"I got all of the money! If anyone says anything to the cops, you won't be able to say anything after!" Adam cackled. My arms were raised above my head, and my eyes were wide in play-fear.
"O-okay, sir. We-we won't t-t-tell. I promise," I stuttered. Adam laughed one more time, then he ran out of the room with the briefcase. A minute later, Adam came dashing back in, giggling.
"That was awesome, Nikki. I-"
Adam was cut off short when we heard a shout from downstairs.
"Nicole! Adam! Dinner!" Adam's mom yelled. I grinned at Adam as we both ran down the hall, then the staircase. My legs got me to the dining room faster than Adam did. He came in right behind me, panting.
"Pizza and breadsticks, homemade. Just how you two like it." Jo nodded, proud of herself. Like she said, there were two homemade pizzas (one Hawaiian and one Meat Lovers), and sixteen made-from-scratch breadsticks. The greasy aroma of her cooking filled the air, and it was like Heaven to my senses. Adam and I sat down next to each other, and Jo sat down across from us.
"Thanks, Ma. It means a lot to me that you let me stay here this weekend while my parents are gone...Again," I said, upset. Jo and Adam went silent for a minute. They knew what I meant, and even though we were okay with talking about with each other, it was still hard to.
"Oh, it's not problem. You know we love having you here. And, it keeps Adam from playing those stupid video games all day." Jo eyed him wearily; you could tell that he truly was playing video games a lot.
"Mo-om! Can we just say Grace and eat?" Adam reached over and put my hand in his. Jo grabbed my other hand, then Adam and Jo joined hands.
"Dear Lord, thank you for the food before us, and the friends and family around us. We are so blessed to have you in our lives, to have each other in our lives. Thank you. Amen."
"Amen."
"Amen."
I let go of Jo and Adam's hands, immediately pouncing on the delicious meal. Adam wasn't far after me, and soon all three of us were wolfing down the meal.
One hour later, Adam and I were on the couch, watching It's A Long Way From Here. It was actually a movie that Adam and I directed, written, and produced together a few months before. It was about a young girl (our friend Liliona) growing up, wishing she could be an artist, but her parents make her become an accountant. In the end, she breaks free, moves to Paris, and accomplishes her dream job.
Back to the story. We were sitting there, munching on popcorn, when the doorbell rang. Coming from the kitchen, Jo walked to the front door and opened it. My mother was standing there, a stern and tear-streaked face.
"Give me my darn daughter. Right now, Jo. I don't want to wait. Nicole! Come here!" my mother scolded. Frightened, I grabbed Adam's hand and leaned against him. He squeezed my hand tightly while Jo stepped out of the way as Mother pushed past her, into the living room.
"Ni-cole! Get your filthy butt over here! We're going away! Right now! And you better know that you'll never be seeing your father again!" My mother clenched her fists and stared at me, fire in her eyes. I could tell that she was daring me. Daring me to stay where I was. Daring me to disobey her.
I took that dare like you take money out of your grandparents' hands.
Jo could tell that I wasn't moving, so she moved quickly and stepped in front of Mother before she could do anything to me or Adam.
"Now, Gianna. there's no need to overreact. Why don't we-" Jo was immediately cut off by my mother again. We could all tell she wouldn't let anyone talk sense.
"Shut up, Jo! I am not freaking overreacting! I want my daughter, and you're going to give her to me, and that's final!" Mother began to walk towards me again. Jo stopped her again. You could see the fire in both of their eyes.
"Gianna, if you don't stop right now, I won't hesitate to call the police. I may be your friend, but this is getting out of control. Just, go back home. Get a good night's rest, and come back in the morning. Then we'll talk," Jo ordered. I could feel Adam's heavy, fearful breathing on my neck. The two of us were both shaking down to the bone.
"This isn't the last you'll hear of me."
"Yeah, I know. At some point you'll have to pick up your daughter."
When you first see her, Jo looks like a sweetheart. And she is, don't get me wrong. But, if you get that woman mad...You better watch your back. And my mom knew that. That's exactly why she walked out of Jo's house with one last final, livid glare.
"Adam, Nicole, go upstairs. Get a movie on in Adam's room. I'll... be right there." Jo attempted to smile as Adam and I slunk upstairs.
Nine years later...
"Nikki! Adam's here! And it looks like he drove the Convertible!"
A smile spread across my face, ear to ear. After applying a bit of dark red lipstick, I slung my purse over my shoulder and strutted out of my room.
"Coming!" I began my descent down the stairs, making sure not to trip while in my heels. Once I got to the bottom, I heard a gasp. My head snapped to the right, and Daddy was standing there.
