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Head in the Clouds: Sonnets from Uncharted Territory

By Jim Tomedi

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You’ll love this modern, autobiographical take on Shakespeare’s sonnets.

Synopsis

In his first collection of poems, Jim Tomedi takes us on an unusual literary ride as he employs the structure of Shakespearean sonnets to explore both worldly and otherworldly topics ranging from family and friendship to science and technology, from our symbiotic and sometimes careless connection with nature to the heroic efforts of ordinary human beings. Where else can we discover that bard is not just a noun for poets like Shakespeare but is also a verb for armoring a horse or for dressing meat in strips of bacon? Every turn of the page provokes a spirited emotional response and a distinct opportunity for contemplation even when his musings are about unusual items like a discarded pair of sneakers, fish bait, and an old rotary phone or about the man who bonds with the cremated remains that he finds, the carnival booth operator who gives a lecture about kissing, and the couple who must garden for their lost wedding rings. With wry observation and creative wordplay, Jim transports us to quiet towns, along fast highways, across remote trails, into the earth’s core, and through outer space in ways that will make readers want to revisit time and time again.

When I happened upon Jim Tomedi’s book Head in the Clouds: Sonnets from Uncharted Territory and read its synopsis, I’ll admit that I was a bit doubtful. I wondered whether the premise would work well or be a total disaster. However, my skepticism was overcome by curiosity, and I was not disappointed. 


Tomedi, via poetry, writes his autobiography out of order. He flashes back to losing his wedding ring while gardening, the bittersweet nostalgia of fading childhood innocence, and witnessing a parent in the vicious throes of addiction. He employs alliteration to perfection. He takes a naturalist approach by making the ugly brutality of the everyday so relatable that it becomes beautiful; famed nineteenth-century editor William Dean Howells would be quite the fan. 


Tomedi’s greatest talent is his ability to invoke emotion. His poems remind me of many events in my own life, even though according to his author description, we are of different ages and at different stages in life. I laughed, I cried - well, maybe more like guffawed and sobbed, but I do love a good sonnet.


Most intriguingly (and on a more serious note), Tomedi does all of this via a few dozen modernized Shakespearean sonnets. The meter, the rhyme - it’s all there. He even gives a funny opening disclaimer about his imperfect iambic pentameter. However - and I know I’m being tough - I do wonder if someone that good couldn’t perfect that final detail, that cherry on top. And Tomedi is, indeed, what one calls “that good.” However, this didn’t take away from the quality or flow of the sonnets; their slight imperfections went with their theme of raw humanity. For this reason, I’m giving Head in the Clouds a well-earned five stars. I can’t wait to see what else this talented artist has in store, and when you finish this piece, you won’t be able to do so, either!


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Hannah Lindley is 32 years old. A writer and voracious reader since she was young, she holds a bachelor’s degree in English. Her favorite writers include C. W. Gortner, Rachel Kushner, Hilary Mantel, and Shirley Jackson.

Synopsis

In his first collection of poems, Jim Tomedi takes us on an unusual literary ride as he employs the structure of Shakespearean sonnets to explore both worldly and otherworldly topics ranging from family and friendship to science and technology, from our symbiotic and sometimes careless connection with nature to the heroic efforts of ordinary human beings. Where else can we discover that bard is not just a noun for poets like Shakespeare but is also a verb for armoring a horse or for dressing meat in strips of bacon? Every turn of the page provokes a spirited emotional response and a distinct opportunity for contemplation even when his musings are about unusual items like a discarded pair of sneakers, fish bait, and an old rotary phone or about the man who bonds with the cremated remains that he finds, the carnival booth operator who gives a lecture about kissing, and the couple who must garden for their lost wedding rings. With wry observation and creative wordplay, Jim transports us to quiet towns, along fast highways, across remote trails, into the earth’s core, and through outer space in ways that will make readers want to revisit time and time again.

Measurin’ Once Saw’n’ It Twice


I grew too old and unmotivated

To write the Great American Novel

Much other pulp has long been inflated

Some rightly worth the cerebral shovel

Mockingbird and Fahrenheit 451

And that Catch number earn declaration

And Player Piano though critics shun

To clutch pretenders with adulation

Hemingway should have waved farewell to arms

Salinger swilled rye and let Holden roll             

F. Scottgilt Egg shells to sell as two charms

Even Grapes were sour if pinched from the Bowl

So I decided to sonnet instead

To slip so leisurely into your head

 

But wait I am not nearly over done

I schemed and barded with Shakespeare my way

No not dressing with armor or bacon

Just entertaining like the man might play

So feel free to count ten and look for rhyme                                                        

And fourteen lines as is English custom

I scripted iambic in proper time

Accidental since I uniambed some

Embrace the corruption since there is more

Most problems have few solutions to bed

World chaos shames the latter and therefore

Cast blooms at my feet or stones at my head

Either way read this verse I do entreat

Let novels like flesh sleep in this conceit

 

Par for the Course

 

A red-tailed hawk sits on a pole line wired—

amber-eyed, pupil-dilated, sharp-beaked,

cinnamon-feathered, white-flecked, hunger-fired—

scanning across a two-lane blacktop streaked

with maple and oak and hemlock and pine.

She launches: swift, strong wingbeats in hushed chord,  

angling untouched through limbs stretched byzantine,

pitching a controlled dive to open sward.

Her outstretched legs talon-pin easy prey,

a vole, writhing in breathless surrender.

She thrusts and tears as white spheres stay in play

until warned by cart-caddied, drunk laughter.

The raptor with game retraces her flight

to feed distant from other appetite.

 

Back to the Garden

 

They nurtured life as two who became one

through work and children and common passion

and one late death plague fought in unison, 

her breast and his lung in matching fashion.

They buried the disease with shared pursuit,

their prized garden a plot from infection.

On the morning of fifty years in root,

he glassed blue hydrangeas for devotion.

But then did he note his wedding ring gone,

slipped off a finger thin from beaten blight.

After fruitless search, he confessed withdrawn,

she now awake and pleased with blossomed sight.

She smiled sweetly and showed slight, ringless hands.

They gardened that day to raise two gold bands.

 

First Congregational Church

 

The architecture is in juxtapose,

elevated high in brick yellow brown, 

its neighbors vacant and boarded in rows,

footed by cracked, broken sidewalks weighed down

with a random detritus that repaves 

in needles and plastic and paper scraps.

One by one they reel to the cross that saves,

some pushing food carts or wagons with flaps.

The line builds slab by slab around the block,

the fortunate firsts at the locked oak doors.

Opened, they reach for bags of valued stock,

moving unmoved to resume their own wars,

sad congregants playing hide and go seek,

fated to return again the next week.

 

Preserved

 

It would not surprise me if you had King

Louis the XIV’s heart or Einstein’s brain.

Maybe Mozart’s skull with which you can sing.

I can toss Ted Williams in your domain,

either his or Oliver Cromwell’s head.

Perhaps Thomas Paine’s scattered skeleton

or the bad blood that Mussolini bled.

Wait, souls in small pieces bring you such fun.

Galileo’s two fingers? Vertebrae

from John Wilkes Booth? Saint Francis’s left hand?

Well, half of it, but you’re no saint to pray.

Beethoven’s lock of hair if you demand.

No, I bet Chaplin’s body you possess

since you own mine once I fell powerless.

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About the author

Taught in public schools, prisons, and on the collegiate level for 40 years. Shortly after retirement got diagnosed with an aggressive form of oral cancer. During the time I spent in recovery I lost himself in the creation of "Head in the Clouds." view profile

Published on August 01, 2021

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