The circle of death

Mystery Horror Sad

Written in response to: "Write a story that involves a mystery — it doesn't need to be crime-related, it should just include something that remains unexplained until the end." as part of Two Hundred!.

Chapter 1 : los Angeles

There was a girl named Isabelle she lived with her two sisters Sofia, Emma and her mother Amelia. Then ko One day Emma, Sofia and Isabelle moved to los Angeles from London with their mother. Emma was very nervous. Isabelle asked her ‘hey Emma why are you looking so nervous?’ Emma said ‘oh issie I am nervous about los Angeles. There will be a new school new friends new malls new….you get the idea right?’ ‘ ya ya. How about you sof? Are you nervous?’ said Isabelle. ‘nah I’m not. I’m exited to go to LA!’ said Sofia in a cheerful voice. Soon they reached LA and their mom Amelia said ‘girls we reached our new house!’ the girls shouted. ‘oh finally we reached!’ they looked at their house and saw an old castle like house it was called the house of Valerie de Merril. Sofia asked her mom ‘mom who is Valerie de Merril?’ ‘oh why don’t you go and research about her. Go and met your New neighbours and make friends and ask them if they know something.’ Said their mother. So Emma, Sofia and Isabelle went to go and meet new people and make friends first they went to a house called Brown’s. There they met a very cheerful and positive lady and her two children, a girl named molly and a boy named James. Their father was also very cheerful and nice. Next They went to another house named the Watson’s, they knocked on the door and a lovely old couple came out the girls met them and went back home……

                                   Chapter 2: I love black

Emma, Isabelle and Sofia sat on the dining table with their mother. Isabelle started eating like she has not eaten since a year!. She took a whole bunch of vegetables…..ew……. Even broccoli and ate five to six vegetables at a time they all were staring at her as she ate like a pig. Soon Isabelle realised that she is being stared at and said ‘have you not seen a hungry girl before?’ Soon it was bedtime and the girls went to their bedroom. There were three beds and the room was of three colours. The purple side was for Emma, turquoise was for Isabelle and for Sofia it was pink her favourite colour. Isabelle said ‘ew turquoise! Such a dirty colour! So last year!’ Emma was shocked ‘OMG! Issie, in the old house you said you could give away all your things just for having a turquoise bed!’ she said. ‘ya ya so what if I said that, black is the most awesome colour!’ said Isabelle smiling. Emma and Sofia were really surprised but went to sleep but just when they were about to fall asleep Isabelle started to snore. Isabelle never snored before In her life but Today she was!. Emma and Sofia had a difficult time to fall asleep but when they did Isabelle woke up and went out of the room.

                               Chapter 3: furious Isabelle

It was morning, the sun was shining, Amelia called out ‘girls it’s time for breakfast!’ Emma and Sofia came down but Isabelle did not. Emma asked ‘mom where is Isabelle?’, there was a voice ‘ I’m here’, it was Isabelle, she gave a fright to everyone. They all ate breakfast and their mom sent the girls out to play. Emma said ‘umm…. Where should we go?’ ‘let’s go to play with molly and James’ said Sofia. They went to the Brown’s house, there Mrs brown (the cheerful and positive lady) opened the door. She said ‘oh girls! It’s you!, Come in come in. Molly and James are in their room, you go play with them I’ll get the snacks’ ‘ it’s called hangi'n out to kids our age’ said Isabelle in a rude tone. The girls then found themselves in front of the bedroom door of James and molly, they knocked on the door and the door creaked open, the girls entered and saw a white thing in front of them, Sofia screamed ‘aaaaaaa’. Just then the white thing removed it’s white skin, it was James and molly dressed up as a Ghost to prank the girls. All of them were laughing except Isabelle who was furious.

                            Chapter 4: he died of old age

Mrs brown brought everyone snacks…… YUM!..... veggie puffs and banana smoothies. Isabelle said ‘ew I hate veggie puffs!’ ‘oh I’m sorry dear I’ll get cheese balls for you’ said Mrs brown awkwardly. Everyone ate the snacks and drank the smoothies. Soon it was evening , the girls went home and ate dinner. At night the same thing happened again, Isabelle went out of the bedroom. Isabelle went to the Watson’s backyard. The next day Mr Watson was found dead in his backyard. The Brown’s and the girl’s family was invited to his funeral. Everyone was sad except Isabelle she was smiling. The police wanted to solve this problem as before Mr Watson died, the day before another man named Mr Coyle died in his backyard. Sad Mrs Watson said she had not seen nor heard anything to the police. The police also asked all the Neighbours, soon the police asked Isabelle, she simply smiled and said ‘I think he died of old age’.

                                    Chapter 5: vanished

It was another day, the girl’s mother screamed......aaaaaa……, the girls rushed down and saw Isabelle standing next to a dead body, with a dagger in her hand, and her clothes covered in blood. Everyone was terror struck, they never thought that Isabelle could do something like this, Sofia asked Isabelle from the stairs ‘issie d..d..did you k..k..kill this man?’ then Isabelle spoke in a distorted voice ‘yes it is I who killed this man, Mr Watson and Mr Coyle….. hahahaha……’ ‘but why would you do such a thing Isabelle I know is kind, nice, and sweet, she would never do such a thing.’ Said Emma. ‘ I’m not your Isabelle, I’m Valerie de Merril the original owner of this house and I am in Isabelle’s body so I can take revenge from the people who murdered me’ said Valerie in Isabelle’s body. ‘ what can we give you to stop you from killing people?’ said Amelia. ‘ there is one way, one of the people living in this house will have to sacrifice their life!.’ Everyone was thinking just then Emma said ‘I will sacrifice my life!’ then Sofia said ‘no! I will’ but just then their. Mother said ‘ shut up you two! I will sacrifice my life’ then Isabelle said ‘oh so the mother will sacrifice herself! Come in this black circle of death. Isabelle started making a black circle. Amelia stepped in it and immediately vanished.

