Comatose

Sad

Written in response to: "Write about two people reconnecting after a rough patch in their relationship." as part of Candy Hearts.

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The cold air flowed in through the open door of Biblio Phile. Mr. Murton, an old man dusty from age and tomes of days past, peeked over the stack of New Arrivals to see who was letting in "that infernal draft". To his surprise, opposite the top of the stack, stood a young gentleman. Now, you and your ilk have no idea who this person is. None of you have a clue or a guess or a thought or an inkling. But I, yes, I know this man, and Mr. Murton did too.


"Hey, Max! What the devil are you doing here? How's college treating you?" Mr. Murton spoke in a slow voice of sticky molasses, letting the words slop off of his tongue. Well, you get that type of speech only after a Monday of reading Chaucer.


"Ah, is that Mr. Murton? How are you still alive??" Max threw his arm around the shoulders of the old man, patting his back in a delicate manner. To Max, there was nothing different about the store. The shelves seemed to be in order, only a couple of obvious careless placings by customers. The Classics aisle was still strong as ever, boasting all the books one would ever need to read. Murton was conquering the Solzhenitsyn section at the moment*.


"Ah, well, you know what they say. A reader lives a thousand lives and dies but one!" Always full of wisdom.


"I'm... looking for a specific book."


"What's it called?" For a moment, Max was silent and looked at the floor with disdain. "Well, out with it!"


"I need to find my old Lord of the Flies." Murton's face contorted in some foreign expression that I can only describe as nostalgia.


"Really? After all this time? I'm not sure we even still have it." Creaking away from the back of his chair, the old man stretched to reach the ebony cane next to the cash register. Max lent an affectionate glance to the copy of Remembrance of Things Past lying next to his foot. What a great stepstool that book was.


The small specks of fuzzy light that clouded the store felt like fireworks at a welcome home party to Max. The rows of shelves were gigantic punch bowls of knowledge and wonder that were yet to be spooned into cups. If only he'd been around more. If only he'd read at all.


"Right this way!" Mr. Murton stood next to the Island Adventure aisle, scanning the sections for the name GOLDING sticking out from the spine.


"Where are you, my pretty... no, Ballantyne, not you, no no no... Ah, there you are!!" With a sigh of fulfillment, he retrieved it. The pages were crisp and clean-cut, seeming the same as when Max had given the book away so long ago.


"Ah, yes, I remember when I got you..." Mr. Murton's voice trailed off the side of a cliff, leaving the world stranded behind. The adventures of Ralph and Piggy and Simon... his heartstrings felt a little twang when reminiscing over the old memories.


"Max? Where'd you go?" The world around seemed quiet. No sounds echoed through the door, no drafts. Where had that boy gone off to?

***


As Mr. Murton closed up for the night, the sign on the door waved a solemn goodnight. No customers had come today besides that Max, who'd left as soon as he came.


"Night, Moe!" The tabby cat on the corner of Rosemont Road squeaked a reply as it wandered its ways through the streets. That cat was never claimed, no signs of any kind put up around the city. Moe was better off that way, though. He didn't like the warm of the house.


Where was I? Oh yes, Mr. Murton. Our old dodger waved to the incoming cars as he hobbled across the street, throwing wide open the door to his car. An old 1960s Bentley, he could never bear to part with it. He appreciated the car in a way more true and pure than any other thing. It was his own. His way of saying "I might be old, but I can still be free". However, Murton's cane told otherwise.

***


"Max, can you hear me? Max, it's Georgia. Please come back." The strands of wire that hung to the old man's heart were a maze that Georgia Murton made no attempt to make sense of. She hung by her partner's side without caring for a medical solution. Emotions would solve everything, she believed, and so it shall be.

***


When our kooky senior reached the edge of his street, he felt a sharp pain underneath his arm. The jutting edge of a cover was sticking into his flabby underarm, and he reached out to retrieve it.


"Lord of the Flies. Well, I'll be..."

***


Ralph was sitting in the corner of the platform, looking across the triangle of logs to his friends. Jack was sitting in a corner with his choir, laughing about something with Maurice. Simon, well, Simon was simply there, there was no two ways about it.


"Max?" A face looked up at him through the din of childish humor and games. Ralph laughed for a second, trying to catch on to whatever joke he might've missed. In another life, Ralph would've ignored it. This, however, is not that strand of life.


