Lost In The Tide

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Written in response to: "Begin your story with somebody watching the sunrise, or sunset." as part of Summer Solstice.

β€œI’m leaving with Olive, come if you wanna!” June shouted into her little cottage.


β€œOkay, coming!” replied Asa, her younger brother.


June, with a ruffled pale yellow dress and a white sun hat, led her bunny out into the evening sun. Olive’s fur was blonde, with some white spots, and little shiny black eyes. The moment June had laid her eyes on the little rabbit, she decided it was hers.


β€œWait up!” shouted Asa while June and Olive walked to the seaside, with paint, brushes, a palette and an easel in June’s arms.


The sun was half of its way down the sky, smearing orange and yellow across it’s pink canvas. Lavender and indigo clouds dotted the sky, with the bottoms highlighted by the sun’s light. All these colours were reflected onto the pale sand below, so that was where June set up her canvas.


β€œI said wait up!” Asa shouted again as June gazed at the easel from different angles and adjusted it appropriately.


β€œPainting waits for no one,” responded his sister, and Olive jumped up in agreement.


β€œI brought Olive her favourite toy,” Asa said, holding out a coloured ball of rope that Olive immediately started leaping at.


β€œShe’ll have to pose for me first.”


β€œPose? Is she a supermodel or something?”


β€œHaven’t you heard of β€˜en plein air’?”


β€œI have really no idea what you are talking about,” Asa said, taunting Olive with the toy.


β€œAh, nevermind. Can you move Olive over there so I can prepare my paint?”


β€œFine,” Asa muttered, leading Olive away.


June had brought only the necessary colours: blue, red, yellow, white and black. Those were the colours she had, and the only ones she would need, really. It would take a lot of mixing, but mixing paint was one of her favourite things to do, creating colours that you hadn’t seen before with your own very hands.


June squeezed some red and blue out on her palette, to make the dark violet that spanned the sky under all the other colours. She brushed it lightly all over the canvas, and then mixed a pale orange to blend into the horizon line. June added white as the transition colour and blended a smooth gradient, as Asa teased Olive with, β€œGet the ball! Get the ball!”


June now added some yellow right atop the horizon, where the imaginary sun would rest. She squirted some white and a touch of red, making a pink highlight for the clouds. Adding white to the violet she’d used earlier, she was about to make a cloud when a fluffy lump landed on her arm, dragging the lilac across the painting.


β€œOlive!”


The bunny jumped off quickly and knelt at June’s feet, paws up at her chest pleadingly.


β€œAsa, you were supposed to keep her away until I needed her!” June shouted.


Asa winced and said, β€œUm, I might’ve thrown the ball at you by accident and Olive went after it.”


β€œWell, maybe you should practice your throwing skills before taking care of a bunny!”


Asa didn’t respond and just picked up the ball at June’s feet. With a glare from his sister, Asa led the little bunny away from the painting, which June now had to fix up.


β€œUgh, brothers…” murmured June as she attempted to repaint the gradient with the leftover paint from earlier. After a few minutes there wasn’t any dragged paint across the sky, even if it didn’t look as good as before, so June moved on.


Dabbing with the lavender she made, June created the clouds that added embellishment to the sky. She then highlighted them with the pink, and after it had partly dried, used her brush to drag the clouds out a bit, making them look wispy.


Stepping back to admire the sunset she’d recreated, June heard Asa shout, β€œNo Olive! No!”


She looked to her left and saw Olive skipping into the sea, splashing water onto her blonde fur.


β€œOLIVE!”


The bunny looked at June, who was running towards her, and stared at June as she picked her up.


β€œDon’t go out there Olive. It’s dangerous,” whispered June, looking into Olive’s glossy, curious eyes. She set her pet down and walked back to her painting, while Asa scolded Olive for trying such a thing.


Back to her painting, June mixed a bit of red, blue and yellow to create a tan colour. She added white to make the muted sand colour and applied it to the bottom of the canvas. She added a bit more yellow and red to make the paint darker, and then shaded the sand with a stiff horsehair brush.


