The Dragon Warrior-Part 2

Fantasy

Written in response to: "Write a story where the power goes out on a spaceship or submarine." as part of Lights Out.

 Author’s note: This is the continuation of The dragon warrior. This can be read as a stand-alone story. But, for a better understanding, you may want to read the first part.


After the tough battle with the Kaals I received the warrior’s trophy from the President. After all, I am the Dragon warrior. But, after receiving the trophy, I was given the police job. But, not inside the air conditioned police station, instead in the scorching sun as a watchman. I was saving the city from rogues and thieves. They were the only criminals I knew here and they would run away if they saw me.

On a bad day, I had come to my duty and was sitting in an old, broken chair.

“Hey, Flame. Did you see Mr.George?”Miles,the sub inspector of police,asked me.

“Hey, Miles. I didn’t see him. Where did he go?” I said.

“Okay, Flame. Carry on with your job. I will make a call,” Miles said.

He went inside the station and came back after some time.

“Hey, dude. Don’t panic, Flame. He said he was ill yesterday. I completely forgot that,” Miles said and started scratching his head while I rolled my eyes.

My routine was to be awake at mornings and nights and talk to the police in the afternoon. They were my only support and family.

That day, the news flashed,”Weaponized submarines of the country to take off tomorrow. Officers in charge, Inspector George and sub inspector Miles.”

They had left me alone again. Miles was very excited and started to frustrate me. But, I didn’t take those things seriously. 

The next day, George came to the police station.

“Are you fine?” I asked him.

“Yeah,” he said.

“Aren’t you excited?” Miles asked.

“Very much,” he said happily. He was the happiest man I could have seen in that city.

“Please take me with you,” I said.

“No, Flame. That’s not possible,” Miles said.

“Okay. George, call me if there’s any problem,” I said and went to sit on my old chair which would break anytime.

Then a huge car came in front of the police station. The policemen were amazed. A man came out of the car. He was a fat and a bald man with gold rings on all ten fingers. He was the President. 

“Get in, George and Miles,” he said.

“Wow!” exclaimed Miles.

They got in and Miles taunted me. In my anger, I wanted to take my dragon sword and chase him.

The car took off at a high rate of speed,leaving me alone in the scorching sun. On that day, there were no thefts or mistakes happening in the city and I was bored. But, not for long.

George called me, ”Flame, we need your help. The power has gone out in the submarine and a shark is threatening us. Please come as soon as possible.”

That was the one I was waiting for. I donned my red dragon warrior suit and made my keychain into a skateboard. It can change into anything.

I raced fast to the nearest beach. George had sent me the coordinates of where he was. I just followed the google maps and dived into the waters. I would do anything for my friends, even for that annoying Miles.

Wow! It was so cool to be swimming in the water after being in the scorching sun. I found the fishes, in all colours floating with their fins with ease. But, then I saw a large fish, which was attacking the old, blue submarine. No one had maintained it for years.

It was the shark. I turned the keychain into a sword. The submarine's engines were stuck. I pushed the submarine as hard as I could. The metal was very rough as it was an old submarine. But, using all my strength, it moved forward slowly and the engine started with a loud “Vrooooooooooom.”

Then the shark dreamt of a nice feast. But, it didn’t know that I would have the feast. I slashed my sword and cut it lightly on the face. It tried to attack me but I gave a kick in its eye and scared it away. It groaned in pain and went out of my sight.

I opened the upper door in the submarine and went in. Just a small amount of water came in. Okay, a lot of it came in. 

“Thank you, Flame and I am sorry for the mocking,” Miles said.

“Welcome, my friend. Don’t be sorry because I am also inside this submarine,” I laughed.

There was completely no light in the submarine and the ocean was also very dark. Miles started to get the generator ready. It would help us for a few hours until we got out of the waters.

“Thank you, Flamey,” George said.

Flamey, that name I knew. But, I couldn’t remember and I didn’t get the time to recollect. George punched me with his fist and I was transported to some other place. It was full of dragons and the ground was raging with fire.

Then George touched his chest and transformed into a man with a great physique about my age. He was dressed fully in black. He had the dragon mark on his hands. 

“Do you remember me, Flamey?” he asked me.

“WHERE IS GEORGE?” I yelled at him.

