The Lotus Princess- part 2

Adventure Suspense Thriller

Written in response to: "Write a story that takes place in the same building but in two very different time periods." as part of City Living.

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(Princess Kamalini with Rekti)


“I want to drink his blood.”

The way she utters those extreme words calmly makes me breathless. I gather my senses and push my words from my tongue.

“Are you sure about what you are saying?” I ask her. “You never mentioned anything so violent before; are you okay, Kamalini?”

She breathes in a huff of air and shuts her eyes. She does it when she is angry or when she finally made a decision.

“Yes, I am certainly going to do this.’’ She takes a momentary pause and studies my eyes. "I stand on my decision, and I am going to do it not caring what you think.”

The silence between us is stale and the waves of the river occupy it by questioning her motive.

“Who are you talking about?” She never demanded anything before. For the past few months, she is going through the turmoil of emotions. Being a princess is overwhelming, but taking the anger on innocent people; is not right.

“The Golden Deer.” She exclaims. “I want to drink its blood. It has magical powers, and when we consume its blood we can travel dimensions.”

A sinister reflection sparks in her eyes.

“You are the princess of the most affluent kingdom, next in line for the throne. Do you think this behavior is appropriate for you?”

I know I am crossing the line, I am a servant but before that, I am a friend. A friend must guide without acknowledging the consequences.

“You know your place in my life. Don't you?” Her words hit me sharply. “Your job is to protect me and to take care of my needs. So, do what I say.”

“But Nali….” She cuts me in our conversation.

She raises her palm and signaling me to not speak anything. ''I princess Kamalini, of Kingdom Ekalki, command you to take me to the northeast shore.’’

I gulp down the tears which swell in my throat. Still, I want to take the last chance.

“Nali, are you sure…” My hands were shaking, but I gathered my courage.

She glares at me with her raven black eyes, and her face flushes up.

“Will you take me, or should I travel myself alone?” When I did not respond to her right after, she stood up and tried to jump down from the boat. I cannot let her embark on this madness alone. ‘'Wait Nali, I will take you. Please sit down.” I catch her wrists and give her an apologetic look.

She positions her back upright and takes her sword because the underwater bandits were habitual in the river.

I start rowing my boat, pushing the water away with my paddle, and watching Nali. She never has requested such rampant wish; there is a strong reason behind it.

But her behavior and words stung me like a poisoned arrow. I never even imagined in my dreams that Nali will take me for granted due to my ranking.



“I am sorry.” I hear a faint voice. "I know I have hurt you Rekti, but it was not my intention. It's necessary.”

“What is necessary, Nali? There is prohibition over the hunting of the Golden Deer in our kingdom and finding a one is also not easy.” I scan her expressions. “You are the daughter of the most powerful King; you are brave and courageous, yet what you are craving for?”

She slides towards me, “I want to avenge the death of my mother. That is the only goal I have in my life.”

“Your father already had avenged your mother's death, right when she died. Don't you know that?” My pitch unfurls; the step which Nali is taking is far more dangerous than anything.

“If I drink its blood, then I will be able to travel time.” I guess her next words. “Maybe, I can travel back when they were in the temple and save her before she gets attacked.”

Her response stuns me, and a strange confusion hovers over my thoughts.

“You know time does not stop for anyone. You can't change your past or future. All you can work on is present; speak logically Nali.”

“I promise you, it will work. Today I read it in the library, and I guarantee you that no harm will happen.” She assures me by squeezing my wrist gently.

In the distance, we hear a howl; we have arrived at the northeast shore. We both look at each other and promise with our eyes.

I take the boat on the side of the bank and gather my knives. I first come out of it; I have to inspect any area where the princess arrives. I run my eyes at each corner, there are trees and poisonous ivy. In the deep silence, we can hear the wolves howling and the trees rumbling. The wind flirts with my hair, and a cool breeze kisses my neck. I see no danger.

I signal the princess to come behind me.

“So, what we have to do next?” Her madness will ruin me one day.

