Neale Sourna

Neale Sourna – Editor

Writing / editing characters and stories to be heartfelt and always interesting; no matter the historical period, genre, or gender.

Overview

Neale Sourna is an award-winning published author (since 2002) and a writing and editing freelancer (since 2006); writing and editing fiction, semi-fiction, and nonfiction, but mostly fiction.

Client work includes: novella / novels; short stories; game narrative / game stories; screenplays / scripts; sales training scripts, and more.

Not all projects or samples available for online display. Ask.

CLIENT PROJECTS INCLUDE:

 ROMANTIC CULTURAL NOVEL from Memoir—reworking a French Canadian journalist’s personal memoir notes, emails, and my questions about her search for love in mainland China and Singapore while teaching English. Formed into a publishable first draft story about culture clashes and love conflicts when more than one culture and more than one language or dialect is involved in love.

INCLUDES:

o better individualized characters and actions (including hiding real life identities)

o individualized dialogs / dialogues for varying new language skills among her Chinese and Singaporean friends

o investigating and artfully showing culture differences of Communist capitalism lain over old Chinese Communism which is lain over Old China’s ancient culture of interactions between women and men


 SPIRITUAL HORROR SCREENPLAY—reading for analysis to describe changes that could be made to improve the client author’s original work, then rewriting and editing client’s spiritual (Judeo – Christian ethos) feature screenplay

o upping overall and specific high and low stakes o increasing hazards to life and death and beyond

o ratcheting up personal threats to hero – hero’s family – hero’s friends – hero’s love and lover

o clarifying the Powers of Hero, Angels, and Demons for the audience

o broadening and deepening spiritual aspect with viable Eastern spiritualities

o Also redo of logline and synopsis.


 URBAN GIRLFRIENDS TREATMENT to present to film backers—pulling from client notes a storyline and treatment to show the arcs and interactions of the loves and stresses within a group of African American sisters and college friends in their lives, loves, and careers.

o Individualized characters for heightened characterizations

o Redo real life people to hide identities in well-known entertainment corporations

o Established personal and career threats: emotional, love / marriages, sanity, etc


 Game stories, short stories, novella / novels from brief premise or loose outline (usually without)

 FANTASY NOVEL DRAFT TWEAK—to proof and add more humanity

 SPIRITUAL SPORTS NOVEL—first draft rewrite to clarify characters and spiritual explanations and goals
Services
Fiction
African American Fiction Comics & Graphic Novels Historical Fiction LGBTQ Fiction Plays & Screenplays Romance Short Story Themes & Motifs Women's Fiction
Non-Fiction
Sex & Relationships
Languages
English (US)
Awards
  • Best of Year Erotic Romance from BlackRefer.com
  • New Century Screenplay Finalist

Work experience

Human Curious

Jul, 2014 — Aug, 2014 (11 days)

o Ardor The Game (Netherlands) (2014) for Human Curious – edited game design documents, game play materials and card texts

Ophelia Madison Press (MD USA)

Feb, 2013 — Mar, 2013 (26 days)

o “The Brazil Story.” (2013) Client invited. Ghostwriting 30 page multicultural / interracial romance story for Ophelia Madison Press (MD USA)

Sex and Glory Games / Lessons of Passions Games (Russia)

Aug, 2011 — Jan, 2016 (over 4 years)

 Sin City Comic (2015 - 2016) story narrative;
 Lovecraft Project (2015) initial game story and design elements adapted from author’s novels;
 “Girl With Tattoos” full game narrative and game design (2014)
 “Mysterious Island” (zombie) full game (2014)
 “Tattoo Girl” test short game (2014);
 Yacht / Zombie Island Game test story and design (2013);
 360 Demo hotel story (2013);
 5 Theme Monologues (2013);
 24 Profiles (200 word character stories, fantasy site seeds) (2013)
 7 Recipes rewrite;
 Adult Sleuth: 7 Days Game story rewrite, additional storywriting and editing (2011) adult detective narrative

Elance Client

Feb, 2010 — Mar, 2010 (about 2 months)

o Canadian in China romance memoir—fictionalizing and organizing story base for nonfiction events and “characters,” character dialog,

Formed novel's first publishable draft for client from her emails, notes, and requested input from writer research.

