Loxie's arrival (part 2 to "Dragon Watcher")

Fantasy Teens & Young Adult

Written in response to: "Write about a backup dancer who’s on tour and just wants some peace and quiet for the holidays." as part of My True Love Gave to Me.

I'm not entirely sure why I even liked it or joined it, I'm not sure anyone knows. Every time I try to leave, she just begs me not to go. "Oh, but I need you! you're really important!" Moxie will always say.

I'm a backup dancer, you could probably find somebody else really quick. Then again, she probably doesn't even need backup dancers or anything else. Nobody ever goes to see anything of what she does.

But Mother would always tell me, "Come on Lox, maybe you should help her...this has been her dream ever since she could walk and talk." I guess that happened, look where I am now.

I don't exactly know what we were going to do first in London, Moxie just told all of us (through texting, of course, we haven't seen each other for a few weeks) to meet at a restaurant. She never clarified which Restaurant though.

There was a little feeling I had that this would be a total waste of time and be really boring, though it wouldn't be like that for me. It would be like that for everyone else. Not me.

I grabbed my phone out from the right pocket and then texted, "Hey Scarlett, guess who is here? Where are ya? I wanna go have some fun."

Of course, I had to wait for a little while until she texted me back. About fifteen minutes later she finally texted me back, "I think you know where it is Lox, I got a job being the new Dragon Watcher, come visit."

Dragon Watcher? That was an actual thing you could do? Moxie always told me when I asked about the building that it was a fake job...

I began to look around and spotted the building in no time, (It was simply just labeled "D.W." How fitting...) it would only take a couple minutes to get there. Anything would be better than doing anything with Moxie.

I texted her back, "When did you ever get the job? I thought you didn't want one."

While waiting on her to text back I had decided to also text Moxie, "Don't wait for me, I'll be there when I get there. There are some more important things I need to do."

Sometimes, I kind of just wish I could delete her contacts off everything of mine and never talk to her again. Or just not have met her at all.

You people reading this story, and yes I did just break the fourth wall, are probably wondering, "Why do you hate Moxie? Nothing seems wrong with her..."

You probably won't ever learn that, though I do have a lot of reasons for hating her. Like I also said, literally anything and I mean anything, was better than being with that piece of trash.

I just didn't want to upset the family that I actually care about and who care about me. Everyone else in the family seems to like Moxie though, and that I just don't understand.

Then, my phone buzzed twice as I started reaching the building. The first was from Scarlett and it read, "I guess some things changed, I'm waiting outside for ya."

The second text was from of course Moxie, which read, "Wait what?? Lox come on please, you're the most important person in the group, I need you to be there." Heh, I knew it.

I feel like if we're all together, she'd act all sweet and kind, especially being really forgiving towards me for not coming. Though how much do you wanna bet that when we're alone, she'll start yelling and cursing me out?

I didn't want to do any of this, I just needed a little break with a good friend of mine for once. That idiotic girl can wait, I'll probably be at the building for a few hours.

My phone buzzed again, though I shut it off. It was probably Moxie again saying something like, "You have to help me, it might be ruined!" Though I don't care. Not one bit.

Moxie could even get into a car crash or something even worse, I won't care. I won't even go to the hospital or wherever she would be. Anyone else who actually gives a crap could do that.

"Hey, Loxie over here!" I hear a familiar voice shout. Finally, someone I actually care about and want to be with.

Once I meet up with Scarlett at the building, she leads me into the building and through a long stretched out hallway. It kind of looked like something out of a horror movie.

"Stay right here," Scarlett quickly ran off somewhere when we entered the room, it was really large and I couldn't see where she ran off to.

Though she eventually came back with a little dragon, it seemed to be riding on her head when she came back to me. "Aw, what's his name?"

"I finally decided to name him Inferno, I thought it would kind of be a cute name."

"Hey, could I maybe help you take care of him? It's better than what was going on before this..."

"Well, that's actually what I was hoping for Lox...something really bad happened yesterday..." Scarlett admitted.

The two of us sat down (Scarlett being a bit more careful, that way she wouldn't hurt inferno) to be comfier, then I asked, "Could you tell me what happened then?"

She lifted Inferno off of her and then sat him in her lap as she began to explain, "Well yesterday...I kind of heard some talking from outside, I didn't hear everything but the people said that they were going to take Inferno somewhere and kill him..."

"Wait, what??"

I saw Scarlett's grip tighten on him, though not enough to hurt him or something, she just didn't want to lose him I'm guessing. "I just don't know what to do Lox..."

I smiled faintly and then told her, "Scarlett, I can help you! Maybe we could keep Inferno safe by hiding him somewhere else, then we think of another plan so we make sure they don't do that to him."

"Really?"

I nodded, "I would never lie Scarlett..."

Posted Dec 19, 2020
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Wow B! You're right about this story! Your idea was amazing! I loved the way the entire story just flowed! Awesome job! =)

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B. W.
December 19, 2020 04:36

Thanks, im glad that ya liked the story ^^ what did ya think about Loxie?