"You look beautiful, honey. That is a beautiful color on you. Now, go ahead. Spin, spin!" Daddy cried. My smile spread wider as I spun around and my black, flowy, knee-length dress flew around me. I only stopped when I got dizzy.
Honk! Honk!
Daddy smiled at me, excitement in his eyes. He loved Adam like a son. Maybe in a few years he would be.
"Alright, go on, sweetheart. I love you. Have fun. Be safe. Back by midnight!" His smile got wider (if it was possible) as I pecked him on the cheek, then swirled out of the door.
"Hi, Nikki! You ready?" Adam called. He was in the front seat of the Convertible, just like Daddy had said. The top was down; most likely so that we could still get the slight breeze in the humid, summer, night air.
"I'm more than ready. This is our senior prom, after all. Oh, and Daddy said he's gonna take pictures once we get back because he 'doesn't want to bombard us'." I opened the passenger side door and slid in, closing the door again.
"Alrighty then. We're off to the races!"
Adam and I looked into each other's eyes for a moment before we sped off to the interstate, towards Clearwater High.
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Great story!
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Thanks!
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:)
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Hi!
First of all amazing story! It is so unique and full of awesome description. I like the ending especially.
Also, you probably aren't going to see this for a while but I hope you are okay! I read your bio and I hope that I can talk to you soon! I miss our (few but very awesome and fun) convos!
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Hello!
First of all, thank you for your concern! I am great now! I love your convos, too!
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No problem! That's good! :)
And thank you! I will love to see what you think.
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^^ No problem!
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Also, if you wouldn't mind, (whenever you get back) I just posted a new story and would love it if you could check it outtt!!
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I don't mind! I'll read it once I get the chance!
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THIS IS FREAKING INTENSE
Hello Brooke!
Ya got another awesome story!
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XD
Hi, Celeste!
Thank you!
Btw, I will give you feedback on your writing ASAHP.
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XD
Awww! TY!
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You're welcome!
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Yay! I loved it! The starting was really enthusiastic, I actually thought that it was apart of the plot! Keep up the great work!
~SS
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Thank you so much!
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Welcome!!!
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Welcome!!!
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Welcome!!!
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OMG LOVE LOVE HERMIONE AND YOUR BIO AND YOUR STORYS SQUEEEEEEEEEEEE
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This made me laugh, Celeste. I am glad and appreciative that you love me, because I adore you and your writing as well. -Hermione
P.S. (as Brooke) AWWWWWWWWW THANK YOU SO MUCH
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:DDDDDDDDDDDDDD
YOUR WELCOME HERMIONE!!!!!!
*Emotional Happy Noises*
:'D
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😊
P.S. (as Brooke) XD You just made my day!
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:DDDD
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U DID TOO WHEN I SAW YOUR NAME AND BIOOOOO
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That genuinely makes me very happy to hear.
P.S. (as Brooke) :DDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD :))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))
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Good idea to twist the beginning into a couple of kids just playing cops and robbers. It gives it a realistic feel -- I know I played stuff like that with my brother when we were growing up. We'd also go outside half-naked at five years old or so and eat malabar spinach raw, pretending to be "Indians." It was fun.
Anyway, this is a sweet little day-in-the-life story, and I like it. It's cute that those two kids playing together eventually got together. A nice happy ending. My only critique would be to put the "flashbacks" into italics, make them stand out as flashbacks, so that they're not plain exposition.
Other than that, well done. Keep it up!
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Thanks so much, Zilla! It means SO MUCH to me to hear this from an outstanding author like yourself. Also, I am so glad that my writing could connect with your childhood! :D XD
That makes sense. I'll make sure to do it next time.
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Of course!
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Hola amiga
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Hi, Brooke! I really love your take on the prompt. When I saw them last week, I never would've thought to spin it like you did! I really liked how it flowed, very smooth and precise. Although I was wondering what happened after that night Nicole spent with Adam. Also you seem to have forgotten a few words here and there. Otherwise, I really enjoyed reading it!
-Whirlwind
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Hey, Whirlwind! Thank you so much! It means a lot to me.
-Brooke
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Of course! 😁
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Hey, how are you?
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Hi! I'm great now! :D
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yay ^^
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^^
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I'm glad your back
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Me, too. :)
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I love reading your story especially knowing that Gionna didn't take her daughter home that night. The mother was mad and hard telling what would happen. Great story.
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Thank you so much, Judith!
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Good story. Very fast paced. Interesting how you made it out to be a game at first. I hoped that Nicole and Adam would remain friends. Keep it up.
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Thanks so much, Lonnie!
(I love your name, by the way.)
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how are you?
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Good! You?
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I'm just kinda bored
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:/
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Though im working on my novels again
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That's good!
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This story is so so so amazing and I'm not just saying that. I love how you made the first part of the story a game that was really creative and then you tied it back up nine years later. It was so fun to read!!
