This story is dedicated to Kylie on Reedsy Prompts. Please read my author's note in the comments~
The corners of Kylie's mouth slightly moved upwards as she stared at the box, her eyes twinkling with pride. She felt like a pet owner watching their dog do as trained, a mother bird observing her child fly for the first time, an artist finished with their masterpiece.
The creation Kylie had made, this small, carefully chosen box, packed to the top with loved items, it was like a newborn to her. Delicate, a source of her pride.
Kylie picked up her time capsule, fingers light as feathers, and cradled it during the whole journey.
It had taken her months, maybe even over a year, to decide what she would put in this box. After all, it was nothing but the future generations' perceptions of those who had lived before them.
There was no doubt that Kylie would add technology. She wondered how much her phone would be worth in the future, more or less than its current price? How much value would people give to old phones? Would it be valuable due to its time and design? Or would future technology be ten times more developed, and people would regard it as a cheap, lame device? She hoped it would be valuable as she placed the phone into the box with trembling hands.
Food would expire, plants would die, clothes? Her clothes weren't unique. They didn't represent anything, and they could never speak for the world's current fashion.
Kylie snapped her fingers excitedly as an idea flashed into her mind. Photos! Photos of everything!
Her mother's call for her echoed throughout the house with the door left swinging ajar. Kylie had departed on a crucial mission to collect photographs.
Would taking photos of all the buildings be too much, she questioned, as she sunk into the shade, a refuge from the tormenting sun.
What if the buildings had fallen and only ruins remained? What if it would be an inspiration-a vintage inspiration to the future- for architectural design? What if she, Kylie, would become famous in her grave?
You're getting way too ahead of yourself, Kylie, she thought as she snapped a picture of the Reedsy™ building and walked away.
Her camera clicked and flashed for hours on end, until she decided to check her phone and realized it was almost eight. The sky had burnt from its fresh blue to a thick, tar-like black. She dashed home, mentally noting where she'd go for photos the next day.
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One windy morning, months after the first day of photo-taking, Kylie dressed in a hurry as she deliberated in her mind what else to add to her capsule.
Toys! Those toys might not exist in the future. It'll be fun for future kids to play with them!
She tucked in a fidget spinner, a few figurines, and as many intact toys she could find in her little brother's closet.
Kylie arranged receipts and restaurant menus, thinking about its use for research on foods they would eat back then.
She slid in jewelry, household items, pens, markers, paper. She placed some of her paintings on top, along with some of her stories. She felt as if she was building a skyscraper, stacking things on top, level by level.
Kylie added an unused cigarette she had found on the street, and a lighter along with it. Who knew which people would come across her time capsule.
Makeup products! I'm sure everyone would appreciate some makeup and skincare items. Goodbye, all of the makeup products that I spent hundreds to get. Goodbye nail polish, goodbye lotion. Goodbye essences.
Her journey to find and choose the items that would determine the future's impression of the past had lasted for months. Kylie was finishing with the final details, and one last idea sprung up.
I'll tuck in some masks and gloves so they can observe what we used to prevent our worldwide pandemic-
Her busy hands froze.
What if there was no future generation, what if the pandemic wiped out everyone, what if the survivors would only die from natural disasters?
What if this sickness was the universe's way of wiping out humanity? They had caused so many problems: merciless killing and cruelty of animals, destroying nature's beauties to slap down gray, dusty buildings, contributing to climate change with vehicle exhaust, Kylie was only getting started.
Humanity had also turned on each other. There was the constant injustice and prejudice, leading to traumatizing deaths based on skin pigmentation or specific beliefs. Betrayal, backbiting, lying. Those had always weightlessly fallen from humans' lips. Racism, stereotypes, lies, falseness, sexism, these were all real. And they happened every day.
What if the universe had concluded humans weren't worthy of living on Earth, the planet of life, after all?
These what-ifs slunk across Kylie's mind, wrapping around and squeezing, a deadly viper ready to take over its prey. They clawed around her head, a sinister darkness beginning to cloud her previously positive mindset about her creation.
