The Date

American Coming of Age Crime

Written in response to: "Write your story as text messages or an online conversation between two characters — and at least one of them isn’t who they say they are." as part of Between the Lies with S. J. Watson.

Can u meet me @ Bix?

Sure. Todd, right?

Huh, yeah, Todd.

C you there in 10?

Good.

I'll be wearing red.

Me, too.

Been here for five where are you?

I'm sitting at a table by the door. You must've walked past me.

Heading back to the door now.

No, don't see you.

You sure you're in the right place?

Yep. You? Bix on Main at Fifth.

Oh, no. I'm at Bix on 32nd and Hall. Too far to meet now.

What's up, anyway?

I need to talk. I'm down.

Why? You are so talented and so beautiful.

Thanks. But I don't feel that way.

What do you feel like?

Like nothing. Like darkness.

What? Like darkness? What does that feel like?

I can't explain just trust me it's bad.

How do you mean bad? You feel bad. Or it's bad to feel darkness?

Okay, fuck off with your psychobabble questions.

I'm serious.

Serious about what?

About knowing what makes you feel that way and tick like that sometimes.

What are you saying? I "tick" like that when I feel like it? Is that it?

No. I never said any such thing. Is that what you think about yourself?

Get lost asshole.//

Hey. There's no need to be aggressive and rude. Why are you calling me an asshole? What did I do?

You don't get anything.

What should I get that I don't get?

This isn't about you. Remember? It's about me.

Oh, I thought this was a conversation between friends.

That's where you thought wrong. I'm not your friend.

What do you mean? Who is this?

Your worst nightmare.

Where are you again?

I take it you guessed by now.

You aren't Todd and you weren't at Bix on 32nd and Hall and you aren't wearing red. You probably see me right now, don't you?

Yes. Be careful when you leave. I'll be following you. No matter if you're in a group or not.

Stop. Please. Enough. You are scaring me.

Good.

We can try again tomorrow if you want and make sure we are closer this time.//

Todd? Are you there?

Hi, how's it going?

I could use some help.

Help?

Yeah, my mom and dad are yelling at me all the time. I need to get away from here.

How are you going to do that?

I need money.

How much do you have?

Not enough to get very far.

Well, how much is that?

$200.00

That's a lot of money. You could get a bus ticket pretty far.

Maybe. I want to disappear.

Why?

I hate them both.

Wouldn't it be easier to talk to them?

Maybe, but at times like this, they don't listen.

Why not? Did you say something to make them ignore you?

No. I just don't say anything.

What caused this?

You.

Me? What do you mean?

My parents don't like me texting you. They say you could be an old man or something like that. They want to meet you.

Yeah. I'm not cool with that. I don't like meeting parents. We barely know each other ourselves.

I guess.

I'd meet them but why? I don't have a reason to meet them.

Okay. It would just make my life a whole lot easier if you did.

I'm not comfortable with that.

It's an easy and quick fix.

Try to hang in there. I'll be here waiting for when you can go out again. Don't worry.

I'm not worried. Just wondering why you won't help me.

I can't help you because I'm not comfortable with that. I told you already.

Okay. Fine.

I'll be here waiting for your text. //Shannon, are you there?

Yes, I'm here. Waz up?

I had a fight with my parents today. They think I'm foolish to be texting with someone I've never met. They also would like to meet you.

I'll do it. When and where.

Are you serious? You'll meet my parents?

Yep. Why not.

It's stupid that's why not.

It's only stupid cuz you don't want to meet mine.

So. It's still stupid.

I don't think it is. So there.

Well, I do.

It's not.

It is.

It's time to go. Talk again soon.

Why? Where are you going?

I don't want to hear this stuff.

Okay. Fine. Just lose my number. //

No, wait. Sorry, Shannon, I didn't mean it.

I don't like games. We're supposed to meet to go on a real date and have some fun. You down still or what? It seems like you come up with excuses not to meet at Bix. What gives?

