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With those sporting the VT2 watch, their Final Notice can appear. A rise of violence has forced the creator to track their emotions, sort of!

Synopsis

FINAL ACT is a fast-paced sequel to Final Notice and has been described as simultaneously realistic and surrealistic ... and totally engrossing. It is set in today’s chaotic political climate and gun-crazy culture; and features the “only slightly” sci-fi watch – the VT2 – that monitors blood chemistry so accurately that it can predict the wearer’s death within 10, 20 or 30 days.

But while Final Notice asked the question: “What would you do if you knew – for certain – that you had a couple weeks to live?” ... Final Act asks: “What might others do if they knew that you only had a couple weeks to live?” And when those “others” include Bratva (the Russian Mafia) and the SVR (formerly the KGB), you have a page-turner that turns “what if” into “what is.”

Final Act picks up the VT2 story during a presidential election year, exposing the danger to everyone – especially the candidates. Crafted with suspense, dark humor, irony, and a dash of romance, Final Act casts a clear light on the deep divisions within our country, divisions that have been widened and exploited by a malignant foreign power.

First and foremost, a large thank you to Reedsy Discovery and Van Fleisher for providing me with a copy of this publication, which allows me to provide you with an unbiased review.


After devouring the first book by Van Fleisher, which lays the groundwork for this novel, I knew that I needed to read more, if only to learn how things with the VT2 watch developed and what Dr. Vijay Patel had in store for the world. While the watch has been working effectively to offer its users a ‘final notice’ before their deaths, Patel and others have also come to see a rise in gun violence among those with nothing to lose—the premise of the series debut. After selling the company, Patel chooses to take a leadership role within the wing of the company that is working on these notices and some other software. Teamed up with a Special Agent within the FBI, Patel is trying to work out an added layer to the notice option, tracking levels of aggression and blood chemistry that might help trigger knowledge that could alert to the potential of a violent outburst during this final notice period. When Patel is forced from his job by a vindictive company CEO, he tries to keep the new level of tracking going, only to have all his pathways shut down. Knowing that this is a vital portal, Patel will bend the rules, if only to help stop the continuous spree of killing. However, someone is trying to play their own version of Big Brother, tapping into the Final Notice data to exact revenge on high-ranking officials and yet keeping the blood off their own hands. As high-profile murders begin to take place during an election year, Patel and his FBI counterpart must work from the outside to gain new and covert access to the VT2 data, saving lives and yet tracking those who are most likely to become violent. All of this has major implications, especially with the true puppet master still lurking in the shadows. A decent follow-up piece that seeks to delve a little deeper into the story and keep the reader questioning every plot twist. Van Fleisher does well here, but the story lacked the punch I would have hoped, coming off a successful debut novel.


While I know some panned Fleisher’s opening piece as being too silly or even a novel that seeks to ride on the coattails of current events, I quite enjoyed the banter between characters and how he developed his plot. There was a great deal of potential with this piece, as it sought to look a little deeper into the Final Notice aspect of the VT2 watch and look at those who use this as a means to tie up their personal loose ends and exact some revenge, knowing they will not face the consequences. However, the story got wonky part way in and never really was able to right itself effectively. The thriller aspect of Patel trying to work from the outside propelled the piece forward, but there were countless instances where interactions between characters seemed inserted to fill space rather than develop the story effectively. The premise of the book had much potential, though I think it got bogged down throughout the meandering narrative and over abundance of plot points. The mix of chapter lengths helped balance out some of the less than strong storytelling, as I could push through shorter portions and set the book down until I had a mental reset. Fleisher can tell a story, there is no doubt, and his choice to inject some social commentary throughout is never a bad thing. I do wonder, however, if a reworking to sharpen and strengthen this piece could help create a better duology on the topic. I think Fleisher might want to hire a new editorial team to help him define a stronger story that will sell and perhaps look back to his debut novel, finding its strengths and building on them, rather than trying to toss so much into the book and hope to please everyone with a little something here and there!


Kudos, Mr. Fleisher, for a decent second novel. There are a mix of good and bad things for me, but I hope those who read both novels get the larger themes and points you see to address.  


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Synopsis

FINAL ACT is a fast-paced sequel to Final Notice and has been described as simultaneously realistic and surrealistic ... and totally engrossing. It is set in today’s chaotic political climate and gun-crazy culture; and features the “only slightly” sci-fi watch – the VT2 – that monitors blood chemistry so accurately that it can predict the wearer’s death within 10, 20 or 30 days.

But while Final Notice asked the question: “What would you do if you knew – for certain – that you had a couple weeks to live?” ... Final Act asks: “What might others do if they knew that you only had a couple weeks to live?” And when those “others” include Bratva (the Russian Mafia) and the SVR (formerly the KGB), you have a page-turner that turns “what if” into “what is.”

