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This book lacked a sense of time. The 1890s felt more like the 1990s, and there were several times the storyline contradicted itself.

Synopsis

She’s a vampire. She's a witch. And she's heartless... literally.

Mercy died twice. Once when she became a vampire. Again, when her own father had her heart cut out of her chest. But Mercy’s guide in the Craft had other ideas. The essence of her heart, now bound to her brother's soul, revived the vampire witch. But the Order of the Morning Dawn will stop at nothing to eliminate her. An organization devoted to two tasks-burning witches and vanquishing vampires-will literally go to hell and back in an effort to liberate Mercy's brother's soul and end Mercy’s vampiric life. If Mercy wants to live she must go to hell herself and capture her brother’s soul before the Order can get to him. Will Mercy survive, or will the Order finally eliminate one of the most notorious vampires in existence?

Bloody Hell is the first book in Theophilus Monroe's Legacy of a Vampire Witch series. These vampires don’t sparkle. If Anne Rice's Vampire Chronicles ever met the Mayfair witches you might end up with a character like Mercy Brown. She is a ruthless, badass, snarky anti-hero straight out of your worst nightmares. But you will want to root for her nonetheless!

Bloody Hell got off to a great start. I understood Mercy's struggle and her turning into a very special kind of vampire. Where I had a lot of problems was the sense of time. The book starts in the 1890's, but you never would have guessed it if the date wasn't under the chapter number. The language and actions spoke of a time 100 years later.


The story drags for a while as Mercy grows older and more powerful. Ramon was an interesting diversion, but it lasted far too long. It was just page after page of how horrible they could both be. This middle section was just a lot of gore. It wasn't graphic or overly descriptive, but it was death after death, page after page. It didn't seem to take the characters anywhere in their development. It did pull the story slightly forward, as all the killings brought the attention of vampire hunters, but I think it could have happened in a much less draw out way.


There were also several inconsistencies in the storyline, where later parts of the book seemed to forget things that had happened earlier or directly contradict them - especially when it came to Mercy's abilities and relationships with her sire, Nico, and Ramon.


There were some really great one line quotes in the story that I really got a kick out of and showed the promise of what the story could have been. I would have liked to see more about the voodoo and the people from Nico's past. It was glossed over and I think the lack of details there made the story a little confusing when the author was trying to pull all the strings back together. To be honest, I'm still not sure what happened at the end even though I read the last 25 pages or so several times.

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A reader of just about anything, I love a story with strong character development and a plot that makes me wonder what's happening next.

Synopsis

She’s a vampire. She's a witch. And she's heartless... literally.

Mercy died twice. Once when she became a vampire. Again, when her own father had her heart cut out of her chest. But Mercy’s guide in the Craft had other ideas. The essence of her heart, now bound to her brother's soul, revived the vampire witch. But the Order of the Morning Dawn will stop at nothing to eliminate her. An organization devoted to two tasks-burning witches and vanquishing vampires-will literally go to hell and back in an effort to liberate Mercy's brother's soul and end Mercy’s vampiric life. If Mercy wants to live she must go to hell herself and capture her brother’s soul before the Order can get to him. Will Mercy survive, or will the Order finally eliminate one of the most notorious vampires in existence?

Bloody Hell is the first book in Theophilus Monroe's Legacy of a Vampire Witch series. These vampires don’t sparkle. If Anne Rice's Vampire Chronicles ever met the Mayfair witches you might end up with a character like Mercy Brown. She is a ruthless, badass, snarky anti-hero straight out of your worst nightmares. But you will want to root for her nonetheless!

Prologue

Present Day 

It wasn’t the first time I’d been to hell, though on this occasion it was by my own insistence. It was also the first time I’d been here in the flesh. And I went with the girl who would later become the Voodoo Queen. It was a delicate relationship between me and Annabelle Mulledy; we hated each other, but we also needed each other. It was in her interest that I continued to deem her an asset, of more use to me than not. 

They say that hell is all fire and brimstone. I’m sure parts of it are like that, but I never went there. I was more interested in the cold, dark part of hell. The place where cursed spirits roam, including the spirits of presently-staked vampires—and, thanks to a witch, my brother.

“Edwin!” I cried out, hoping my long-dead brother’s spirit might respond. He had been dead for more than a century and the better part of another. But it was his soul, cursed by the remains of my vampiric heart, that kept me alive. 

A wraith darted past my face, the cold chill of the vampire spirit frosting my cheek. This was the part of hell where vampires went when they were staked. I’d sent more than my share here myself. After what had happened to me, I could never bring myself to burn their hearts—the only way to ensure a vampire never comes back. I was the only exception to that rule. More than once, hunters who had heard of my exploits tracked me down and staked my chest. The horror on their faces when I laughed and sank my fangs into their necks after they’d staked me was the real prize. It isn’t the blood itself that we vampires crave—it’s souls, and human souls cohere in their blood. The more terrified the soul is when I feed upon it, the better it tastes. 

