A Winter’s First Kiss
The air was cool and crisp—cold, but not as bracing as late February in West Virginia could be. Silver clouds stretched lazily across the sky, and light snow flurries drifted around us, settling softly on my hair and shoulders. Each flake felt like a whisper, delicate and fleeting, dissolving the moment I touched it. We walked slowly through the black iron gates of a small park. The smell of damp earth mingled with the faint pine scent lingering from the nearby forest. It wasn’t a typical park with bright playsets or the laughter of children echoing between swings, but a quiet grove of bare trees, their branches skeletal against the gray sky, and pale green grass poking through patches of early snow. A gentle hush seemed to envelop everything, as if the world had paused just for us.
As we wandered down the winding path, studying the shapes and textures of different trees, he slipped his hand into mine. My hand fit perfectly in his, warm and steady, and a flutter rose in my stomach. A shiver ran up my spine, though it had nothing to do with the cold. Six hours and three states usually lay between us, but today there was no distance. Today, we were together—for the first time of many to come. Everything felt new. Everything felt thrilling.
As we were walking along he spotted a small grove of bamboo. He wondered off towards it as if the adventure in him had gotten his attention. After walking through the closely grown stalks he found himself standing in an opening. The tall stalks swayed softly in the breeze around him, while I lingered in the open grove. A chill crept over me, settling first into my hands. He walked toward me, his footsteps muffled by the snow-dusted grass, and gently took one of my hands in his.
“Your hands are freezing,” he said, his voice low and warm.
It was true—only my hands were cold, but now they weren’t alone.
We began walking back toward the gate, our fingers entwined, the soft crunch of snow underfoot punctuating the silence. In the corner of the grove sat a beautiful wooden bench, its back painted with a serene forest scene. He suggested we sit. When I lowered myself onto the bench, he took off his coat and draped it across my lap before sitting beside me. The fabric was warm and familiar, and I leaned slightly into it, letting the comfort sink in. He gathered both of my hands in his, his thumbs brushing softly across my cold fingers, warming them. Snow still drifted lazily through the air, and the last of the autumn leaves lay scattered across the grass, curled and brown, like small memories clinging to the earth.
Suddenly, nerves flooded my chest. Was it the effect of watching too many romance movies? Or was this real—really happening? The moment felt perfect—too perfect. Perfect for new love. Perfect for a young girl’s first kiss. Panic swirled through my thoughts. What if he does kiss me? I don’t know how. My stomach flipped, and my fingers tightened around his, seeking some anchor in the dizzying anticipation.
I looked around at the bare trees, trying to steady myself. Maybe it was intuition whispering what was about to happen.
Then, softly—almost cautiously—he lifted a hand to my chin, turning my face toward him. My heart seemed to skip a beat.
This is it.
He leaned in, and his lips met mine. The world contracted, fading into the background, leaving only the warmth of his mouth against mine. Time stretched and bent, the cold and the snow and the bare trees dissolving into a singular, breathtaking sensation. Shivers ran up my spine as our lips lingered together, tentative at first, then certain.
When he finally pulled away, he smiled, that quiet little smile that seemed to carry everything he didn’t need to say. I smiled back, my mind spinning wildly. Did I do it right? Did he like it? Questions fluttered through me like the snowflakes drifting down around us, delicate and unpredictable.
He kept holding my hands a moment longer, thumbs brushing lightly across my fingers, grounding me in the reality of this perfect, impossible moment. Then he stood and offered me his hand, helping me up from the bench. The world had shifted, subtly but irrevocably, and I could feel it in the small pressure of his hand, the warmth radiating through mine.
We walked back toward the gates, snow settling in our hair, the painted bench fading behind us. Neither of us spoke, but the silence felt rich and full, a language all its own. Every few steps, our shoulders brushed. Every few steps, he glanced at me with that same quiet smile that said everything. The world around us was hushed, and yet it felt alive, each detail more vivid—each flake of snow, each leaf, each whisper of wind.
By the time we reached the car, my nerves had settled. The panic had vanished entirely, replaced by something steady, glowing, and unshakable. All that remained was the certainty that something new had begun—something worth the six hours, the three states, and every mile between us.
That night, long after he’d driven away, I lay in bed, letting the memory wash over me again and again. I replayed the snow, the painted bench, the warmth of his hands, and the shock of that first kiss. The distance between us felt heavy again, but it was different now. Not emptiness, but anticipation, like the quiet hum before a song begins. Six hours no longer seemed impossible—not when I had finally felt what it was like to be kissed by someone who could make the world pause for just a moment.
I thought of the way he had looked at me, the subtle curl of his lips, the warmth that lingered in my hands long after he had gone. I imagined the miles stretching out between us, no longer daunting, but promising—promising phone calls and late-night drives, stolen weekends, quiet moments like this one, and the kind of love that grows slowly, beautifully, and without warning.
Somewhere deep inside, I knew this was only the beginning. And for the first time in a long time, I was willing to wait.
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I enjoyed the story. I'm still pretty new here and my main reason for joining is the critique circle, so I'm really looking forward to hearing what ways you believe I can improve.
Being new I'm not sure I have the best advice, but I tried hard to find something for you. All I could really find was sentence structure. Yours isnt bad by any means, but if I had to find a spot for your quality to take another step it would be learning some of the nuances that the structure can give your writing. It's one of the many things I'm working on myself.
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Thank you. Your way of sharing your constructive criticism comes off has tasteful and kind. I normally really struggle with it but your comments did not bother me. Could I have an example of the sentence structure changes? If I can see what your referring to I can work on it.
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I will do that as soon as I have a little time... Did you have any thoughts on how I can improve my writing?
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Very well written and sweet, with her rich inner experience of a first kiss in a wintery backdrop, left with the thrill of a budding romance!
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Thank you so much! I really appreciate the kind comment.
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