Caroline Tolley

Caroline Tolley – Editor

I have over 25 years of experience editing Romance, Women's Fiction and Suspense. I offer developmental edits, line edits and assessments.

Overview

I have edited for two Top Five publishers, small digital presses, self-published writers, and literary agencies. During a very productive professional career, highlights include a handful of New York Times, USA TODAY and Publishers Weekly, bestselling authors. I am as passionate today about what I do as I was when I started out. New writers, established authors...It's a privilege to work with you all, no matter where you are on your journey. Popular fiction is my area of expertise: Romantic Suspense, Historical Fiction or Mystery, Book Club Fiction, Rom-Com, Amateur Sleuth. Helping a writer to see the broad story canvas, strengthening structural weakness and fleshing out character development, are often main focal points for me as a developmental editor. I love to 'talk shop', brain -storming the ins and outs of a changing publishing landscape. There is often plenty to discuss when it comes time for you to figure out which route to take towards seeing your story out into the world. I am happy to bring my editorial recommendations to you to assist in creating a strong and marketable work of popular fiction. Please don't hesitate to reach out!

Services
Fiction
Historical Fiction Historical Mysteries Romance Thriller & Suspense Urban Fantasy Women's Fiction
Languages
English (US)

Work experience

Soul Mate Publishing

Jan, 2013 — Jun, 2020 (over 7 years)
As a freelancer for Soul Mate, I acquire and edit all genres of commercial fiction and Romance. Developmental and line by line editing.

Avon Books

Jan, 2002 — Jan, 2004 (about 2 years)
As a freelance fiction editor for Avon Books, I edited numerous commercial novels including Romantic Suspense, Historical Romance, Urban Fantasy and African-American Romance. Developmental editing and line by line editing.

Self-employed

Jan, 2002 — Present
My editorial services include developmental editing, line editing, and manuscript critiques. I also offer assistance with submission proposals for literary agencies, publishing industry insight and career consultation.

Pocket Books, a division of Simon & Schuster, USA

Sep, 1989 — Dec, 2001 (about 12 years)
During my tenure at Pocket Books I worked with both new writers and seasoned veterans. My relationships included editorial work for 4 New York Times bestselling popular fiction authors. All sub-genres of Romance and fiction for women were the main focus of my editorial tasks. I worked closely with literary agents; put together contracts, offered input on marketing, publicity and jacket art options. I often attended writer's conferences, spoke on panels, took author pitches. and judged contests.

Portfolio

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The Old Cranberry Ladies Garden Club: The Ghost and The Key

Cusano, Bill

Cusano Marketing, LLC - 4610 Publishing

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The General's Wife

Dana, Suzanne

Zen House Ink

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The Baker's Ghost: A Mystery Baked to Perfection

Fioravanti, Gerard

Groovy Corporation

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When Happily Ever After Fails: A Novel

Deane, Courtney

SparkPress

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The Christians

Casey, Thea

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A dutiful son to his single mother, Manny Stockton has spent the last twenty years harboring a grudge against his absentee father, Isidore. But after Isidore’s sudden passing, an obligatory ho... read more
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*** WARNING: READERS FREQUENTLY REPORT A LOSS OF SLEEP DUE TO THE "CAN'T PUT IT DOWN" NATURE OF THIS BOOK *** The StorySPACE. It's not just the glitziest casino ever built. It's the largest ma... read more
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Walking wildfire Sam Owens gets Lillian hot in all the right ways, but there's more to the software CEO than just a pretty face. And a great body. And . . . Oh, right. He’s the enemy, accordin... read more
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Like a vengeful Norse God, Captain John Nylander has come from the sea to steal the only home that Callie has ever known. And that might not be all he's after. Can a Viking . . . Orphaned as a... read more
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An old and deadly enemy.A danger reaching beyond life's boundaries.A love destined for all eternity... A silent killer sweeps humanity, consuming its life force, threatening an eternal reign o... read more
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Ebola Island

Pratt, Gregor

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In this entertaining story rich with tongue-in-cheek humor and clever twists, a witty art lover battling a tarnished past races to solve a string of high-profile art thefts in the Pacific Nort... read more
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Polar Vortex