That's not true. Every time we were supposed to have met I was there. You were the one who didn't show.

Well, quite playing games then and get your shit together and meet me already.

Fine. // Todd? Can you tell me if you can meet? Let's try Bix again.

Okay. When?

Not tomorrow because I have to go with my parents to a recital. I'm playing the piano.

Nice. Where is it? I may have to stop by and give it a listen.

Yeah right. Do you even know what a piano is? Ha ha.

That's not funny. I play the guitar and sing.

Ooh, are you in a band? Ha ha.

I was in a band but we split up because my buddy's garage got taken over by his dad's car. Let's try tomorrow.

The Bix on Main? I'll say tomorrow at 5:00. I'm sneaking out. Do't worry. I'll be alone.

Me, too.//

I'm here. Waiting.

I'm on my way.

Okay. I'm waiting for you in a booth by the window.

I'm inside and I don't see you.

I'm not where I said I'd be. That's probably why.

I'm not where I said I'd be either.

Nice try. I can see you.

Yes, Todd, so you can. You finally found me. Please come and join me. Sit down. We've many things to discuss.

Sergeant Dixon waited for the man to sit down. "Todd" was supposed to be meeting a peer aged 14. They were supposed to be meeting for a date. The man was at least 30 and had less than honourable intentions with a 14-year-old girl. They caught him and took him down inside Bix and nobody knew it Two posers texting as 14 year olds who were looking for a connection.

Posted Feb 11, 2025
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25 likes 19 comments

Annoyance Hunts
April 17, 2025 01:48

Awesome!
Imagine if the girl was an old man too.

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Lily Finch
April 18, 2025 15:08

That would be awesomingly odd. Thanks for reading and suggesting another angle by which to look at this story.

Cheers,
LF6

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A Elizabeth
February 20, 2025 13:28

I thought this prompt was quite challenging, but you did a great job with it, Lily!

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Lily Finch
February 20, 2025 16:34

A. Elizabeth, I've never written a more challenging prompt than this one. Thanks for thinking I did a successful job with it. That helps me to know people at least understand why I wrote it the way I did. It posed a significant challenge.
Thanks for reading and letting me know. I appreciate that so much.
LF6

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Martin Ross
February 19, 2025 13:02

Wow, it takes more discipline than I have to write this style of narrative! You did such a great job, and got the characters across so well even with the minimalist requirements.😊😊

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Lily Finch
February 19, 2025 18:36

Thanks, Martin. The stories we are being asked to write with the prompts are becoming more and more challenging for me. They enable me to employ diverse voices and generate innovative thought processes.
This one was no exception.
LF6

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Martin Ross
February 19, 2025 18:41

I am seeing that challenge. Why I’m doing fewer mysteries, but it is stretching me.

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Lily Finch
February 19, 2025 18:45

Me too. Believe me, my friend.
LF6

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Viga Boland
February 15, 2025 20:35

Well done, Lily. You know how much I admire writers who can get a story across using only dialogue…or in this case, text. Bravo!

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Lily Finch
February 16, 2025 02:19

Viga, thank you for reading. I am so happy that you admire the writer and like the story. Coming from you, that's a genuine compliment.

LF6

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Viga Boland
February 16, 2025 14:58

And most deserved Lily ✌️

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Tom Skye
February 13, 2025 19:05

Chilling stuff, Lily!

Well done

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Lily Finch
February 14, 2025 04:36

Thanks, Tom,

I appreciate that.

LF6

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Mary Bendickson
February 13, 2025 18:54

Scary reality.

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Lily Finch
February 14, 2025 04:36

Sad, but true.

Thanks for reading.

LF6

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Tommy Goround
February 12, 2025 23:34

thumbs up.

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Lily Finch
February 14, 2025 04:32

Thanks Tommy. What happened to Clapping?

Sheez.

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Korinne H.
February 11, 2025 17:57

This was good!

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Luigi Conte
February 11, 2025 18:13

Thanks, Korinne.

LF6

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