Submitted to: Contest #325

The Disappearance of Jane

Written in response to: "End your story in a way that leaves the reader with a sense of uncertainty or doubt."

Mystery Suspense Thriller

The car smelled of cheap disinfectant and old tobacco. A thin film of gray dust coated the dashboard, and the crumbs of a forgotten pretzel clung stubbornly to the cracks between the seats. The cab driver ran a damp rag over the steering wheel, an automatic and clearly futile gesture. The grime was persistent. A daily defeat. Maybe it wasn’t neglect. Maybe it was fatigue. The erosion that comes from too many hours on the road, fighting for every dollar.

His eyes settled on the ID card clipped to the windshield. The photograph showed a man with an easy smile, one of those friendly faces that inspired instant trust. Yet the driver looked at the picture with a familiar disdain.

“Ugly bastard,” he muttered to the portrait, his hoarse whisper lost in the rumble of the diesel engine.

It was a ritual. Maybe to remind himself who he was, or who he’d once been. Or maybe for another reason, deeper, less confessable.

He pulled up to the curb, right outside the district precinct. The fine New York drizzle painted the world in melancholy gray. That’s when he saw him: a man in a long coat, rigid posture, eyes sweeping the street like a scanner. He opened the back door without ceremony and climbed in, bringing with him the cold scent of the city.

“16th Precinct, Manhattan. And make it quick,” said the voice—clear, authoritative—without looking at the driver.

“You got it, sir,” the driver replied, shifting gears and merging into traffic with the skill of someone who knew every pothole by heart.

He tried the usual. His trademark. Small talk.

“Rough start to the day, huh? Feels like it’s barely begun and already dragging.”

The man in the back gave nothing but a grunt, eyes glued to his phone.

“Must be unpleasant work,” the driver pressed on, undeterred. “Just being outside a precinct, you can feel the weight. But a man like you—you’re no uniformed cop. No, sir.”

The passenger raised his head slightly, a flicker of irritation crossing his gaze.

“What does it matter? Just drive, please.”

The driver smiled into the rearview mirror. “Oh, it matters. A man leaving one precinct, taking a cab to another—that’s detective work. Regular cops have their cruisers. Detectives… well, they’re always in a hurry. No time for paperwork. Logical, right?”

The detective—because that’s what he was, the driver had nailed it—sighed, annoyed by the unexpected sharpness of his humble chauffeur. He didn’t reply.

“Must be a big case,” the driver continued, unfazed. “You’ve got that look. Heavy. Like a man carrying a secret.”

“Look, I appreciate the interest, but I prefer to ride in silence.”

But silence wasn’t the driver’s way. The solitude of the cab was too vast, and this passenger too intriguing.

“It’s the girl, isn’t it? Jane. The missing one. Everyone’s talking about her. Citywide topic.”

The detective’s jaw clenched. “That’s not taxi talk.”

“Everybody’s talking, boss. Even me. It’s a story that gets under your skin. A beautiful girl, newborn baby, hardworking husband, perfect life... and then—poof. Gone. Like a ghost.”

The silence in the back seat turned icy. The driver went on, his tone softening, almost reflective.

“Forgive my loose tongue, sir, but I’ve been thinking about that case. In my downtime, you know? Like a puzzle. And I’ve got a theory.”

The detective let out a dry, dismissive chuckle. “A theory, huh? That’s good. Save it for your buddies at the coffee shop.”

“Oh, but my buddies don’t know the trade like you do,” he replied cheerfully. “See, everyone looks at the husband, the friends, the coworkers. But nobody thinks about the invisible ones. The people who come and go without anyone noticing.”

Irritated, the detective typed a quick message on his phone: ‘As if her husband’s TV theories weren’t enough—now even cabbies have one.’ He hit send with an audible sigh of arrogance and frustration.

The driver ignored the sigh. His voice dropped a tone—more confidential now, more intimate.

“Who can move through the city without leaving a trace? Who knows every street, every alley, every abandoned warehouse? Who drives something unremarkable, something no one looks twice at—and can carry... well, anything, or anyone, without raising suspicion?”