She snatches a knife out from my hand and throws it in the dark void.

“Nali, we are short on weapons, use it wisely..” Before I could complete my sentence, she shuts me by placing her palm and points her eyes to a trail.

A golden trail appears with sky blue wasps. She smiles at me and marches forward.

The trail leads to a den, a big boulder covers its entry. On it was my sharp knife, standing on its small point.

“I think we have reached the site.” She utters it with utmost gratification.

“What and where?” I question her knowledge.

“To the den of the Golden Deer. They are the only species of Deer that live in natural caves, and can you see the boulder?” I shake my head. “It means the mother deer has shut her children inside to protect them from the predators.”

“Like you.” I taunt her with a smile.

“Yes like me. Now we have to remove the boulder and just grab them. I will see the rest of it.”

“The thing which looks easy; has a lot of hidden secrets," I say aloud.

“I know father says it a lot. Let's leave that and do our work first.” She takes few steps towards the den when I hear a sharp twang.

It is the noise of a bow. I cover Nali immediately, but the arrow pierces my arm.

“Rekti.” I hear Nali shout.

But then I hear the faint yet fast winds through which the arrows reach towards us. I cover her immediately and face my back towards them. They pierce my back, and a stream of blood flows from my mouth. I have to protect her at any cost.



Posted Mar 14, 2021
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Kate Reynolds
April 01, 2021 20:29

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Kate Reynolds
March 31, 2021 15:17

Hey Radhika, I feel like we shouldn't be focusing on the downvoting right now, but instead focusing on how to make Reedsy a writing platform once again. Everything would be so much better if they could just remove the downvoting and upvoting options, maybe we could make a petition for that?

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Frances Reine
March 28, 2021 15:54

Hi Radhika. Checking in because you haven't been super active. (I mean, neither have I but you usually are and I saw your bio.) The karma's pretty useless, isn't it? Oh well.
I hope you're doing okay and I can't wait till you post again :)

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Radhika Diksha
March 28, 2021 17:06

Yeah a lot better. Thanks for asking. How are you?

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March 26, 2021 18:44

Okay, just...
You can do what you want to do.
Just promise me that if you leave you'll keep great stories like this up for people to say "see? This is good stuff."
Also, I would be lonely since I cannot do watt pad.

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Upvotey Girl ✨
March 26, 2021 18:11

Okay, I just finished upvoting you 50+ points! :D

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Radhika Diksha
March 25, 2021 04:54

I kinda know, why are you asking though?

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March 24, 2021 21:21

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March 24, 2021 15:21

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March 24, 2021 16:54

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March 24, 2021 17:42

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Radhika Diksha
March 24, 2021 15:02

Thank you so much Ari. The comment made me happy.

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Ari Berri
March 24, 2021 15:05

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March 16, 2021 18:32

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Nainika Gupta
March 16, 2021 15:54

Ok Radhika, I really enjoyed this series. I'm really excited for more parts, and I like the way you've gone with this!
amazing work!

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Akshaya Sutrave
March 16, 2021 15:14

Hi Radhika!
Wow, this second part really adds on to the plot line! Again, the picture in the beginning is awesome and I loved the story!! The Golden deer was a great addition, and I like how you wrote this through Rekti's perspective! I really wanna read the third part now!! Are you going to post it soon, because you said it's ready?

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Writer Maniac
March 16, 2021 14:36

Hey, can you see my message on Hangouts?

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Radhika Diksha
March 16, 2021 14:36

can we talk here?

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Writer Maniac
March 16, 2021 14:40

I feel like Hangouts is easier to chat on

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Radhika Diksha
March 15, 2021 13:26

Your response made my day. Thanks

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npppppp but fr tho I NEED MORE YOU CAN'T LEAVE ME HANGING LIKE THAT AKSSADKJNXXSNNS

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Radhika Diksha
March 15, 2021 13:28

Sorry, I am a lot depressed today. Just weird thoughts.

