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A Horrifying Night
“The storm is getting worse Ted. Are you sure you want to go to that funeral home tonight?”
“Yes, I'm getting rid of him.”
“How are you doing that? You know what he did to you the last time you tried. He really shook you up. You still carry the scars.”
“This time I’m ready for him,” Ted said as he slipped on his coat and hung his tool bag on his shoulders. After opening the door he looked at his wife Rose and said, “Wish me luck.”
“Be careful Honey.”
“Don’t worry. I’ll be alright. I got what he needs.” Ted said while patting his tool bag.
On the way to the funeral home, Ted was fighting the wind. Each time it was lightning Ted ducked. He didn’t fancy the lightning but at least it gave him some light. He started hearing noises in the woods, footsteps that seemed to be following him, dogs barking off in the distance, branches cracking, and wolves howling. He even thought he heard a voice saying, “You better be careful. Vampire Barney will get you.” He knew he shouldn’t have come out tonight but the job has to be done.
Ted felt a bit afraid but he knew he had all he needed to get that vampire. He’s done playing around. He has had nightmares and wakes up seeing this creature with long teeth and all-black horns looking down at him when he wakes in the night.
Just then Ted heard footsteps coming even closer behind him. He turned around to see what it was and it was Mega the Gypsy.
Ted stopped, and looked up at her, “What do you want from me?”
“I’m here to warn you to stop right where you are. Barney is dangerous. He will do anything he can to stop you from hurting him, " the witch flying around his head mentioned. Then don’t you remember how you used to pick on the kids in school then all through your life you were very unkind? Then you moved back into these woods because you didn’t want to live around people. You were hateful and you really haven’t changed.”
“Well, they picked on me the whole time I was growing up because I am cross-eyed and have a uni-brow. It got on my nerves. So just leave me alone. I have a job to do.”
The witch laughed and laughed. “I’m sure there is a great surprise awaiting you.”
“Just go,” yelled Ted, feeling upset at the witch. His plan was to get that awful evil thing that haunts him every night.
As he continued his walk he heard an awful growl. When he looked he saw the worst outrageous face he had ever seen. It started to come toward him. When he got close enough he grabbed Ted by the arm. “I think you better stop trying to destroy us.”
“That vampire needs to leave me alone and all his wicked partners, and stop using his ghost or any other creatures he terrifies me with. He’s made enough trouble and I’m going to destroy him.” Ted thought he saw a shadow in the woods. It had long teeth and a lot of hair with burning red eyes. What could that be? He thought to himself. He was glad when he finally got to the funeral home. The creepy crawlers and shadows didn’t make him feel very good at all. He thought, Once I’m done with my job, I’m going home and I won’t ever be troubled by this horrible thing again.
When he got to a coffin that had the words, Barney the old tormentor on it, he started opening the coffin cover-up slowly. What a squeaky sound it made. Enough to wake the dead. The cover was very heavy and dark brown. He started taking out his tools. First, he would try the dagger and place it on his chest. But when Ted placed it right above his heart as he was going for his hammer, while raising his arm, Barney reached up, grabbed his arm and dragged him inside the coffin. The vampire jumped out, shutting the coffin cover down and locked it up.
Ted started yelling, “Let me out of here! Let me out!” He kicked and kicked but no use.
It’s been 20 years since Ted has been in that coffin and he will never, ever get out.
His wife never knew what happened to him and after she cried for weeks she got a knock on the door.
No one ever comes here. she thought.
When she opened the door her eyes nearly popped out of her head. “Is that you, Sed?”
He never said anything at first.
“Where have you been?”
“Mom, I just got home. Where is father?”
“Teddy, is that you?” Being hard for her to see. She grabbed him around the neck and hugged him. You have been gone so long. Why did you leave us son?” she started to cry.
“Yes, too long I joined the army after I ran away from home and it took a long time before I decided to return. Now that I found you I want to apologize.”
“For what? Come in son.”
“Is father around?”
“I’m sorry son, your father went out to the funeral home one stormy night and never returned.”
“Why would he go to a funeral home, and at night?”
“Well, your father had worked as an undertaker for a few years and each night he would wake up terrified telling me he had seen creatures hanging over his bed. He swore to himself he was going to find him and put a dagger through his heart. I begged him not to go but he was determined he wasn’t stopping until he got him.”
“Was it nightmares he was having? You know papa always seemed like a troubled man.”
“Yes, and this is why he couldn’t get along with anyone. He always said no one liked him and always made fun of him while growing up, and actually all through his life and this is why after we married he wanted to buy this place here in the woods.”
“How long has he been gone?”
“Twenty years and I still think of him.”
“What do you think happened to him?”
“Either he got lost in the woods because he had to travel on foot, or the creatures he claimed were after him, killed him.”
“Do you believe there were creatures after him?” Teddy asked his mom.
“If you could have heard him holler in the night, it sounded like something was after him.”
“Have you seen any?”
“No, but he often said he was reaping what he sewed.”
“What did he mean?”
“He told me what goes around comes around, and now I fear he’s paying for it, and I don’t think he will ever be back.”
“Do you think if I go look for him I will find him?”
“Oh no, son, I lost your father and I might lose you. Please don’t go, Teddy.”
“Okay, it’s been so long he probably can’t be found.”
His Mother kissed and thanked him. “I love you, son.
“Son, I think whatever he saw in the night. It followed him and killed him,” said his mother.
“Mother, that is awful,” Ted cried.
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I really enjoyed the atmosphere with the stormy setting and vivid sensory details. The supernatural elements were seamlessly woven into the characters' emotional struggles. I appreciated the way you described Ted's struggles and motivations, making his journey and choices feel real and impactful. The twist at the end was surprising and chilling. Great work!
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