Matthew Mather

Arctic meets Da Vinci Code in the new thriller from Matthew Mather, worldwide bestseller with over MILLION COPIES SOLD, translations in 24 languages and film development by 20th Century Fox.A ... read more
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Tracy Price needs a sampler that says, “When you’ve got it all, don’t screw it up by worrying you’re going to screw it up.”Not that she doesn’t appreciate the abundance in her life.She has a r... read more
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A drunk historian, a dodgy entrepreneur, and a lost Inca treasure. Has newly-qualified geologist Sam Harris bitten off more than she can chew? Sam Harris is a woman in a man's world - overlook... read more
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Silke Monnie and Mari J Hahn met in the kitchen of the German dorm in 1988. Even though they come from different countries, different cultures, and speak different languages, they became fast ... read more
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2018 IPPY Historical Fiction of the Year, Silver Medalist2018 National Indie Excellence Awards, Finalist2017 Foreword Reviews Book of the Year, Finalist "What is Forgiven is danger, mystery an... read more
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He's everything a girl could want...And everything this girl wants to run from!Moni Lawrence can't believe her good fortune! Thanks to an unexpected inheritance, she's leaving her tiny Virgini... read more
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In this sizzling romantic suspense, the popular author of Into Danger brings together a woman with no past with a man who has given up on his future. Rick Harden, CIA's Task Force Operations C... read more
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Dawn Miller's marvelous debut novel is a grand adventure -- and a glorious love story -- experienced with all the passion and yearning of a heroine you'll never forget: eighteen-year-old Calli... read more
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Stunning her free-spirited mother by settling down in a quiet New England community, Sabine, a possessor of psychic abilities, helps unravel a local mystery with the help of Dan Smith, who has... read more
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Contemporary and compelling, the novels of JoAnn Ross draw their power from the laughter and tears that fill women's lives. Now, after her triumphant bestseller A Woman's Heart, she makes a da... read more
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Just Before Sunrise

Carla Neggers

Carla Neggers' sizzling novels are loved for their deliciously funny dialogue, electrifying suspense, and heart-stopping romance. Here, the New York Times bestselling author presents a fast-pa... read more
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Brickhouse

Rita Ewing

Fitness superstar Nona Simms worked hard to make Brickhouse one of the hottest gyms in the city. Now corrupt city politics is coming uptown to Harlem, and Nona's dream is slated for the wrecki... read more
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Bestselling author Andrea Kane delivers a pulsating blend of corruption, seduction, and bone-chilling suspense in one of the most sensational blockbuster thrillers of the year. From its openin... read more
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Paradise County

Karen Robards

The rolling fields of Shelby County are home to some of the finest horseflesh and bluest blood in Kentucky. With its rural beauty and tranquil lifestyle, it is easy to see why the locals call ... read more
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JT Lockie and Shawna have to solve the mystery before it's too late as they are swept up in a mystery going back several decades. It starts with the mysterious death of his father and a strang... read more
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The Winds of Fate

Elizabeth St. Michel

A woman’s desperate attempt to escape an arranged marriage leads to adventure she never could have imagined in Elizabeth St. Michel’s riveting new novel, The Winds of Fate.Claire Hamilton will... read more
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Lucy Callahan will do anything to rescue her sister from a cult, even marry a werewolf she’s just met. But the werewolves are working undercover for the government, and Lucy fears a confrontat... read more
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Woman’s Suffrage. Influenza epidemic. War. See how those three things impact an ordinary American girl as she comes of age during the early decades of the 20th Century. Follow her journey to i... read more
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Exit Signs

Patrice Locke

Tracy Price is a serious researcher. Then she meets minor rock star Jesse Elliot and the only question on her mind is, "May I sit on your lap?"He's trying to write a memoir that will bare his ... read more
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Simon Low is a rake. His name travels across New York on whispers and titters. Owner of a luxury department store in Manhattan, it’s his job to create desire. He makes women want things. At le... read more
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Hot Boyz