She glanced down, sullen, at the time capsule she had spent months creating. A torrent of tears swished over her glazed eyes, and suddenly, Kylie was sobbing. She didn't want to die. Kylie didn't want her family, her friends, her teachers, her neighbors to die. She didn't want anyone to die.
Nobody's going to die.
Kylie's tears sparkled as they fell upon the items she had so lovingly collected and packed, shimmering in the afternoon sun. Kylie stared at them, a caring smile beaming through, as she picked up her stationery saved for special events, and sat at her desk to write a letter.
Crisp labels sat, taped to every item in the time capsule. Kylie had written the name of every object, along with a description.
Her letter sat, the curlicues and swirls of ink drying beside the open window.
Kylie now stood, looking down at her time capsule, an enveloped letter to go along with it, eyes twinkling with happiness. Writing the letter had lifted everything-all of her concerns off her shoulders, and she had decided to bury the time capsule.
Kylie kissed her time capsule and walked to the park.
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ya wanna hear some jokes or something?
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Sure!
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Knock Knock
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Who's there?
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Alex
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You already told me that one, it's "alex plain when you let me in", haha~!
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Hey, i really hope im not bothering you with this though I'm just a bit worried since the new ones would be out later and all that, hows it coming with your part of the story?
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Okay, so I'm actually done with the draft. I'm reviewing and submitting today :) Maybe in the evening though, since I have classes all day. I hope that's okay with you. I'll try and do it towards the afternoon, though!
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well, remember to tell me whenever you submit it ^^
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Of course :)
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How long do ya think reviewing it would take though?
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I'm not sure. Different stories take different amounts of time to review based on how much I want to work on/change a specific part.
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This was real cool, and I think that it was amazing the way that she realized the truth of her mortality. You did use Kylie a lot, maybe use pronouns every once in a while. All-in-all, amazing! I did your get to know you quiz, and I was wondering if you could read my stories? Just when on the quiz I answered not following you, forget that because I'm following you now!
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Thank you, Luke! I didn't notice that I used her name often, thanks for pointing it out~
Okay! I'll read them soon :)
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hey, did i maybe tell ya yet about the whole alien market prompt and my idea for it? i kinda forgot :/
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Yeah, I responded to it a while ago~~
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Hey, whats up with your bio now? why is it just kinda gone now and all that?
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I'm not sure, I just didn't feel like looking at it for some reason, if that makes sense :)
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are ya gonna make a newer one or something?
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Probably not.
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so your just not gonna have a bio?
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Mhm~
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heyyyy
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Hiiiiiii~
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how are ya?
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...Not great. I stayed up really late last night, and just got my weekly load of 150 assignments, and am thinking about a lot of things, haha~
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thinking about what if ya dont mind me asking? if its maybe anything bad or anything like that, do ya wanna talk about it?
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Well, I have quite a few events coming up, so I was thinking about those and how they'll work out, and then about my assignments, and then about minor issues~~
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I could try to go on another upvote spree for you but I cant really find big threads or even small ones at the moment
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My memory sucks so i dont even remember if I asked you this or not, though you still wanna read that novella I've been talking about right? and also possibly the demi-god novel whenever that's finished?
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Yeah, I do, for both~ :)
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ya do?
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Of course!!
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I wanna try and send a link for you so you can see it but I don't think that it would work
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Try, we'll see~~
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Hey, maybe you could make more quizzes or something when you have the time? they are kinda fun.
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Really? I didn't think people would enjoy them, sure!
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Im still just feeling down, maybe ya could make a funny one.
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Hey Laiba, B said I could ask you what was going on? Who are you guys talking about before? Did you guys find the downvoter or something?
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Oh, no. Someone was really rude to Hope and left her a long message calling her annoying, rude, and immature, and they left the comment on my page.
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you still sure that i wasnt being anything like that?
