Maura and Jamal came to Peter’s Diner nearly every Friday, very late at night. There was a waitress who would put aside slices of cherry pie for them.
Maura was 36 with auburn hair and a green sweater dress. Jamal was wearing his literal uniform. Khakis and the polo shirts of the computer repair service for whom he worked.
Peter’s diner sold some pretty typical American greasy-spoon food. They decided it was a habit they would pick up after distancing themselves from a friendly couple that did too much cocaine and kept trying to sleep with them.
That is what it had been like to be new to town. Internet apps to meet people would give way to activities and clubs until they were face-to-face with Corey and Frank, just dead swearing that they rob a bank once a year to pay for Christmas.
"It's practically tradition at this point, boys," Corey said, leaning in. "We call it 'Santa's Little Helpers.'"
Frank nodded in agreement. "Just a quick in-and-out. The bank is always dead Christmas Eve. Everyone's already tucked in with their eggnog."
Jamal frowned, nervously adjusting the collar of his computer repair polo. "You two are seriously pitching a felony to us over slices of cherry pie?"
"I thought you were just joking about the annual thing," Peter added, his voice low.
"Joking?" Corey scoffed. "Peter, this pays for everything. The kids' college fund, Maura's dream vacation, that new deep fryer you keep mentioning."
"Don't bring Maura into this," Jamal snapped. "Look, I have two kids. Two actual, sweet, forgiving kids right now. If I end up doing ten years, they’d never forgive me. That kind of betrayal, that kind of absence—the money isn't worth it."
Peter: He's right. It could break up my marriage. Jail time for grand larceny is a bit harder to explain to your spouse than, say, a bad debt. We have lives here. Stable lives.
"Stability is boring, and stable doesn't buy you a yacht," Frank countered. "We've got it down to a science. Zero risk, minimal fuss. Think of the presents, guys. Think of the freedom."
"Think of the orange jumpsuits," Jamal said firmly. "The answer is no.”
The next day, Jamal wore the same khaki pants, only with a different, equally uninspired pale blue polo shirt. The computer repair service he worked for was aggressively coastal-casual, and the office itself was in a strip mall literally across the street from the boardwalk, smelling faintly of old sea salt and pizza grease.
The conversation with Frank and Corey the night before—the ridiculous, unsettling proposal of robbing a bank—still sat like a lead weight in his stomach. He was a father of two. He was stable. He was a man who said ‘no’ to a yacht.
He spent the day troubleshooting a particularly stubborn network issue for a tanning salon, wishing he could swap out his khakis for swim trunks and just wade into the cool Pacific. At five-thirty, the thought of his own bed and Maura’s quiet presence pulled him out of the office faster than usual.
His old Toyota Camry, a gift from his dad that was more reliable in theory than in practice, sputtered and died three blocks from the freeway entrance.
Jamal pounded the steering wheel in frustration. He checked the gas gauge—three-quarters full. It wasn't the gas. It was the transmission, the alternator, or maybe just the general decay of a twenty-year-old vehicle that had spent its life inhaling salt air. He pulled his polo shirt away from his neck, feeling the sudden clamminess of the May evening.
He was on a residential street, one of those winding, manicured lanes that served as a buffer between the cheap condos and the expensive beachfront properties. He recognized the street sign. Of course. He had broken down directly in front of Frank’s house.
Frank’s house was a monstrosity of gray stucco and questionable architectural choices, clearly designed by someone with more money than taste. Jamal groaned and got out. He figured he'd have to call a tow truck, but first, he ought to at least knock. Maybe Frank was home and could offer a jump or a ride.
Frank opened the door, dressed in a faded t-shirt and athletic shorts. He looked less frantic than he had the night before, though still radiating that restless energy.
“J-man! What’s up? Is this a social call?” Frank’s smile was wide, but quickly faded when he saw Jamal leaning against his dead car.
“Car died,” Jamal said, kicking a tire lightly. “Near as I can tell, it’s not the gas, but hey, you got a siphon? Or maybe a lift? I just need to get home.”
Frank leaned against the doorframe, scratching his head. “Dude, I am so broke I haven’t filled my tank since Tuesday. Literally running on fumes. I can’t help you with the car, but I can help you with the trip.”
“How?”
“Shortcut. I know these neighborhoods. You can cut three miles off your walk. It’ll put you right on the main street where you can catch the bus or grab a cab. I’ll walk with you, I’m headed that way anyway.”
Jamal considered it. Frank was annoying, but he wasn’t a bad guy, just misguided. Besides, he needed the company for the walk. “Lead the way, Frank. And try not to pitch any bank robberies.”
“Duly noted, J-man. Duly noted.”
They set off, cutting through a narrow alleyway behind Frank's house and onto a public hiking trail that was little more than a dirt path bordered by dense brush.
“So, how’s Maura?” Frank asked, kicking at a loose rock.
“Maura’s great. She’s... stable,” Jamal replied, using Frank’s own word from the previous night.