"Max, it's Georgia. Please, if you can hear me, please come back for your wife."

***


Moe was a solitary cat, never caring for the company of others. People bothered him, made him antsy to get away. There was never a way around them, though. Humans were just always there.


The train station was brimming with life at the late hour of night. Voices and intercom mixed into a slushie of sound that seeped through Moe's feline earlobes. He hissed for a second, hoping that the sounds would go away. Well, that's humans for you. Never caring.

***


Georgia Murton was a stout, loyal woman. She stood by her husband in all of his antics, all of his eccentric quirks. There was never an instance where she thought of unfaithful acts. Betraying her husband was simply not in the scope of possibility. We are called here today to commemorate her horrible, painful journey, and to respect the battle she waged on life. May we all grow to be as resilient as she was and to love another as she did Max. She can be with her husband again. Thank you.


*Thanks Zilla heehee


Posted Feb 16, 2021
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Mira Caplan
February 19, 2021 16:44

LUKIE!!! I HAVE OFFICIALLY CREATED A MAGIC SYSTEM FOR THE ALDENVERSE. To whole pagesssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssss

You are not competing??? LE GASP (Me neither)

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February 19, 2021 16:47

DIDN'T I TELL YOU THAT ITS MUCH HELPFUL??????? SAME WITH THE ROYAL SYSTEM. YOU NEED TO HAVE ONE.

Yerp

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Mira Caplan
February 19, 2021 16:49

YES YOU DID!!!!!!! I was just so... AARRRRGGGGG yesterday. Totally unmotivated to write and feeling like it was just like I was copying the magic from KOTLC. BUT KOTLC DOESN'T HAVE EIDETICS OR FROSTFIRES. OR SHIFTERS.

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February 19, 2021 17:04

That's great!!! I feel like it would be so awesome if you made an indian-cultural inspired fantasy series because you could make it sooooooo darn good!!!

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Mira Caplan
February 19, 2021 17:08

YASSSSSSSSSSS!!! That would be like Aru Shah, though..........

and Aru Shah is awesome.

AND BRYNNE RAO IS BI. THAT JUST MAKES ME SO HAPPY BECAUSE YEAH

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Mira Caplan
February 19, 2021 17:08

YASSSSSSSSSSS!!! That would be like Aru Shah, though..........

and Aru Shah is awesome.

AND BRYNNE RAO IS BI. THAT JUST MAKES ME SO HAPPY BECAUSE YEAH

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Mira Caplan
February 19, 2021 17:10

But if I did, even though it would be awesome, it would be too much like Aru Shaaaaaaaaah

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Oh noes Sia left? I had no idea! I haven't heard form her in a while, though...

This is a very good story, emotional and well written. I really like the characters. is your puzzle the book of the dead??

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February 19, 2021 12:57

Yeah she did... it be so sad.... No it isn't but its a book about a place of death... WE HAVEN'T TALKED IN SO LONG HOW'S LIFE???

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I checked-- her last story is a cliffhanger, I can't believe it.

Meh. Totally blocked on everything.

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. .
February 19, 2021 13:01

Wahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh i knowwwwwww

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I winder if I could do a fanfic of it? it's really good and i want mooooooooore.

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February 19, 2021 13:12

Maybe, just make sure to acknowledge her i guess :)

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Megan Sutherland
February 19, 2021 03:39

WHAT DO YOU MEAN "HERE LIES"

LUKE WHERE HAVE YOU BEEN BRO WE HAVEN'T TALKED IN LIKE A YEAR I MISS YOU SO WHAT'S GOIN ON BRUTHA

victory is ours (?) I got it from Maya, pass it on lol

-Megggggggggggggg

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February 19, 2021 12:12

MEGGGGGGGGGGGGG OMG HIIIIII I MADE IT A MEMORIAL FOR THE PEEPS THAT LEFT BUT HI YEAH WE HAVEN'T TALKED LIFE IS GUT

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Megan Sutherland
February 19, 2021 12:20

Life is gut? XD what?
How've you been???

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. .
February 19, 2021 12:44

Gut is good in german XDXD I've been amazing!!!!

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Megan Sutherland
February 19, 2021 15:55

You know German?! That's so coooooool

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. .
February 19, 2021 15:56

I'm learning!! Some of the words are so similar sounding, like hat is hut.