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No, I promise. I already said this, but hate comments are like downvoters, people stooping low to bring down others. Don't take the words to heart.
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I think they might be a bit worse than a down-voter. Though I don't know what to really do, I kinda do take the stuff like that. Ive been thinking of this stuff for like a few years.
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Don't take it like that. It seems she didn't have rude intentions and wanted you to think before typing, which I would also say to everyone on here-not just you, and not just her. It's extremely important, and I can't believe she was pointing out something you didn't do when she did worse..
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Oh my gosh, are you serious?! Who would do that?! That's so rude!
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I dunno why. It was on this story but I think Laiba said she deleted the comments of it and stuff.
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omg, that's horrible...
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I know, right? It's so rude...
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I don't even understand why they did it.
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is it gonna be out today?
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Good :) Finally cleared up! Yes, she is the first-I've never unfollowed anyone before.
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Wait, why did you ever delete the thread?
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I wanted to get rid of it. It wasn't fun to look at.
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Well, alright. I still don't feel good about any of it though.
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Please, ignore it, Hope :( Don't let it affect you seriously, just like downvoting. People do it and they're stooping too low just to bring others down. I didn't agree with any of it, and I didn't think that way. You're not being impatient at all, I understand you're excited and want an estimate of when it'll come out so you're not sitting waiting all day for it. That's nothing bad, is it?
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Hey, are you maybe good at doing a story in second person?
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I'd like to think so, since my most liked story is in second person~
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I could use some help
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Oh, speaking of, have you read any of my older stories? Spring Breakout, Morning Darkness, Illuminated Night, Embellishments on the Memory Wall, Avani?
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Yes, im pretty sure i have, didnt I ever leave some feedback?
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Hmm, I'm not sure about my older stories... I think you read Avani? Not sure.
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Ya wanna hear some jokes or something? I honestly know a lot of them now, i aint sure if your still feeling down about a couple of things, though maybe this would cheer ya up a small bit and maybe ya just like jokes.
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Sure! I'm feeling good nowadays, but it'd be nice to hear a few :)
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Knock Knock
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Who's there?
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tank
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Haha, you already gave me that joke (tank who? you're welcome), any others?
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i think i'll try to upvote you some more :)
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Really?~ Thanks! Your story will be out in an hour in return, haha~~
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Yep of course i will ^^ and thanks, i'm getting more excited ^^
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I made a new story ^^ could you check out "The crossover: the final countdown" and leave some feedback?
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Sure!!
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Remember to leave some feedback ^^
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Of course! I usually do, haha~
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Heya ^^
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Hi! How are you??
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I'm good ^^ so is the comment thing almost done? Sorry, i'm still just excited to see what ya got ^^
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Last question, it's from Ember's POV, right?
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Yes, from her POV/first person :)
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I squint my eyes, attempting to see whose shadow is illuminated under the unusually bright moonlight. It seems like it's Blue. I walk towards him, still squinting, a useless war against the light; it peeks through and stabs my eyes anyways.
"Blue!"
He glances up, an unreadable expression on his face.
"Ember."
I open my mouth, excited to tell him about my latest creation, when I'm cut off by a sharp stab of pain in my neck. I look down, terrified and confused, at Blue's head buried into my shoulder, fangs out in my neck. I pull away instantly, and he looks up, eyes red and terrifyingly dark.
Oh my goodness, I'm going to turn into a vampire, I think to myself as I fall to the ground, dizzy from the sight of what I just witnessed. Bats flit across my mind as my vision turns red.
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wow! this was really interesting and thought provoking... as always, your writing was brilliant :) I love reading your stories <3
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Thanks, Sam!! I love your stories too and really can't wait for the next one <3
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aww thank you so much !! <3
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No problem~ :)
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Hi Laiba. I read your bio, and I feel so sad for you and your pet.
Okay, to the story. This was really good! I really love how you're writing stories about all of your Reedsy friends! It's so cool and creative! I loved it so much! Great job!
P.S. I'll upvote you a little bit!
