The Whispers Of Intuition

Fiction Suspense Thriller

This story contains themes or mentions of physical violence, gore, or abuse.

Written in response to: "Set your story in an empty hospital, school, or office building." as part of Liminal Spaces with Shaelin Bishop.

As I slowly began to open my eyes, I felt my throat gasping for air. I felt hands reaching around my throat, until I heard..“Wake Up” a whisper in my ear. I quickly shot up and turned to my side to see nothing. I placed my hand on my chest, as I looked around to see where the heck I was. Am I in some sort of classroom? There are desks sitting in rows and a white board upfront, but no posters. “OH MY” I shouted as I gripped my head. I feel so dizzy and lightheaded, but why? Why am I in a classroom and where’s…. I quickly paused as I stood up. WHERE IS EVA? I quickly grabbed the desk as I felt my balance begin to tilt. “Stand down.” I heard the whisper again as I turned around hoping it was Eva, there was nothing there again. “LUNA!?” I heard someone shout my name. I felt my heart racing, trying to recollect my mind. What is going on? The door bust opened and a goddess walked in. GOD WAS SHE STUNNING…She had short wavy blond hair, beautiful tint pink lips, fair skin and deep green eyes. She looks like she came out of a fairytale book. Those eyes quickly darted to me and her eyes gleamed with tears. “LUNA, OH MY STARS. ARE YOU OKAY?” She said as she walked towards me. Why do I feel the need to run? I tried stepping back but I couldn’t hold my balance. “L-Luna? It's me…O-Opal. D-D-Do you not R-r-remember..” Opal stuttered as she paused in her step. L-Look I do not know what is going on, I need to find my sister, Eva and I don’t know where I am at. I said as Opal took a deep breath. “It's really getting to you, we are in Eva’s school, this is Mr. G classroom.” Opal said as I snapped my finger. It started to come back to me, I came to the high school to pick her up. We are at Zion High School, home of the Tigers. I said as Opal slowly nodded. I paused. Wait what is really getting to me? I questioned as Opal looked towards my stomach. As I looked down, I saw blood all over my shirt. Opal came closer and lifted up my shirt and we both gasped. I WAS SHOT? HOW? I quickly felt my breathing get slower as I couldn’t hold myself anymore. “LUNA” I heard Opal shouted as I felt like I was falling backwards in slow motion. I couldn’t keep my eyes open.

“Luna?” I heard a faint voice. “Lunnna.” The voice began to get louder. O-Opal I muttered as I tried to open my eyes. “OPAL? WHO THE HECK IS OPAL?” I heard the voice shout as I began to squint and saw bright lights. “Come on Luna, stop playing the phone ringing for you.” The voice said as I fully opened my eyes and saw no one. I quickly sat up and felt my head still banging. What the heck, where am I now? I thought as I looked around. Okay I am on the floor. I turn around and I am in a conference room? I see the long table and the bullet board. As I stood up, I quickly looked at my stomach. Okay good, no blood and no bullet wound. I feel fine. I need to find Eva. As I stepped out of the conference room, I realized I was in an office where there were cubicles and I could hear the computers typing but no one was there….? I cleared my throat. Hello? Anyone here I said as all you could hear was the silence. Urgh so creepy. As I began looking around I saw a bunch of paperwork and contracts everywhere. I suddenly heard ringing. “It's for you.” I heard that whispered again. I quickly looked around and like always no one. I tried following the ringing but I felt like I was going in a circle like a loop. “Hurry” I heard the whisper again as I began running, but couldn’t find where the freaking ringing was coming from. GOD FREAKING SHIT WHERE IS THIS RINGING COMING FROM. I saw a light shine in the corner of my eyes. I quickly whipped my head and saw the phone that was ringing. I felt my heart feel heavy as I walked towards the phone. I took a deep breath and answered it. Hello? I said as I heard her voice sounded so distressed. “L-Luna.” I heard Eva whisper. Hey sweetie, where are you? What's going on, I feel like I am losing my mind. I said as all I heard was mumbled from her. E-Eva I can’t hear you, I said as I suddenly began to feel my heart drop. All I heard again was mumbled before I heard the dial tone. I felt tears running down my face. I slowly touched my face, confused? WHY AM I CRYING? WHERE THE HELL IS EVA? I shouted as I slammed the phone down and threw the phone against the wall. “Run” I heard the voice whisper as I looked around quickly and saw a tall shadow figure at the end of the hall. What in the world? I thought as I felt my heart racing and my ankle begin to throb. The shadow began laughing menacingly, giving me a fear I never felt. No, I can’t be afraid. I swallow my fear. WHERE IS EVA, I shouted as the tall shadow ran towards me, I quickly shield myself as I felt it passed through me. 

