Tomorrow, I Promise

Horror

Written in response to: "Write a story with the aim of making your reader gasp." as part of Flip the Script with Kate McKean.

The baby monitor crackled to life at 2:17 a.m.

Heidi had only fallen asleep an hour earlier.

She’d been at the kitchen table with her laptop, answering emails that could have waited, telling herself she’d stop after one more. She always said that. Her neck still ached from hunching over the screen.

At first, she thought it was static. The old house breathed at night. Pipes clicked. Floors sighed. She rolled over and pulled the blanket higher.

Then she heard it again.

“Mama?”

She sat up so fast the room spun. The monitor’s green light glowed on the nightstand. Her daughter’s voice came through thin and sleepy.

“Mama, I can’t see you.”

Heidi smiled despite herself, guilt threading through the relief. Night terrors had started last week. The pediatrician said it was normal. Still, she hated how often Emma needed her at night lately. Hated that part of her sometimes wished she’d sleep through it.

“I’m right here, honey,” she said, leaning toward the monitor. “You’re safe. I’m listening. Try to sleep, okay?”

There was a pause. A long one.

Then the voice whispered, clearer now.

“Mama… you’re not here.”

Heidi swung her legs out of bed. The hallway was dark, the air cold against her skin. She moved quickly, barefoot on wood, already rehearsing how she’d soothe Emma back to sleep. How she’d promise pancakes in the morning. How she’d do better tomorrow.

Halfway down the hall, she stopped.

Emma’s bedroom door was open.

Her bed was empty.

The blankets lay folded, neat. Too neat.

Heidi’s heart hammered. “Emma?” she called.

From behind her, inches from her ear, a small voice answered softly.

“Mama?”

She turned.

Emma stood in the hallway, eyes wide, clutching her stuffed rabbit.

Relief crashed through Heidi so hard her knees nearly gave out. She dropped to her knees and pulled Emma into her arms.

“Oh my God,” she whispered. “You scared me. Why are you out of bed?”

Emma pressed her face into Heidi’s shoulder.

“I woke up,” she said. “Because someone was talking to me.”

Heidi froze.

“…Talking to you how?”

Emma pulled back and looked down the hallway toward her bedroom.

“From the monitor,” she said. “It sounded like you.”

The baby monitor crackled.

From Emma’s empty room, Heidi’s own voice whispered softly—

“I’m right here, honey. I’m listening. You don’t have to be brave.”

Heidi didn’t breathe.

The monitor hissed, like something amused with itself.

She backed away, clutching Emma. “That’s enough,” she said, forcing steadiness into her voice. “We’re sleeping together tonight.”

They retreated to the bedroom. Heidi locked the door. Then, after a moment, shoved a chair under the handle. Her hands shook.

Emma curled against her chest. “Mama,” she whispered, “it’s still talking.”

The monitor sat on the nightstand. Silent.

Green light steady.

“It’s just feedback,” Heidi said. “Old electronics do weird things.”

She was trying to believe it. Trying not to think about all the times she’d ignored strange noises because she was too tired to care.

The monitor crackled.

“Heidi,” it said.

Her name.

Her voice.

“You’re so tired,” it continued gently.

“Everything feels bigger when you’re tired.”

Emma whimpered.

Heidi lunged and ripped the cord from the wall. The light died. Silence flooded the room.

For several seconds, nothing happened.

Her heartbeat slowed. She kissed Emma’s hair. “See? It’s off. We’re okay.”

Emma didn’t relax.

She stared at the dark corner of the room.

“Mama,” she whispered, “it’s not coming from there anymore.”

A soft click sounded beneath the bed.

The green light flicked on.

From under the mattress, inches from Heidi’s face, her own voice whispered—

“I told you I was right here. I didn’t go anywhere. Not like before.”

Heidi screamed and rolled off the bed, dragging Emma with her.

They hit the floor hard. Heidi didn’t stop moving. She grabbed Emma and bolted for the door. The chair clattered away.