Romantic4Ever

Nov, 2007 — Jan, 2009 (about 1 year)

o Website fiction content writer (2+ yrs) for 3 Australian websites (romance, honeymoon, sci-fi / fantasy)

• "Becca" (a short story novel, 6 of the chapters) A swashbuckling pirate story!
_Cornwall, England UK; 1680s
• "Outback Love" [aka "Mail Order Love"] in three (3) act chapters
_Coober Pedy, South Australia; 1919
• "Samurai Days" & "Samurai Nights"
_Kyoto, Japan; 1600s

Plus, five wedding night stories here:

• "Frictionless Sheets" Intergalactic Deep Space sometime in the Future
• "The Veil: 1846" Gretna Green, Scotland
• "No Touching" USA, Today
• "Empty Nest Honeymoon" Australia and Pradesh, India
• "Iraqi Honeymoon" Fallujah, Iraq

Guru Client

May, 2007 — Oct, 2007 (6 months)

o Screenplay rewriting editor (overhauled: dialog, visual descriptions, emotional levels and stakes)—for a Toronto scriptwriter, about Heaven and Hell spiritual power in the everyday

Also separate project for logline, synopsis rewrites.

Orchid Games

Feb, 2007 — Feb, 2016 (about 9 years)

o Orchid Games (Poland)

 Heartwild 1 and 2 Games story narrative update (2013);
 Brainstorm HOPA game title (2013)—“Graven: The Purple Moon Prophecy”

o Orchid Games (Poland) with Sandlot Games Game story segments writer, beta tester, promotion quiz writer, romance PC solitaire game

 “Heartwild Solitaire: Book Two” (2010)
1. Branched game story segments writer (characters, story, narrative design).
2. Beta tester.
 “Heartwild Solitaire: Author’s Edition” Level Name Titling (2010);
 “Heartwild Solitaire: Quiz” (2009)
 “Heartwild Solitaire: Author’s Edition” / “Heartwild Solitaire” [E for Everyone Edition] (2007, PC and Mac)
1. Game story segments writer (characters, story).
2. Beta tester

Portfolio

A bonus story formerly found with the short story “Tenure (MFM)”: Professor privately tutors a certain Tight End footballer. The boy will definitely get more than his grades up, to save his place on the team, while Prof rams knowledge into him._5930 words approx.
A bisexual, male Professor, newly tenured and bored at his college's Student / Faculty mixer, discovers two young Freshmen openly having sex--a gorgeous, brown-skinned classic Greek "godling" and a beautiful, gold-skinned mixed race coed female. Professor's en... read more
A bonus story formerly found with the short story “Tenure (MMM)”: Professor privately tutors a certain Tight End footballer. The boy will definitely get more than his grades up, to save his place on the team, while Prof rams knowledge into him._5934 words approx.
A bisexual, male Professor, newly tenured and bored at his college's Student / Faculty mixer, discovers two young Freshmen openly having sex--a gorgeous, brown-skinned classic Greek "godling" and a beautiful, gold-skinned mixed race male. Professor's enormous ... read more
Dez is a willful, stubborn hottie, the bisexual top stripper and erotic dancer [exotic dancer] at Max’s club; independent to the bone, she won’t be controlled.But, enter Mr. Dark, a powerful, dangerous, wealthy player, a corporate gangsta with an eye only for ... read more
A sexy woman, a nameless man; she picks him up, as her husband watches, then she invites the new man to enjoy sex with them in their wealthy suburban home. Swingers, threeway sex, and more. _9078 wordshttp://stories.neale-sourna.com/three-invitation.html
Self help: Sexual instruction Cunnilingus: How to Give Head (Oral Sex and Eating Pussy), for Giving Women Orgasms of Cuntlicious Joy! Info and Sex Games! Sex Advice Includes: Helpful information, diagrams, clear instructions, plus erotica fiction excerpts and ... read more
Sex Advice and Instruction: Cunnilingus How to Give Head (Oral Sex and Eating Pussy), for Giving Women Orgasms of Cuntlicious Joy! Info and Games! Includes: Helpful information, diagrams, clear instructions, plus fiction excerpts and sexy games to encourage be... read more
Have her fall completely in love with THE WAY YOU MAKE LOVE to her.She’ll NEVER say, “No,” again. Neale Sourna’s CuntSingerCunnilingus: How to Give Head (Oral Sex and Eating Pussy), for Giving Women Orgasms of Cuntlicious Joy! Sex Advice Includes: Helpful info... read more
Cunnilingus: How to Give Head (Oral Sex and Eating Pussy), for Giving Women Orgasms of Cuntlicious Joy! Info and Sex Games!Sex Advice Includes: Helpful information, diagrams, clear instructions, plus fiction excerpts and sexy games to encourage better sexual k... read more
Basketball jock Yune gets his stone hard, young Korean American cock sucked by a first time knob munching, K.A. church virgin, while his favorite, bespectacled, brown-skinned teen goddess secretly watches, and then later he’s sucked off by a classmate’s red-ha... read more
A lawyer makes a pilgrimage to a corporate titan in order to get his help with freeing her client from a death sentence. She knows he's ... "interested" in her. But, her appeal to this billionaire's sense of justice won't be enough; she'll have to curry and sa... read more
Erotic Short Stories, Poems, and Novel Excerptshttp://libidinous.neale-sourna.com/(updated file May 2016)
A businesswoman's emotional conflict between overthinking versus her erotic needs is tested when she's caught in the rain with the man who keeps her mind and emotions distracted. But, will she overthink a playful shower together, too?_3218 words Erotic Romance... read more
In ancient times, a legendary half Egyptian general's rage and jealousy may be his downfall, when he seeks to break a sacred alliance between his Amazon shaman / sorceress mate and her allies. [erotica novel excerpt, over 10,000 wds!] Ancient Warrior Romantic ... read more
STEVE is a horrid bad boy, envious of friend ALEX's turn-around attitude with his soon-to-be new love, KARA, but grandma's monkey's paw, gives Steve complete control over anyone he wants; even Alex's sweet new lady; against her will.... Plus MORE, there are mo... read more
Hobble