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Maya -
February 19, 2021 01:30

𝖁𝖎𝕮𝖙𝖔𝕽𝖞 𝕴𝖘 𝕺𝖚𝕽𝖘!

𝕬𝖕𝖕𝖆𝖗𝖊𝖓𝖙𝖑𝖞 𝖎𝖙𝖘 𝖆 𝖈𝖍𝖆𝖑𝖑𝖊𝖓𝖌𝖊 𝖜𝖍𝖊𝖗𝖊 𝖞𝖔𝖚 𝖘𝖆𝖞 𝖎𝖙 𝖙𝖔 𝖘𝖔𝖒𝖊𝖔𝖓𝖊 𝖆𝖓𝖉 𝖙𝖍𝖊𝖓 𝖍𝖆𝖛𝖊 𝖙𝖍𝖊𝖒 𝖕𝖆𝖘𝖘 𝖎𝖙 𝖔𝖓. 𝕴 𝖌𝖔𝖙 𝖎𝖙 𝖋𝖗𝖔𝖒 𝖆𝖒𝖊𝖙𝖍𝖞𝖘𝖙 𝖜𝖍𝖔 𝖌𝖔𝖙 𝖎𝖙 𝖋𝖗𝖔𝖒 𝖑𝖚𝖓𝖆 𝖜𝖍𝖔 𝖌𝖔𝖙 𝖎𝖙 𝖋𝖗𝖔𝖒 𝖘𝖆𝖕𝖕𝖍𝖎𝖗𝖊 𝖜𝖍𝖔 𝖌𝖔𝖙 𝖎𝖙 𝖋𝖗𝖔𝖒 𝖐𝖆𝖙𝖊 𝖜𝖍𝖔 𝖌𝖔𝖙 𝖎𝖙 𝖋𝖗𝖔𝖒 𝖏𝖆𝖉𝖊 𝖜𝖍𝖔 𝖌𝖔𝖙 𝖎𝖙 𝖋𝖗𝖔𝖒 𝖊𝖒𝖊𝖗𝖆𝖑𝖉

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. .
February 19, 2021 12:13

Yeah I've got this twice alreadyyyyyyy

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Maya -
February 19, 2021 13:40

Lol sorryyyyyyyy
Happy Friday! How's life?

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. .
February 19, 2021 13:40

XD Life is greatttttt

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Maya -
February 19, 2021 15:54

That's good! :)))
Do you like the new prompts?

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. .
February 19, 2021 15:57

THEY'RE OUT????

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February 19, 2021 01:08

hello!

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. .
February 19, 2021 12:13

HALLO!!

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February 19, 2021 21:55

so
ummmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm

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February 19, 2021 22:54

i was kinda thinking on doing a collab for the new prompts . . .

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. .
February 20, 2021 00:02

Ooh, you wanna do one with me?

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February 20, 2021 00:10

YES YOU RESPONDED
yeah i wanna do one

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. .
February 20, 2021 00:25

Why wouldn’t I?? Ofc we could!! Let’s do a shareable link sometime, mebbe Monday?

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IGHT EASY PUZZLE
ummmmm
uh-
The graveyard book?
skeleton bok?

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. .
February 19, 2021 00:18

YERP

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Jexica Marcell
February 18, 2021 17:39

This was.... YEEEEEE SO GOOD!!!! I love the title and it was like really good.
no words can describe this story. serisouly.

lots of YEE YEE
-Cass :)

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Jexica Marcell
February 18, 2021 17:39

also, i spelt stuff wrong lol

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. .
February 18, 2021 18:29

THANK YOU SO MUCH YEEEEEEEEEEEE

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Jexica Marcell
February 18, 2021 18:58

hahaha i took both of your tests. I like my eggs scrambled.
oh btw if you want and can, could you put me as the queen of yee yee on your bio? thanks!

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February 18, 2021 19:01

Oh I decided to throw the queen and king stuff out the window and replace it withhhhhhhhh what is now there!!!!

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Jexica Marcell
February 18, 2021 19:07

oh im so smart. i lost my reading glasses so yeah.
have u read to kill a mockingbird?

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. .
February 18, 2021 19:07

XD No I haven't, but I've heard a lot of great things about it!!

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Nainika Gupta
February 18, 2021 14:08

LUKEEE NEW PUZZLEE!!! AHAHA

okokokokoko
coffins by Rodman Philbrick??