“Stable. Yeah. We were talking about that last night. You know, you and Maura are solid. Like granite. I respect that. Me? I can’t seem to hold onto a girl for longer than six months. They always complain I’m too ‘unpredictable.’ I take that as a compliment, but they don’t.”
“Frank, predictability is nice. It means they know you won’t one day suggest they help you rob a bank.”
Frank laughed, a loud, slightly manic sound. “Okay, fair. But look, I met this girl, Sarah. She’s a yoga instructor, totally zen. I told her I was an accountant—which is technically true, I do account for things. She bought it. Says I have ‘calm energy.’ I don’t know how long I can keep up the lie, though. Every time she starts talking about organic kale and mindfulness, I feel like blurting out that I’m three minutes from going totally postal.”
They talked about relationships for another half mile, Frank complaining about the inherent conflict between being a responsible adult and wanting to do something reckless, Jamal offering dull, sensible advice. The sun was beginning to dip, casting long, dark shadows from the overgrown trees.
Jamal, distracted by Frank’s latest tale of trying to convince Sarah that his lack of a steady income was actually a commitment to the 'freelance economy', wasn't watching the ground. His foot caught on something solid hidden beneath the long grass.
He went down hard, his knee hitting the rocky path with a sharp, sickening jolt. He swore loudly, rolling onto his back.
“Whoa! You okay, J-man?” Frank rushed over, looking down at him.
“Yeah, I think so. What did I trip over, a tree root?” Jamal sat up and rubbed his throbbing knee.
Frank bent down and pulled the obstacle out of the grass. It wasn't a root. It was a duffel bag, heavy and dark blue, with "CALVIN KLEIN" stitched discreetly in white thread near the zipper.
“Well, someone definitely left their gym bag,” Frank said, testing the weight. He whistled. “It’s heavy. Smells kind of… metallic.”
Jamal felt a sudden, cold dread. “Leave it, Frank. It’s probably gym equipment or something. Lost property.”
“Or something.” Frank’s eyes were sparkling with that familiar, reckless energy Jamal had seen the previous night. He glanced around the empty trail, then back at Jamal. “Come on. Just a peek.”
Before Jamal could protest, Frank had worked the zipper open. They both stared into the bag. It wasn't full of sweaty gym clothes. It was packed, top to bottom, with bundles of fifty and one-hundred-dollar bills, secured with rubber bands. The distinct, musky smell of old money wafted up.
They looked at each other, the silence thick and heavy.
“Holy…,” Jamal whispered. He felt dizzy. This was the anti-stability. This was the opposite of the cherry pie and green sweater dress life he and Maura had built.
“This is it, J-man,” Frank breathed, his voice reverent. “Freedom. Presents. Yachts.”
“This is a mistake,” Jamal said, his voice strained. “Someone lost this. Someone is going to be looking for this.”
“Then someone is a very messy person,” Frank said, cinching the bag shut. He hoisted it onto his shoulder. “Come on. Let’s go. Now we really need that shortcut.”
The walk home felt different. Frank was energized, practically dancing despite the bag’s immense weight, occasionally letting out a nervous laugh. Jamal was a hollow shell, his mind cycling through worst-case scenarios—drug deals, mob hits, the police.
He’d refused a clean felony, one that was supposedly 'down to a science', and now he was walking home with a duffel bag full of what he was certain was dirty money. He was in deeper than Corey and Frank could ever have dreamed.
They reached the apartment complex, a modest two-story building that lacked Frank’s questionable flair but offered the blessed neutrality of rental stability. They used the stairs, not trusting the elevator with their secret.
Maura was sitting on their small, slightly worn sofa, reading a novel. She was still in her green sweater dress, looking calm and contained.
“Jamal! You’re late. And you brought Frank,” she said, setting her book down. “Did you finally cave on the bank job?”
“Worse,” Frank said, dropping the Calvin Klein bag onto the carpet with a heavy thud.
Maura looked from the bag to Jamal’s ashen face, then back to Frank’s wild grin. “Frank, if you brought a bowling ball, I’m going to be mad.”
Jamal closed and locked the door. “Maura, you need to see this.”
Frank didn’t wait for permission. He unzipped the bag and tipped it over slightly, letting a few rubber-banded stacks spill out onto the beige carpet.
Maura didn’t gasp or scream. She just sat perfectly still, staring at the green stacks. Her face was unreadable. “Jamal,” she said, her voice dangerously quiet. “Tell me you did not rob a bank.”
“No! I swear. My car broke down near Frank’s house. He offered to walk me home via the shortcut. I tripped over this. On the trail.”
Maura picked up a stack, running her thumb over the crisp edges of the bills. “And you didn't leave it there?”
“Could you?” Frank asked, sitting cross-legged next to the bag. “This is like a million dollars, Maura. Maybe more. This is it. This is our out.”
Jamal watched Maura. She looked at him, searching his eyes. In that moment, he knew he was completely exposed. He was stable, yes, but he also wanted to give her the dream vacation Corey mentioned. He wanted a life that wasn't beige. He waited for her to tell him to call the police, to be the steady conscience he had always counted on.