Behind them, the mattress sagged.

Something shifted.

“Heidi,” her voice called gently. “You forgot her rabbit. You’ve been forgetting little things lately.”

She didn’t look back.

They ran down the hallway, past Emma's room, past the stairs. The front door loomed ahead, pale with moonlight. Heidi fumbled with the lock, fingers slick with sweat.

Emma buried her face in Heidi's neck.

“Mama, it’s coming out.”

The floorboards behind them creaked.

Slow. Deliberate. Bare feet on wood.

“Heidi,” the voice said again, closer now, no longer coming from the monitor. “You always overreact,” the voice said gently. “You’re so tired. Everything feels bigger when you’re tired.”

The door finally opened. Cold night air rushed in.

Heidi burst onto the porch and slammed the door behind her, locking it with shaking hands. She backed away until her spine hit the railing.

Inside the house, something knocked once.

Soft. Polite.

Then Emma lifted her head.

“Mama,” she said, confused. “Why are you holding me?”

Heidi looked down.

Emma's eyes were calm. Clear. Awake in a way she hadn’t been all night.

“Because you were scared,” Heidi said.

Emma frowned. “No I wasn’t.”

The front door behind them clicked.

Unlocked.

From inside the house, Emma's sleepy voice drifted through the crack.

“Mama?”

Heidi's breath came apart in her chest.

She looked down at the child in her arms.

Same pajamas. Same rabbit-print cuffs.

Same faint scar on the chin from the coffee table last summer.

But the weight felt wrong. Too light.

The front door opened slowly.

Emma stood inside the house, hair mussed, eyes heavy with sleep. The real kind. The kind Heidi knew. She rubbed one eye with her fist.

“Mama,” the girl in the doorway said. “Why are you outside?”

The thing in Heidi's arms sighed.

“Oh,” it said, still wearing Emma's face.

“You noticed.”

Its skin went slack, like a mask losing shape. Fingers lengthened, joints bending the wrong way. It smiled, and the smile kept stretching.

Heidi didn’t think.

She dropped it.

It hit the porch and didn’t cry. It just unfolded itself, rising smoothly, too smoothly, and turned back toward the open door.

“Wait,” it said, in Heidi's voice now. “You forgot me.”

Heidi slammed the door shut, scooped the real Emma into her arms, and ran into the night barefoot, not stopping until the house was a dark shape behind them.

They slept in the car until dawn.

In the morning, Heidi told herself it was over.

That was three weeks ago.

Tonight, Emma stirred in her sleep and murmured softly into the darkness-

“Mama?”

Heidi leaned close. “I’m here.”

Emma smiled with relief.

“Good,” she whispered. “Because she’s standing in the hallway again.”

Heidi didn’t turn around.

She kept her eyes on Emma's face, memorizing it like a lifeline. The soft curl of her hair. The uneven lashes. The tiny wrinkle between her brows when she was dreaming.

“I don’t see anyone,” Heidi said.

Emma's smile faltered. “She doesn’t like when you lie.”

A floorboard creaked.

Slow. Careful.

Heidi's hand slid under the pillow and closed around her phone. She didn’t look at the screen. She just pressed the emergency button and prayed the call went through.

Behind her, a shadow stretched across the wall.

Too tall. Too narrow.

“I tried so hard,” the voice said. Not Heidi's this time. Not Emma's either. Something strained and layered, like several people speaking through one mouth. “I learned your words. Your routines. The way you apologize when you’re too tired to play. The way you promise ‘tomorrow’ and mean it.”

“I learned how you love.”

Emma shifted in bed. “She practiced on me, Mama.”

Heidi squeezed Emma's hand. “Don’t listen. Close your eyes.”

“I can’t,” Emma whispered. “She’s wearing yours.”

The phone vibrated. Connected.

Heidi finally turned.

The thing in the doorway looked almost right. Her face, her body, her posture. But the eyes were wrong. Too still. Like glass that had never blinked.

It smiled sadly.

“There’s room for both of us,” it said.

