Next Gen (part 1)

Fantasy Teens & Young Adult

Written in response to: "Write about someone who doesn’t remember their past — and doesn’t want to." as part of New Year, New You.

October 1st, 2031.

The four of us had finally arrived at the camp today, luckily nothing terrible had happened on our way there. There was me, my sister, Harper, and then our two friends Gray and Ace.

The place seemed much larger than what our parents had described it, though it had been several years since they were here. Maybe it ended up getting remodeled? That seems like a good explanation.

One of the camp counselors had been waiting and greeted us at the gate and motioned for us to follow him. He had been showing us where we'd be staying, if I'm being honest we'd probably just get lost. Or at least one of us that is, probably Gray.

Though once we were reaching the greek area of the camp, that's when he looked at me with this startling look (or at least that's what I think it was.) "Oh, Cleo was it? The Egyptian part of the camp is near the edge of the camp, you'll know it when you see it."

I doubt there'd be a lot of Egyptian demi-gods here though, it could possibly just be me. This place was mostly for Greek and Roman demi-gods, maybe even some other ones I don't know yet.

I'll go look around to see what other ones there are once I'm settled down.

October 2nd, 2031.

Oh wait a minute, I should probably fully introduce myself. How could I forget?

My name is Cleo, and I'm actually the daughter of Anubis. You probably have a couple of questions by now, and it's a simple little answer. I'm adopted.

Harper had actually given me this thing a couple years ago, and now I'm actually using it to do this. There's been a lot of things I've been wanting to spill out.

According to my adoptive parents, they could never find my real mother, and Anubis apparently didn't want me. Harper and I would always say that my mother "Left to go get milk and hasn't come back."

It doesn't really bother me that much though, I don't think I'd like being with my actual mother. She probably wouldn't even try to do anything with me. I think it's probably way better with Harper and my adoptive parents.

I should probably get going now, apparently Ace wants to take us to something or someone that he found. He said that it was supposed to be a surprise, so he hasn't explained everything yet.

October 3rd, 2031.

Well...I can at least say that the thing he showed us was quite interesting. The way he had explained to us was just, "I was looking at the old part of the camp and decided to explore, because why not? And then I found this thing."

I'm not exactly sure how Gray or Harper never noticed him leaving to do this though, she had told me that all three of them were staying in the same cabin. Maybe he did it when they were asleep or something?

Though apparently, this 'thing' that Ace had found a while ago, was an old and destroyed building. It looked like it had kind of fallen apart suddenly and without warning, at least that's what I felt happened.

You wouldn't even be able to tell what it had previously been, everything was just destroyed. None of us had decided to tell anyone else about this though, what would they even do? Maybe others already knew.

"You're going to get yourself hurt, stop it right now!" This was really only one of the moments I remembered from it, Gray had to keep him from getting into the rubble.

"Oh come on G, I'm not going to get hurt! I'll try and be really careful!"

Thankfully, he didn't get the chance to do any of that and we all left. I guess that was the first really interesting thing that happened so far.

October 7th, 2031.

I kind of forgot to write in this for the last couple of days, though barely anything happened if I'm being honest. There was another Egyptian Demi-god that I saw, but they disappeared before I could go to them.

Maybe I'll try to look for them later and talk to them, though I'm not sure. They might just want to be left alone or not be with anyone else.

Though that wasn't really the important thing at the moment, there was something else that I need to talk about. It's been happening for the past couple of years, though it started happening a bit more recently.

I always hear a lot of yelling or just a whisper, one was a female voice, the other one would sometimes be an echoey male voice. One of the main words I could always hear was simply just "Cleo!" it always seemed angry or concerned.

There were always some other words that they'd say besides that, but I could never understand it. The words always sounded like they were being said angrily.

This barely happens as it's sort of rare, though sometimes...I see something like a little me and a large shadowy figure near or in front of her.

I'm not sure what this even means, and I don't think I want to know...at least not yet.

October 9th, 2031.

I couldn't really help myself and decided to tell Harper what had been going on a few hours ago. I never explained everything though, we'd be here for a long time if I did. I just explained a small bit of it.

Luckily she didn't think I was crazy or something and then try to ignore me, she actually had agreed to try and help me with this! Though I'm not exactly sure what we'll do...

We were going to be at this camp for a long time though, and maybe something here would help us find out what was going on. Maybe we could even get Ace and Gray to help the two of us.