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I really liked this story in general actually. Not just Loxie as a character, but how you brought everything together in the plot.

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B. W.
December 19, 2020 16:32

what do ya think should happen in the next part of the story?

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Well, that depends on what prompt you choose.

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B. W.
December 19, 2020 19:27

I know there wasn't that much about her, but what do ya think about Moxie?

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Maya -
December 20, 2020 23:44

Hi!
I saw your bio, and I don't really know you at all, but the stuff you said doesn't seem true at all. From the comments/ feedback I've seen you leave on people's stories you seem like a really nice person, and you're a really great writer! I saw you were getting downvoted, so I upvoted you. Happy holidays! :)

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B. W.
December 20, 2020 23:48

I've just always kind of felt like this for a couple of years, and not just on here, in general as well and with IRL friends. Though I'm at least trying to do some things to forget about it and all that, like listening to music and stuff. Though thank you so much ^^ The downvoting has also been going on for like several months, and its been getting on my nerves.

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Maya -
December 20, 2020 23:52

Yeah, the downvoting is annoying and pretty pointless. I can upvote you anytime if you suddenly lose lots of points. As far as what you said, your friends probably don't see it that way. Try to see yourself in a more positive light. :)

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B. W.
December 20, 2020 23:53

Aw thanks ^^

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Maya -
December 20, 2020 23:54

Anytime! Hope you feel better!

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B. W.
December 20, 2020 23:55

I hope so too

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Amel Parvez
December 19, 2020 12:38

ohhh! great.
INFERNO<3
loved the story. you gonna write the third part, right?

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B. W.
December 19, 2020 16:20

there'll eventually be a third part, but not right now.

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Amel Parvez
December 20, 2020 14:26

Yeah, right.
Ok☺

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B. W.
December 20, 2020 18:14

What do ya think of the prompts?

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Amel Parvez
December 20, 2020 21:01

Yeah they are interesting but unfortunately my exams are going on and I really am short of time so as I will be free of exams I will make my mind to write one.

What about u?
AnywaYs will u do me a favour and read my stories and give a comment, don't care if it's a critique. If u have time.

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B. W.
December 20, 2020 21:04

Eh, for me theyre all sort of half and half to be honest :/

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January 05, 2021 00:22

loved this continuation of your story. your idea is amazing and i cant wait to see what you do with this.
:)

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B. W.
January 05, 2021 00:50

Thanks ^^ favorite part?

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January 05, 2021 01:04

the whole thing maybe
i dont really have a favorite part the whole thing was fun to read

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✨Abby ✨
December 21, 2020 03:21

Hey. New thread. So when do u think you will be finished with the story? Your part of it.

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B. W.
December 21, 2020 03:22

well youre doing the first part, you have to be finished first before I can start

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✨Abby ✨
December 21, 2020 03:45

Oh ok. Sorry, I'm still kinda confused. So am. i doing the story from luckys pov and only doing half the story? Like she gets the bird then u.write the rest the.we each post our half on our pages? Or what?

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B. W.
December 21, 2020 03:47

Your part of the story is Lucky's POV. Where she would first get the bird, and she would try to do anything with the bird like playing with her and all that, along with whatever else you'd want to happen. My part of the story would be the birds POV. Where she starts to try and escape and all that. Your part 1, I'm part 2.

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✨Abby ✨
December 21, 2020 03:50

Ohhhh okay. I get it now. I'm pretty far along with my part I just don't know how 2 end it. Any suggestions?

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B. W.
December 21, 2020 04:06

It could probably end with Lucky giving up (at least for the day) and deciding to try again the next day, with her going off to sleep.

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December 20, 2020 12:33

Hi!

Wow! Part 2 was really great. Great job!

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B. W.
December 20, 2020 18:12

thanks and hola ^^ did ya have a favorite part?

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December 21, 2020 17:17

I loved the friendship between Scarlett and Loxie, how they each had the other's back when a problem arises.

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B. W.
December 21, 2020 19:18

Nice

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Megan Sutherland
December 19, 2020 13:59

I loved this, B! Great idea with the creative spin on the prompt. I liked all your characters, too. Just one point of critique- you seem to write like you talk, and I guess everyone does that, but it makes your writing seem more informal. You have a lot of run-on sentences and a few spots of incorrect grammar when you're putting dialogue together. Maybe someone else in your family or a friend could read through it before you've submitted it, because I think no one really catches their own little way of speaking in their writing all the time.
I don't mean to be rude at all, so please don't take this too seriously and I did not mean to hurt your feelings. It's just what I took from the story.
Your Reedsy Friend,
Megan S.

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B. W.
December 19, 2020 16:27

I'm still kind of using Grammarly, though sometimes it doesn't point out a thing or sometimes it points out the wrong thing. Though I'm glad ya liked the story, I can try and fix all of that stuff later.

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Megan Sutherland
December 19, 2020 18:05

Okay!
I've used Grammarly before.... I got rid of it quickly. I don't think it understands context sometimes and then it makes incorrect suggestions.