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. .
February 18, 2021 14:08

NERP

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Nainika Gupta
February 18, 2021 14:09

dang

OOH WAIT OML
THE GRAVEYARD BOOK AHAHAH

I DIDN'T EVEN SEE THE BOOK EMOJI AHAHA THOUGHT IT WAS A TOMBSTONEEE

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. .
February 18, 2021 14:09

XD YERP

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Nainika Gupta
February 18, 2021 14:10

YASSSSSS

XDDDD

anyways..hows it goingggg??

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. .
February 18, 2021 14:12

GREAT IM STARTING ULYSSES

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Mira Caplan
February 17, 2021 23:05

LUKIE. HAVE YOU READ THIS????????????????? I AM OBSESSED. OFFICIALLYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYY.

https://blog.reedsy.com/creative-writing-prompts/contests/81/submissions/55040/

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. .
February 17, 2021 23:16

YAS I DID A WHILE AGO IT WAS GREAT

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Mira Caplan
February 18, 2021 00:37

I. AM. OBSESSED. MY CHARACTER- YOUR CHARACTER- THE BEST FRIENDSHIP- IT. IS. PERFECTION.

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Mira Caplan
February 18, 2021 00:37

I. AM. OBSESSED. MY CHARACTER- YOUR CHARACTER- THE BEST FRIENDSHIP- IT. IS. PERFECTION.

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Juniper Zeta
February 17, 2021 22:52

The story had a well written plot, keep it up. Is the answer to the emoji puzzle The Graveyard Book by Neil Gaiman?

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. .
February 19, 2021 20:09

Oh sorry yep it is!!!

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Mira Caplan
February 17, 2021 20:18

I reeeeally need to teach you how to make an argument without insulting the other person...

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February 17, 2021 20:24

Sorry... but I just try to tell you and you don't listen...

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Mira Caplan
February 17, 2021 20:32

and you also need to learn how to let people do what they want sometimes and have their own free will- even when it comes to something like writing. And I did listen to you. That's why I have a specific type of name for all the characters, instead of Imryll right next to a Gale or Rowan. Everlys, Therin, Vatra, and Calder all sound like they fit together. It doesn't have to have the same root, just the same general sound.

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. .
February 17, 2021 20:59

Well, to each their own

I sorry I was harsh tho

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Mira Caplan
February 17, 2021 21:07

It isn't a matter of whether you were harsh or not, you just kinda said it in an insensitive way

...

is ok

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. .
February 17, 2021 21:18

Okkkkk

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The Manticore
February 17, 2021 17:36

Luke. The Manticore is curious. Would you consider writing with us?

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. .
February 17, 2021 17:55

Ofc!!

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The Manticore
February 17, 2021 17:57

Okay! Sounds good. We will discuss the best way to continue chatting with you.

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. .
February 17, 2021 17:58

Ok!! I might not be able to comply with all of the rules or anything, so no absolute guarantees.

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The Manticore
February 17, 2021 18:15

No worries! We've always known you to be a rebel, Mr. Litlover.

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. .
February 17, 2021 18:15

Aw, well no denial on my end XD

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February 17, 2021 17:23

LUUUUUKEEEEE! YOU GOTTA TELL ME WHEN YOU HAVE A NEW STORY!!! XD

Anyways... I LARBED IT!

Moe. Larb it. XD

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February 17, 2021 17:23

I didn't tell anyone XDXDXD Thanks so darn much Ginger it felt real confusing writing it... did you get that Max in the bookshop was a reflection of mr. murton's younger self?

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February 17, 2021 17:25

Oh. XDDD Yep! Well, it took me a little while to figure it out, but now it makes sense! :D

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February 17, 2021 17:25

Thanks you!!!!

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February 17, 2021 17:26

XD

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February 17, 2021 17:26

XD

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February 17, 2021 17:21

LORD OF THE FLIES! WORST BOOK EVER! XD

JK, but that’s one book I seriously don’t like...

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February 17, 2021 17:23

NOOOOOOOOO WHY?????

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February 17, 2021 17:24

XD I DUNNO...? SOOO WEIRD... XD

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. .
February 17, 2021 17:24

... I forgive just this once.

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February 17, 2021 17:25

...Hehehe...

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February 17, 2021 17:26

... i trust it will not happen again :)

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Mira Caplan
February 17, 2021 16:46

You know what I can't stop singing?