β€œOlive!”


June looked back to her left and saw Olive skidding to a stop at the shore of the beach, with Asa running behind.


β€œOlive…” June began as she ran to her bunny and picked her up. β€œYou do know why it’s dangerous to go out there?”


Olive just stared back eccentrically. 


June sighed. β€œIf you go out there, Olive, you might get pulled in by the riptide. The riptide appears out of nowhere and just rips you into the ocean, pulling you under. If the riptide pulls you under, you won’t come back. Please, please don’t go into the ocean. ”


Olive blinked with some or another understanding, and trotted back to Asa orphically.


Almost time to get Olive, thought June as she dotted the bottoms of the clouds with a lighter pink. Then, after combining yellow and orange from before, she added little clouds near the horizon line, around where the sun would be. 


June stepped back again, looking for imperfections. That cloud looks a bit too dark, she thought, so she painted over a cloud that was on the right side of the painting with lavender. June hummed along with the lapping waves as she shaded the clouds, using more pastel colours than before. She thought she might’ve heard someone calling her name, but she decided it was her imagination.


Straining her neck back again to check, June thought, Now the highlights look too bright. She darkened the pink with a touch more red, and then reapplied the highlights with the new colour. 


The sun now was perched right at the horizon line, just like in June’s painting. She thought the calling for her had gotten louder, but she just ignored it.


Satisfied with her clouds, June was about to call Asa for Olive when she heard something. Splashing. Not the waves lapping, that sound was normal, but a more distinct splash.


β€œNO!”


June looked up from her painting to the waves in front of her and saw a little lump splashing in the water.


β€œOLIVE!”


Asa and June ran, ran, ran into the water, trying to get to Olive, but then they paused.


A wave, which had appeared out of nowhere, towered above the little bunny and crashed down, engulfing her in its waves. When the waves pulled back, the pair only saw colourful waves peering back at them.


"No. No. She can't be gone," said June, sobbing. "She can't be."


Asa gulped and opened and closed his mouth, but couldn't push out the slippery words in his throat.


They now leaned against a rocky cliff, where they could see their cottage and the beach and June’s painting. They cried, then hugged, then stared at the sky as the sun started disappearing under the surf.


β€œI thought…” sniffed June, β€œthat it was my imagination...I didn’t know it was you...I’m so sorry Asa...I’m sorry…” She leaned against her brother’s shoulder for reassurance.


β€œI should’ve moved faster,” Asa said, β€œbut I just stood and watched. I should’ve moved.”


β€œThere were so many things we should’ve done,” June said. β€œSo many things.”


Asa nodded and the two settled in a silence that was not awkward, but one that gave off a feeling of kenopsia.


After a while, June stood up. β€œI’ll collect my painting stuff now.”


Asa nodded again.


He watched her dress billow as she folded up her easel and the unfinished painting. As her eyes looked so solemn when she put her brushes among the palette, not caring that they got smothered in paint. As she walked slowly back to Asa with her things when a little tear dripped down her cheek and sat back down next to him.


They didn’t talk. Not until the sky and the waves looked like sisters or brothers, cousins or nieces, until the sky and waves looked similar as family.


β€œShe was so...so cute. I remembered when we got her, the first thing I thought when I saw her was, β€˜she’s so cute’,” said June with a quiet sigh, her twinkling eyes resembling the stars. They sat in a short silence as night blanketed the sky, and neither of them could tell the waves and sky apart as they headed home.

Posted Jun 21, 2021
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TJ Squared
June 21, 2021 23:02

Riptides. Serious things.
I really liked how you described how June painted the sunset and the mixing of colors was pretty cool.
Olive is a great name for a little rabbit like that. And man, when she was pulled under the waves it was just...wow.
grrrrrrrrrreat job with everything!