“Answer my question, Flamey,” he replied calmly.

And then I remembered.

“You are my mate on Dragon planet. Your code name is Shape Shifter. And your name is Aqua,” I said.

“Wow! You still remember me. But, from now, you are the one who would be remembered,” he said, taking out his dragon sword. That was not as powerful as mine. But, it was powerful, too. He was a great fighter.

“Hey, wait. How did you escape? I had stabbed you. Then the Kaals had attacked and destroyed the whole planet,” I said.

“I knew it. You are a betrayer. You had killed every warrior and would have killed me. I transformed into a Kaal and have been travelling with them for a few days. I arrived on earth and George interested me. So, I transformed into him,” he said, ready to fight. He was correct. I was a betrayer and a merciless person who killed all the warriors.

“But, the Kaals had tricked me,” I said.

But he diverted from the topic. 

“I know that your weapon is much stronger. So, I took some powerful weapons from the submarine,” he said. He was my best friend from childhood. I couldn’t imagine myself getting killed by my friend.

“Stop it, Aqua. I was tricked by them that you were going to destroy the planet. So, I made a decision to kill you guys. After I killed you, they had destroyed the planet,” I said.

“THAT IS THE TRUST YOU HAVE FOR US,” he shouted and took out a rocket launcher from his bag. He fired it on me without second thought. I acted fast and made the keychain into a shield. It blocked the rocket for quite some time.

“No, wait. I realised my mistake. I had saved the earth from them and travelled in their spaceship. And the power signal got cut, which made it easier for me. I slashed every ship with my sword and destroyed all the Kaals. Sorry, that I had no trust in you. But, you knew it right? I have always been cheated my whole life,” I said.

“Yeah, you have been cheated the most number of times,” he laughed and embraced me.

”Where is George?” I asked him.

”I kidnapped him and hid him in the police station itself,” he said.

”Let’s go and rescue him,” I said.

That was my friend. We touched his ring and went back to the submarine. 

Miles looked at us, "What just happened?" Aqua and I started laughing as we left the water for the sands."

The military force, along with the police, were there waiting. So was George - the real George.

"ARREST THEM," he shouted. 









Posted Sep 08, 2020
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Kendall Defoe
September 21, 2020 15:01

Keep this going with the prompts! You have a real talent and the prompts will keep you on a particular path...
I need more!

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The Cold Ice
September 21, 2020 15:49

Thank you for reading. If you want more you may read my third one Leaf me Alone. It’s a addition to this series. Thank you.

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Kendall Defoe
September 22, 2020 23:46

I will...!

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The Cold Ice
September 23, 2020 01:25

Thanks.

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🄼🄹 🅂
September 20, 2020 21:07

Hi, Sahitthian. I'm here as promised. This was a great story. I tried to write this prompt, but I didn't have any ideas to continue it, so it's cool to see someone else write it. I like the cliffhanger, since it gives way for a part three if you choose. By saying that the dialogue was a little choppy, I'm repeating what others in the comments have already said. All you have to do it work on making it flow a little bit more, and you're good to go. It takes practice. Keep writing!
-Mj

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The Cold Ice
September 21, 2020 04:06

Hi. Thank you for coming. I am glad you like the cliffhanger. Yeah, I am writing a part 3 for dragon warrior. I am working on it.

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🄼🄹 🅂
September 21, 2020 05:23

Great, can't wait to read it.

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The Cold Ice
September 21, 2020 05:24

Ok.

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September 17, 2020 16:57

Great story! Your plot was really thought out and well written. The only suggestion I have to work on your dialogue. It seemed a bit clunky in this story. Other than that, you did a wonderful job on this one! I thoroughly enjoyed it :)

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The Cold Ice
September 17, 2020 17:02

Ok,I will work on my dialogue.I am glad you enjoyed it.Thank you for reading.

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September 17, 2020 09:53

Needed a nice twist. Looking forward for more stories from you.

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The Cold Ice
September 17, 2020 09:58

Okay I will improve my twist.I will write more stories.Thank you for reading.

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Rambling Beth
September 16, 2020 16:29

Loved this, especially the end. I'm interested in a continuation!

Good story. :)

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The Cold Ice
September 17, 2020 03:06

I am glad you love this and the end.I will write the third part.Thank you for reading.