A second wraith struck me in the chest. I extended my wand and zapped it with sunlight. You can’t kill the dead, but sunlight on a vampire’s wraith makes hell itself seem like a vacation. He wouldn’t fuck with me again. Annabelle didn’t know I was also a witch—and with her, I was playing my cards close to the chest. I quickly pocketed my wand. Thankfully, she hadn’t seen it. Annabelle was here on an errand of her own, a fool’s errand my sire had effectively blackmailed her to complete. If she knew the full reason I was here, she’d hardly comply. And we needed her. She was the only person we knew who could cut a literal gate into hell. It was the only way I could come here in the flesh.

In my human life they’d given me the name Mercy. Mercy Brown. I still used the name—my first name, anyway. I relished the irony of it. In my human life, before I was turned, I’d been a witch. Only recently did I resume my practice of the Craft. As much as I relished the flavor of human souls, the dark arts gave me a different kind of thrill. Another source of power. And nothing tastes better on my palate than power. Besides blood, of course.

I could hear the wraith I’d burned with sunlight screeching in the distance. That’s right, I thought, tell the others. Let them fear me more than they already do. Hell, half of the vampires here I’d staked myself. It was no wonder they’d attack me. 

There was only one I was seeking, and it wasn’t going to be a pleasant reunion. It might even be the death of me. But I didn’t have a choice. 


Theophilus Monroe
Theophilus Monroe shared an update on Bloody Hellalmost 4 years ago
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It's a hit! Having hit the top-200 on all of Amazon, and #1 in eight different categories, check out the "Legacy of a Vampire Witch" Boxset! Just $0.99 for a limited time--yup, all five books for less than a buck! https://amzn.to/3cLuOkG
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Theophilus Monroe shared an update on Bloody Hellover 4 years ago
over 4 years ago
Hello everyone! The complete five-book series is now available! Also, if you've already downloaded this book (Bloody Hell) be sure to do an "update" through Amazon. I've made a few modest revisions. Thank you for making this book and series such a hit! As one reviewer put it, "Mercy is fast becoming my favourite vampire!" https://www.amazon.com/gp/product/B08HQMDHGQ?ref_=dbs_dp_rwt_sb_tkin&binding=kindle_edition
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Theophilus Monroe shared an update on Bloody Hellover 4 years ago
over 4 years ago
What readers are saying about "Bloody Hell!" "This was my first read by this author and I loved it!!! Brilliant storyline and characters. I loved the female main character Mercy. She was so entertaining and her whole thought process and actions sucked me in and made want to know what she would do next." - Amazon Reviewer (5 Stars) "Having read some of Theo's other books, I knew I was in for a treat. His writing style is definitely unique! I finished the book in a single sitting and I must admit, the intricacies of the story kept me spellbound (excuse the pun) and the twists and turns kept me guessing throughout." - Amazon Reviewer (5 Stars) "It's filled with intrigue, mystery, magic, and yes humanity." - Amazon Reviewer (5 Stars) "It is rare to see a book written from the point of view of a supposed villain. Particularly when the villain is featured in another series. Mercy Brown is that character. The author portrays her very human nature (even though she's a vampire). The book is enticing and thrilling. I can't wait to read the next in the series." - Amazon Reviewer (5 Stars) "I will say this spin off is awesoooooome. This book did not disappoint. We have twist and turns, the unexpected, interesting combinations of characters. Follow Mercy on her journey. We where its dark its light and she is awesome. Can wait to start the next book." - Amazon Reviewer (5 Stars) And this just scratches the surface! And Book 2 is getting even better reviews! Check out BLOODY MAD! ON Sale for $.99 today, only! https://www.amazon.com/gp/product/B08HQMDHGQ?ref_=dbs_p_mng_rwt_ser_shvlr&storeType=ebooks

