**

But the traveller, travelling through it

May not– dare not openly view it

Never its mysteries are exposed

To the weak human eye unclosed

Posted Mar 16, 2021
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Amany Sayed
March 17, 2021 12:44

This was sooo gooood! You have such a way with words! Can I ask something, do you write poetry? You'd be good at it if you haven't already. Your descriptions and metaphors and similes are just so...juicy for lack of a better word! I sort of disagree, this kind of did have a plot. I've written my fair share of plotless stories and this isn't one of them. Anyway, this was awesome. Keep writing!

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March 17, 2021 12:46

Thank you Amany!!! Well, I do read a lot of poetry like Edgar Allan Poe, which is in this one, and some Coleridge, and I did try my hand at a little bit. I'll certainly try some more if you think I'd be good at it!! Thank youuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu!!! Ah, well, that's because I added much more. The previous one ended after he was imprisoned by the darkness.

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Amany Sayed
March 17, 2021 12:49

You're welcome! I totally do! You crowned me the queen of poetry once, didn't you? Consider it a special request from the queen herself ;) You're so welcomeee! Oh, that makes sense!

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March 17, 2021 12:49

Ha lol I didddddddd because you are poetry KWEEN. :))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))

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March 17, 2021 12:09

DO YOU GUYS GET MY EASTER EGG REFS??????

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March 16, 2021 20:15

This kind of reminds me of "existential crises", ngl. With the two stories in one that are very different, yet connected.
Annnnnd since I loved "existential crises", it's natural that I loved this one, too. You have a way with words. I couldn't tear my eyes off the screen until I read the entire story. It had me hooked. I like that you used EAP's poems. (And before you ask, yes, I did read some of them.)
The Minor Errors Police didn't have to stop by your house 👏🏾
Great job :)))

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March 16, 2021 20:17

Heehee I didn't see much of a connection, but I'm glad that you saw what I didn't!!!!!! That be so sweeeeeeeeet!!! EAP IS AMAZING!! Lol the Minor Errors Police, Captain Skybelle.

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March 16, 2021 20:28

I mean, the connection wasn't much of a "connection" besides the fact that it showed that darkness is evil lol
Yesssss (I literally just found out one of his poems is called "Annabel Lee" XD)
Yep, that's me. Ready to bust down your doors or clap for you at any given moment.

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March 16, 2021 21:54

Oh yeah lolllllllllll YOU DON'T KNOW ANNABEL LEE????? WHAT ABOUT THE RAVEN????? ONCE UPON A MIDNIGHT DREARY...

XPPPPPPP I PROCLAIM YOU COMMISSIONER OF THE MINOR ERRORS POLICE.

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March 16, 2021 22:17

I've read The Raven and Alone. That's it lol. I was honestly surprised I didn't know about Annabel Lee sooner XD

I will gladly accept that honor. https://www.memesmonkey.com/images/memesmonkey/51/5120ed801b40eecda281df243d769141.jpeg

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March 16, 2021 22:23

Heeheeheeheeheehee well he's one of my all-time faves. XD COMMISSIONER SKYBELLE.

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Sia S
March 22, 2021 10:06

Prophecies?
Worldbuilding?

yesssss i need em for bombbbut not the cliche type eitherrrrr ughhhhhh plej?

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March 22, 2021 11:56

Okkkkkkkkkkkkk!!!!!! So bomb is sci-fi tho, right, so shouldn't there be another color that can see the future if there's going to be a prophecy?? Also, give me a run-down of stuff that you want mentioned in the proph.

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Sia S
March 22, 2021 12:23

Yeshhhhh yes, well, um, I'm actually going to convert it too sci-fi fantasy at the middle of the plot arc, sooo yeah...

Mmm hmmm, maybe something like diff parts of the prophecy refer to Renna, Zaina, Sadira, and the others? What do you think?

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March 22, 2021 12:44

Ok!! Well, for the plot I would need some quick insight into what your plans for the plot is... heehee... like what the end is going to be or what the quest will be.

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Sia S
March 22, 2021 14:10

Ehehe

Well, I haven't exactly planned the quest part yet, but I know that they're main goal will be hide from the govt, help other teens get out, a secret (which I cannot sayy) and remain hidden with humans.

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March 22, 2021 14:18

Ah, I don't know if that's enough to go on but I'll try:

In the darkest shade of tire
Young unique femmes will conspire
To bring the end of the land of fire
and a beginning in the new dawn

Alphabet shall mark them pure
As they uncover the forgotten lore
Break out of their shells, demur
And shake the world like never before

The souls of evil will hear their cries
ambitions in the night
And strive to corrupt them with lies
But they shall see the light

The light will shine through them all
Their gifts will weather the fall

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Maya W.
March 21, 2021 21:39

Hi Luke! Ooh, I love Dream-Land. One of Poe's best. Honestly, I think this would be great if it was longer and expanded on the characters more, but it's already pretty amazing. Nice work.

