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The outsiders

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Not for me 😔

Poetry is entirely subjective so I dont want to label this as inherently bad but I didnt enjoy this. Never felt a good flow.

I found myself annoyed frequently while reading this. A lot of which came from word choice. Repetitive words, odd rhymes.. general confusion in what was actually trying to be said.


Unfortunately because I was frustrated it made it harder to really take in the meaning behind each poem. Of course, poetry is subjective, so others may not mind or notice what I did and find this style of poetry will be much more appealing to them. It just was not something I found enjoyable or engaging.


Occassionally there would be a poem or a line that I would think "Oh this was a good one!" But it didn't happen often enough for me to want to rate this higher. It's obvious a lot of effort and passion went into these poems and I don't want to discredit that but I think this collection would benefit from finer editing. Some poems could be infinitely better just replacing a few words or sentences to make for better flow. As it stands, many feel clunky or "thesaurus-y" or repetitive in one way or another.


This has a lot of interesting concepts, heartfelt and emotional. I only wish I was able to enjoy them more.

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About the author

My name is Hassan I'm a college student currently studying Human Services. I've have been writing for as long I could pick up at pen. I am from Kenya but I grew up in Omaha Nebraska. So Far I've only written one book and that is "The Outsiders". view profile

Published on August 24, 2020

20000 words

Contains mild explicit content ⚠️

Worked with a Reedsy professional 🏆

Genre: African American Fiction

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