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Thank you for the kind words!
I appreciate what you said about the story :)
Thank you so much!
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You are sooo welcome!!!
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We haven't talked in a while! How's everything going?
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Yes, that's so true! Everything is okay, although I think I've told you school is a lot. How's school for you?
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It's stressful for me as well, I'm barely managing everything :) Non-school wise, things are a bit boring, but family has been doing fun things to spice up quarantine and give us something to look forward to! We have days where we eat special food, like Mediterranean food on Saturdays, so I can't wait for Saturdays because I love Mediterranean food *W*
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heyyy
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Hi
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Hi ^^ i hope i'm not bothering you or anything but do you remember how i asked you to do the thing on how the characters would get together and stuff?
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Yeah
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How is it going with that?
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It's going fine.
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Really good! You've definitely gotten better and it's a pleasure to see. My only critique is to cut things like "deliberated in her mind" because a) it's wordy when "thought" will do fine and b) it hints of an inexperienced author when I know you're not one. Keep it up!
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Thank you so much, Zilla! That makes sense :) Reading it out loud, it definitely sounds very wordy, I'll change that!
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Oh, never mind, I realized I can't change it :D Thank you, though!
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Ah well. You're welcome!
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I could use some help
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With what?
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Well you know my demi-god novel right?
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Yeah~
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I need help with it, mostly the romance though.
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Okay, do you not have any ideas on how to execute it?
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A very light story. Not sure how sad it is, though it does give passing mention to negative human behavior. Your protagonist, Kylie is very upbeat. She has a moment of doubt, then conquers it by writing a letter. Everything before her momentary sadness is simply listing what she chooses to include or exclude from the time capsule. Admittedly, it is an obvious trend for a tale about a time capsule- I saw many stories about putting stuff into time capsules. At least here we do have that moment of tension.
If you want to put tension into stories, you should think of the tension first, then include it throughout, starting with the first or second line. Or, spend a lot of time in rewrites to pull the tension to the front of the tale.
Pulling out the tension. Make Kylie a little more desperate. It's her one chance to leave a record for posterity and she can't blow it. Keep that thought at the front of her mind, all the way to the end. Since you don't have any dialogue, you need strong internal monologue to substitute. Have her weigh each choice against something else, then mention time running out because it has to go down on a certain day...
Finally let her have an epiphany just as she does. First doubt about the future wracks her, then she realizes she can only act as if it will be there.
Just my advice.
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Thank you, Charles! I will definitely use that advice for future stories with similar elements~ I apologize for requesting you to read my story, I don't love to burden others with requests. I asked you to lend some advice because I have seen your comments on others' stories and I appreciated your method of advice. No sugarcoating, simple and short. It's nice to have solid feedback! Thanks again :)
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I have no problem with helping people. It's always nice to have someone listen.
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Thank you again~~ Of course I'd listen, your advice is very helpful!
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Hey guys! Charles: I'm glad you think I'm upbeat! :)
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I love your stories. They can hardly get any better! Definitely one of the best stories ever!
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Thank you, Julia! That's a really kind compliment, haha~ Did you have a favorite part or was there a part you thought was the most well-written in the story?
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I liked the part when she chose to put photos in it. I also liked how you included Reedsy in the story.
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Thank you! It means a lot :D
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You know how you wanted the romance in the next part of the thing?
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Yeah, what's up?
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How would you act if you had a crush? and who would you want to be with, it's up to you. Like vayd, Orenda, etc.
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Hmm, I'm not sure~ probably quiet about it, I don't usually make the first move or anything, I'd just get shy during my interactions with them but mostly conversate normally. Haha, this feels weird to talk about :D I'm fine with anyone as long as they're fine with it too and they know they'd be with me :)
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Well, could i maybe do you and Vayd then?
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Sure, is he okay with doing it with me?
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nice work it's cool how u involve your followers in ur stories
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Thanks, Emma~! Do you have any critiques?
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nah, this was great
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Thanks~
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