The Phoenix (Part 2 WoE)

Coming of Age Fantasy Friendship

Written in response to: "Write about someone who is given a bird for the holidays but doesn’t know how to take care of it." as part of My True Love Gave to Me.

Part 2 of the War of the Elements

(Read part one first)


Luke Alverra’s POV


Only the royalty had the powers of the elements. That’s why they were so formidable. But could a regular peasant have the powers of the elements? No. That’s what my intuition tells me. But I’m the complication. The outlier. I have the power to make fire obey my will. However, sometimes it gets out of my control, and I accidentally burn things I don’t mean to.


So now I stared at this bird which my brother had given me. I supposed it was some sort of Christmas present, but a feeble attempt at one. It was evidently the worst one he had bred.


“Too runty. Like you.” But I knew he didn’t mean it. In fact, I had strong limbs with a lanky build. I had dark brown hair which covered my gold-flecked eyes. My brother in the other hand was buff with muscles that popped out protrudingly. So yes, I was a little frail, but I couldn’t eat much food without burning it. 


“I’ll try my best not to burn you alright?”

“Wheeeeewhooo!” It whistled indignantly. I laughed at him. 

“I’m Luke. Perhaps we can be friends, eh?” It felt good talking to a living thing. I had no friends, but that was partly my fault. I was so scared of my own powers that I wasn’t even sure I could have friends without accidentally burning them.   And what good would friends be? If I told them my secret, they would shy away from me, or even report me. No, better to keep my secret safe even if I stay lonely.


“I honestly don’t know how to take care of you, little friend.” I had tried feeding him roots, but he’d turned away coughing. But I had to feed him something. If I didn’t, he would die. So at dinnertime, I took the highly flammable foods that I couldn’t eat and fed them to the little bird. He seemed to like it! 


Throughout the next few days, our bond grew. I began to call him, Phoenix, due to the vibrant colors of red, orange, yellow and gold that made up his feathers. Much of my time, while I was reading, (surprisingly, books didn’t burn under my touch) Phoenix would perch on my shoulder, nuzzling me at times. It was like having a real friend for once. 


Phoenix grew fatter and his coat of feathers started to shine. He was beginning to have hold over his wings. Some times while I walked through the streets of the town, Phoenix could fly jerkily above me. At night he would cuddle on my chest, with his wing over his body. At these times I was most self conscious of my powers. I couldn’t sleep at all, for fear of burning him. 


One morning, while Phoenix went on a warmup flight around the house, I heard my brother and dad laughing maliciously.


“Ay! The runt has grown fat! He can be our Christmas feast. Tell Luke to stop reading and hurry up and skin the bird.” 


The runt. The runt has grown fat? Then it dawned on me. The runt was Phoenix. 


“Angus! Stop! No! Phoenix!” I arrived breathlessly at the kitchen where my brother held Phoenix by the legs. My heart stopped. Phoenix struggled and wriggled around, resisting. I watched with horror as my brother brought the blade down on Phoenix’s neck. 


So I did the only thing that I could possibly do. Before my eyes, a streaking fireball zoomed towards my brother. It hit him in the chest and he screamed and dropped Phoenix. 


The fire spread across Angus’ chest. My father watched with horror.


“A monster. You are a monster!” He shook a shaking finger at me with anger in his eyes. 


“My son is a monster! No, you are no son of mine! You have killed my son, you monster.”


By then, Phoenix had taken flight. He was fine. Phoenix was still alive. He circled above me and flew ahead. When I didn’t move, he circled back again and hovered above me. He wanted me to follow him. I slung my backpack across my back, hoping it had some books in it. 


As Phoenix led the path I ran behind him. I wasn’t sure for how long we ran, but soon we reached a forest. I wasn’t even sure which town we were in anymore. All I could think was that I had no family anymore. My father disowned me and I had killed my brother. My mother had died before I could remember her, as was normal in such conditions. I didn’t feel sad. I had Phoenix, and that was enough.


Suddenly, Phoenix stopped and flew onto a branch. I heard a heavy crackling of leaves and twigs from close by. I pressed myself close to a tree trunk and tried to remain quiet. The person moved even closer. He or she was right in front of the tree I was hiding behind. Please do t come any closer, I prayed.