Neale Sourna

BENNET GILLESPIE, a successful, yet burned out half Native American medical professional, crashes into a recuperating "innocent" beauty on the beach; beginning an obsessive, sexual triangle with the seductive African American, DAY, who's jealously guarded by H... read more
Hobble

Neale Sourna

Native American surgeon BENNET GILLESPIE is brilliant, burned out and "on sabbatical," maybe permanently, as he, literally, falls for an irresistible and dangerous African American beauty, DAY. Unfortunately, she's a legally homicidally "insane" and ... myster... read more
Dia’s the only cheerleader on the team bus filled with excited, champion ball players, managers, a middle-aged co-coach, and everyone’s favorite Mr. Dean.Willing Dia would do ANYTHING for her man’s pleasure. So, Mr. D will test his girl’s trust and love for hi... read more
Dia’s Coach (1)

Neale Sourna

Young Dia is a naughty cheerleader, who prefers older men, well, one particular older man. She wants everyone’s favorite team coach and teach­er, Mr. Dean. He’s been good and strong, resisting her; but, he’s weakening....And lovely Dia always gets what she wan... read more
The Freelancer

Neale Sourna

Annie’s new temp, Ryan, with the fascinating ass, is great at his job, even on his very first day; but, he’s driving her to distraction and she can’t get anything done!When Annie works late and alone, to catch up on work, gorgeous Ryan returns in order to show... read more
Rough-Me Dot Com

Neale Sourna

Dot com queen, Lara, runs an internet dating hookup site for “rough sex.” Her own boring romantic life has her observing the online site communications of a client, named Wil.She makes contact with him, as Dennie, one of her online aliases, who “works for her.... read more
3 Articles: (1) Seduce Her Like Keanu Reeves (2) Ten, Yes, 10 (Ten) of The Best, Easiest, Romantic Seduction Secrets, from Keanu Reeves' Performances (3) Bonus: The Bad List of Bad Lovers. By Neale Sourna www.ProjectKeanu.com
A post Second World War (WWII) love story/novel excerpt.The war’s been over two years; but, days ago Temple and her little dog Wuffer found Tommy, drinking the morning’s milk outside the door of his own family home, like a stray tomcat, finally returned, after... read more
No Wedding Night

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A wedding, a reception brawl, and the bride and groom’s wedding night will be in jail. Or will it?_866 words Romance

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