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March 21, 2021 23:04

Yeshhhh I love that poem so muchhhhhh and I love poetry infused stories... aw thanks Maya!!! You too kind :)

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Maya W.
March 21, 2021 23:55

Of course. :)

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March 22, 2021 11:58

Please post more lol I need to read moreeeeeeeee

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Maya W.
March 22, 2021 12:17

Haha, sorry. I've been super busy lately, but I can probably write something this week.

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March 22, 2021 12:18

GOOOOOOOOOOOODGREATGRANDPLEASEDO

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B. W.
March 21, 2021 21:07

Hey

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March 21, 2021 23:05

Heyyyyyyy

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B. W.
March 21, 2021 23:22

How are you?

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March 21, 2021 23:40

Lol I’m great

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B. W.
March 22, 2021 00:47

Not sure if I already asked or not, though what do ya think of the prompts?

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March 22, 2021 11:57

I LARB THEM.

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Nainika Gupta
March 21, 2021 17:23

Heyy how ya been?

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March 21, 2021 23:07

I’ve been great!!! My Someone Like You story is in the works.... heeheehee.... NEVER MIND ILL FIND *stop it Luke you’re embarrassing yourself* MIRA GOT DOWNVOTED OFF OF THE LEADERBOARD.

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Sia S
March 22, 2021 06:06

WTFHSEROUSLY?OHMIGODUGH

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March 22, 2021 11:56

I KNOWWWWWWWWWWWWW WE NEED TO HELP HER

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Sia S
March 22, 2021 12:24

OHMIGODDHDHDH YESHHH

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Nainika Gupta
March 22, 2021 12:04

Haha lol amazing! And wth?? I’m gonna help!

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March 22, 2021 12:04

XP I KNOW I'M GOING NOW. SHE. DOES. NOT. DESERVE. IT.

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Nainika Gupta
March 22, 2021 13:20

Hah! And I’m so madddd
Ok new puzzle
Is it one thousand white women?

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March 22, 2021 13:25

The last two words are SO CLOSE

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Maya -
March 20, 2021 22:28

Hey Luke, so I saw your playlist idea thing on the doc, which is a great idea. Would you mind if I did something similar writing stories inspired by songs (giving you credit for the idea), only if you don't mind. Also, I have lots of suggestions for songs for yours if you want to hear them. Lol xD

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March 21, 2021 00:09

Ofc that would be totally fine!!! What are your song suggestions?? I need flower-y ones lollll

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Maya -
March 21, 2021 20:03

Great, thanks!
Hmm lol okay like spring theme. xD
Lemme think
I'll just put like good songs then maybe the message of the song could be applied to the prompts somehow? xD
So like (grouped in order of the band):
Natural - Imagine Dragons
Shots - Imagine Dragons
Tiptoe - Imagine Dragons
Cutthroat - Imagine Dragons
Follow You - Imagine Dragons
The Scientist - Coldplay
Viva La Vida - Coldplay
Start Again - One Republic
Counting Stars - One Republic
Rescue Me - One Republic
Wake Me Up - Avicii
Hey Brother - Avicii
The Nights - Avicii
Unstoppable - Sia
Dream Away - Lights and Motion
Lol~

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March 21, 2021 23:03

Thanks Maya!!! I’ll give you a sneak peek... sorry I didn’t choose any of those wonderful ones for yhis story prob the next one but it will be a super sad someone like you!

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Maya -
March 21, 2021 23:47

It's fine! Ooh, what's the sneak peek? :))
A super sad someone like you??

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March 22, 2021 11:57

Its a story inspired by Someone Like You

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Kate Reynolds
March 19, 2021 23:48

HELLO BROTHER
(Have you read Jasey's "The Gangs of Obrye" yet??)

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March 20, 2021 12:03

HA HI SISTERRRRRR YESH I LARBED IT SO MUCHHHHHHHH

OMG WHY ARE YOU INACTIVE

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Kate Reynolds
March 21, 2021 19:52

IKR IT WAS SO GOODDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD

Too much things going on in life right now QwQ
But I will pop on and off sometimes

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March 21, 2021 23:05

Awwwww well I glad to finally talk to you after so longggggg

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Kate Reynolds
March 21, 2021 23:21

Sameeeee it's been wayyyyy too longggg

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March 21, 2021 23:40

Ikkkkkkkkkkk have you checked out the prompts or some of my new stories???

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<inactive> .
March 19, 2021 18:24

Yuh just got downvoted for the first time! Feeling great :D

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March 19, 2021 18:34

THE FIRST TIME???? Jeez, I’ve lost like 6000 in total..

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<inactive> .
March 19, 2021 18:43

Yes first time 👉👈
Oof, I’ll upvote you a bit

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March 19, 2021 19:07

Aw I don’t really need it

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March 19, 2021 17:17

This is so good- and is ur emoji puzzle The Tale Of Genji??

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March 19, 2021 17:39

Thank you and yes it is!!