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TJ Squared
June 21, 2021 23:24

you're welcome :D

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TJ Squared
July 04, 2021 19:12

nice new poem! especially the last line, it's very intriguing.

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tyyy!!!
I have to put a new one lol XD

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August 14, 2021 11:57

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August 14, 2021 00:16

SISSSSSSSSSSSS
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No really tho, r u on Quora?? You should be on Quora.
ASLDJAHAGSGS I CAN’T GET OVER HOW PICREW HAS MANAGED TO INVADE REEDSY TOO LOL

wow this comment is a mess-
short story shorter, picrew profile pics are alllll over Quora and I’m so used to seeing them there it’s kinda funny to see em’ on Reedsy XD Noice hehe. Love ya adiossssssss

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HELLOOOOOOOOOOO
LOLLL I'm not (yet) :>
LOL

XD interesting!!! shanks u too lol your pfp XD booteefool

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August 19, 2021 00:26

HELLLLLLOOOOOOO
yessss gurl you better get RIGHT on there it’s really freaking fun!!!

Eeeee ty haha

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:D okay :>
np ;D

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waitwaitwait I didn't notice this before but you said you like that pin [it's been changed lol]
:O
r u...??

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August 22, 2021 20:45

oh yah definitely
*wiggles eyebrows, slightly more dramatically*

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:O
:D
hehe buddiesss

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August 22, 2021 21:34

ooh yessss lol

(and on THIS episode of Online Friends Are So Wholesome-)

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mhm yes

(we have a GLOBAL dilemma, aka 'why won't Aerin's pfp appear'-)

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August 10, 2021 18:25

*darkness
*spotlight on me
*evil voice
Well well well
HELLO THERE

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*darkness
*evil voice
*spotlight on moi
HELLO THERE
*spotlight breaks

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August 09, 2021 21:43

I love your new poem! <33 :DD

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August 10, 2021 15:45

ywww <33

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July 20, 2021 19:04

Hope you'll be back soon, Ame!
🎡You'll be back
🎡You will see
🎡You'll remember you belong to me
(Just kidding, King George quoting)

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:DDD thanks!!
XDD <33

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July 22, 2021 18:14

:) How are you?

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July 23, 2021 14:12

Nice! My brother has a play today. I'm going to finally see all those lines he memorized! He got a lead role.

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wow! good luck to him -> πŸ€

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July 20, 2021 00:15

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July 07, 2021 01:19

SUP SIS

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HELLO

did you draw your pfp? :O

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July 21, 2021 23:48

HIIIII HRU

yussss :D

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I'M GUD WBU

you're so good at drawing oml

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July 23, 2021 18:03

ALSO RLLY GOOD I’M ON PAGE 40 OF COLOR QUEST BOOK 3 NOW AFTER THREE DAYS SO THAT’S NICE LOL

ackkkk thank you

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OML GREAT JOB -> πŸ€πŸ€πŸ€

np <33 :o

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July 02, 2021 20:23

Poem = πŸ”₯

TBR TBR TBR

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Sia S
June 30, 2021 11:33

Part 2 out!

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I'll read it ASAP :)
you're leaving?
:< 😭😭😭😭

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Sia S
July 02, 2021 02:31

:(

I am, lol.

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Sia S
July 22, 2021 04:10

aRe yOU?

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fOr nOw bUt I'm gOiNg oN vAcAy fOr A wEeK sO I'LL dEpArt tHen

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June 29, 2021 13:50

Oh, man. You literally made me cry at the end. In a short story, you really made the reader (meeeeeee) love Olive. You captured Asa and June's sibling relationship super well, as well as the way they felt about their precious Olive. Also, your description of June painting was fantastical.
Keep writing!
-b r o n a n a

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June 29, 2021 21:21

No prob Ames! <3

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:DDD
luv your pfp lol XD

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July 02, 2021 12:04

shank you lol
McGonagall is a kweeeeeeeen

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yaaaaaaaaaasssss
have you watched all the Harry Potter movies?

