Enjoying this book? Help it get discovered by casting your vote!

Worth reading 😎

Come rain or come shine, a mother’s love will find its way in this uplifting short story.

Synopsis

When a beloved mother suddenly dies, she refuses to cross over and becomes one with the rain. When she shows up at important family events, she comes in the form of rain and ruins the day.

She is faced with a choice; move on and miss the milestones of the people she loves or stay and bring the rain.

What will she do?

Sue is a beloved wife, friend and mother of two who, unlike most people, enjoys rainy days: she dances with her soon-to-be husband under the rain, she gets excited when it pours rain during her daughter’s soccer practice, she finds comfort in a storm as she dies surrounded by her family.

 

After Sue’s untimely passing, she shows up as rain during the family’s milestones. Although she realizes that this ruins the celebratory occasions, she still wants to be part of those precious moments that were taken away from her by cruel fate.

 

The premise of Rain on Sunday is ingenious and full of potential. The magic works well and the ending, in which Sue’s spirit finds a way to be with her loved ones without disrupting their lives, is uplifting. There are nice vignettes of domestic life, and the characters are likable, if rather plain.

 

I loved how the prologue ties to the short story that follows. In the former, the author tells a personal childhood anecdote about one rainy afternoon when her father took her on an adventure. It is always intriguing to discover how real-life events and experiences can inspire writers. 

 

The story is categorized as young adult fiction, but it doesn’t quite fit in that realm. In spite of the great premise, the plot is simple and fairly predictable, and the situations and characters are not complex enough to address with much depth the troubles that two young siblings would experience after the premature death of their beloved mother.

 

Rain on Sunday seems more like a very nice children’s story that happens to have two young adult characters. Contemporary YA readers possess enough smarts and life experiences—good, bad and in-between—to expect more multifaceted, challenging narratives.

                           

Despite its promise and strengths, this story ultimately falls somewhat short. It lacks spark; it lacks thunder.


Reviewed by

Content strategist. Founding member of Bogotá Writers, where I have contributed short stories to two anthologies, with a third forthcoming soon. I write in English and Spanish, and have been published by After Dinner Conversation, Short Édition and Letralia. I read for Reedsy and Short Édition.

Synopsis

When a beloved mother suddenly dies, she refuses to cross over and becomes one with the rain. When she shows up at important family events, she comes in the form of rain and ruins the day.

She is faced with a choice; move on and miss the milestones of the people she loves or stay and bring the rain.

What will she do?

Prologe

When I was about seven years old, my dad cut three holes in a Hefty trash bag, one for my head and one for each arm. He carefully cut the bag up the center. When he was done with his dad-made creation, he guided my arms through the holes, then made the same plastic vest for himself. He grabbed the large black umbrella and we headed out the front door with my mom standing inside, arms crossed in front of her, tapping one foot.

“What are you doing?” she shouted. “It’s pouring out there!”

“We’ll be fine, promise,” he said with a wink, and he closed the front door.

My dad and I were buddies. When he fixed the car, I handed him tools. When he mowed the lawn with his goggles on, I walked behind him with sunglasses on. On this day, I followed him out into the rain, grinning as I stomped into the deep puddles, which was strangely satisfying.

“Where are we going?” I asked. It didn’t really matter; I would follow him anywhere.

“Up there.” He smiled and pointed to the roof.

In front of our house was a courtyard with a stone arch. Inside the arch was a gate that latched in the middle with no lock. I always thought it was pointless, because even at seven years old I knew that anyone could simply walk around the wall and get inside the courtyard.

Dad unlatched the steel gate and it screeched as it opened. There was a rod that usually went into a small hole in the cement. Dad opened the gate as wide as it would go and pressed the rod into the dirt of the planter with Mom’s rose bushes, which she would not be happy about. He picked me up and stood me on the top rail of the gate and I held on tight to the steel arrows that pointed to the stormy sky. My dad climbed up behind me and led me, one step at a time, up the gate to the top of the courtyard arch and onto the first level of the roof. We sat down about six feet from the edge and the umbrella popped up with a sound like it had not been used in years, which it hadn’t. Later, I would learn that we had been experiencing a drought that was going on its third year. I guess that was why my dad was so excited about the rain. We sat on the roof and watched the lightning storm that was miles away, and even though we were under an umbrella, the rain hit my face with cold droplets. I leaned against my dad and he put his arm around me. We sat there in our Hefty bag jumpers under a rusty umbrella, and it smelled like cut grass and Old Spice aftershave. From that day on, I loved the rain.

Deborah Albers
Deborah Albers shared an update on Rain on Sunday (A short Story)about 3 years ago
about 3 years ago
My new short story, Rain on Sunday, is out. If you like ghost stories, you might like this one.

Comments

About the author

Deborah is a member of the Society of Children's Book Writers and Illustrators (SCBWI) and has published three books to date with many more in the works. Through the Paul and Deborah Albers Foundation, she and her husband have supported many charities that served as an inspiration for her books. view profile

Published on March 25, 2022

6000 words

Genre:Young Adult

Reviewed by