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Godslayers: The Megiddo Incident

By Jakob Sjolander

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Sjolander fails to properly develop his protagonist while his other characters are much more interesting.

Synopsis

The Godslayers–an elite group of assassins, mages, soldiers, and shapeshifters–are about to find out whether they are worthy of the name.

Prophets all over the world spit blood, have seizures and speak of only one thing: the town of Megiddo in western Kansas. Quetzalcoatl, the Plumed Serpent, blood god of the Aztecs, is coming to earth.

Mole, born and raised in the sewers of New York and now a top member of the Godslayers, gets the call. Haunted by memories of past missions, he knows only one way to make the memories go away: create new ones.

It is a race against time as Mole fights to defeat a god, keep the peace between a hundred greedy factions, and deal with treacherous comrades. But he’s still got an ace up his sleeve–a magical secret far more terrible even than the nuclear warhead ready for launch…

Godslayers: the Megiddo Incident is a contemporary fantasy thriller. If you like Bill Willingham’s Fables, Steven Erikson’s The Malazan Book of the Fallen, or Neil Gaiman’s American Gods, this is for you.

Jakob Sjolander’s The Godslayers: The Megiddo Incident is a fantasy set in the modern world. When prophets foresee the coming of the Mayan god, Quetzalcoatl, Mole and the rest of the mythologically-themed Godslayers, or super soldiers are deployed to stop it.


It would be tedious to account for every bit of bad dialogue or line of prose that can be described colloquially as “cringe.” Suffice it to say, Mr. Sjolander would benefit from an editor. This review instead will be limited to three major concerns: character, conflict and plot cohesion.


First, character. There are a number of vivid characters here. There is Cathy with her bright hair and matching disposition; Frosty and her magic sword; and the oozy, bug-infested McCormick. Unfortunately, the protagonist is vanilla Mole. Plain vanilla. Not even a single jimmie on top. There isn't a physical description of him, leaving the reader to guess if he’s a moleman until a character at last states, “So you’re human,” about halfway through. Further, he is an observer rather than an actor. He watches through binoculars as the Godlsayers set up their base. He watches through video feed as they conduct an assault. When he finally does something worthwhile, his efforts are ineffectual, and the situation is remedied by a deus ex machina. His character arc - overcoming PTSD - falls flat.


Second, conflict. Nobody in the story knows what’s going on. There is a vague prophecy and a duplicitous informant. As a result, Mole wanders around asking questions, but everyone is just as clueless: We think something will happen, but God knows where or when. The only palpable threat comes from the various magical factions occupying Megiddo alongside the Godlsayers. Yet, it is not clear why they are so hostile.


Which brings up the third point, plot cohesion. This can be expressed by a series of questions. Why are foreign entities allowed to establish operations in an American city? What are their goals? What, precisely, is the motivation of the villainess? And so on. Also, Mole the “sewer expert” never enters a sewer. 


There are some good things here, too. The premise is solid. The PTSD arc has potential. The climax is well handled. Indeed, when some characters are killed, Mr. Sjolander manages to elicit empathy from the reader.


Even so, Godslayers is not recommended. Perhaps with practice Mr. Sjolander’s skill will equal his vivid imagination.

Reviewed by
T. C. H.

First, I go by T. C. I am a Cincinnati-based writer and editor with a degree in journalism. Presently, I write IGreviews.substack.com.

Synopsis

The Godslayers–an elite group of assassins, mages, soldiers, and shapeshifters–are about to find out whether they are worthy of the name.

Prophets all over the world spit blood, have seizures and speak of only one thing: the town of Megiddo in western Kansas. Quetzalcoatl, the Plumed Serpent, blood god of the Aztecs, is coming to earth.

Mole, born and raised in the sewers of New York and now a top member of the Godslayers, gets the call. Haunted by memories of past missions, he knows only one way to make the memories go away: create new ones.