“LUNA!” I heard her voice again. “LUNA PLEASE.” I can hear Eva shouting but can’t bring myself to open my eyes. “YOU SHOULD HAVE LISTEN.” What should I have listened to Eva? I tried speaking, but I couldn’t for some reason. Why does it feel like I am in a loop? I don’t remember anything. I feel so helpless and so fucking confused. I quickly gasped as I began blinking trying to see where I was at now. I am back in a classroom? GOD FUCKING SHIT, my head is getting worser. “LUNA” I heard Eva shout as I looked around. I am in a fucking hallway now. I am getting tired of this shit. As I stood, I felt like I couldn’t catch my breath. “LUNA.’ I heard Eva shout again as I began looking right and left. “Left.” I heard the whisper again. I quickly began running left down the hallway, I felt pain in my ankle and couldn’t catch my breath again. I touched my stomach and there was no bullet wound. I felt like I was running down this hallway for hours. “She in Room 406” I heard the whispered again as I began looking at the doors. I am in the 300’s. I am coming Eva, just hold on. Am I going insane? I feel like I am stuck in the 300’s? I quickly stopped to catch my breath. I am stuck, why is this happening? I began breaking down as I got to my knees. PLEASE, WHERE IS ROOM 416? I shouted as I grabbed my thighs. I suddenly heard a door creaking. I quickly looked up and saw the door open. I wiped my nose and felt hope when I saw the number above the door say 416. I quickly began to run towards the room as I started hearing loud bangs. Come on Luna, you're almost there, go, go go. I begin hyping myself up as I enter the classroom. EVA?! I shouted as I felt everything in me break, when I entered and saw nothing but a hospital room? 

I tried to go back but there was no door.The room had a curtain covering the bed of I guess the patient. It was a regular hospital room.. I heard crying as I slowly turned around. Wait, I touch my head, my stomach and ankle. No headache,no bullet wound, no pain? This is getting to fucking weird for me. “Pull the curtain" I heard the whispered as I felt a hand on my shoulder. I felt a shiver go down my spine, afraid to look for some reason. “Go on, pull the curtain.” I heard the whisper again as I slowly began walking towards the curtain, already feeling the tears falling down. I can’t pull it, I know it's going to be her. I felt my heart aching with the pain of seeing Eva. “PULL IT.” I heard the whisper shouted as the grip on my shoulder got rougher. I quickly pulled the curtain and my breathing became unstable. I quickly turned around and saw my dead mother gripping my shoulder. NO. NO. NO. THIS ISN’T RIGHT. THAT, I CAN NOT BE DEAD. HOW. I said as I collapsed to the floor, as I saw myself in the hospital bed with tubes and everything. Eva was beside the bed crying. “You did the best you could sweetheart.” My mother said as she hugs me and everything fucking thing came flooding back. EVERY FUCKING SINGLE THING….

I was at the office over working and my co-worker came to get me, because the phone had rang for me. I kept putting it off until my co-worker had said it was Eva. I answered it. She whispered my name.She begged me to come get her, she was in room 406, but I was busy with work and heard room 416. She said her school was on lockdown. There was a school shooting, the police had already confirmed 4 dead. I ran out of the office and twisted my ankle. I kept running till I was out of breath. I knew a way to get inside the school in order to save Eva. I went into the wrong room. I went into Mr. G classroom. That stupid teacher left the door unlocked and unblocked. He wasn’t even there. Those kids were scared shitless, but that was where I met Opal. I remember thinking she was out of fairytale, because of her looks. She was the youngest and smallest one there but so brave and kind. The shooters came in and began shooting in the room. I said as I felt my mother hand on my shoulder. I felt the tears falling as I began remembering everything. “Come on honey so we can go. You have to accept this” My mother said as I felt snot already falling. I blocked the shooter from shooting Opal and some other students. All I felt was pain and like everything was in slow motion. He shot me in the stomach. He heard the police and ran out of the classroom. Opal was so scared and told me not to worry. She told me her name and that she was going to find help. The other students were surrounding me, trying to figure out what to do. All I remember was begging for Eva. I said as I looked at my mother with tears in my eyes. “You are okay now darling; you trust your intuition to bring you into the light. It's time to go. Eva will be just fine; there is nothing more we could do” My mother said as she reached her hand out to me. 

Posted Sep 09, 2026
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