Ed Centanni
Retired Writer
Ed Centanni
@edcentanni - Reader
Ed Centanni
@edcentanni - Reader
I am a retired software engineer. I spent 50 years writing code for computers. Since retiring, I have been learning to write prose for humans. more
left a comment on Class of 1967almost 3 years ago
almost 3 years agoMajority of the chapter is an information dump. Weed out all the passive verbs. Put in dialog, action, and conflict. There are at least 30 grammatical errors. Run your work through ProWritingAid to help clean that up. There's a lot of work to do before August.
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almost 3 years agoAbout me
I am a retired software engineer. I spent 50 years writing code for computers. Since retiring, I have been learning to write prose for humans.
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