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The Feigned Moon of Entiria


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Great themes and motifs fall victim to excess telling and insufficient showing, but ultimately still worth reading for fans of soft Sci-Fi.

The Feigned Moon of Entiria promises a lot with its wonderful cover art and intriguing premise, but despite quality writing and deep themes, something holds it back from being great. Still, it's a good story.

The world is bright and vibrant and the story creatively blurs the lines between science-fiction and fantasy, which hooked me. The novella was unable to reel me in, however, due to its lack of focus on the world and thematic elements. It instead relies heavily on the characters.

The most important of these characters presents a fascinating case study on the relevance of oral tradition within technological societies. Do we need to remember our histories, or can we rely on machines? How much responsibility should one person be expected to shoulder? Does what happened before matter?

Sadly, these questions go unexplored in favor of more narrow, situational dialogue. The famous rule 'Show, don't tell' repeatedly came to mind as I read The Feigned Moon. I wanted to see everything that was being described; instead, the author glosses over much of it in favor of conversations among the story's four main characters.

I enjoyed the fast pace and brevity that Bagby brings to this story, but ultimately I wanted more. I wanted more information about Giels's family and their relationships. Giels was supposed to be the tribe's Storyteller, but what jobs were the others to be given had they stayed? How exactly did they build their machines, and how did they work?

That said, this is the first part of a serialized novel and though I wanted and expected more, I wasn't disappointed. I'm excited to read the second part of this story and curious where Bagby takes it. Fans of YA, character-driven stories, soft Sci-Fi, and light-hearted serials will have a good time should they decide to read The Feigned Moon.

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After growing up on Star Wars and in the foothills of the Sierra Nevada mountains, like flying from Tatooine to the Death Star, his family moved him to a loft the center of Manhattan, in the early '80s. The transition colored his experience and stuck with him to eventually inspire his first novel. view profile

Published on June 25, 2020

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30000 words

Contains mild explicit content ⚠️

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