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March 19, 2021 18:32

np and I made a form to be in my story if u wanna be in it here's the link if not its fine :) thank youu https://forms.gle/JySK8iu9htvmYWif9

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March 19, 2021 18:39

thanks so much <33

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<inactive> .
March 19, 2021 15:27

Look im dumb is the emoji thing some sort of japanese princess-
aaaaaaaaAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA

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March 19, 2021 15:32

ALL THE PUZZLES ARE BOOKS AND THIS ONES A JAPANESE CLASSIC

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<inactive> .
March 19, 2021 15:38

o h
w e l l g u e s s i w i l l n e v e r g e t i t
i have no remaining brain cells im trying to write- settling for hanahaki because i know more about it than what is considered normal-

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March 19, 2021 15:39

Lollllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllll

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<inactive> .
March 19, 2021 15:49

yoooooooooo just made garlic bread yeye
it smells so freaking good-

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March 19, 2021 16:13

THAT MAKE ME HUNGEREDDDDDDDDDDDD

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Sia S
March 19, 2021 02:33

A. For suree

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Jasey Lovegood
March 18, 2021 23:21

HIIII LUKE

My Reedsy Cast story is out, and your character is in it, so if u wanna read, please do! :)

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March 18, 2021 23:32

OMG ILL READ TOMORROW!!!

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Jasey Lovegood
March 18, 2021 23:33

THANKS SO MUCH!

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B. W.
March 18, 2021 19:50

Hey

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Mira Caplan
March 18, 2021 18:06

LUKEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE The teacher orders you join

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March 18, 2021 01:32

Hi!
In answer to your poll: C
It sounds cool :]
NEW EMOJI PUZZLEEEEEEE let's see if I can guess it :)

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March 18, 2021 12:01

Ok!!! Lol I wonder...

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March 18, 2021 22:30

:))))
Any hInTs?

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March 19, 2021 11:09

Eh its a japanese classic

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March 19, 2021 15:53

hmmmmmm
The Tale Of Genji?
Snow Country?

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March 19, 2021 16:13

YOU GOT IT!!!!! THE FIRST ONE!!! YAY AMEEEEEEEE

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March 18, 2021 01:31

Is the puzzle... The Tale of Genji?

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March 18, 2021 12:01

YErp

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March 18, 2021 12:26

Yay!

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March 18, 2021 12:40

You're in 5th I think!!

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March 18, 2021 12:42

:0

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March 18, 2021 15:08

Also, for the poll:
a. A new Epic Fantasy series
a. A new Epic Fantasy series
a. A new Epic Fantasy series
a. A new Epic Fantasy series
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a. A new Epic Fantasy series
a. A new Epic Fantasy series
a. A new Epic Fantasy series
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a. A new Epic Fantasy series
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a. A new Epic Fantasy series
a. A new Epic Fantasy series

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March 18, 2021 15:43

Lollllllllll well I'm thinking of doing a fable-type story sequence of magical realism which will be 5 parts and the song inspired stuff, which I'll call the Playlist.

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Jasey Lovegood
March 17, 2021 23:34

The talent, I swear. ["Yeh'll kill us all! No!"] That's rough buddy-

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March 18, 2021 12:02

Thankoooooooo Jase!!!

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Jasey Lovegood
March 18, 2021 19:47

No problem, Luke! :)

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March 17, 2021 21:43

I think I'd be best friends with Hermione (Harry Potter), Six (I Am Number Four), and Primrose (The Hunger Games).
What about you?

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March 17, 2021 22:06

Definitely Enola Holmes, Cal Trask, Sophie Foster, and Klaus Baudelaire.

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March 17, 2021 22:21

Where are the last three from?
Sorryyyyyyyyyy. We don't read the same books, lolol.

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March 17, 2021 22:26

Lolol Cal Trask is from East of Eden, Soph is from KOTLC, and Klaus is from a series of unfortunate events

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March 17, 2021 22:27

Oh, okay! XDDD

What are you up to?

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March 17, 2021 20:48

A series of stories inspired by songs, pleaseeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee. It would be amazing!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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March 17, 2021 21:07

Lolllllll ok two votes for that.

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March 17, 2021 21:08

Heheehehehehehehe

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March 17, 2021 21:22

If I do that one, I’m thinking of some songs like Someone Like You, Hometown Glory, Rise by Katy Perry, girls by Nature, and some other ones... but I might do one of the other ones!!

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March 17, 2021 21:40

That sounds amazing!
PLEASE do Someone Like You. I LOVE Adele. I would read every story you post for the next two months if you did Someone Like You.

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March 17, 2021 21:55

I LOVE ADELE TOOO AND I GONNA HOLD YOU TO THAT

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March 17, 2021 21:41

By the way, can you give me some critique on one or two of my recent stories? I need some really hard (but still constructive lol) critique. Please!!!!!!!! :)

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March 17, 2021 21:55

OFC I WILL SOMETIME TOMORROW

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Mira Caplan
March 17, 2021 19:24

LUKEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE

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March 17, 2021 19:39

Whatttttttt

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Mira Caplan
March 17, 2021 23:24

nvmmmm XD

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Mira Caplan
March 17, 2021 23:24

nvmmmm XD

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Mira Caplan
March 17, 2021 19:22

LUKE TEXT ME NOW

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Mira Caplan
March 17, 2021 19:22

Because I think "I" have the wrong time. So....uh....heeeeeelppp

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Mira Caplan
March 17, 2021 19:22

Lukeeeee

Can you message "me" and sat that RO ended

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