Hello

Crime Romance Suspense

This story contains themes or mentions of physical violence, gore, or abuse.

Written in response to: "Write a story whose first and last words are the same." as part of Final Destination.

"Hello"

Such a simple word; but when their no response it's like a empty room said Jeff McKinney as he closed the door to house he once shared with his wife and kids.

Going back to driveway where his car was parked Jeff McKinney gets back into it and heads back to work.

To think that he bought this Mercedes Benz for the family to enjoy with but that's another story.

Working for the Boston Chronicles for last ten years had brought Jeff McKinney joy as well as pain.

Okay enough going down memory lane said Jeff to himself as he parks his car.

Exiting the car and going into the building Jeff McKinney uses his badge to clear security and goes into his office.

The joy of being on the first floor not to mention his fear of heights.

Thank God his boss Harry Lane understood his fears and was willing to work with him.

Sitting behind his desk as his secretary Alice Long brings in his coffee to drink.

Alice Long waits until her boss takes his first sip before asking the question.

"Well says Alice did you asked her"?

Knowing that she meant well but didn't feel like discussing his life right now Jeff McKinney only shook his head as he began typing.

"How do you plan to bring your family back together if you're afraid to talk said Alice"?

"We had been through the whole speech for weeks only for you to come back with a head shake"

About to go into another serum before Jeff McKinney finally gave a real answer.

"She wasn't there Alice so I left and will try again if you don't mind says Jeff McKinney".

"You should said that in the beginning said Alice Long".

Turning over today's files along with some messages Alice Long leaves the office.

Glad of the silence and the opportunity to catch up with articles he writes.

Jeff McKinney decides to reads some of his messages left by business and new customer.

Some of the messages were questionable but than the one that stands out.

Quickly putting the message into his phone Jeff McKinney hurry to leave the office.

"Is everything okay said Alice Long"?

"Nothing to worry about Alice only something I need to check on".

This is a lead into the missing housewife that the police had given up on thought Jeff McKinney to himself.

As he heads back to his car to take a long drive down the road.

After about a half hour Jeff McKinney wonder if this was a waste of time until he spots Linda Tyrus car.

Parking a little further down the road Jeff McKinney gets out of his car and walks back.

Checking his cellphone for battery life and location alert.

Jeff McKinney gets closer to the old house only to see more than Linda Tyrus but his wife and kids.

Now this journey has become personal as Jeff McKinney dials 911 to tell the police of his discovery.

The Detective over the case inform him not to enter the house and they were on their way.

Saying okay just to get the detective off the phone as Jeff finds a entry threw the back of the house.

Once in Jeff McKinney heads towards the living room where he saw his family and Linda Tyrus begin held.

Trying to get his wife attention as well as keep his where about hidden.

Jeff was about to throw one of his ink pen at his wife when he felt the cold pressed of the gun on his head.

"Well Mr. McKinney we're going to call you but since you're here it's save us the trouble said the kidnapper".

"Look I've money so please just don't hurt my family says Jeff".

"We know you have money and glad you willing to give it up let's just hope Mrs Tyrese family feels the same way".

And that's when Jeff McKinney realizes the kidnapper mistakes.

They thought they had the Heiress Pamela Tyrese his wife college roommate.

Looking at them from a distance and in the dark he could see the mistake took place.

Linda Tyrus was the nanny to the Heiress kids.

Not about to tell them of their mistakes Jeff goes into living room as instructed it.

"How is it McKinney response to his ransom note and not Heiress family says the other kidnapper "?

"Probably because he doesn't have my secretary said Jeff "

"Be quiet and let us think said the kidnapper "

Hoping the cops arrive before he figure out the answer to that thought Jeff McKinney.

"Do you have a plan said his wife; as she holds the kids closer?"

"No I'm just going to play it by the seat of my pants says Jeff"

Turning his attention back on the kidnapper Jeff recognizes that one of the kidnapper is nervous.

"Hey I can write a check for my family now and you can disappear says Jeff McKinney".

Seeing him ready to take the offer the two argued about it.

"How much can you write it for said the nervous kidnapper?"

"I said no as he walks back towards the other kidnapper ".

And that's when it happened the nervous kidnapper fired two shots into his partner chess.

As he hits the floor the nervous kidnapper walks towards his body and stands over him.

"That's your problem you have always been to greedy".

"Money is money when you have none and shot him in the head"

Turning back around to address Mr. McKinney is when Jeff takes his chance to take the gun.

The struggle seems to last forever as the two women and kids watch them fight.

A shot goes off as the cops rush through the door.

"I got it says Jeff as he raised up the gun until he sees blood on his hand and realizes it's his blood ".

Passing out and hitting the floor as cop and family rush to his aid.

Several hours later and recovery from operation of the removal of the bullet from his gut.

"Hello, Hello, Jeff hears as his wife enters the room."

Such simple word yet so powerful when you can receive a response.

"Hello says Jeff McKinney".

Posted Mar 18, 2026
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11 likes 2 comments

Jonathan Bennett
22:10 Mar 24, 2026

Cool flip from first lines to last, tying the theme together.

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Lorraine Wade
22:18 Mar 24, 2026

Thank you very much; it's a push to get from work and start on my prompt but I'm determined to get published.

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