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Magic in Bloom

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Not for me 😔

I expected more, even from cozy fantasy. With a name like Magic in Bloom, I expected a lot of magic.

To say I was disappointed in this cozy fantasy Magic in Bloom is an understatement. Though geared toward younger women like myself, I felt like there was a lot of things about the book that just left me wanting more and not in a good way. The characters lacked emotional connection. The magic was little to non-existent. The description was lack-luster because of the POV.



However, I will start by saying I enjoyed the idea of the book. I liked that the characters were each unique in their own right and stood out. The characters personality made them each individual, and it’s easy to see the care that went into crafting the backstory for each character. With that said, I think focusing on the characters left a lot to be desired from the overall plot itself.



The story is told in first person, present tense. I have seen this POV done very well in the past with loads of description and well written plots, but this story was written without those things. By page three and four it was tiring and annoying to read.



Because of the POV, the author repeated themselves quite a bit, which is one of my biggest pet peeves as a writer. They would write what the character saw and then the character would say it, verbatim to another character. You have limited words pace to capture a readers attention, and this is not the best way to use it. Every sentence of narration and dialogue should push the narrative forward instead of repeating it.



The characters were incredibly flat, especially because of the POV. The main character had little to no reaction at any given time and was always willing to brush things off. A new stranger in a town that never sees strangers? No biggie, someone just moved in. Someone pushes your sister down in the street? They were just in a hurry. Whatever. I wanted way more reaction and internalization that what we received. I don’t know if the writer was writing the script for something like Hallmark, but even The Good Witch has extreme reactions in it.



Now, let’s get to the magic. There’s only a few mentions of magic in the early chapters when they do rituals under the moonlight. And the main character literally thinks this is normal. That other families in the town are doing this and can’t figure out why the town doesn’t like them or think their crazy, which makes no sense. It would be perfectly fine if she understood it and didn’t care. She just doesn’t get it, and she comes off a bit like a Mary Sue. Even when they were supposed to be at risk, when things were supposed to be hard for the characters, I found the reaction unbelievable. Overall, I just wanted more emotion from all of the characters.



On top of all this, I noticed grammatical errors throughout. It’s clear the book has seen at least one, to two rounds of editing, but needs a good proofread. Missing periods, missing quotations, backwards words. I understand things are missed or looked over during editing, but there shouldn’t be this much.



Because of everything I’ve mentioned above, I have to give it a 2 out of 5 starts. Those who love cozy fantasy may enjoy the book, but if you are looking for magic the likes of The Good Witch, Harry Potter or even Witches of East End, this is not the book for you.

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About the author

L.M. Thornburg graduated from UCCS with a degree in English. She has written two novels and is currently working on the third. She lives in the Pacific Northwest with her husband, four sons, 2 cats, and 1 dog. Most days her life closely resembles a zoo. view profile

Published on May 01, 2019

Published by Amazon Kindle Direct

50000 words

Worked with a Reedsy professional 🏆

Genre: Young Adult Fantasy

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