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aw :( I'm sorry to hear that, I understand what you mean it's a hard thing to deal with <3

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Kate Reynolds
March 15, 2021 01:22

This is the PERFECT sequel to your series!!!!!!!!!!
The blood-drinking thing makes sense nowwwwwww
Wonderful job, can’t wait for the next part!!!

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Radhika Diksha
March 15, 2021 01:37

Thanks so much, Kate.

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Kate Reynolds
March 15, 2021 01:42

That's what I'm here for!

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Radhika Diksha
March 15, 2021 02:00

You are great.

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Kate Reynolds
March 15, 2021 22:28

Awww thank youuu
You toooo!!!

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March 14, 2021 21:05

I am going to warn you right now. I am SUPER nit-picky with spelling/punctuation/grammar (punctuation especially). I am not being rude, I promise. I do this with everyone who has minor errors. But if you don't like me doing this, then make sure to tell me (kindly) :)

I love your descriptions in this story. Kamalini and Rekti's friendship is well thought out. The action kept me on my toes. I like the idea that if you drink the blood of the Golden Deer, you can travel dimensions. That's very creative. I especially loved the ending, even though it was a bit brutal. It was fantastic.

MINOR ERRORS POLICE, OPEN UP! *smashes door*
'She breathers in a huff of air and shuts her eyes.' --> 'She breathes in a huff of air and shuts her eyes.'
There are sentences where there is no comma or period when there should've been one. (Like: 'Being a princess is overwhelming but taking the anger on innocent people is not right.' or '"You never mentioned anything so violent before are you okay, Kamalini?”') There are some other sentences like this throughout the story.

There are also sentences where there is commas instead of periods. (Like 'She positions her back upright and takes her sword, underwater bandits were habitual in the river.') You can either put a period instead, put in a semicolon, or put a word that 'connects' the two phrases so you can use a comma. (Ex: 'She positions her back upright and takes her sword, because underwater bandits were habitual in the river.') There are several other sentences like this throughout the story.
(If you want, I can pick out more of them for you.)

This is reallyyyyyyy long lol. I loved this story! I look forward to part 3. Great job!!! :D

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Radhika Diksha
March 15, 2021 01:34

Hey, I like the people who are good at grammar because I am not. Yes, I will surely incorporate what you said. I would love it if you showed me the other sentences too. Thanks for working hard on my story.

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Radhika Diksha
March 15, 2021 01:36

'She positions her back upright and takes her sword, because underwater bandits were habitual in the river.' I did the same here before submitting the story but Grammarly is suggesting removing the comma in the sentence that you have mentioned.

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March 15, 2021 02:33

Hm. If that's what's happening, go with Grammarly. Pretty sure it's more accurate than I am XD

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Radhika Diksha
March 15, 2021 02:03

I worked on my story again, and now I have ten sentences with punctuation mistakes. Before you critiqued it was 32. So, after you told me my errors. I worked on them and look it has become so better.

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March 15, 2021 02:34

I'm glad I could help :)

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Radhika Diksha
March 15, 2021 02:51

Thank you very much.

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March 15, 2021 11:42

Np :)

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TJ Squared
March 14, 2021 15:14

wow, how are you so good with endings!?!?! Geez! It was a bit brutal, but I suppose she was doing her job. (whew, I'm kinda glad she doesn't want to eat the blood of her enemies, that would have been gross XD).
My fav line (ofc): "In the deep silence, we can hear the wolves howling and the trees rumbling. The wind flirts with my hair and a cool breeze kisses my neck. I see no danger."

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Radhika Diksha
March 14, 2021 15:25

Thanks babe. I love you a lot.

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TJ Squared
March 14, 2021 15:26

here we go again :)

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Radhika Diksha
March 14, 2021 15:36

Love you

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TJ Squared
March 14, 2021 15:41

o-okay then...

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March 14, 2021 15:08

I love who you kept straight up with the action from the last part and never took a break. Great addition!

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Radhika Diksha
March 14, 2021 17:42

Thanks

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