“Shoot. I knew I shouldn’t have worn this darn dress. Dumb ball gown.” It was a girl who sounded like she was relatively my age. Perhaps she wasn’t dangerous. I was starting to calm down when she walked right in front of me. Both of us screamed at the same time. I shot fire, she shot water. The two elements dissolved each other. I stared at her in shock, and she regarded me with confusion. 


“Who are you?” We asked at the same time. 


“I come in peace.” We both declared at the same time. 


In bewilderment, we started to laugh. It felt good to laugh after all that had happened. She must’ve gone through something too. 


“I’m Luke.” I said.

“And I’m prin-  I mean, I’m Mira.” 

“Hi. You tell me about yourself first. No secrets to keep anymore.” She nodded, and began. 

“I’m Princess Mira Nobelius and my father has just been abducted...”

As we talked, Phoenix circled the air around us and landed on my shoulders.


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Heyyy! Thanks for reading! Kate’s character is coming out and I’m really rushing so I’m gonna edit this part later... 

Posted Dec 25, 2020
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I really enjoy this story a lot!

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✰ Jennie ✰
December 25, 2020 17:33

Wow thanks! omg praise from the top 10

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Oh my gosh!! Thank you so much! :)

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Akshaya Sutrave
December 31, 2020 17:34

Hi Jennie!
I wanted to inform you that I joined the Marshmallows, too.

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✰ Jennie ✰
December 31, 2020 19:15

YAAAAAAS! WE AUTOMATIC BESTIES!!!!!!! You can call me Jen if you want :D

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Akshaya Sutrave
January 01, 2021 04:07

Yessss!! Sure!! :D

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WHERE 3rd PART I NEEEEEEEED IT

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✰ Jennie ✰
December 29, 2020 22:35

It's Kate's part, and for your backstory, you are the only one in the bloodline with apparently no powers, but it turns out that your powers are the most POWERFUL and most DANGEROUS ones in centuries, so that's why it took so long for them to mature... ok?

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GASP
TAHNKS YOU SO MUCH.

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December 30, 2020 16:17

This is an intriguing story.

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When story bring story.

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✰ Jennie ✰
December 30, 2020 01:20

soon bring story

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That's how I was when the library closed after I returned my books.
I hugged the first book I took out through "drive-up pick up", which was Harry Potter ad the Order of the Phoenix.

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Hehehehehehehehheehehehehehe. XD

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✰ Jennie ✰
January 08, 2021 15:15

story needed and story arrived :)

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✰ Jennie ✰
January 08, 2021 15:15

story needed and story arrived :)

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✰ Jennie ✰
January 08, 2021 15:15

story needed and story arrived :)

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✰ Jennie ✰
January 08, 2021 15:15

story needed and story arrived :)

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✰ Jennie ✰
January 08, 2021 15:15

story needed and story arrived :)

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✰ Jennie ✰
January 08, 2021 15:15

story needed and story arrived :)

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✰ Jennie ✰
January 08, 2021 15:15

story needed and story arrived :)

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COME BACcCcCc
😩😭

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✰ Jennie ✰
December 29, 2020 22:39

*dramatic entrance

power is back!!!!!!!! (so I don't have to type on my phone lol)

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YAYYAAYAYYAYAYAYAYAYAYYYAYA

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Mira Caplan
December 27, 2020 23:44

I GOT DOWNVOTED

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✰ Jennie ✰
December 29, 2020 22:40

nooooooooooooooooooooo marshmallow police have been enacted!

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MARSHMALLOWS TO THE RESCUE!!!!!!

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Kate Reynolds
December 27, 2020 20:23

JENNIE SOMEONE DOWNVOTED US! (Mostly you and I got you back to 1000)

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✰ Jennie ✰
December 27, 2020 21:31

You da best!!!! Don’t fear your character’s backstory coming out when our house’s WiFi gets back (I’m typing this on my phone using hotspot)

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Kate Reynolds
December 27, 2020 21:45

Omg did your house have a power outage or something??
And THANKS!!!