Final Act picks up the VT2 story during a presidential election year, exposing the danger to everyone – especially the candidates. Crafted with suspense, dark humor, irony, and a dash of romance, Final Act casts a clear light on the deep divisions within our country, divisions that have been widened and exploited by a malignant foreign power.

CHAPTER 1 – WHEN IN ROME …



Rome, Georgia. The beautiful, crisp, autumn Saturday that greeted Mildred Pierce as she opened her front door and stepped out onto Broad Street masked what lay ahead. The sky was bright blue with only a few puffy clouds floating by, in sharp contrast to the thunderstorm of just a few hours ago. The storm had kept most folks indoors, and the empty streets suggested that few were ready to venture out. 


Mildred was looking forward to having lunch with her best friend, Esther, who’d been away for a few weeks visiting her family in California. She had chosen her brand-new Fall pantsuit for the occasion – a smart, two-tone grey outfit that complimented her lithe frame. 


Mildred was nearing eighty, but with her tall, almost military-like bearing, and energetic, confident stride, she could have passed for sixty. She wore her silver hair in a medium bobbed fashion that attractively framed her wide grey eyes, upturned nose, and mouth that defaulted to a warm smile. She appeared self-assured and upbeat, completely belying her inner feelings.


It had been a rough few weeks without Esther’s warmth and love, and she knew it would feel good to be back in the glow that her friend radiated. But a part of her also dreaded the meeting.


It was just a short walk to Sweet Pickles, a favorite restaurant of theirs. She loved the chicken salad, accompanied by the famous sweet pickles that Penny made, and she and Esther often shared a piece of Penny’s delicious chocolate cake, as well. But when she reached Fourth Avenue, only a short distance from the restaurant, a black pickup truck swerved toward the curb, sending a tsunami of muddy water from the morning rain that literally covered Mildred’s fresh new pantsuit. She gasped from the splash, heard laughter from the open window of the truck, and looked back as it sped away, its Confederate flag curtaining the rear window. 


Mildred surveyed the damage as best she could and knew that she couldn’t meet Esther looking like this. Her spirits momentarily dashed, she turned around and headed back to her apartment. Esther was always late, so even with this unexpected wrinkle, it would be OK. As she made her way quickly back to her home, she couldn’t help but wonder why someone would do that to her. She knew it was intentional, and the hooting and laughter from the truck confirmed it, conjuring up the dark thoughts from the past that she had been wrestling with since she’d received her final notice.


Traffic was now at a standstill on Broad Street, and she could hear sirens and see flashing red and blue lights up near Second Avenue. She continued on her way, deciding which clothes to change into when she saw the Confederate flag in the rear window a few steps away from her. She stopped for a moment, the country music blaring from the open windows. She also heard laughter from long ago as the dark, unbidden thoughts raced through her head. She glanced down at her watch and made her decision. Unzipping her purse, she purposefully strode up to the truck, pulled out her silenced Glock 26, and put a bullet through the temple of the passenger, whose head jerked back, giving her a clear shot as she pumped another round into the driver’s forehead while he stared at her, frozen, wide-eyed with surprise and fear. Calmly putting the gun back in her purse, Mildred didn’t hear the sound of an alarm coming from the driver’s watch. Muffled by the loud country music and approaching sirens and obscured by the Confederate flag in the rear window, no one else heard the shots or noticed Mildred’s act, and she simply continued her walk home to change clothes. Everyone else on Broad Street was trapped in traffic, texting, talking on their phones, or chatting with each other. 


The sirens muffling the shots and the Confederate flag hiding the splattering of blood may have obscured Mildred’s crime from everyone in Rome, but 1,085 miles to the north, just outside of Boston, Massachusetts, Vijay Patel was watching. 


***


The dead bodies remained undiscovered when Mildred passed by again, now dressed in a clean blue pantsuit. As she walked past the motionless pickup, with its equally motionless driver and passenger sandwiched in the gridlocked traffic, she briefly glanced over. Why did they do that? Because she was old? Because she was a woman? Because they were assholes? Or maybe all of the above? Mildred had never forgotten the many assholes she’d encountered over the years. The men who thought they were God’s gift to women. The men who tried to grope her as though she owed them a piece of her body for a drink or dinner. And the men who used their positions and gender to try to intimidate her at work, some with promises of promotions and others with threats of losing her job. She stole another glance at the two dead men in the pickup, recalling their laughter, and, as though it were yesterday, she heard the laughter from an event of over sixty years ago.


***


Smyrna, Georgia. Mildred had just finished her basic training at Parris Island, South Carolina, and was home on a week’s leave before shipping out to the Marine Corps Air Station at Kaneohe Bay, Hawaii. She was a Southern girl from Smyrna, and going to Hawaii would be the most exciting thing she had ever done, other than enlisting in the Marine Corps. She’d seen most of her friends since coming home, partying hard every night, but tonight, she had decided to stay home, watch TV, drink a couple of beers, and have an early night. 