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Kristin Neubauer
September 16, 2020 16:26

You do not disappoint, Sahitthian! I enjoyed this story as much as Part 1. I think one of my favorite parts about Flame is how all these crazy things happen to him, but he accepts them very matter-of-factly. Like when the President showed up....or when George called him from the submarine....or when he encountered the shark. He's got such a great voice. I'm looking forward to Part 3!

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The Cold Ice
September 17, 2020 03:45

I am glad you enjoyed it.I am glad you like when the president showed up.I will write the third part.Thank you for reading.

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September 16, 2020 11:32

I love all the action. This is a fun fast paced story. Great job. Your story telling is improving with each story

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The Cold Ice
September 16, 2020 11:34

Thank you !

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Graham Kinross
April 01, 2022 00:28

This was great. Will there be more?

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The Cold Ice
April 23, 2022 08:31

Thanks. Yes soon it will

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Angel {Readsy}
April 28, 2021 09:04

Vivid and lucid imagery " . I turned the keychain into a sword". You are very brilliant in creating colorful imaginations keep it up , excellent and amazing story

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The Cold Ice
April 29, 2021 09:56

Thank you

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Angel {Readsy}
April 28, 2021 08:56

Dragon on rescue mission , " I was saving the city". Up voting Up voting upvoting (。・‧̫・。).**♡(✿◕ ‿◕ฺ)ノ))。₀: *゜❀.(*´◡`*)❀.°˖✧◝(⁰▿⁰)◜✧˖°

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The Cold Ice
April 29, 2021 09:56

Thanks

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Angel {Readsy}
April 28, 2021 08:55

Very good , " I received the warrior’s trophy from the President"

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The Cold Ice
April 29, 2021 09:55

Oh sorry I have no time edit.

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Angel {Readsy}
April 29, 2021 16:40

That above sentence shows your vocabulary and imaginations are superb

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The Cold Ice
April 30, 2021 04:57

Thanks

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Angel {Readsy}
April 30, 2021 05:07

Please change user name plz plz

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The Cold Ice
April 30, 2021 06:00

That’s not my user name. It’s my real name.

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Angel {Readsy}
April 30, 2021 06:04

Hmmmm......

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The Cold Ice
April 30, 2021 06:05

Yes

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December 12, 2020 14:45

YAY! I love the new Dragon warrior!

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The Cold Ice
December 12, 2020 15:28

Thank you

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William Liu
November 25, 2020 23:03

Gave u a lot of points :)

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The Cold Ice
November 26, 2020 16:35

Thanks

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The Cold Ice
November 27, 2020 01:43

I too will upvote you later

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The Cold Ice
November 27, 2020 01:44

Umm we Can became friends

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William Liu
November 27, 2020 03:31

sure :)

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The Cold Ice
November 27, 2020 04:15

Hi

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William Liu
November 29, 2020 17:12

hello

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The Cold Ice
November 30, 2020 03:23

Wyd

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The Cold Ice
November 30, 2020 03:23

You didn’t written any story

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October 08, 2020 10:55

Hey Sahitthian, I am here as requested! I can see this story appealing to a younger audience because it is full of flashy fight scenes and high-stakes action! The story moves rather quickly, so be sure to add scenes that make the characters beloved to the reader, such as their insecurity or their humor, which you did begin in a few places. Just keep expanding on that character development and you're right as rain!

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The Cold Ice
October 08, 2020 12:22

Thanks.I will work on it.Thank you for reading.(would you mind liking my story)Thanks.

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Alexi Delavigne
October 02, 2020 02:10

While reading this and part one I kept thinking it would be cool as a comic or something:) really creative stories, keep writing!

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The Cold Ice
October 02, 2020 09:15

Thanks.
Keep writing.

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Karen Kinley
September 29, 2020 23:06

Very nice story! I like your descriptions. I would caution you about your dialogue. You have a lot of it. Much of the conversation between characters can be shortened or explained within the narrative. Good luck with your writing!

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The Cold Ice
September 30, 2020 01:49

Thanks.I am glad you like the descriptions.I will work on it.Thank you for reading.(would you mind liking my story.

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Barbara Eustace
September 29, 2020 09:12

Oh, I love superheroes. Such an escape from the normal humdrum of the world as it is today. Hey, can he beat this virus we've got at the moment? Just asking. Keep writing.