Marissa Monteilh

There are no siblings more charmed than the Wilson brothers of Ladera Heights, California. Fine and famous pro golfer Mason has money, respect, a beautiful, loving wife and two wonderful teena... read more
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Traces of a blue powder, an audio CD, and the victim’s medical history are all that Nick Seneca has to work with as he races to solve the homicide investigation of a lifetime. As a car enthusiast and a county prosecutor in Atlanta, Nick could not be a better c... read more
Two months after her disappearance, a young woman's body turns up on a New Hampshire riverbank hundreds of miles from home. Now the murder victim’s identical twin, Rose Blue, tries to use her flawed psychic connection to her sister to solve the tragic case. Ho... read more
Now that Lord Garrett Burnes has proposed, Tracy can finally be happy. But some people have decided otherwise. They’re all against her, even an old enemy she believed out of her world. He’s back, and he wants something from her. Thrown back into a different un... read more
Investigative reporter Carmen Cole gets the surprise of her life on her wedding day when she discovers that her fiancé and best friend are sleeping together—and that the two of them are her town's resident superhero and ubervillain. Shocked and hurt, Carmen re... read more
Prequel to the Three Keys Series...What if the life you live were a facade, your dreams a reflection of your true identity, and what if those worlds collided?The balance between good and evil has just been shattered, opening a path for a dark lord’s demons and... read more
Nakamura Reality

Alex Austin

To understand Japanese culture requires reading between the lines. This is Hugh Mcpherson's challenge in Nakamura Reality, a beguiling blend of mystery, odyssey, inconsolable loss and obsession.Absenting himself for a brief intimacy with a former girlfriend, H... read more
Cassandra Whitmore is facing yet another Valentine’s Day alone. Her love life is as dry as the Sharpie pen she uses to mark an even more dreadful day on her calendar—her upcoming 30th birthday. Driven by the maddening ticking of her biological clock, Cassandra... read more
Black Dawn is a continuation of the Davenport series, and picks up where Black Tide left off. In a race against time, Tom Spears is tracking his wife’s kidnapper from Washington State, to New York. Six days later, he finally catches up with them. A battle to s... read more
After trusting in her beloved friend Dan’s guidance from above, Olivia is finally on the path to realizing her destiny. Staring at a blank canvas after ditching her raucous corporate life and meeting the love of her life, Finn McDaniels, a hot, widowed, celebr... read more
Ranger James accepted his best friend’s death like a good soldier. With guilt. Regret. Vengeance. But a forbidden desire keeps pulling him from his mission…Desire for his best friend’s widow.Killed in Action. That’s why Amy Carter’s husband wasn’t coming home.... read more
Cold Sweat

Faith O'Shea

Letitia “Tish” Jones was one of the most talented classical pianists of her time but it had come at a cost. The price she paid stripped her of her passion for music and she’d do anything to get it back. Almost anything. Going on hiatus with the band Raging Thu... read more
Idealistic entrepreneur Lionel Lane is struggling with his San Francisco-based company Double Vision Beverages. His only hope is winning the biggest social entrepreneur award ever, the one billion dollar Big Disrupter. Desperate, he partners with his brilliant... read more
The only thing standing between a new vampire and eternal darkness is the mortal woman who claims his heart. Youngling vampire Dominic Marchant struggles to master his deadly instincts as he hunts the urban jungles of South Florida. He keeps his hunger confine... read more
Paris, September 1824 Lord Nicholas Asquith needs his wife. Too bad he broke her heart ten years ago. Can he resist a second chance at the love he lost? When Mariana catches the eye of the man at the center of an assassination plot, Nick puts aside their painf... read more

Caroline has 55 reviews

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M W.

M W.

Sep, 2024

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Lets start by saying Caroline has an eagle eye. Caroline finds the bits a writer might miss from being absorbed in a story. She is like a street lamp that shines a light in places that shows the persepctive from a readers point of view. Caroline was extremely helpful in explaining terms and offer...
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Donna R.

Donna R.

Aug, 2024

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Caroline responded when I had a question and was prompt in doing so. She was kind about her suggestions to my MS and very detailed about how I could make it better. She offered insight I could only get from a professional and tools to use to improve my writing. I believe she increased my odds ...
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Tracy M.

Tracy M.

Jul, 2024

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Caroline's insights and suggestions have been invaluable. She is very professional and responsive and took ample time to answer my questions and discuss her notes. I highly recommend her editing services!
Bill C.

Bill C.

Jul, 2025

Caroline is a super editor. She is so easy to work with and is very accommodating. We had agreed to a timeline, but then I wanted to make a few more changes before she started editing, and she adjusted her schedule to meet my needs. It is so refreshing to have a professional change their plans to...
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Joan L.

Joan L.

Apr, 2025

Caroline was very professional and encouraging. I think her suggestions were spot on.

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