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Hunted

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Isabella joins forces with Detective Stone to solve the mass murder of her family in this short book that will leave you feeling uneasy.

Synopsis

Homicide Detective Ethan Stone’s next case unexpectedly leads him to the beautiful and brave Isabel. He has seen a lot of horrific crimes, but nothing like this. As lead investigator he is tasked with keeping her safe while tracking down a deranged killer. He isn’t about to mix work with pleasure but the pull towards Isabel starts to blur the lines…

Isabel’s life has been shattered with the gruesome discovery of her murdered family. Can she outrun the killer who has his sights firmly set on her? How many more people will die in the process to keep her safe…

The premise of Haunted was intriguing: a woman comes home only to discover that her family has been murdered and the killer seems to have a special interest in her. With the help of a detective, she’ll try to outrun the killer until he’s captured, but the bloodbath has only begun and this is a game the killer wants to win.


It promised to be perfect for me, yet... I will be dividing this review in two sections: things I liked and things that need to change. While I didn’t enjoy this as much as I hoped to, I do think the book has potential and might appeal other people.


The idea of this book sounds incredibly interesting. I truly wanted to lose myself in this book, searching for the killer and enjoying a little romance on the side. In that way, the story delivered: I was intrigued by the action taking place in each chapter and wanted to solve the mystery along the protagonists.


The dynamics between characters are well-written and I found them realistic. I would have liked to explore them more, but they bring a lot of life to the story. I won’t say much about this part so I don’t spoil anything, but I really liked the antagonist of the story. His reasons, his actions... everything creeped me out, which is a win in this case. Those are all the good things I can say about this book. The second part of this review is a little more critical.


This book needed more editing. There are too many run-off sentences, disconnected ideas in the same sentence, and weird wording. This pulled me away from the story, even in the scenes I was interested in. The editing is not only relegated to the writing, but also pacing and descriptions, which brings me to my second point.


The story suffers from a LOT of telling-not-showing. This made the reading experience exhausting and took a lot out of my enjoyment from the mystery. Since I was told so much, the clues were a little too in-your-face for me to experience that eureka moment I love in mysteries where everything clicks together.


As much as I enjoyed the character relationships in the story, as stated earlier, I felt like the characters themselves were too bland and two-dimensional. A big part of this relies on the issue with telling-not-showing. Descriptions of mannerisms, attitudes, and behavior are extremely important when we’re getting to know a character, and give a lot of depth to the story as a whole. This story was lacking that cohesive element.


I think the author has a lot of potential in writing mysteries and thrillers. Her plot structure is great and she doesn’t treat the reader in a patronizing way (which is very hard to find in thrillers nowadays). However, this story wasn’t it: more editing could have turned this ok-ish book into a great story.


People new to mysteries might find in this story a good place to start, though. It blends many elements into the story that would be appealing for people who don’t normally read mystery or don’t mind getting clues that quickly reveal the mystery.

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I’m a 22 years-old afro-boricua that likes reading about everything, but especially Latinx goodness and diverse voices. I'm in love with everything and anything Jane Austen, mysteries and healthy romances.

Synopsis

Homicide Detective Ethan Stone’s next case unexpectedly leads him to the beautiful and brave Isabel. He has seen a lot of horrific crimes, but nothing like this. As lead investigator he is tasked with keeping her safe while tracking down a deranged killer. He isn’t about to mix work with pleasure but the pull towards Isabel starts to blur the lines…

Isabel’s life has been shattered with the gruesome discovery of her murdered family. Can she outrun the killer who has his sights firmly set on her? How many more people will die in the process to keep her safe…

PROLOGUE


Unknown


He had a need, a need so strong it couldn't be controlled. The desire for blood and death vibrated through his entire body.


"Where is she?” he yelled to the poor, brutalised family.


He had them tied and gagged, quivering in fear of the unknown. He looked around the quaint home; the family had done well for themselves, he surmised. He picked up a framed picture—mother, father, son, and daughter—stroking his finger over her face, such a perfect looking family—too bad they wouldn’t survive.


He took in a calming breath and crouched down next to the wife. She was sobbing uncontrollably now; she whimpered as he unsheathed his blade.


He always preferred to use a blade over a gun, a blade was so much more personal. Yes, it took more planning, and it was sometimes riskier, but the joy of slicing through flesh and watching the searing pain in his victims was beyond gratifying, and he could always draw out the dying process.


"I am only going to ask this one more time.” He was looking directly at the husband, whose jaw was clenched, teeth clamped shut, clearly trying to find a way out of a situation that was hopeless. He looked into his angry gaze and wanted to commend him for his commitment to his family.


He had broken every single one of his fingers and toes, and still, he did not reveal the information he was after. With the blade pressed tightly against his wife’s throat, the husband broke his gaze and looked to his wife. What he saw there was love, sorrow, and understanding. He mumbled a heartfelt, "I love you,” through the gag, tears streaming down his face.


The husband glanced toward his unmoving son, blood pooling around his awfully still body. Then his gaze locked with the killer’s; he could see the renewed determination. He wasn’t going to say a word.


The killer’s blood raced with excitement through his veins; this was going to be fun . . .




About the author

Montana Jones is a self-published author who has always loved to read and write from an early age. Her professional career only began in 2020. She lives in Melbourne, Australia with her husband and two kids. She loves to write Crime/Thriller/Romance genres. view profile

Published on October 03, 2020

60000 words

Contains explicit content ⚠️

Genre: Mystery & Crime

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