It is a race against time as Mole fights to defeat a god, keep the peace between a hundred greedy factions, and deal with treacherous comrades. But he’s still got an ace up his sleeve–a magical secret far more terrible even than the nuclear warhead ready for launch…

Godslayers: the Megiddo Incident is a contemporary fantasy thriller. If you like Bill Willingham’s Fables, Steven Erikson’s The Malazan Book of the Fallen, or Neil Gaiman’s American Gods, this is for you.

Ghosts and Memories

The cold muzzle of the gun pressed against the base of his skull. “You should’ve known better, Mole. I’m not that easy to kill.” The voice was as cold as the gun.

The muzzle pressed harder, warming up as it pushed into Mole’s skin. A rookie mistake, Mole thought. What is the point of having a ranged weapon if you’re going to use it to poke people? It would be easy to knock the gun aside with his elbow as he spun around and went for the throat.

That’s how Mole knew that the owner of the cold voice and the gun was as dead as he was supposed to be. The real Bajram Nikolla–warlord, warlock, and the Eagle’s Chosen Champion–would never have made such a mistake. Thus, this was just another ghostly memory playing pranks. Besides–why would a warlock use a gun? Mole sipped his coffee. But his hand shook.

           Mole looked around the Kansas diner. It wasn’t packed, but the happily chatting people around him were more interested in each other than a 6 foot 6 Albanian warlock with a two-headed eagle tattoo on his forehead holding a customer at gunpoint. The most likely explanation was that there was no such Albanian warlock standing behind Mole. So the warlock must have died the way Mole remembered, burning and screaming the name of a treacherous god, falling like a comet into the dark waves of the Adriatic.  

            “No last words? All out of tricks? If you wish to beg, this is the moment,” the voice asked, the coldness yielding place to a lust for suffering. “Very well. Time to die.” The hairs on the back of Mole’s neck rose. He could sense trigger being squeezed.

           “More coffee, honey?” It sounded like a young woman. Mole looked to his right and saw a waitress. What memory was this? When had he offended a waitress? Why would he have nightmares about coffee?

           Mole’s tongue was quicker than his brain, and answered for him. “Yes, please.” The waitress turned his half-empty cup into a full cup. Mole fired one of his trademark smiles at her and got a very sweet one in return. But when her back was turned, he sniffed the coffee. It smelt like real coffee. It looked like real coffee. He sipped. It tasted like real coffee. It was real coffee. You can never be too sure. It wouldn’t have been the first time he was poisoned. Mole’s shadowy reflection looked up at him from the cup.   

           Mole paid, tipped generously but not suspiciously so, and stepped into the sunny street of Megiddo, western Kansas. The cup of coffee remained on the table. Nobody paid him any attention. Megiddo may have been a small town, but there were plenty more interesting things to look at than a lean and sandy-haired man in his thirties leaving a diner. Mole figured they might have been more interested if they could have seen the memories he carried with him.

Mole stepped out on a pleasant street, in a pleasant town, in a pleasant part of America. So why did he hear the thunder of artillery and sorcery in the distance? Why did twisted shapes haunt every shadow? Why did he wonder what faraway eyes stared at him through the eyes of the raven on the rooftop? Smoke and shadows. These worries were less than ghosts, less than memories. They were dreams that hadn’t noticed he was awake.

           Mole walked away from his visions. But they followed him. Or maybe they already knew where he was going and waited for him there. Mole passed by a playground where what looked like burning children played, oblivious to the fire.

           “Why didn’t you save both of them?” a voice behind him asked. The voice belonged to a mother of one, formerly of two.

Mole didn’t bother to turn since he knew there was nothing there. “I wasn’t fast enough,” he answered, as he had the first time.

           “Why weren’t you fast enough?”

           The buzzing of his smartphone spared Mole the answer. Only one person had his number. And that person held the key to making the memories leave him alone: making new memories. 

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About the author

Jakob Sjolander has searched for oil in Canada, worked on farms in Australia and been a schoolteacher in a high-crime neighbourhood. He holds a master's degree in philosophy, and has written books on courage, failed predictions, animals, and randomness. view profile

Published on March 01, 2023

50000 words

Contains mild explicit content ⚠️

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