Instead, a small, slow smile stretched across her face. It wasn’t the sweet smile he was used to. It was a predator's smile.
“Get the laundry basket,” Maura ordered. “Let’s count this.”
They spent the next two hours sorting and stacking. The count was astonishing: $2.1 million.
“It’s a life-changing amount of money,” Maura said, staring at the towering stacks spread across the dining room table, a mountain of cash that dwarfed their Friday night cherry pie ritual.
“First, I’m paying off the Camry, then I’m setting it on fire,” Jamal declared, a genuine lightness entering his chest for the first time since he tripped. “Then I’m taking my real kids on a trip. Somewhere with no internet and a lot of sand.”
“A trip is good,” Maura agreed. “But we need to disappear. New state, maybe the Pacific Northwest. We buy a small, anonymous cabin. We go off-grid for six months while the heat dies down.”
Frank was leaning back on the sofa, his hands behind his head, looking at the money like it was a warm fire. “You’re talking about safety, guys. That’s boring. We should buy stuff. A speed boat! A casino membership! A solid gold mailbox!”
“We’ll buy some of that stuff later,” Maura said, ever practical. “But first, we secure the future. Jamal, you said you wanted a life free of betrayal for your children. This money can buy that. It can buy silence and space.”
Frank sat up, suddenly serious. He pointed a finger at Jamal, then at Maura. “Listen, this money… It’s a sign. You two, you’re stable. You’re good. You have two kids already, J-man, but they’re not yours and Maura’s, right?”
Jamal and Maura exchanged a look. It was true. Jamal’s two children were from a previous marriage. He and Maura had always wanted a child together, but years of trying had led nowhere, and they’d quietly accepted that the diner and the khakis were their lot.
“What are you getting at, Frank?” Maura asked.
“I’m saying you keep the two-point-one million dollars. And you use it to have a baby.” Frank’s voice was softer now, devoid of the manic excitement. “A real, honest-to-god, safe, stable, no-orange-jumpsuit baby. You use the money for whatever procedures, whatever adoption agencies, whatever it takes. This money isn’t for yachts, J-man. It’s for new life. It’s for stability that’s not boring. It's for the betrayal you won't have to deal with.”
Maura’s eyes were shining. She looked at Jamal, and he saw the years of quiet longing reflected there. The cherry pie, the steady job, the beige apartment—it had all been a placeholder.
“Frank,” Jamal said, tears unexpectedly welling up. “That’s… that’s actually a brilliant idea.”
Maura nodded, a single tear tracing a path down her cheek. “We’re having a baby,” she whispered, conviction settling over her like a warm blanket.
The three of them leaned over the table, ignoring the mountain of stolen cash, and began to dream out loud.
“We’ll name her Cherry,” Frank suggested immediately. “After the pie.”
“No, Frank,” Maura laughed, wiping her eyes. “But we’ll give her a dessert nickname. Pudding. Pie-face.”
“We should get a boy,” Jamal said, already envisioning a miniature version of himself. “He’ll be a troublemaker, though. So maybe a girl. Smart, like her mother.”
“He’ll have auburn hair, like me,” Maura said. “But Jamal’s eyes. And he’ll be a musician. No computer repair for this one. He’ll play the cello.”
“She’ll be a rock climber!” Frank countered. “She’ll go to space! She’ll be the kind of kid who never, ever needs to worry about eggnog or bank hours.”
They continued, the illicit money now simply a means to a beautiful, stable, and deeply desired end. The risk was forgotten in the face of the dream. They were criminals now, but they were also a family planning a life. A life bought by a duffel bag found in the dark.
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I really liked this. The found-money setup grabbed my attention right away, and Jamal being careful played off Frank’s wild optimism really well.
I'm curious what you think of my latest story titled "Et Tu".
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The ending caught me off guard, and now I’m curious to see what happens next.
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Hey, Karly, I enjoyed the story. Different kind of ending. Hopefully, it's that easy for them.
Couple of suggestions:
1) get right into your story. The offer that Frank makes them in the beginning drives the whole thing. Character descriptions, etc. can be done in subtle ways as your story goes. Ask yourself, why is this character trait important. If it is, then leave it, otherwise, it bogs down the narrative.
2) tension. You do a good job building the tension. The money is mysterious. Are there really no strings? I don't trust Frank, and someone is always looking for their money, especially $2 million, which doesnt go as far as one thinks to buy a house and car. You've got the makings of a great longer narrative here.
3) the ex-wife? Does she come round sniffing out the money? Lots of potential there.
Personally, I would deposit it in a bank or two like paychecks. Or small regular increments over a series of banks and charge things to credit card. With auto withdrawal. I'm not a good thief though.
BTW. I was in Springfield once when I was in college. Nice town. Stayed with a great family that had no clue what biscuits and gravy could be eaten for breakfast. Haha. They gave me an English muffin and jam. You can also have fried eggs with biscuits and gravy. I would recommend it!
All the best to you!
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