“You’re so tired,” it said softly. “You fall asleep before she finishes talking. You miss things. You hate yourself for it.”

“Let me take over. I won’t miss anything.”

Sirens wailed in the distance.

The smile twitched.

“Oh,” it murmured. “You told.”

Its shape began to blur, edges softening, as if it were being erased. The hallway light flickered. The air went cold.

Before it vanished completely, it leaned forward and whispered, gentle as a lullaby-

She already knows who feels real,” it whispered. “Who listens. Who stays awake. Who doesn’t drift away.”

The light snapped back on.

The hallway was empty.

Police came. Lights. Questions. Blank stares when Heidi tried to explain. No signs of forced entry. No evidence. Nothing.

Eventually, the house was quiet again.

Later, after everyone left, Emma crawled into Heidi's bed and curled against her chest.

“Mama?” Emma said sleepily.

“Yes, baby.”

Emma yawned. “If she comes back… how will you know it’s you?”

Heidi opened her mouth.

Then closed it.

Emma smiled faintly, already drifting off.

“You didn’t answer,” she whispered.

From the dark corner of the room, someone else did.

“She won’t.”

Posted Feb 06, 2026
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Danielle Lyon
16:50 Feb 07, 2026

Gonna reply to this submission after I hug my kids, kk?

OKAY. Wow, what a gasp, for real. I'm just going to jump straight in and say that this demon (because it is some kind of a demon, right? One that plays on the fears and insecurities of both mother and daughter? Talk about a shared inheritance) is the spookiest thing. The refrain of "Everything seems bigger when you're tired" is a pretty close approximation of what my mom used to say to me when I was a kid, so MAJOR skin-crawly points for that inclusion.

Using the police as a reality check right before the demon sowed it's last bit of doubt and emphasized Heidi's feelings of inadequacy ("She already knows who feels real") felt like catharsis BUT THEN you hit us with the voice, right back in the corner. 10 points on the Richter scale of scares.

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Rebecca Lewis
02:51 Feb 09, 2026

Your comment legit made me laugh and shiver at the same time. 😅 Go hug your kids and maybe triple-check those baby monitors, just in case! You nailed it with the "shared inheritance" thing - like, it's not just the monster, it's the doubt and the guilt that just never leaves. And yes, the "everything seems bigger when you're tired" line? That's just straight-up real life horror for every sleep-deprived parent. Also, the way you picked up on the police bit!! I wanted that moment of hope, like, "maybe this is all explainable," and then boom, it's worse because there's still that shadow of doubt, and now nobody believes you. Appreciate the kind words and the chills! Hug your kids a little tighter tonight, for real.

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Kian Gallagher
16:36 Feb 09, 2026

Great story and well written! I like how it almost seems like the monster is a more caring version of Heidi. Giving her time to Emma is the true battle Heidi needs to win. And I love that final line.

You wrote this very well, but one thing you could change or work on is that when you're giving dialogue, make sure it's clear who's speaking. At a couple points when the monster was talking, you finished her dialogue with closing quotation marks but then the next paragraph of dialogue was also her's. It's perfectly fine to have a new paragraph be the same person's dialogue, but you need to not close the quotation marks at the end of the first paragraph. Leaving out the last quotation mark implies that the person will continue talking. Otherwise, it looks like her dialogue finished in the first paragraph and then someone new started talking in the next paragraph.

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Rebecca Lewis
15:12 Feb 10, 2026

Thank you for reading and also thank you for help with quotations.

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Jenny-Lee Nord
11:18 Feb 09, 2026

Well done...

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Pascale Marie
05:04 Feb 09, 2026

Super creepy! Really well written and you managed to keep the tension building throughout. Well done!

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Vivien Mossman
02:50 Feb 09, 2026

Wow, this was absolutely terrifying! Every sentence was so unsettling and I was holding my breath for what was going to happen next! The element of the baby monitor just elevated the creepiness and as a reader I just wanted the child to be safe. I think you really portrayed the imperfections of the mother-child relationship naturally, but you also showed how much the mother cared and wanted to do better when we see her fears coming to life in the monster. Great story!