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Aw, thanks so much, Rachel!
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hey Brooke you okay?
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Hey, Amaya! I'm amazing now! :D
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yayy :)
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i'll give it a 10/10 :)
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Why is this tagged as a Christian story?
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I just tagged it as that because the characters say Grace before every meal, believe in God, and pray.
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Gotcha, makes sense. 🙂
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😊
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Hello Hermione ^^ I'm quite surprised to see you and the others on here as well
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Hello, Luna! I know! It's crazy how many of us have gotten onto this website at the same time.
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Do you think Ron or Harry would join as well?
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Possibly. But I don't think either of them are interested in writing, or have time to.
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Maybe we could try to convince one of them to join? I think they'd like it ^^
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Maybe! I'll talk to Ron. I can ask Ginny to talk to Harry about it.
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Hey- maybe you could help me? What you and some of the others are doing seem a bit fun and I really wanna do it as well, though I don't know that much stuff about Harry Potter :/ I could maybe do it with something else but I don't know what.
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Hello, B.! It's nice to talk to you. I'm not sure what you mean, but maybe someone else could help? -Hermione
P.S. (as Brooke) Basically, all we're doing is changing our name to any Harry Potter character and pretending we're them. You could change your name to Luna Lovegood. She is a fun, quirky Hogwarts student who is always talking about Nargles (nobody knows what they are), and reading the Quibbler (a magazine her dad edits/writes).
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Oh dear, sorry about that, though maybe we could still talk? You seem a little fun? ^^
(I could do try to do that then, though I really hope I don't mess up something with how she acts :/ maybe you could be the first to talk to me when I change it? I'll do it soon)
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Oh, it's okay! Of course we can talk. It would be my pleasure. ^^
P.S. (as Brooke) Yeah, I can talk to you first. Then I can give you some tips on how to talk like her, and it'll all be good! ^^
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So what do you usually like to do? What are ya doing here? I hope these aren't a lot of questions for ya ^^
(I'm changing it now, so maybe once its changed you could go to one of my stories to explain how to do the stuff and all that?)
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Well, I like to read, write, hang out in the library, help Harry and Ron, punch Malfoy in the face, and snap back and forth with Pansy Parkinson. I just wanted to try this out because I love writing, and was looking for something to do. Oh, I don't mind!
P.S. (as Brooke) Yeah, I'll go over there right now.
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Hello Brooke! I was so confused like "who is this random person who suddenly is high up on the leaderboard" haha
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Hello, Amaya! I'm sorry, but you must be confused. I'm Hermione Granger. I have met Brooke, but I'm definitely not her. And also, I take that as a compliment that you noticed I'm high on the leaderboard. So, thank you.
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Oh, hello Hermione! I have a secret to tell you as well: my name isn't Amaya. Amaya was my code name, so no one from Hogwarts would recognize me! I'm Ginny Weasely! You know, your boyfriend's sister and your best friend's girlfriend! ! We did a lot of stuff together, including saving the world. My muggle form is a huffleclaw, even though im a Gryffindor.
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I should've known. (; How are you, Ginny? Harry and the kids doing okay?
On a not-so-happy note, I heard from someone that Harry was giving this girl some looks and you were angry...Is this true?
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Yup, doing great! Hopefully no other hogwarts kids come by this and find out about me being Ginny. Lily has a fever though, hopefully she gets over that. Luckily we know it's not that crazy muggle sickness they can't seem to control, since wizards can't get it.
Oh, well, yes I was angry, but I was angry for a different reason. Harry would never, he's a Gryffindor after all. I was annoyed at how he didn't let me pick any of the children's names, and insisted even though I was completely against Albus Severus. Come on Hermione, I'm sure you understand how crazy that is. I'm over it now though. I hope ur doing great!
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That's good! Why not? Publicity thing, I'm guessing? Oh, that's too bad. Yes, I heard about that. It's too bad. :( But, I agree that it's a good thing Lily doesn't have it.
Oh, I see. Yes, I understand. Ron and I went back and forth on what we should name Rose. Finally we agreed on Rose. It's good that you two are fine now. My family and I are doing great as well!
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Brooke!!! You changed your name?!?! That's kinda funny!! I was actually wondering where you went, until I just pressed this name out of curiosity and found out it was you!!! So funny!!!
Anyway, nice story!!! I loved it!!! I haven't read one of yours in a while, and this was good!!! Great job!
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Brooke? I apologize, but I'm Hermione. It's nice to meet you, though, Avery G..
Thank you very much! I will read one of yours in return.
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Ahh, yes, I see. How is Crookshanks?
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Crookshanks is doing fine, thank you for asking. He is still chasing rats around whenever he can (luckily they're not Scabbers anymore).