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June 24, 2021 17:58

AME

AME

AME

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HELLO

YES

HACKCOUGHHACK YES

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June 27, 2021 19:22

HI

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GOOD DAY FELLOW HUMAN

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July 04, 2021 18:03

GOOD DAY TO YOU TO MADAME AMETHYST

AHHHHHHHHHH

FRIDAY. WAS. THE. BEST.

~SPICY SAUCY CHICKY WINGS~

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THIS IS ALSO OLD BUT IKKKK

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Sia S
June 24, 2021 05:39

"going a lil' inactive :)"

NOPE. :)

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June 22, 2021 15:52

Awwwww this was sad :(

*!!!Long Comment Alert!!!*

I love how you transitioned from her mixing the paint (I wonder if a recent conversation inspired that btw XD) and her painting the sunset to her brother playing with Olive. It was really cool to go back and forth, from the painting to the plot. Also, great descriptions for the paint! One of my favourite descriptions was:

"Dabbing with the lavender she made, June created the clouds that added embellishment to the sky. She then highlighted them with the pink, and after it had partly dried, used her brush to drag the clouds out a bit, making them look wispy."

Idk why the "drag the brush to make them look wispy" sPoKe To mE but yeah, that was really good XD

One point of cRiTiQuE was, well I mean I don't know why its bothering me, but this dialogue:

"β€œIf you go out there, Olive, you might get pulled in by the riptide. The riptide appears out of nowhere and just rips you into the ocean, pulling you under. If the riptide pulls you under, you won’t come back. Please, please don’t go into the ocean. I love you Olive.”"

It seems a bit long..and...rUnNy (XD). Maybe you can find a way to take out or decrease the number of sentences in there, either by merging two of them together (the magic of commas will prevail) or by adding some of that information earlier into the story, OR (lol so many ideas) by splitting it up into two sections of dialogue. Or ya know, you could just keep it :) idm :D

Anyway, the emotions were really sad, and I love the way you put the familiarity between the sky and the waves, "Not until the sky and the waves looked like sisters or brothers, cousins or nieces, until the sky and waves looked similar as family." that was a great metaphor!!! Like I was sayiing before about the emotions, I feel like you could have extended it a bit more (ik other ppl said it but yeah). Maybe add in a paragraph of pure shock, then them running into the waves or something, and finally realising that she was gone? It felt a bit early to say "β€œThere were so many things we should’ve done,” June said. β€œSo many things.”"

One more thing is, I love the names! but im freaking out because I JUST FINISHED A BOOK WHERE A GUY NAMED OLIVER AND A GIRL NAMED JUNE WERE THE MAIN CHARACTERS LOLOL. tElEpAtHy OoOoH mInD cOnNeCtIoN oOooOoH

Great job! :DD <3

(Oh and, almost forgot, but title ideas: Lost in the Tide [might be a bit dramatic, but the more dramatic the more people want to read it XD] Brushes and Bunnies?? [XD idk im bad at this] ORRRR Colours of the Tide/Colours of the Ocean. :D)

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eeeee I was afraid people would poke at me for run on sentences, so I'll do that :<
okay I'll add in another thingo eeee
ooh I like that one, I'll just take that~~
thx!

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June 23, 2021 17:36

I love how I type out a whole essay and I get two sentences in reply XD oh well it's still satisfying to look at my long comments XD

anywhoo, kk! No problemo :D Also why are you "might delete"-ing this story? its great!

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lol sorry ):)
yes it is

idk...idk. wrote it too fast?

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June 24, 2021 17:57

???? no its so good! don't delete it!

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August 09, 2021 12:34

Hi! Would you like to be in my Reedsycast? I know you're kinda inactive, so it's okay if you don't respond.

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:O yes I would love to!!! thanks for asking me <3

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August 10, 2021 13:21

https://docs.google.com/forms/d/e/1FAIpQLSfGEWmL2BlUwEvt8kKxgV1zp5XgPsc4BKje3T0R3HLz3TeRMQ/viewform
Here it is!