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Rebecca Lewis
03:11 Feb 09, 2026

Thank you so much for this comment - it means a lot! I was worried the baby monitor thing might come off as too cliché, so hearing that it added to the creep factor is awesome. And yeah, I wanted to show that messy side of parenting, where you’re tired and overwhelmed but you still love your kid more than anything. I’m glad that came through! Thanks for reading and taking the time to share your thoughts.

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Tejas Kaushik
18:01 Feb 08, 2026

This terrified me. Absolutely chilling.

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Hazel Swiger
14:07 Feb 07, 2026

Whoa- this story gave me chills! Like, my hands are shaking a little and my eyes went wide at every perfectly executed sentence you wrote. Absolutely terrifying- but I loved it. The child's sleepy voice is really nice compared to Heidi's, and it makes Emma's question at the end really creepy but in such a great way. Honestly really creepy, spooky, and just great. I could definitely see this as a best-selling horror movie or something. In my mind, I was picturing what this monster looked like- I was coming up with different things, sort of based off of a poem by Shel Silverstein- about something who wears other people's skin, but I don't know if that's quite what it is. I would love to hear your thoughts on what you were picturing when you wrote that sort of psychological horror. I mean, I just loved reading this. The part about the baby monitor in the beginning really sets the tone- a little uneasy, which you nailed. And, oh my God- the part about saying she'll stop again and again but not stopping? Honestly so real. Also, the repeated line of 'you're tired. Everything's bigger when you're tired.' is just beautiful. Really good use of a creepy figure with just the right lines that sorta rip you open, not being so careful with the seams. Anyway, this was such an amazing story. I'm excited to see what you do next! Really, really good job!! ❤

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Rebecca Lewis
23:55 Feb 08, 2026

Thank you so much! Your comment just made my whole day. I’m so glad the story got under your skin (in a good way, lol). That “child’s voice vs. mom’s voice” thing is something I wanted to land, so it means a lot that you noticed. I’m obsessed with the Shel Silverstein comparison too! I was picturing something that could almost pass as normal, but always felt a little off, like if you saw your own reflection blink out of sync. Psychological horror is my fave because it messes with your head even after you put the story down. And you get the tired mom vibe - sometimes the scariest thing is just… not being sure you can trust yourself. Anyway, your feedback means everything, for real. Thank you for reading (and surviving the creeps). I promise, more unsettling stories are coming! ❤️

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Hazel Swiger
00:03 Feb 09, 2026

Amazing! (That feels weird to say, lol) I'm also a big fan of psychological horror, so yeah! It's one of my many interesting, to say the least, quirks. :)

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Elina Mattila
03:54 Feb 11, 2026

Damn, I don't get scared easily, but you managed to creep me out! My favourite horror stories have always been the ones that are both scary and have an emotional heart, and here both come through so well, and creating a demon out of the single mother's feeling that she's never present enough for her kid is a really cool move. It's also really effective that the monster doesn't seem all bad - from the child's perspective, the demon can even be a comforting presence that is there when her mum isn't, which just heightens the mother's horror.

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03:39 Feb 11, 2026

Maybe I'm dumb. I didn't understand the ending. I got confused on the blocking a couple times too

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Carina Magyar
21:05 Feb 10, 2026

Truly chilling! Major Babadook vibes, in a good way. I'm going to immediately re-read it now to figure out where the lines between human reality and demon reality blur....

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Marjolein Greebe
16:58 Feb 10, 2026

Rebecca, what really got under my skin here is how the horror isn’t just the double, but the accusation it carries. The voice works because it knows her routines, her fatigue, her love—and uses that intimacy as leverage. I loved how repetition (“you’re so tired”) shifts from comfort to threat, and how the story keeps refusing a clean resolution. The final question isn’t whether the thing is gone, but whether presence itself is something you can ever prove. That’s what makes it linger.

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