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✰ Jennie ✰
December 27, 2020 23:30

Yah a big rainstorm but hopefully I can get you and Celeste in the story with these prompts

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Kate Reynolds
December 28, 2020 00:53

Oh that sucks. It's np! Take your time! :D

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Mira Caplan
December 26, 2020 16:35

YESSSSSSSSSS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! You captured his personality PERFECTLY!!!!! AND THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR THAT LITTLE CONVO AT THE END WITH MEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! You're improving SO much!!!!!!!!!

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December 25, 2020 15:58

NOICE! luke and Phoenix have a nice relationship, and OH BOY i agree with pRinCeSs Mira on the gowns.
I.
Can't.
Do.
Gowns.
😁
- Amethyst

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✰ Jennie ✰
December 25, 2020 17:32

thank you thank you!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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Mira Caplan
December 26, 2020 16:35

YESSSSSSSSSSSSSSS!!!!!!!!!! Me, neither.

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WoW!

Was not expecting him to murder his brother for trying to kill his bird.

Just wondering-- could the dad get kind of sad as well, since the brother seems to be his favorite son?

Good work!

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December 31, 2020 17:04

Varsha Vimal and Jade Kingsley are Mallows now!!!

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✰ Jennie ✰
December 31, 2020 02:05

hi friend! i'm having a writer's blooooooooooOOOOOOOOOOooooooooockkkkkkkkkk

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✰ Jennie ✰
December 31, 2020 02:10

i found some potential downvoters i think!!! they are pretty spammy, so I may be judging or just prejudging... but idk

https://blog.reedsy.com/creative-writing-prompts/author/arjun-chen/

he and his friend draco malfoy

https://blog.reedsy.com/creative-writing-prompts/author/draco-malfoy/

maybe im overreacting... but they seem a little sus

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Can I see the story so far?
TeLl mE

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✰ Jennie ✰
December 31, 2020 02:11

pErHaPs

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When Story come tho?
*sorry*

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✰ Jennie ✰
January 01, 2021 16:48

today!

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Kate Reynolds
December 30, 2020 20:57

NEW STORY! :D

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✰ Jennie ✰
December 30, 2020 20:58

Omg yayayayaya

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Kate Reynolds
December 30, 2020 20:59

:DDD

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Sia S
December 30, 2020 11:18

I FOUND THE 2ND PART OF MY SOUL!!

IMMA MARSHMALLOW TOO!!

XDD

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✰ Jennie ✰
December 30, 2020 11:53

YAAAAAS LETS GOOOOO MARSHMALLOW

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Sia S
December 30, 2020 12:43

YASSSSS GURLLLLLLL

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December 29, 2020 21:20

All of your stories are up-voted!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :DDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD

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✰ Jennie ✰
December 29, 2020 22:40

THANK YOU SO MUCH MUCH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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December 29, 2020 22:45

YOU ARE SO WELCOME!

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December 29, 2020 21:01

NEW STORY

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✰ Jennie ✰
December 29, 2020 22:40

going there!

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December 28, 2020 22:19

JENNIE. I HAVE NEWS. CELESTE AND I HAVE DECIDED TO FORM THE MARSHMALLOW DOWNVOTE POLICE TO UPVOTE PEEPS WHEN THEY DOWNVOTED. ARE YOU IN, FELLOW MALLOW?????

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✰ Jennie ✰
December 28, 2020 02:32

Hiiii!

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Mira Caplan
December 27, 2020 22:57

JEN PART 8 IS OUTTTTTT!!!!!!!! You aren't in it YET, but I have this genius idea for your character. (And Nanika's) ENJOYYYYY

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Mira Caplan
December 27, 2020 22:58

Btw, it's REAL dramatic and suspenseful and etc. :)

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✰ Jennie ✰
December 27, 2020 23:30

Omg yaaaaas me going

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Mira Caplan
December 27, 2020 23:31

I SHIP THERAYA WAAAAAAAAAAAYYYYYY TOO MUCH

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✰ Jennie ✰
December 27, 2020 23:37

BUT ME TOOOOOOOO

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Mira Caplan
December 27, 2020 23:31

I SHIP THERAYA WAAAAAAAAAAAYYYYYY TOO MUCH

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Kate Reynolds
December 27, 2020 17:48

OMG THIS WAS SO GOOD!!! I loved the fantasy feel of it and how Luke and Mira came together at the end. GOOD JOB!!! :DD

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✰ Jennie ✰
December 29, 2020 22:40

yayayayayayyay I've been typing on my phone since power was out at my house sorry!

