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Papa's Boys


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The story was really not as well-written as a story with this kind of plot should be.

Papa's Boys is a story about Charley, who is going through a nasty divorce with his wife Patricia, while trying to get custody of his sons Charley Jr. and Mason. He meets someone new and there is more madcap adventures along the way.

Now, reading this story, I felt like the plot was nice. I get the idea behind everything and I feel like the story had a lot of potential. But I have to say, the story was not executed well. First, there were a lot of errors. Sentence errors, spelling errors, grammatical errors, those kind of things. I understand if there's maybe one or two here and there, we're only human. But this story had the errors everywhere. It was jarring at first, but then became very annoying, and then it was a huge labour to even finish the book. As an example, two different parts of the book gave two different time settings. One implied that this story took place in 2020, the other said that when these events were happening, there were no cellphones or computers. So errors were a constant theme.

I strongly feel that the books should be edited before it is released.

Secondly, with the whole book containing errors, it was hard to focus on any other part of the book. That said, it was still obvious that the characters were a bit off. They had just one personality, and that's it. This is most obvious with Charley's estranged wife. People aren't just one thing, and the story makes it seem like this is the case. That you have one constant theme running through all your actions. And this was another thing that made the story rather uninteresting.

I do not think the book is ready for publication. It has a good plot, but it needs serious work. I wouldn't go public with the book as is right now. It's honestly a bit of a disaster.

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Hello. My name is Precious Oluwatobi Emmanuel.

I am 21 years old, and passionate about books generally and fiction in particular.

I enjoy reading. I write too, and I like dark rooms. They're so peaceful. And dark. And peaceful.

I live in Kano, Nigeria with my mom and siblings

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About the author

Juntu Ahjee, originally from Oklahoma City, he began his journey in 1979 writing short horror stories. In 1988, he earned an Urban Spirit Award. In 1999, he relocated to Seattle, WA and embarked on music writing. In 2019, his poem, ‘81st Street’ won the 2019 National Poetry Award for Nubian Poets. view profile

Published on January 29, 2021

40000 words

Contains mild explicit content ⚠️

Genre: African American fiction

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