MAGO, MAGO DADADADADADADAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA

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. .
February 17, 2021 16:53

YAS I KNOWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW

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Mira Caplan
February 17, 2021 16:57

IT IS SO CATCHYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYY!!!

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. .
February 17, 2021 16:58

I KNOWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW

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Mira Caplan
February 17, 2021 17:01

YEEEEEEEE!!! And 4x4ever.

(I literally did a presentation on Mamamoo for music...4x4ever was playing for the first three minutes of class, and then i just...talked about k pop. It was awesome.)

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. .
February 17, 2021 17:04

I KNOW ME TOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO BUT YOU ARE NOT EXPERIENCED ENOUGH IN KPOP TO TALK FULLY ABOUT IT XD

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Amaya Reddy
February 17, 2021 01:15

lord of the flies!

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. .
February 17, 2021 12:50

Yerp!!!

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Amaya Reddy
February 18, 2021 02:49

yaaaay i have two correct guesses now :)

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. .
February 18, 2021 18:31

Yay!!!

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is your emoji puzzle lord of the flies?

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February 17, 2021 12:50

Yerp!!!

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February 17, 2021 14:51

:D

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February 17, 2021 00:47

Oh wow- I've been having too much of sad stories lately..
This was sooooooo sad :((
I swear, I'm running out of adjectives to describe your stories, they're amazing! Always paying attention to detail, and well...plot! So, that's great..
Wonderful job, Luke! :DD

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February 17, 2021 12:51

Thank youuuuuu!!!!!!

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February 17, 2021 13:38

Nooooooooo problem :DD

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Kate Reynolds
February 17, 2021 00:23

My heart just died...
THIS WAS SO SADDDDDDDD
I loved the whole tone of it, and the details were amazing (not surprising)
Great job!

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. .
February 17, 2021 00:25

Thank youuuuuuuuuu was it a little too confusing???

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Kate Reynolds
February 17, 2021 00:26

Noooo not at all!!!
Btw, do you mind leaving a comment on my latest story? :)

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February 17, 2021 00:32

Tomorrow I will!!! It’s late here

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Kate Reynolds
February 17, 2021 00:34

Oh alright! Thanks

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February 16, 2021 23:47

You really made me fall in love with the characters here; they were so heartfelt and earnest that it was impossible to like this story. Also, that tone is amazing!

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February 17, 2021 00:25

Thank you so much!! Do you mean not like it? Aewww thanks

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February 17, 2021 00:37

AAHHH
Sorry, lol, I loved it. Unless I just love it so much that it’s impossible to just love it...

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February 17, 2021 12:52

XDXDXDXD

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Sunny 🌼
February 26, 2021 12:49

AAAAAAH! HAPPY BELATED BIRTHDAY LUKE! Sorry, I missed it but I hope you had a great day! And congrats on another trip around the sun! (And being one step closer to death :) )

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February 26, 2021 13:14

THANKOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!! Yesh death is closer now!

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February 25, 2021 13:12

Happy birthday, Luke! Enjoy your day :))))) 🎂

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February 25, 2021 13:18

Thanks, Danny!!

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February 25, 2021 13:20

:))

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February 24, 2021 21:32

Don’t mind me, just breaking the perfect 500 comments
(Cuz, c’mon, I just finished destroying the perfect 200 comments on Mira’s story, and since I’m on a roll, I decided to comment here too 😈

Lol I am so extra...)

Oh, also, HAPPY PRE-BIRTHDAY! As in, I know ur birthday is tomorrow but I’m 40% sure I’m going to forget so I’m wishing you a happy birthday early just in case :3

Bye!

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February 24, 2021 22:24

HA LOL and you did my other one too XD THank you!!!!!!!!

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February 24, 2021 22:26

Hehe yes, because destroying perfect numbers is what friends do >:3
Yw!!!!!!!!!

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February 24, 2021 22:27

YERPPPPPPPPPPPPPP

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<inactive> .
February 24, 2021 16:54

Flappy birthday!! 🎂 🎉
Here’s to another year of existence!
(Idk if it’s your birthday yet where you live but it’s like 9 pm where I live so nearly there-)

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February 24, 2021 16:58

Welp its Mira's bday right now, but mine's tomorrow!!!!!!! Awwww thank you!!!

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