Mildred was staying at her older sister’s apartment. Her mom was still with her sleazy boyfriend, and Mildred wanted no part of him. She hadn’t forgotten his lewd and aggressive advances. Her sister was out for the evening and told her that she probably wouldn’t be back until morning … late morning.


She had just started watching The Twilight Zone on TV, and she jumped at loud knocking, actually banging on her front door. She looked out the window and saw Jake Jackson, another guy and a girl, all with beers in hand. Mildred had gone out with Jake a couple of times in the past, but there was never any chemistry, and she knew that. She’d also heard that Jake had recently completed his basic training and was shipping out to the Marine base in Okinawa soon. 


Jake shouted, “Millie, one for the road!” We’re shipping out in the morning! 


She liked the nickname Millie, and it made her smile as she quickly debated whether to ignore them or answer the door. She decided to open it, and they all stumbled in. Jake introduced the guy with him as Travis, a buddy from basic training, but he had forgotten the girl’s name. Travis introduced her as Tracey. 


Millie had only drunk a beer and a half and estimated that she was at least a six-pack behind them. She knew that the two guys had just been through a grueling basic training program, much harder than her own, so there was a strong sense of camaraderie and understanding.

 

Travis and Tracey sat on the couch and began to make out and pretty much do as much as they could with clothes on. Jake put his arms around Millie, pulled her to him, and tried to kiss her. She pushed away and tried to verbally deflect the move. “You’re in good form tonight, Private First-Class Jackson.”


Jake grinned briefly and twisted her around, pinning her arm behind her back. He pushed her into the bedroom and onto the bed. She cried out, and Jake pushed her face down into a pillow to muffle her scream. He called for Travis, who picked up a roll of tape from the top of a nearby box that Millie had been packing and sliced a piece free. 


Jake kept his knee pushed into her back, grabbed her hair, and roughly pulled her head up just enough so Travis could place the tape over her mouth. Now, she could at least breathe, but the two men tied her hands to the headboard. She felt her shorts and panties being pulled and then ripped off. Then her legs were tied to the footboard. As she laid there, spread-eagle on the bed, she could hear the two men breathing heavily, the rapid sound of zippers unzipping and The Twilight Zone on TV in the background.


She lost track of time, and occasionally consciousness, as Jake and Travis took turns with her, cheering each other on to do it harder, longer. And that should have been the worst part, but it was the horrific and demeaning insults and profanities that they grunted, taunted, and whispered in her ears, that she was never able to forget. That and their laughter. She could just see the TV screen, with Tracey’s reflection. The young woman drank a beer and intently watched the show, with neither awareness of nor interest in the brutal scene playing out less than ten feet away. 


When they finished with her, they untied one hand and left, unhurried. Mildred considered calling the police or her commanding officer, despite Jake’s threat that they would kill her if she did so, but she was pretty sure that her word against two male Marines and a civilian woman wouldn’t carry any weight. It might even screw up her chance to go to Hawaii. So, she took a very long shower, kept quiet, went to Hawaii, and used the memory of that night to focus on her hand-to-hand combat training and marksmanship. No man would ever do that to her again. And like carrying an umbrella to ensure it won’t rain, Mildred never needed to use her unique skills ... until today. 

***


As Mildred’s thoughts returned to the present, another thought occurred to her. Why did I do that? She shrugged her shoulders and wistfully answered to herself, “perhaps it was my #MeToo moment.” And then she realized that today was probably the last time that she and Esther would share a piece of that delicious chocolate cake they ordered after lunch. She wouldn’t burden her friend with her crime, nor the awful memories that prompted it. It would be difficult enough to break the news about her health.


***


Esther had been devastated when her best friend told her she had just days to live. And so, when she couldn’t reach Mildred, she went to her apartment. Using the key Mildred had given her, she found the lifeless body, looking very peaceful, eyes closed, and the apartment spotless. Esther sat there for a few minutes, sobbing, and then called 911.


When the police conducted a routine inspection of the apartment, they found Mildred’s gun and took it away for analysis. Rome being a very small town, the two police officers were aware of the murders a couple of days ago, right down the street from where they were at the moment. They saw that the magazine was two rounds short of being full – the same number of shots that killed the two men in the pickup. But how would a seventy-nine-year-old woman be involved with a double homicide?


***


About the author

I've enjoyed two careers affording me the opportunity to read voraciously on thousands of flights and learn about people, cultures, business, and life. FINAL NOTICE was my first thriller, followed by a sequel, FINAL ACT. I live in California, and France, with my partner and our goldendoodle. view profile

Published on April 19, 2020

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70000 words

Contains explicit content ⚠️

Genre: Thriller & Suspense

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