Submitted to: Contest #301

I Left You What You Didn't Sign Up For

Written in response to: "Write a story that includes the line “This isn’t what I signed up for.”"

African American Christian Drama

She is standing on the sidewalk with a suitcase, a tote bag, and an envelope. She continued to stand looking at this house. Her face didn’t show any expression. It was as if she knew how to keep her composure in a place of indecisiveness. The more she stood there looking at the house. The bigger the house appealed to be bigger and uglier. It was all in her mind. She knows what she has to do. This was just unfair after all she had been through. 

What she didn’t know was that a woman was looking at her standing on the sidewalk with her suitcase, tote bag, and the envelope in her hand. The woman was just observing her. The woman couldn’t understand why she would just stare at this house for over thirty minutes. The other people in the house started to become curious about why the woman was looking out the window for so long. The other guest in the house figured out what she was looking at: that woman. They noticed a person across the street was watching her too. They were not watching for the wrong reasons. The woman saw he was approaching the woman from behind to steal her suitcase. All the people in the house rushed to the door, They yelled, “Blue J, we see you. You know we are not afraid. Go ahead and try us.” One of the women pointed at something in the corner. A camera was in the corner of the house. If BlueJ stole her suitcase, there would have been proof. The girl who was standing on the sidewalk. She was completely lost and overwhelmed. Until she noticed what the woman was pointing at, the camera was on the side of the house. All the women grabbed the woman's things off the sidewalk, they escorted her into the house. The woman could tell she was in a fog. They just let her sit in silence until she was ready to speak. The house mother, Ms. Ella Rose, was about seventy years of age. The way Ms. Ella Rose looked like the world could tell she was not the sharpest knife in the drawer, but you could not get anything past her. She could find a rat hiding spot. Ms. Ella Rose walked to the front of the house after she heard the commotion. She recognized the woman. Ms. Ella Rose did not say a word. She sat in the chair across from the woman. The girl immediately came out of her fog. She said,” Moma”.

“Meela”, Ms. Ella Rose replies calmly. The woman's facial expression went from no expression to angry in less than thirty seconds. “This isn’t what I signed up for”, replies Meela. 

Ms. Ella Rose didn’t say a word. She just smiled and kept it moving throughout the house. She had to finish cleaning and cooking before eight o’clock. She had to rise early in the morning to assist the ladies to cook breakfast and do her business. 

Ms. Ella Rose had developed a transitional house for women. It was for pregnant teen mothers, getting out of jail, and the homeless. Meela was a toddler when Ms. Ella Rose opened this house. Ms. Ella Rose was a single mother of three children. She had already broken the odds when she opened this house. Meela’s brother and sister were not angry with Ms. Ella Rose is like Meela. Meela wanted her mother’s attention. She wanted to share her mother with no one. Meela's anger made her act out. She got a criminal record. Meela was released early after serving three of her five-year sentence. 

One of the ladies in the house did not like how Meela spoke to Ms. Ella Rose. She walked softly over to Meela. She stood in front of her. “Your mother didn’t sign up for you to be a rude, disrespectful, and angry jailbird”, said Linda. One of the girls sneaked. Meela threw a pillow from the chair at her. Ms. Ella Rose did not see what happened, but she yelled from the other room. “Meela, apologize and don’t throw anything else. Linda, I do not need your assistance. God is bigger and stronger than you. He will handle Meela.” Meela rolled her eyes and fell back in the chair. “Don’t you fall back in my chair like that”, yelled Ms. Ella Rose. All the ladies had a look like Let's get out of dodge. They ran upstairs to their rooms. Meela was sitting in the living room with her suitcase, the tote bag, and the envelope. As silence continued to speak without saying a word. She heard her mother in the back of the house, humming and thanking God. It was better than hearing the noise, depression, oppression, and chaos of the prison walls. She would not admit this truth to her mother. She grabbed her suitcase, tote bag,  and the envelope and walked downstairs to the basement. She looked at the pictures of her childhood. She laughed and cried. She heard a big thud and a scream. She ran upstairs from the basement. She saw her mother lying on the floor unconscious. One of the ladies in the house dialed 911. Meela's brother was coming through the door for his regular visit with his mother. He screamed and wept so hard he just fell on top of his mother. One of the ladies in the house pulled him off her. Meela finally came to herself. She began to give her mother CPR. Her brother looked at Meela and smiled with tears falling from his eyes. This is my sister, the nurse. EMT came through the door. They were given praise for doing such good work. Ms. Ella Rose had a pulse. If Meela had not come to herself in just the nick of time. She might be burying her mother. She didn’t need that experience after being in prison all this time. Meela told herself. I did not sign up for this, but I am in the right place. From that day forward, Meela learned from those ladies each day. Ms. Ella Rose had a stroke. She could not run the house anymore. Ms. Ella Rose's children ran the house. Ms. Ella’s vision of leaving her children this house to help women was being fulfilled. Meela’s dream to be a nurse had begun. 

Posted May 08, 2025
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Akihiro Moroto
03:22 Oct 29, 2025

Such a powerful story about mother's unconditional love, forgiveness, and redemption. How often do wisdom from our elders seem to fall on deaf ears- Only for that seed to gradually take root and at the right moment-come to fruition? So much heart in every word, every sentence. Thank you very much for sharing your writing, Mellanie!

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Grace Kelley
18:05 Oct 21, 2025

What worked well in my opinion:

1.Strong Emotional Core, The prose seems a bit rough, but the emotion is clear and powerful

2. Moral and Hopeful Tone,
I got a moral takeaway- redemption, faith, and second chances.
I got an uplifted feeling after reading it.

I liked the title like line “I did not sign up for this, but I am in the right place” , very quotable.

3. Some Strong, Natural Moments

A few lines that I thought stood out
“Silence continued to speak without saying a word.” poetic and reflective(nicely done)

“If Meela had not come to herself in just the nick of time…” I really liked that phrasing.

The detail of her laughing and crying at old photos, humanized her and softened the mood.
(These moments made it feel like you have the instinct for emotional pacing.)

✏️ What Could Be Improved(in my opinion):

Maybe a clearer beginning-middle-end rhythm, maybe one or two sentences to set the scene before conflict starts. Might be nice…
it jumps straight into the action without much grounding, which can confuse some readers.

2.Show vs. Tell
It tells what happened instead of showing how it felt.
Like when it says-

“Meela’s anger made her act out. She got a criminal record.”

That’s factual, but what IF it went something like:

“Meela’s anger used to burn holes through reason. It sent her down the kind of path that ends with handcuffs.”

Some final thoughts,
It’s a moving story that feels personal….. like something written from experience or empathy rather than fiction for fiction’s sake. It feels like it values redemption, faith, or second chances. So well done 👍❤️

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Mellanie Crouell
22:27 Oct 24, 2025

Grace, first thank you! Second, I love how you broken everything down that I can go and consider turning this into a book or maybe something else. Thank you again!

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Zelene McBride
15:10 May 25, 2025

Hi Mellanie.

The core of this story is rich with emotion and inspiration. It’s beautifully conceptualized.

To make this story sing, play with different grammatical styles to let the reader understand the nuances within a scene. Reconfirm some of your word choices to ensure that is the word you want to use.

This is a really wonderful story and it can definitely be further expanded into a longer work, if you so desire.

Best,
Zelene

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