Posted Jan 01, 2021
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Wow! I see you have started a new series! I really enjoyed this story B! Great job! :)

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B. W.
January 01, 2021 20:01

Did you maybe have a favorite thing about it or anything like that?

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All of it. I really liked the idea of this story. It was a great way to start the new year. :)

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B. W.
January 01, 2021 21:14

Would ya wanna see another part of this at some point?

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Of course I would!

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B. W.
January 01, 2021 22:53

What do ya think will happen in the next part?

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Is this Percy Jackson related?
If not, its still super rad!
Great job!

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B. W.
January 01, 2021 21:13

It sort of is, because Percy Jackson inspired me to do the original series on here and then I finally decided to do the spin off, have you seen the original one I did?

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Hmm no, I'm gonna look right now tho!

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B. W.
January 01, 2021 21:33

I can tell you the stories that were part of it if ya want? That way it would be easier to find them and all that.

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B. W.
January 01, 2021 22:51

1. the goddess child
2. the camp
3. not his fault
4. her arrival
5. getting her back

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B. W.
January 01, 2021 19:09

This might be a little terrible, and I'm sorry if it is, also any other ideas for the name? I kinda don't like this one. Below this will be some extra things that you all should probably know.
1. Ace and Gray are the sons of Lia and Zio, they'll appear more in the later parts and all that. Each character will have a POV for one story at some point.
2. All the parts aren't going to be like a diary, this might just be for Cleo at some points.
3. Harper is the daughter of Harmony and Arren.
4. Like Anubis, Cleo actually has the head of a jackal (including a tail actually) instead of just looking like a regular human and all that.

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January 05, 2021 00:02

great cliffhanger excited to see where you take this story.

im doing a reading spree of all your stories so if you see me liking and commenting a lot thats why
:)

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B. W.
January 05, 2021 00:48

Thanks so much ^^

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Laiba M
January 02, 2021 02:18

Wow, I really enjoyed the story~ I love the incorporation of Egyptian mythology! It's so fun to read. I liked reading about the part with Cleo hearing voices out of nowhere. I can't wait to see the reason behind it!

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B. W.
January 02, 2021 02:23

I've only really done Roman and Greek mythology, though I finally decided with this that I'd do some Egyptian mythology and some other things. What's something you'd wanna see in the next part?

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Laiba M
January 02, 2021 14:54

I'm glad you decided that! As I said, I'd love to see the reason why Cleo hears voices :) Great job, Ri~~

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B. W.
January 02, 2021 17:11

Is there any other sort of mythology you'd wanna see in this?

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Laiba M
January 02, 2021 17:12

Maybe Norse?

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B. W.
January 02, 2021 17:18

Who are some Norse gods and goddesses though?

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Phoebe DeNeve
February 18, 2021 00:13

Great Story! I really like the journal/ diary style with the dates at the top. Keep up the great work! :)

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B. W.
February 18, 2021 01:43

Thanks so much ^^ I'm glad that you liked the story

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Kate :)
January 04, 2021 12:42

Good job on this one! I'm excited for the new series.

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B. W.
January 04, 2021 16:40

What did ya think of Cleo?

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Kate :)
January 05, 2021 18:26

She was interesting. I like how you made her the daughter of an Egyptian god.

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B. W.
January 05, 2021 18:56

What do ya think will happen in the next part?

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Kate :)
January 05, 2021 19:12

I'm not sure, but I'm looking forward to it.

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B. W.
January 05, 2021 19:31

Would ya wanna see Anubis?

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Itay Frenkel
January 02, 2021 06:00

The Egyptian mythology is really cool, I got used to seeing Greek and Roman mythology in your stories so I'm glad to see you're trying new things. The diary format is cool, I'm excited to see where you take this series!

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B. W.
January 02, 2021 17:08

Thanks, im glad that ya liked it ^^ did you maybe have a favorite part in the story or anything like that?

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Itay Frenkel
January 02, 2021 21:07

My favorite part of most of your stories is the chemistry between the characters, which was definitely the case here. I also liked Cleo's backstory, and the Egyptian mythology was interesting.

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B. W.
January 02, 2021 21:08

Thanks ^^ so would you maybe wanna see Anubis at some point or really any other specific god, or anything like that?

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Itay Frenkel
January 02, 2021 21:12

I don't really know much about Egyptian mythology, it's up to you. I remember learning about a scary crocodile god called Sebek, he could be a cool antagonist.