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Theophilus MonroeI do not typically respond to critical reviews. My books won't be everyone's cup of tea. In this case, however, I could not resist--particularly since prior to this the book has been so highly rated and well received. When I use this service I actually pay for a professional review from a curated reviewer who I presume is going to be well versed in my genre. I'm fine with critical reviews. I typically use those reviews to improve. Though, since this is how I provide for my family, my hope is a review I'll be able to use to help promote my book. A review that is paid for, I believe it is reasonable to expect, should either be useful for promotion or offer *specific* criticisms that I can use. Unfortunately, this review satisfies neither of those expectations. I'm genuinely concerned that this reviewer might have some other unstated reason why she did not like my book. Perhaps I offended her in some way? I hope not, but it happens. The reason I suspect this, however, is due to how she is overstating her critique without any citation of examples to establish her point. For instance, she says that if it wasn't for the posted date she would assume that the book began in the 1990s. Well, the very first scene in the book depicts a protagonist suffering from consumption, lamenting the fact that her father hopes to send her to a sanatorium (the standard treatment for consumption, what we now call tuberculosis in the 1890s). In other words, the review here loses legs once one reads the very first page of the novel. In terms of language, etc., I suppose the critique is fair. I made a conscious choice--since the bulk of the series is set present day--to establish a consistent character voice over trying to reflect archaic patterns of speech. There are a few word choices made to reflect language common from the 1890s, but I intentionally held back on that. Urban Fantasies are character-driven rather than setting-driven, so I chose to prioritize the character's voice. Since it's a first person POV, further, the protagonist speaks/tells her story from an undetermined point of time *after* the actual time of the novel. This is true of most first-person novels. It's expected, to some degree, that her voice would reflect who she *is,* not who she was. Still, I get this critique. It's valid, even if it was something I did intentionally. I could have, perhaps, done more to reflect the time period in the way I depicted other characters like Rose, Alice, etc. In terms of inconsistencies--I don't know how to respond to this because the reviewer didn't spell out what these inconsistencies were. Mercy's power (which she loses at one point in the book) and the Nico and Ramon characters were adapted from a previous series where Mercy was introduced (see my book, Grim Tidings). The twists and turns these relationships take were established before and I had these in mind as I wrote toward these developments. I'm not saying it isn't possible that there are inconsistencies here. Mercy, at this stage of the series, is a very conflicted girl. In truth, there are only a few scenes in the middle of the book (after Mercy's sire, Nico, has left) that things get out of hand. I don't know where she finds killing after killing. There are just a few, they don't last that long, they serve a purpose (esp. in the evolution of Mercy's relationships with Nico and Ramon) and... Hello... It's a vampire novel. Mercy lost her mentor, albeit temporarily, and loses her way. But these events serve a purpose--her lack of control, her willingness to indulge Ramon's proclivities, even with her reservations, gain the attentions of an old foe, the Order of the Morning Dawn. They also demonstrate her need to take control of herself and not depend on her sire. I'm not sure what was missed in the conclusion. If she didn't get it, I can own that. My other readers don't seem to have had that problem but my readers are accustomed to twists and turns built into my magical systems. I'm guessing something was missed, here... but for the sake of not spoiling the ending, I won't discuss it further.
over 4 years ago
Marianne MillerI loved the book, I am seriously into mythological creatures and I love the whole era
over 4 years ago
Theophilus Monroe@mariannemiller Thank you! More mythological creatures to come in books 2-5 (which are all written!)
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over 4 years ago
D FoutsAs a fan of this author, the newest book does not disappoint. A lot of twists and turns with this character keeps you on your toes. . We have seen this character in past books and it is interesting to see how she evolves. If you are a fan of this genre, I highly recommend this book!
over 4 years ago
Kathy WorthamI did not have any problem following the story. IF you have ever been to the South or New Orleans you know that time operates differently there. There were no inconsistencies or confusion in the story line. Mercy just doesn't really care outside her little circle. She seems live and let live, unless you make her angry.
over 4 years ago
Theophilus Monroe@kathywortham Thanks Kathy! Seems like you understand Mercy perfectly! At least at this stage of her growth. :)
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Mary CombsI enjoyed Bloody Hell....esp. since I can relate being a southerner & am intrigued w/New Orleans and fantastical creatures, cults, monsters. It's good to have a what if kind'a story Mercy goes thru to entertain us awhile. I consider you a good author & had no trouble what so ever following this story. What planet was that 'Curated Reviewer' from? I would protest to the service you used for a refund or 2nd Reviewer within your genre!!
over 4 years ago
Theophilus Monroe@marycombs Thanks! I've made a request and contacted @felicia about this. I'm sure they are looking into it. I'm hoping that's what they will do considering the fact that the feedback the book has received apart from this particular review has been overwhelmingly positive.
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Rowan Elisabeth CreechThis books and series is fantastic. Granted it may have been set in 1890, but my grandmother lived to be as hundred years old and was born during this time and talked the same as me and I'm not even near her age. This book was enthralling and I loved all the unique elements to it. The characters were strong, the storyline was engaging, and out of the several books that I have going right now, it is one that I always look forward to reading the next chapter. I'd have to contradict this review as off-base at best.
over 4 years ago
Theophilus Monroe@rowanelisabethcreech Thank you so much! I'm glad you are enjoying it!
over 4 years ago
Corinne LoderHad a hard time putting it down, great characters and story. What's next?
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Theophilus Monroe@corinneloder Thank you! To answer your question I have two more books in this series already released and the fourth is coming later this month! So pleased you enjoyed it!
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over 4 years ago
Ayush Nalavade@theophilusmonroe Fantastic premise! What are your thoughts on adapting this to movie/tv?
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Ayush Nalavade@theophilusmonroe I see you've already given it some thought! That's great! Please send over an ARC PDF. I'd like our Story Innovation team to take a look at it for you this week and schedule a call to discuss it further. writers@bookscribs.com
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About the author

Theophilus Monroe is a Ph.D. in Theology who couldn't get his head out of the clouds long enough to write academic textbooks. So, instead, he took his pen to paper and began crafting magical worlds rooted in the myths and legends of the world's religions. view profile

Published on October 18, 2020

60000 words

Contains mild explicit content ⚠️

Worked with a Reedsy professional 🏆

Genre:Urban Fantasy

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