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B. W.
December 19, 2020 18:07

I've kind of been thinking if i should delete it or not

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Megan Sutherland
December 19, 2020 20:27

It's all up to you, but I personally did not like it. :/

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B. W.
December 19, 2020 20:31

what do ya use then?

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Phoebe DeNeve
January 04, 2021 02:50

That was a great second part. Will there be third part?

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B. W.
January 04, 2021 02:55

Yes, eventually there'll be a third part. Though I don't know when.

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December 23, 2020 19:03

There is only one thing I have to say about this:

AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA YOU ARE AMAZING!

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B. W.
December 23, 2020 19:19

I am? How?

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December 24, 2020 14:04

Because this is awesome :)

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B. W.
December 24, 2020 18:27

ya think so?

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December 24, 2020 18:33

This story is really good. I mean it!

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B. W.
December 24, 2020 18:35

aw thanks :)

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Raquel Rodriguez
December 23, 2020 15:40

This is really good, Bee! Moxie seems kind of annoying, is it just me? Lol, anyway.
Do you wanna collab for the next contest or no?

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B. W.
December 23, 2020 16:55

Yeah, of course i'd wanna collab ^^ and thanks, I'm glad that ya liked the story.

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Raquel Rodriguez
December 23, 2020 16:59

Alright! Yay, I'm so excited. Where are we going to collab on? Maybe Google Docs? Or... what are you comfortable with?

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B. W.
December 23, 2020 17:04

We could talk about the stuff on here? and so after we think of the characters and all that, maybe one of us could make part 1 and the other one could make part 2 for it.

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Raquel Rodriguez
December 23, 2020 17:10

I don't really feel comfortable doing that, I don't want anybody to steal our ideas. If someone can downvote everyone and not feel guilty, then I feel like people can easily steal the ideas we come up with. Are you sure you don't want to do it on Google Docs? I don't want to nag, but it would be much safer. Maybe we could find another way.
But anyway, we should just establish the basic points.
So... should we do:
~ part 1 then part 2
~ antagonist POV and protagonist POV
~ or just different POVs

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B. W.
December 23, 2020 17:36

I don't feel comfortable being on a google doc though, so it might be better to just do the stuff on here. I'm sure no one would even steal the stuff, could it be fantasy?

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December 19, 2020 14:48

Great job!! Sad you didn't use Cadmus, but great job!! I loved the relationship but maybe show how they met and the origins of their being frenemies, because that will tie it together. Great Job again!!!!!

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B. W.
December 19, 2020 16:30

Thanks, im glad ya liked it ^^ well Loxie and Moxie are related, so they probably would have met at a family thing.

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December 19, 2020 16:52

Oh I get it.

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B. W.
December 19, 2020 16:55

anything else?

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. .
December 19, 2020 16:56

Nah!!

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B. W.
December 19, 2020 18:03

would ya wanna see another part?

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Maya -
December 21, 2020 18:50

Hey:) How are you?
The second person POV (if that's what it's called) in this story was so unique and interesting. Also, Inferno is such an adorable name! :D You should totally write a part three, especially with that ... at the end!

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B. W.
December 21, 2020 19:17

This is first person, second person is when in the story YOU are the main character because it'll say something like, "You didn't know what was going to happen that night, but you knew that you're friend was going to be there." Third person is when ya go, "-Main character name- quickly rushed to the hospital, she had to see -best friends name- before it was too late." though thanks, and there WILL be a part 3 and some other ones as well ^^ whats something you'd wanna see in the next part?

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Maya -
December 21, 2020 19:21

Oh yeah, right, I got confused for a second. :) Yay!!! Part three! I think you should do more about the dragon, Inferno, in part three. He's so cute! What if they brought him to a dragon sanctuary to save him and they met other baby dragons there. Or, you could do the third part in the dragon's perspective, that could be interesting.

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B. W.
December 21, 2020 19:24

While having the third part be in Inferno's perspective is a bit interesting, I'm not sure how I should really have him talk and stuff if that makes sense for being the narrator for it and stuff. He's still just a baby.

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Maya -
December 21, 2020 19:26

Yeah, maybe it would be better in Loxie or Scarlett's POV. If it was in Inferno's POV it would be interesting to see what he thought of humans and stuff.

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B. W.
December 21, 2020 19:43

I like that idea ^^ maybe ill do that at some point

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December 20, 2020 02:25

I loved Part 2! Loxie was a really nice character, maybe Part 3 could be a look in the past about her and Moxie's relationship-? Other than that, well done!

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B. W.
December 20, 2020 02:40

Thanks, im glad ya liked it ^^ what did ya think of the ending with Scarlett explaining with what the people were gonna do to Inferno?

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December 20, 2020 02:53

I at first was like, "WHAAAAAAAT WHO'D WANT TO KILL A BABY DRAGON?" It definitely was a plot twist!

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B. W.
December 20, 2020 03:37

is there maybe anything else you'd wanna see in the next part of the story?

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December 20, 2020 03:39

Nothing I can think of at the top of my head

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B. W.
December 20, 2020 03:41

what do ya think of Inferno?

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