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The Cold Ice
September 29, 2020 09:23

I am glad you loved the superheroes .Thanks for the idea Thank you for reading.Keep writing.

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Karin Venables
September 28, 2020 10:08

I have to ask, and I know it's nosy, is English a second language for you?
You've done a good job of telling an action story here.
Concepts of loyalty, integrity and bravery are brought in through good dialogue.
And of course, the recipients of a hero's help are less than grateful in the end.
Good job.

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The Cold Ice
September 28, 2020 12:42

Thanks.Thank you for reading.

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Regina Perry
September 27, 2020 02:42

Great story! It's a really cool idea to have a keychain that can transform into things. Convenient for carrying around, too.
The tension between friends was well done. You showed that not all friendships are perfect, and that friends often annoy each other, but that they can still be friends.
One technically thing I feel that I should point out- you don't need to put a comma after the word "but". The words will flow better without it.

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The Cold Ice
September 27, 2020 03:07

Thanks.Ok,I don’t have time to edit.

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Regina Perry
September 27, 2020 03:11

You're welcome. Yeah, I know. Just keep it in mind for future stories.

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The Cold Ice
September 27, 2020 03:12

Ok ,I will keep it in mind.

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Andrew Krey
September 27, 2020 00:12

Hi Sahitthian, I liked your story, you have a great imagination and the story was very fast paced.

In terms of suggestions - be careful with the spaces between your words/punctuation as sometimes they were missing. I would also say that to make the dialogue more realistic, I would use the characters names less; for example when talking to your friends, you both know each others' names so you wouldn't keep saying them, but is an easy habit to fall into as a writer to make our writing clearer.

I hope my feedback was helpful, happy writing!

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The Cold Ice
September 27, 2020 03:09

Hi Andrew I am glad you liked my story.Thanks.

I don’t have time to edit.I will work on it.

Thank you for reading.

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Andrew Krey
September 27, 2020 11:18

You're welcome, I'm glad it was helpful.

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The Cold Ice
September 28, 2020 03:41

Yes,it was helpful.

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Skyler Woods
September 26, 2020 07:34

Wow! That was awesome! I loved it! 💟😘

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The Cold Ice
September 26, 2020 07:43

Thanks.I am glad you loved it.

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Skyler Woods
September 26, 2020 07:33

Wow! That was so cool! Loved it! 💟

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The Cold Ice
September 26, 2020 07:43

Thanks.I am glad you loved it.

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Melissa Hassan
September 26, 2020 06:25

Hey as requested read both part 1 and 2. It's a great story. You might want to polish up on your grammar a bit though. Good job. Keep writing.😊👍

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The Cold Ice
September 26, 2020 06:27

Thanks.Keep writing.Would you mind liking my story.

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The Cold Ice
September 26, 2020 06:28

Thanks.for liking my story.

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Peachy Hedgehog
September 25, 2020 15:27

Hi! This was a great second part to "The Dragon Warrior". Is there going to be a part 3? The ending was a bit of a cliffhanger, so it would be tragic not to continue the story.
Keep writing Sahitthian!
-Peachy

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The Cold Ice
September 25, 2020 15:32

Thank you. I am writing a part 3. Thank you for reading and keep writing.(would you mind liking my story)

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Kate :)
September 25, 2020 14:00

Hey! You asked me to read this one, and it's a great story. I have a few suggestions: '“Hey, Flame. Did you see Mr.George?”Miles,the sub inspector of police,asked me. “Hey, Miles. I didn’t see him. Where did he go?” I said. “Okay, Flame. Carry on with your job. I will make a call.' I feel like the dialogue got a little choppy there. When people speak in real life, names aren't used as often, so you might want to change that part. You could change it to, "'Hey, Flame. Did you see George?" "I didn't see him. Where'd he go?" "Never mind. Carry on with your job. I'll make a call." I liked how Flame and his old friend made up, but it felt a little rushed. Other than those, this is a great story. Keep writing!

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The Cold Ice
September 25, 2020 15:33

Thank you. I will work on it. Thank you for reading.(would you mind liking my story)

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Kate :)
September 25, 2020 16:03

Sorry! I forgot to do that.

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The Cold Ice
September 25, 2020 16:06

No problem.

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