Passed

Fiction

Written in response to: "Write about someone who must fit their whole life in one suitcase." as part of Gone in a Flash.

Passed

The Angel of Death appeared, holding a black suitcase. ‘You have twenty-one minutes,’ he said. ‘Fill it with the last thing you wish to pass on to your children.’ I tried to let go of all my hopes and focus on the present—it was hard.

‘What should I fill it with?’ I asked. He looked me in the eyes, touched the tip of his right wing, and said: ‘Twenty minutes.’

I dashed to my study, where the gold was hidden inside a safe disguised as a dictionary. I pulled it from the shelf, entered the code, grabbed the eight gold bars, and hurried back to the living room.

The moment I touched the suitcase, a small counter appeared on its side, its numbers glowing like liquid silver and gently pulsing, as if breathing.

‘What’s the unit?’ I asked.

‘Carats,’ the Angel replied.

‘Carats… of what?’

‘Of what matters most.’

‘And how many should I reach? A hundred?’

‘Twenty-four.’

‘Then these should be enough,’ I said, placing the eight gold bars—each weighing one kilogram—into the suitcase.

The counter flickered.

[…1…]

‘Just one?’ I shouted. ‘Thirty-five years of work… and all this value amounts to only one carat?’

‘Eighteen minutes,’ intoned the Angel.

Panic gripped my chest tightly.

‘My certificates are in my office. I don’t believe we have time to…’ He snapped his fingers, and in an instant, we were standing there. I hurried to the wall and collected everything: my bachelor’s degree with honours, my master’s from a prestigious university, and the framed awards my company had won under my leadership. ‘These are my achievements,’ I said, carefully placing them into the suitcase.

The counter shifted.

[…4…]

‘Seventeen accolades for three carats?’ I said. ‘I must have failed the maths of life.’ The Angel’s gaze fell on a trophy I had forgotten on my desk. ‘Ah… I nearly forgot this one—the most important competition I ever won,’ I muttered. The Angel held the trophy for a moment, allowing it to gleam in his hands, before tossing it into the suitcase.

I glanced towards the counter.

Nothing had changed.

‘Fifteen minutes,’ he said.

I felt a pang of despair.

‘Please don’t tell me you expect me to put “memories” into that suitcase.’

‘You may give it a try.’

I reflected on the most expensive trip I had taken with my children. I delved into my mind and pulled the memory. Then, I placed it inside. The suitcase glowed faintly, and the counter changed.

[…8…]

I stared at it.

‘So, there is indeed something more valuable than gold.’

I looked to the Angel for help, but he refused to meet my gaze. I pleaded with my eyes; his own betrayed a quiet kindness he seemed determined to conceal.

‘You may consider what makes you proud of your own father,’ the Angel said.

‘Nothing,’ I replied immediately. ‘My father left us with nothing. I built my life with my own hands and never looked back at him. I have always loathed carrying his name.’

The Angel suddenly produced a transparent screen. Scenes from a life I had almost forgotten shimmered within it, as though the past itself were breathing. The images pulsed gently, each beat of memory echoing in the air.

‘Come closer. Those shouldn’t trouble your heart anymore, should they?’

I saw my father in his days, struggling in ways I had never known, yet always standing at our door, rehearsing a smile before opening it. My younger self ran into his arms, frozen with joy and surprise. Later, he knelt, shadowed by regret, head bowed, hands trembling, silently praying that I would be better than him.

Then I saw him enter our old house one night, tears glistening in the dim light. He crept into my room while I was asleep, placed a gentle kiss on my forehead, and whispered: ‘Thank you… for being my son.’

The screen’s light lingered, trailing a faint, shimmering echo of the past into the air.

My throat tightened.

‘Twelve minutes.’

‘I want to go home,’ I said.

I blinked. We were standing in the hallway outside my children’s bedrooms.

Following my heart, I went into my daughter’s room first. I watched her sleeping and wondered: ‘Which memory should I choose?’ ‘The most precious ones,’ the Angel said. Then he whispered: ‘For her.’

The screen unfurled once more, revealing the life my daughter shared with me.

‘Eight minutes,’ he murmured.

I scanned through school days, birthdays, laughter, and plays, recalling the small wonders of our shared, golden days. I moved swiftly past the moments when I had caused her tears, and lingered with gentle care on those when I had chased away her fears.

Then I noticed something faintly glowing, carrying a delicate scent of jasmine.

I saw my daughter enter, feigning happiness, her strained smile catching my eye. I sat with her in silence. After a while, she hugged me and slipped back to her room. There, she opened her diary and began to write:

“Dear Future Me,

Today is the most beautiful day of my eighteen years.

Today, I have learned that my father will stand by me, even if the whole world stands against me.

Today, I wish to say to him: thank you for being my father.”

She closed the diary, tucked it beneath her pillow, and fell asleep with a smile.

‘I don’t remember that day,’ I whispered, holding back tears.

‘But your daughter does.’

I reached through the screen and carefully lifted the memory. As I placed it into the suitcase, a soft pink light spread across the room.

[…15…]

‘Seven carats,’ I said, almost in disbelief.

‘Five minutes,’ said the Angel.

I kissed my daughter farewell and then walked into my son’s room.

‘How can I measure nine carats from my son, when the most I received from my daughter was only seven?’ I murmured.

The screen appeared. I watched the memories I had built with my son unfold—training sessions, victories, defeats, lessons in discipline, and lectures on sacrifice and responsibility, each moment shaping the man he would become.

Those were cherished memories, yet none felt quite enough.

Then I saw the day I had desperately tried to forget: the day on which everything I had built collapsed. I saw myself crawling back from that defeat, with my son silently watching.

To my surprise, pride shone in his eyes.

‘Two minutes.’

I doubted this moment would be enough, but I lifted it from the screen anyway and placed it into the suitcase. The air shimmered with the scent of lavender, and the counter climbed.

[…23…]

‘One carat remains,’ the Angel said.

I froze.

Is that the worth of everything I have built in my life?

Have I truly wasted it?

I wish someone would tell me what to do.

‘One minute.’

“Listen to your heart; it knows your truth.”

I remembered the advice I secretly turn to in my darkest times. For the first time, I couldn’t help but whisper to the one who had gifted it to me:

‘Thank you… for being my father.’

A tear slipped from my eye despite my struggle to hold it back.

[…24…]

The black suitcase shimmered, then glowed white, before closing with a soft, decisive click.

I handed it back to the Angel.

‘You’ve passed,’ he said.

‘I’m ready,’ I told him.

He smiled.

His wings spread wide.

A gate opened in the sky.

I looked upwards.

There he stood, my father, welcoming me with a proud smile as the gate widened before me.

***

Posted Mar 13, 2026
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Jane Stephenson
12:37 Mar 21, 2026

interesting story, and I loved the value or lack of value that was placed on items he would leave his children.

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01:32 Mar 20, 2026

Great story! I liked the urgency already shown in the first sentence. Your writing was very smooth, and spoke straight to me, a perfect balance of internal thoughts, dialogue, description, action. The only thing I can think to improve is to better explain the system of "Carats", and what it meant when they were being counted up. The ending, and the moral message to fathers to think more about their children's emotional needs rather than stacking up gold bars is a very good one.

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Nader EL-Mahdy
06:22 Mar 20, 2026

Thanks, Scott — I really appreciate your feedback. As for the "carats", some things are better left unexplained.

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