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August 14, 2021 16:06

Which one was you? Sorry, I have a lot of new ones LOL

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lol XD I think I was the noble with dark skin and green eyes...? I did it a few days ago so I forgot a bit lol

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Palak Shah
August 08, 2021 13:54

I loved the story and it was a great read and enjoyed the reading and it was constructed very well.
Well done :)))
Could you please read my story if possible :))

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Thank you!!! <333
:D
Yes! I'll get to it ASAP :)

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Palak Shah
August 10, 2021 18:14

Thanks :))

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Dhwani Jain
August 08, 2021 10:10

I am going to be taking a break from Reedsy...check my bio for more.

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oh, okay! Good luck with your UT's!!

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Dhwani Jain
August 10, 2021 04:39

Yeah, done with the first one, only 5 more to go.

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:DDD <333 wow 6 yikess

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Sia S
August 08, 2021 07:50

Ame. Your poem-

Wow.

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Philia S
July 28, 2021 02:52

Hey, tell as many people as you can that Reedsy's updating this Thursday-Friday and to remember your password, because after it updates you'll need to know it to prove it's you and we don't want people getting locked out.
So yeah. Please please PLEASE tell others about this!!!
(from Dhwani Jain)

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thanks!!! will do!

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Philia S
August 07, 2021 05:28

It already updated yesterday :D All the updates are in FAQ =)

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ooh thanks for the info :)

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TJ Squared
July 27, 2021 17:55

Hey, tell as many people as you can that Reedsy's updating this Thursday-Friday and to remember your password, because after it updates you'll need to know it to prove it's you and we don't want people getting locked out.
So yeah. Please please PLEASE tell others about this!!!
(from Dhwani Jain)

Also, I saw your new poem and wow. it's coolio

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:DD <33 thx!

thxxx <3

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TJ Squared
August 06, 2021 18:30

Actually, it is updated now Ehe

Ofc :D

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yeah lol
ahhh I have to read all ur stories soon

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TJ Squared
August 07, 2021 19:33

Take ur time, I’m going to be less active as well

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just finished a marathon :D wHeW

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July 26, 2021 01:42

aw great story, the ending was pretty sad :’c

I loved the way you wrote everything though, I think you showed how much June and Asa loved Oliver really well, and also how they mourned after

ten tears out of ten c': <3

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DANNY!

tysmmmm <33

πŸ₯° ty!

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August 06, 2021 22:47

no problemmm <333

nice pfp, the purple hair looks great! :o

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<3333

thx! I changed it a bit to look KiNdA look like me~~

you're baccccc

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August 08, 2021 10:40

it looks great!~

yass, so are youuuu :D

how's summer going for you? :)

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:DD

:DDDDDDDDDDD

really good, smoke iin the air is fiNaLLy gOnE lol :> hbu?

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Sia S
July 15, 2021 05:39

Chiaroscuro Pt 8!

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oop yes i have to catch up again XD

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Sia S
July 22, 2021 04:09

Nine too lol

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Sia S
July 23, 2021 03:41

hE

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Sia S
July 11, 2021 15:09

HI AME

WHAT UP

New story (involving hilarious grannies)
;)

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HELLO

XDD I'll read it ASAP

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Sia S
July 22, 2021 04:09

XD ty

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June 29, 2021 03:50

ok i swear i am going to read this and Driving in the Pink Rain but i was so stinkin busy today; i'll read both tomorrow <3

peace

-b r o n a n a

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<33

I love that nickname lol

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June 29, 2021 21:21

lol thanks
Saph came up with it
And now I call her s a p h a n a
XD

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ohml I love that XDDD

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July 02, 2021 12:08

XDDDDD

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could I have a banana name lol

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Iris Vader
June 23, 2021 18:21

Do not delete this! Its so good! I also like the title change!

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