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December 25, 2020 16:39

I LOVED IT!!!!!!!! Great job!!!!

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✰ Jennie ✰
December 25, 2020 17:17

really? do you like your character?

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December 25, 2020 17:34

Yeah!!! He's quirky!!! Maybe try to reveal some of his traits and the situation as the story progresses.

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✰ Jennie ✰
December 25, 2020 17:44

yeah... i wrote the story kinda rushed but im going back to fix it!

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December 25, 2020 17:59

Good for you!!

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✰ Jennie ✰
January 08, 2021 15:48

lukie check out my prophecy for the war of the elements!

“The men of this land blessed with the elements
But they were used unwisely; for greed and torment
Now trouble descends upon city and land
Seven youngsters will save you; but not one you shall forget

One whose father was stolen by the sons of the dark
Another blessed with powers of fire with my consent
A third, female warrior who great challenges underwent
Two sisters, separated across time strange powers present
Sand forges one girl whose powers will be of test
And the daughter of earth confined in cement

Find them you shall, and unite them you must
For the fate of this land lies in their trust
Each holds power and aversion to unjust
These virtues we need to save this land of us

Each power will be extracted and formed into one
The merging of elements and all sins will be undone
But by then it may be too late to save everyone
So hurry, dear child, the War has begun”

its dopey and doesn't really rhyme but do you like it? (and suggest better rhyming words)

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January 08, 2021 15:56

The man blessed with elements of this fair land
Shall unwisely silence the ferine strand
Trouble's descent upon all alike
Seven will save you, seven will strike

One whose father turned to the west
Another with powers of fire hence blessed
A third warrior with opposition abound
The two sisters of which no ones like can be found
Sand forges the girl who will be tried
And the daughter of Earth ceases to hide

Find them you shall, and unite them you must
For the fate of your land lies in their trust
Each holds power uncorrupted by vice
The seven shall serve the image of paradise

Each power extracted and forged into one
The pain of elements and sins to be undone
Time cannot be disregarded
The quest is not for the weakhearted.

The seven shall rise if you succeed
And bring about a newer breed
Your world will be transformed anew
But all depends on your hearts beating true

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✰ Jennie ✰
January 08, 2021 15:58

tf???????? how are you so goooooooooooooodddddd!?!?!!??! omg i quit you just made that up in like 5 mins and I spent the last week thinking of that. damn.

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January 08, 2021 16:00

Lol your thing helped a lot!!! I guess I just have read a lot of old prophecies XD

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Corey Melin
January 24, 2021 02:35

Good read. The fantasy element is superb. He has a sad beginning but I have a feeling it gets much better

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Sunny 🌼
January 23, 2021 00:35

YAY FRIENDSHIP! And Luke's in the series too, cool!

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✰ Jennie ✰
January 23, 2021 00:37

COOLIO!!!!!! GLAD YOU LIKE IT!

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January 13, 2021 00:46

YAY!!!!!!!!!! PART TWO IS JUST AS GOOD OR MAYBE EVEN BETTER THAN PART ONE!!!!!!!!!!!!!! YAYYYYYYY YOU ARE A BEAUTIFUL WRITER AND YOU HAVE A WONDERFUL WRITING STYLE! I CAN'T WAIT TO READ MY PART!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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✰ Jennie ✰
January 13, 2021 00:58

hehehehehe luke the fire boy... THANKS YOU SO MUCHHHHHHHH OMG YOU TOTALLYY DESERVE TO BE IN MY STORY FOR YOU KIND WORDS!!!!!

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January 13, 2021 00:59

YOU'RE WELCOME SO MUCH! NO, I DON'T, BUT THANK YOU SO MUCH STILL!

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