He paused dramatically, letting the words hang heavy in the stale air.

“One of us, Detective. A cab driver.”

Something shifted then. The disdain in the detective’s face gave way to sudden, sharpened curiosity. For the first time, his eyes met the driver’s reflection in the rearview mirror—not with disgust, but with professional interest. The cabbie wasn’t just some chatty fool. There was a twisted logic in what he was saying.

“Go on,” said the detective, his voice now calm, measured.

The driver brightened.

“It’s simple! A cabbie spots her on the street, she gets in without a second thought. Public vehicle—safe, harmless. He’s in total control. Can take her anywhere. And best part? Nobody remembers a cab driver. We’re like furniture. Invisible.”

As he spoke, the detective began to smile—a slow, thoughtful smile. He glanced down discreetly at his phone and began typing, taking notes. He was logging the theory, assessing it. His body relaxed, one leg crossing over the other, professionalism overtaking prejudice.

The New York rain traffic didn’t bother him. Encouraged by the faint smile, the driver expanded his theory, detailing how the abductor might have acted, which routes he might have taken. He grew astonishingly specific. Perhaps too specific.

Then, a chill crept up the detective’s spine. The smile froze on his face like wax. His fingers, mid-typing, went rigid. Slowly—agonizingly—his eyes lifted toward the rearview mirror. The driver’s silhouette was still facing the road, absorbed in his own macabre tale. But the truth, the detective realized with a shiver, wasn’t in the man’s hidden face. It was all around him.

His gaze sharpened, cutting through the cab’s interior: the cracked, filthy upholstery; the dust drifting in a slanted beam of light; the crumbs of a miserable existence. Then it stopped—violently—on the driver’s immaculate suit. The dark fabric, too well tailored, screamed against the car’s squalor. Ralph Lauren? The absurd thought echoed through his mind, even as the grotesque contrast tightened around his nerves.

Almost by instinct, rising panic drew his eyes to the fogged ID card—then to the meter. His heart lurched. The numbers weren’t moving. The base fare—frozen in time. As if the ride had never actually started. As if the whole thing were a stage.

In a flash of raw, piercing clarity, the pieces clicked together with an audible snap. The grime. The eloquence. The luxury suit. The idle meter. The ID that might not be his. The mental report sealed itself with a single, horrifying conclusion.

The horror didn’t arrive—it erupted! Flooding his veins with cold adrenaline, arching his body into animal tension. Every muscle clenched, ready to fight or flee. His right hand, acting on instinct, slid—slow and fatal—toward the holster, the cold, familiar grip of his weapon.

The driver sensed the shift. His chatter stopped. The reflection in the mirror was no longer the face of a friendly, chatty man. It was something smoother. Calculated.

Then came a sound! Muffled, but unmistakable. A dull, metallic thud from the trunk.

The unmistakable proof that another heartbeat was in that car!

The detective’s heart seemed to stop. The taxi sat still, caught in the vacuum of a red light. Suddenly, the rain’s tapping on the roof became a deafening roar—a white veil of noise sealing them off from the rest of the world. Their eyes met in the rearview mirror. A silent duel. All warmth had vanished, replaced by a crackling, electric danger.

The detective’s voice emerged from somewhere deep and gravelly, a controlled whisper trembling with fear.

“I need to see your face.”

But the driver didn’t turn. He kept his gaze fixed on the mirror’s reflection, lips curling into a slow, almost imperceptible smile. His reply came soft—and deadly.

“To see if I’m her husband… or her abductor?”

The detective swallowed hard. His stare was frozen, his mind racing at a blistering speed. The theories, the grime, the suit, the noise—they all converged into an image of horror that refused to resolve, leaving space for the darkest possibilities.

He looked at the man behind the wheel and spoke the final line—the one that froze the air between them, leaving all possibilities hovering, terrible and unresolved.

“No. To see if, in that trunk… it’s the abductor—or Jane.”

Posted Oct 19, 2025
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