                                  Chapter 6: Isabelle is back

Isabelle turned into herself again and said ‘what happened?, Where’s mom?’ she saw the dagger in her hand and she screamed…… aaaaa….. she threw the dagger on the dead body and she screamed again, just then the dagger and the dead body disappeared. Isabelle ran towards her crying sisters. Emma and Sofia explained what had happened and Isabelle burst into tears. Later that day the girls went to the Brown’s house and told them everything that had happened and later told it to the police and they sealed the house. The girls were sent to their cruel aunt’s house but that is another story…….the end….

Story by Gurgeet kaur

Posted Jul 17, 2020
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40 likes 42 comments

Akshat .
July 29, 2020 12:17

Just some spelling mistakes, capital letter issues, and punctuation. But it's good, overall! You should try Grammarly! It helps out with problems like that.

Just one more thing: you revealed the truth about Valerie possessing Isabelle too early and in a bit of a hasty way.

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Harley Quinn
August 27, 2020 07:41

Yeah I'm gonna submit another one as soon as I find a good prompt

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Hriday Saboo
August 24, 2020 14:07

I have submitted my new story Pls read it.

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Akshat .
September 01, 2020 13:13

When will you post a new story?

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Harley Quinn
August 17, 2020 05:31

Thank you all so much!

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Sia S
August 10, 2020 04:26

Nice story Gurgeet, I think Akshat was right you were a little hasty in the end. And the grammar ! Try to check your stories before submitting.

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Hriday Saboo
August 15, 2020 18:16

Yeah true

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Jubilee Forbess
July 31, 2020 15:33

Excellent story, just make sure you follow feedback for spelling mistakes and other grammar things as well as breaking up paragraphs. :)

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Harley Quinn
December 10, 2020 07:52

thanks! btw sorry 2 reply too L8

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Akshaan Airan
July 30, 2020 05:16

I liked your story a lot Gurgeet Kaur.
it was lovely so i give u 4.4/5

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Hriday Saboo
September 14, 2020 11:16

Hi akshaan

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Harley Quinn
December 10, 2020 07:51

thanks! btw sorry 2 reply too L8

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Harley Quinn
December 10, 2020 07:52

thanks for the rating akshaan

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Akshat .
October 21, 2020 04:22

When'll we get a new story?

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Hriday Saboo
September 14, 2020 11:14

are we even gettin’ a new story

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Amogh Kasat
August 26, 2020 09:05

Is there any new stories?

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Hriday Saboo
August 15, 2020 18:15

A nice story gurgeet Kaur

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Hriday Saboo
August 15, 2020 18:15

Liked it

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Harley Quinn
December 10, 2020 07:52

thanks! btw sorry 2 reply too L8

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Hriday Saboo
December 10, 2020 13:31

6 months later dude

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Harley Quinn
December 28, 2020 16:07

😅

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Amogh Kasat
August 10, 2020 03:51

It's a good story! Just some spelling mistakes and grammar issues. If there are any parts ahead, I am looking forward read it.

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Harley Quinn
December 10, 2020 07:51

thanks! btw sorry 2 reply too L8

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Amogh Kasat
December 12, 2020 12:58

it's ok

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Harley Quinn
December 28, 2020 16:08

😅

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Harley Quinn
August 07, 2020 16:13

Thank you all for the feedback, I will definitely work better in future stories.☺️

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Anjali Malik
July 25, 2020 08:44

Wow, this story is very good. You portrayed EVERYTHING very well. I liked your story very much dear.
Really appreciable one.👏
May your all plans come true.😇
Good luck🤗🤗

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Harley Quinn
July 26, 2020 06:38

Thank you so much for the encouragement 🌺🍩🦄🌈🌌🧜‍♀️

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Anjali Malik
July 26, 2020 07:58

:-)

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Akshat .
October 14, 2020 13:33

When will you post a new story? You are active, you just changed your name.

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Sia S
October 13, 2020 06:34

New story pls !!!

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Akshat .
September 16, 2020 05:10

When'll you post a new story? It's been 8 weeks!

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Harley Quinn
December 10, 2020 07:50

sorry I actually didn't have much time to post any of my stories.. well I have been quite busy lately.(awkward face)

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Akshat .
December 11, 2020 02:53

Okay.

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Lexi Robinson
September 14, 2020 17:14

Heyy, nice story!!!

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Harley Quinn
December 10, 2020 07:50

thanks!
btw sorry 2 reply too L8

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September 03, 2020 06:10

Great story!

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Harley Quinn
December 10, 2020 07:51

thanks! btw sorry 2 reply too L8

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December 11, 2020 10:14

All good!

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Harley Quinn
December 28, 2020 16:08

😅

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January 13, 2021 04:45

Really nice but i think things went too fast in the story but awesome😀

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Harley Quinn
January 17, 2021 16:56

thanks I will definitely work on it 😅

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