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Yay!! Oh, right, that's true.
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"Its not Wingardium Levi-OSA its Wingardium Levi -OSAR"
;)
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This made me laugh! I love seeing people attempt to imitate me. Normally I do it back, but I don't know you very well, so I can't.
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hehe, :D
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Hey, Hermione. It's me, Pansy Parkinson. *scoff* I still can't believe you hang out with that stupid Potter, and I want to like, smack you for punching Malfoy because we recently starting dating. But as much as I hate to admit it, I need some help with something that only a nerd could figure out. How do you make Polyjuice potion? I mean I can get the ingredients and stuff from Snape, but I need some help.
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Hello, Pansy. Potter, stupid? I'm sorry, but he's the one who helped to destroy Voldemort. Without him, Voldemort would have full control and we'd all be doomed. As for punching Malfoy, I have no guilt whatsoever. I do not care that you two started dating. In fact, Malfoy is a foul, loathsome, evil little cockroach. I have no idea why you want to date him. Oh, Pansy. You're so naive. You really think that me, a Gryffindor, would help you, a Slytherin who cares about no one but themselves? Ha! Good try and nope. That is, unless you do something for me...
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*eyeroll*
What do you want, you filthy little Muggle?
Plus, Potter didn't beat Voldemort by brains, silly girl. He only beat him because Dumbledore laid the path out for him and basically handed him instructions on how to do it on a silver platter. AND in Potions in sixth year, when he got really good marks from Slughorn, weren't you the one throwing a fit because you knew you were smarter than him yet he did better with the potions because of his stupid book?
As for Malfoy. He is NOT any of those things, he is actually a very nice person. He just doesn't like little Mudbloods like you because you shouldn't even be in this school. You don't need to be here and you don't deserve to be here. Plus, I heard some rumors flying and I saw some camera footage (ahem, thank you, Snape) that YOU were walking around the halls with Malfoy after hours!
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I want you to teach me how you can admire Malfoy so much, because I can't seem to get a hang of it. Not really. What I truly want you to do for me is teach me how to do the Freezing Spell. I know it seems very simple, but with everything go on now with Professor Moody and the Tournament, I haven't gotten the chance to try it.
Now, there is something that I can half-agree with you on. Dumbledore did, indeed, help Harry throughout our school years, but he never gave him direct answers. Sure, there may have been some hints, but no answers. Also, I personally was the brains throughout our school years. I know Harry and Ron weren't. I also know that I am smarter than him, and I urged him to get rid of the book because look at where we ended up with Snape.
Yes, he is all of those things. Oh, and thank you, Pansy for calling me a Mudblood. Because now you can feel like an inadequate person who has lowered herself to the level of a name-calling jerk. I deserve to be at Hogwarts. Why else would I get that acceptance letter AND have the Sorting Hat put me in a house? Hm? As for the walking around with Malfoy, we were helping each other for a short period of time. I was teaching him one thing, he was teaching me another.
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Yeah, right. You're JEALOUS, Granger, and that's it. You have a crush on Malfoy. I've seen the footage.
Freezing Spell? That's one of my favorites. It's very easy. It takes a lot of common sense, which I guess isn't a big Gryffindor trait.
Also, it isn't name-calling, silly. It's called the truth. Something your Mudblood brain hasn't quite figured out yet.
Also, next to our good friend Voldemort, the founders of Hogwarts were some of the best wizards and witches in all of history. I guarantee your founder could have bewitched the hat to allow Mudbloods in. Salazar Slytherin wanted to keep the school pureblood, but the other 3 naive founders decided against it and to allow Mudbloods like yourself in. Face it, Granger- you don't deserve to be here. Only purebloods.
PS: back off of Malfoy. He's MINE. :D
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Jealous?! I don't know what fantasy world you're living in, Pansy, but I would never have a crush on Malfoy. You are clearly reading the footage wrong.
Kind of like how Slytherins lack the trait of anger-control. *mock-smiles*
The truth is that the Sorting Hat had no idea what he was doing when he accepted you into Hogwarts. A person who calls other people "Mudbloods" doesn't deserve to be at Hogwarts.
Voldemort?! He was the worst wizard in all of history. Dumbledore should be in there, not Voldemort. As for Godric Gryffindor, unlike Slytherins, Gryffindors have the decency to respect the rules and not tamper with the Hogwarts educational experience, thank you. And Dumbledore is the best wizard in all of our history, and he is a half-blood. How long did was he Headmaster? Mhm.
P.S. I've never and will never want Malfoy. He's cruel, just like you.
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Could you maybe check out "Unforgivable" and leave some feedback?
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I love this.
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Thanks!
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would ya wanna do a story together?
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