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B. W.
January 02, 2021 21:14

Hm, I'll look into that one, I've never heard of him before. Also, so how are you today? I think its been a little while since we've talked.

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Megan Sutherland
January 01, 2021 22:40

Great story, B!
It's funny, I actually have a friend named Cleo XD
-Meg

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B. W.
January 01, 2021 22:54

Thanks ^^ did ya have a favorite part or anything like that?

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Megan Sutherland
January 01, 2021 23:24

It was all good :)

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B. W.
January 01, 2021 23:45

are ya wanting to see another part?

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Megan Sutherland
January 02, 2021 00:37

Sure!!

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B. W.
January 02, 2021 01:12

what do ya think would happen?

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✨Abby ✨
January 06, 2021 17:14

Ooh I love this! very nice.

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B. W.
January 06, 2021 18:22

Thanks

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Orenda .
January 02, 2021 15:19

hey, hey!

this one is heck of a riveting concept and I'm glad you're making a series out of it. Harper is a character from one of your novels you're writing?

I've a few things to say and I honestly don't mean to be rude, I just want to help you. So just bear with me if I sound like a devil.

from observing a ton of your stories, I've noticed you don't have a patent writing style and I assume you're figuring it out which is not a problem at all. But it feels a lot colloquial, like I had pointed out earlier.

You have amazing ideas and their execution is always done really well but the execution lacks in your writing. I'm no judge or editor, but as a fellow writer and a deranged observer lol, I've noticed these few things. And I believe, with proofreads and editing from others, they'll polish and shine your stories enough to blind us haha.

And if you're shy or embarrassed about having others proofread your stories, don't be because we're companions and moreover, we're writers there to bring the best out of others. I am there for you like always. So don't fret to learn. Grammarly or ProWriting Aid are excellent and make full use of them but don't depend on them, do your bit as well.

Ask me for help in descriptive writing and stuff and I'll do my best. I'm not perfect, but ya know... I see immense potential in you and when you have even better grammar, you're taking home bucks real soon.

I don't know why I decided to tell you this, but I've been thinking about it and I felt it right to tell you.

Anyway, good day!

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B. W.
January 02, 2021 17:17

I'm not sure if Harper is the name of a character in a novel I'm writing, though if it is this character just happens to have the same name as her and isn't related or anything like that. What exactly is a patent writing style though? do ya mean one that I've been sticking with and stuff? I kinda thought that I've already got one or something. I don't really want anyone to proofread them or ask for help with the descriptive stuff, for kind of a few reasons but I also don't wanna bother anyone that much. You know I'd be getting a lot of stories out, so I'd be asking for someone to proofread something and give me something descriptive a lot :/ What did ya think of Cleo and the others though?

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Orenda .
January 02, 2021 17:44

oh yeah, so I got mixed up. No problem.
I like Cleo!

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B. W.
January 02, 2021 18:01

What's something that you'd wanna see in the next part?

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Orenda .
January 02, 2021 18:13

I've no idea. Your story, you know it.

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B. W.
January 02, 2021 19:01

Do ya like the other characters?

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B. W.
January 03, 2021 01:12

Or at least like a specific one out of the three?

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Coco Longstaff
January 02, 2021 01:34

Yikes, wow! Literally Next Gen. 2031? I wonder what the world will really look like in that time. I like how the setting and the time dont relate much, but you made the story work! Cool!

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B. W.
January 02, 2021 01:37

This is still kind of a spin off of my original demi-god series, have you read it?

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Coco Longstaff
January 02, 2021 01:38

Oh, no! But I’ll just read it now!

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B. W.
January 02, 2021 02:00

Do ya like Percy Jackson?

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Coco Longstaff
January 02, 2021 02:02

Yup!

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B. W.
January 02, 2021 02:19

whos your favorite character?

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January 01, 2021 21:44

Oo nice story! I loved the diary format! Can't wait for Part 2!

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B. W.
January 01, 2021 22:52

Thanks ^^ did ya have a favorite part or anything like that?

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January 01, 2021 22:55

The way you wrote the flashback was really nice

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B. W.
January 01, 2021 23:43

What flashback?

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January 01, 2021 23:52

The faint voices and the blurry version of her she keeps seeing. Was that a flashback or memory of some sort? Idk that's how I interpreted it

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B. W.
January 02, 2021 00:33

its not really a flashback, otherwise i probably would have done italics or something. Its supposed to sorta be like a memory in a way/a bit of her past.

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